Issue 144 by A34

xiaobao963UID: 2596307

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It is the artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value.

The speaker asserts that the artist rather than the critic gives society something of lasting value. As far as I am concerned, the topic involves with a relationship between artists and critics and their contribution. On the balance, I disagree with the speaker’s argument which neglects the effects of the critics and tend to substantiate my view by following discussions.

Admittedly, we cannot neglect the importance of the artists who create the valuable fortune for us. For instance, musicians write and play music for us which brings unlimited pleasure, inspiration and complicated feelings for us. It is no doubt that music that artists create has huge effects on human soul. Say, in the Olympic games, with the national anthem played, we, in our hearts, is so proud and excited as to burst into tears. For another example, we can learn history knowledge from documentary films and know about other commons cultures by foreign novels, films, and music. Likewise, the paintings, sculpture, etc. made by artists give us lasting value. It is difficult to imagine that if there is no artistic work, how the world goes for the reason that lots of pleasure, lots of special and complicated feelings, and lots of knowledge lost. So I take it granted that it is the artists give society something of lasting value.

When we champion the importance and contribution of artists, it is extremely fallacious to ignore one of the critics. Although, as some times, poor criticism made by critics may have negative effects on the creativity of artists, even may destroy some artistic works or artists. For instance, Van Gogh suffered from non-recognition of his art from critics so that he was subsequent poverty and mental derangement. However, we have to acknowledge that most critics are more professional than the common people, and make huge contribution on our comprehension about artists’ works. At same time, a true criticism may help the artists find the problem and improve the ability of their creativity. Criticism is not simple to tell people of what are good or bad, but a re-creation and re-discovery. For example, sometimes a great painting is created, and the author who drawing it may not know what meaning and senses exist in this masterpiece. And then the critics are needed to tell people of true concealing meaning. In some sense, a criticism is also a kind of art.

To sum up, due to analysis and reasons mentioned above, I can correlate with each other to arrive at the conclusion that both artists and critics give something of lasting value. Artists provide and create great works and spiritual wealth for humanity with the help of the critics. At the same time, in the comprehension of artistic works, the critics make irreplaceable contribution for us. On balance, it is very difficult to say who are more important for giving us something of lasting value.

mandy61217UID: 2549053

The speaker asserts that the artist rather than the critic givessociety something of lasting value. As far as I am concerned, the topic involveswith a relationship between artists and critics and their contribution. On thebalance, I disagree with the speaker’s argument which neglects the effects ofthe critics and tend to substantiate my view by following discussions. [态度明确，good!]
Admittedly,we cannot neglect the importance of the artists who create the valuable fortunefor us. For instance, musicians write and play music for us which bringsunlimited pleasure, inspiration and complicated feelings for us. It is no doubtthat music that artists create has huge effects on human soul. Say, in theOlympic games, with the national anthem played, we, in our hearts, is so proudand excited as to burst into tears. For another example, we can learn historyknowledge from documentary films and know about other commons cultures byforeign novels, films, and music. Likewise, the paintings, sculpture, etc. madeby artists give us lasting value. It is difficult to imagine that if there isno artistic work, how the world goes for the reason that lots of pleasure, lotsof special and complicated feelings, and lots of knowledge lost. So I take itgranted that it is the artists give society something of lasting value. [本段作为让步，论述充分，但似乎占整个文章篇幅的大部分。。。这部分并不是剖析题目的重点，可少些点]
When we champion theimportance and contribution of artists, it is extremely fallacious to ignoreone of the critics.
【点明本段分论点，good!】Although,as some times, poor criticism made by critics may have negative effects on thecreativity of artists, even may destroy some artistic works or artists. Forinstance, Van Gogh suffered from non-recognition of his art from critics sothat he was subsequent poverty and mental derangement. [又是让步，还给让步给了个例子，呵呵，够慷慨，但这样的例子更削弱作者的驳斥力度。。甚用。]However,we have to acknowledge that most critics are more professional than the commonpeople, and make huge contribution on our comprehension about artists’ works.At 【the】same time, a true criticism may help the artists find the problemand improve the ability of their creativity. Criticism is not simple to tellpeople of what are good or bad, but a re-creation and re-discovery. Forexample, sometimes a great painting is created, and the author who drawing itmay not know what meaning and senses exist in this masterpiece. And then thecritics are needed to tell people of true concealing meaning. In some sense, a criticism isalso a kind of art[这一句才开始论述criticism与lastingvalue的关系，但作者却在这里停住了。。。建议本段中间的让步和对critic的定义稍微略论，但点出他们创造的也是last value的，或者是art的vale-added, 是组成art的lasting value的一部分。。。].

