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taoyukun-daidaiUID: 2657922

因为我作文22分还是可以的，嘿嘿，我大作文是good，所以我帮我好朋友冰  改作文，大家也可以给意见~
It is better for students at university or in college to choose difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades.

Whether it is better for students at university to choose difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades? （建议不要一模一样的重复题目）Different people hold different views. Some may point that study is the most important thing  in college, so the students should choose difficult classes, （其实不符合逻辑，学难课程的理由可以是：想不断地提高自己的能力，难的课程有挑战性，比简单课程更提高能力）while others may view that it is useless for the students to learn such a difficult class. However, in my opinion, it is a little bit haste to say that it is better for different students at university to choose difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades, or vice versa.（学会用的很好很好~）

In university, some students want to go on to study after graduate from school, to be master or doctor. For these students, choosing difficult classes is good for their career. To learn difficult classes well, the students have to pay a lot of time in studying. They will read many books and do more homework. During this process, students can learn not only the subject, but also the way to study well. It is good for them to go their study. In the future, when they be master or doctor, and when they face difficult subject to research, they can solve the problems with confidence because they have faced a lot of difficult things in the difficult classes.（difficult有点多，建议 issue    problem    difficulty  handicap   inconvenience      knottiness  strait    trouble）比起以前进步很大

While for students who have the ambition to be good businessmen, it is useless（有点极端，如果是金融学是一门很难的课程呢？） to pay so much time in studing the difficult classed. They can use the rest time to be a volunteer or fine a pary-time job to increase their experience and it is helpful for them to find a good job. What's more, in university, there are always many classes, they can choose the relatively easy class to learn. Take me for example, after graduate from university, I want to open my own shop to sell computers, so for me, to increase my selling experience is very important. If I choose to learn difficult classes that I cannot get top grades, I will waste a lot of time in studying it. So it is not good for me to study difficult classes.（段落开头最好一句话讲清楚前因后果，这才能让考官明了你在写什么）

In conclusion, whether to choose difficult classes to study depends on the students' purpose. Learn difficult classes can help the students increase their ability of study, but will spend their a lot of time. So the students should decide what they really need.（略显单薄，其实我觉得如果有时间，结尾完全可以多写点，写明白两种人的不同选择，这样会使考官更加明白你的观点，我觉得这不是罗嗦，使总结文章~）

rachel1102UID: 2657934

211# taoyukun-daidai 那几个表示难事的单词，我都没见过几个，记下了，我会努力的，否则都对不起你了，呵呵。虽然很熟，但还是要说声谢谢~

rachel1102UID: 2657934

针对鲲给改的，我把我的作文写的不好的地方总结下。
现在觉得 这篇文章不适合写中立 写better会比较好写。这样就可以第二段不变，第三段就写增加人克服困难的意志品质，对以后工作有帮助。
开头段，第一句，可以用自己的话说。比如 whether learning difficult courses is good for students in university? 然后把那句逻辑不对的句子改成直接就认为是好的，然后另一些人认为没用。这样开头段能简洁点。
第二段学会表示难事的单词  knottiness 还可以用hard或 make theirself in trouble.
第三段问题比较严重 可以重新写。
结尾段按照鲲说的 好好总结一下 别嫌麻烦和罗嗦。

taoyukun-daidaiUID: 2657922

明天计划：                                                                        实际执行情况
阅读：reader's choice                                                         I hate reading fuck reading! 看第一章。。

单词:list4.5.6                                                                   学习list4-6 复习list1-3

听力：VOA听 自己总结动物的单词，听加说                              several videos about animals；  speak the animal verbs

作文：老师的作业，加上必须要背的东西背下来~                        one essay：polar bear   还没背。。

学习了四种阅读方法：skimming, scanning, reading for through comprehension, critical reading

taoyukun-daidaiUID: 2657922

我害怕寂寞     我害怕现在。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。

清风婉婉UID: 2680607

我也好害怕！我也好寂寞！！天呢，越来越恐惧了。我一晚上都没看进去，一直再说，来不及了，来不及了 215# taoyukun-daidai

清风婉婉UID: 2680607

你真棒！！！向你学习！ 90# taoyukun-daidai

STELLA710UID: 2435774

呆呆!!!加油!!!!
我也快出成绩了...每天过的迷迷糊糊的....琐碎的事情很多却又没有规划...东弄点西弄点...