To sum up, due to analysis and reasons mentioned above, I cancorrelate with each other to arrive at the conclusion that both artists andcritics give something of lasting value. Artists provide and create great worksand spiritual wealth for humanity with the help of the critics. At the sametime, in the comprehension of artistic works, the critics make irreplaceablecontribution for us. On balance, it is very difficult to say who are moreimportant for giving us something of lasting value.
总体文章论述主线清晰，但论述充分性还优待补充。欢迎讨论。

kittyharuUID: 2539664

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It is the artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value.
The speaker asserts that the artist rather than the critic gives society something of lasting value. As far as I am concerned, the topic involves with a relationship between artists and critics and their contribution. On the balance, I disagree with the speaker’s argument which neglects the effects of the critics and tend to substantiate my view by following discussions.
开头观点很鲜明，这个太值得我学习了。
Admittedly, we cannot neglect the importance of the artists who create the valuable fortune for us. For instance, musicians write and play music for us which brings unlimited pleasure, inspiration and complicated feelings for us. It is no doubt that music that artists create has huge effects on human soul. Say, in the Olympic games, with the national anthem played, we, in our hearts, is so proud and excited as to burst into tears. （例子举得挺新颖的）For another example, we can learn history knowledge from documentary films and know about other commons cultures by foreign novels, films, and music. Likewise, the paintings, sculpture, etc. made by artists give us lasting value. It is difficult to imagine that if there is no artistic work, how the world goes for the reason that lots of pleasure, lots of special and complicated feelings, and lots of knowledge lost（这里是不是用现在时更好一些，或者will lose）. So I take it granted that it is the artists give society something of lasting value.
先支持artists创造价值的观点，很清晰。
When we champion the importance and contribution of artists, it is extremely fallacious to ignore one of the critics（我觉得one of可以省略吧？）. Although, as some times, poor criticism made by critics may have negative effects on the creativity of artists, even may destroy some artistic works or artists. For instance, Van Gogh suffered from non-recognition of his art from critics so that he was subsequent poverty（这是个名词，用在was后面不合适） and mental derangement. However, we have to acknowledge that most critics are more professional than the common people, and make huge contribution on our comprehension about artists’ works. At same time, a true criticism may help the artists find the problem and improve the ability of their creativity. Criticism is not simple to tell people of what are good or bad, but a re-creation and re-discovery（这一点是我没有想到的，学习了，嘿嘿）. For example, sometimes a great painting is created, and the author who drawing it may not know what meaning and senses exist in this masterpiece. And then the critics are needed to tell people of true concealing meaning. In some sense, a criticism is also a kind of art.


还是那句话，观点清晰，唉，唉唉，值得我学习。


To sum up, due to analysis and reasons mentioned above, I can correlate with each other to arrive at the conclusion that both artists and critics give something of lasting value. Artists provide and create great works and spiritual wealth for humanity with the help of the critics. At the same time, in the comprehension of artistic works, the critics make irreplaceable contribution for us. On balance, it is very difficult to say who are more important for giving us something of lasting value.
总结的比较全面简洁。

总评：
1.
采用的是平衡观点，虽然结构很清晰，但是感觉挖掘的层次还不够深。可以通过和网友的探讨再进一步往更深层次递进。
2.
让步时可以少用一些例子，而强调自己的立场时多用一些
3.
语言上还有一定的上升空间

我还是要说~~~结构清晰这一点，我做的太不好了，向你学习！

评论有不足之处，望指正~~~

susanbai0330UID: 2442910

It is the artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value.

The speaker asserts that the artist rather than the critic gives society something of lasting value. As far as I am concerned, the topic involves with a relationship between artists and critics and their contribution. On the balance, I disagree with the speaker’s argument which neglects the effects of the critics and tend to substantiate my view by following discussions.（开头很鲜明干脆，赞一个！）

Admittedly, we cannot neglect the importance of the artists who create the valuable fortune for us. For instance, musicians write and play music for us which brings unlimited pleasure, inspiration and complicated feelings for us. It is no doubt that music that artists create has huge effects on human soul. Say, in the Olympic games, with the national anthem played（用with 好呢？还是when？）, we, in our hearts, is so proud and excited as to burst into tears. For another example, we can learn history knowledge from documentary films and know about other commons （common 吧）cultures by foreign novels, films, and music. Likewise, the paintings, sculpture, etc. made by artists give us lasting value. It is difficult to imagine that if there is no artistic work, how the world goes for the reason that lots of pleasure, lots of special and complicated feelings, and lots of knowledge lost. So I take it granted that it is the artists give society something of lasting value.例子很好诶！

When we champion the importance and contribution of artists, it is extremely fallacious to ignore one of the critics. （为什么用one？指代什么不明确）Although, as some times, poor criticism made by critics may have negative effects on the creativity of artists, even may destroy some artistic works or artists. （觉得这句应该和开头句换下位置）For instance, Van Gogh suffered from non-recognition of his art from critics so that he was subsequent poverty and mental derangement. However, we have to acknowledge that most critics are more professional than the common people, and make huge contribution on our comprehension about artists’ works. At same time, a true criticism may help the artists to find the problem and improve the ability of their creativity. Criticism is not simple to tell people of what are good or bad, but a re-creation and re-discovery. For example, sometimes a great painting is created, and the author who drawing it may not know what meaning and senses exist in this masterpiece. And then the critics are needed to tell people of true concealing meaning. In some sense, a criticism is also a kind of art.

To sum up, due to analysis and reasons mentioned above, I can correlate with each other to arrive at the conclusion that both artists and critics give something of lasting value. Artists provide and create great works and spiritual wealth for humanity with the help of the critics. At the same time, in the comprehension of artistic works, the critics make irreplaceable contribution for us. On balance, it is very difficult to say who are more important for giving us something of lasting value.

总结：一些小错误
          语言连贯，例子生动，文笔词汇不重复
          是好文章啦

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