我觉得我现在的外语程度丢到国外去还是够呛....
所以我还是继续跟帖吧....现在现每天背单词好了..等分的日子不爽啊

cinderella1016UID: 2666652

因为我作文22分还是可以的，嘿嘿，我大作文是good，所以我帮我好朋友冰  改作文，大家也可以给意见~
It is better for students at university or in college to choose difficult classes even if they cannot get ...
taoyukun-daidai 发表于 2009-9-14 19:08

我看了下你朋友的这篇作文，从语言上说，有些地方需要改进：

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Whether it is better for students at university to choose difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades? Different people hold different views. Some may point that study is the most important thing  in college, so the students should choose difficult classes, while others may view that it is useless for the students to learn such a difficult class. However, in my opinion, it is a little bit haste to say that it is better for different students at university to choose difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades, or vice versa.
第一段的问题：point out才是指出的意思；第二句中的difficult class用了单数，但是之后的difficult class都是复数形式出现，最好统一一下；haste是名词，而a little bit后面是要接形容词的，可以考虑hasty；整篇文章里一共出现了school, college, university等几个表示学校的词，注意统一。

In university, some students want to go on to study after graduate from school, to be master or doctor. For these students, choosing difficult classes is good for their career. To learn difficult classes well, the students have to pay a lot of time in studying. They will read many books and do more homework. During this process, students can learn not only the subject, but also the way to study well. It is good for them to go their study. In the future, when they be master or doctor, and when they face difficult subject to research, they can solve the problems with confidence because they have faced a lot of difficult things in the difficult classes.
第二段的问题：“go on to study after graduate from school, to be master or doctor”嫌唠叨，further their study就可以了；“pay a lot of time in studying”改为“spend … in studying”较好；第四句建议在will之后加上have to；第五句的“During this process”可以考虑用“In the course of …”代替；第六句，“go their study”是错误搭配，可以考虑之前提过的“further their study“或者“go on with their study”；第七句里的they can solve之前的部分就是典型的Chinglish了。


While for students who have the ambition to be good businessmen, it is useless to pay so much time in studing the difficult classed. They can use the rest time to be a volunteer or fine a pary-time job to increase their experience and it is helpful for them to find a good job. What's more, in university, there are always many classes, they can choose the relatively easy class to learn. Take me for example, after graduate from university, I want to open my own shop to sell computers, so for me, to increase my selling experience is very important. If I choose to learn difficult classes that I cannot get top grades, I will waste a lot of time in studying it. So it is not good for me to study difficult classes./ H! P3 I8 H; f$ P2 h. O) ^9 ]* [
第三段的问题：“pay so much time in studing”改为“spend so much time in studying”；第二句中的“rest time”（闲暇时间）应为“spare time”，“fine a pary-time job”应为“find a part-time job”；第三句中的 they应该首字母大写，然后另起一句，“learn/study difficult classes”改为“take difficult classes”更好一些；第四句，take后面接myself然后在example后面的逗号改句号；after是介词，后面接名词、代词、动名词，所以“graduate”应该为“graduation”；第五句，“that”建议改为“for which”，“in studying it”中的“ it”与前文的“classes矛盾”。


WIn conclusion, whether to choose difficult classes to study depends on the students' purpose. Learn difficult classes can help the students increase their ability of study, but will spend their a lot of time. So the students should decide what they really need.
第四段：第一句“purpose”改为复数；第二句“Learn difficult classes”应为“Learning difficult classes”，否则句中就出现了两个谓语动词，还是建议用“Taking”代替“Learning”，“increase their ability of study”建议改为“foster their ability to study”，一个是因为你的“increase”用得太多了，可以给rater造成审美疲劳了，一个是ability后面接to do比较多，然后“spend”改为“take”，句型是“it takes sb. .. to do sth.”。


总的问题：1）拼写和大小写要注意，文中错了多处；
2）词汇使用，一些固定搭配掌握得不好；
3）注意表达多样化。

症结就是：看得少，看得不用心。

STELLA710UID: 2435774

我在看...英伦的天空..出国记实片

taoyukun-daidaiUID: 2657922

好看的话，给我个链接，我也看看，呵呵~ 221# STELLA710

rachel1102UID: 2657934

220# cinderella1016 谢谢点评，我的作文好烂啊，这几天要重点弄作文了，嗨。

rachel1102UID: 2657934

鲲，我突然没信心了，不想出国了，周末就考了，现在有等死的感觉，嗨。别骂我，这个时候了，只能弄弄作文和口语了。突然特别消极，不想学了。
你要加油啊，把基础弄好了，考前就不会发愁了。

taoyukun-daidaiUID: 2657922

第一次语法课

翻译题目：
1.政府更容易确保城市秩序和预防罪犯。举个例子，在北京街道安装的监控摄像头使得警察能够控制所有车辆的信息。正因为这些安全措施，在大街上发生的罪犯会被录制下来而当涉嫌的罪犯企图逃离现场时，他们会很快的控制和抓获。再者，这些安全措施还会对那些潜在的罪犯产生震慑作用。最后，这些摄像头还可以帮助政府收集和播报交通信息以防止更加严重的交通问题。

It is easier for government to ensure city order and prevent crime. For instance, surveillance cameras all over the streets in Beijing enable the police to control the information of all the vehicles. Thanks to these security measures, street crime could be recorded and criminal involved will be soon controlled and caught when they attempt to escape the spot. In addition, these security measures could also be deterrence to potential criminals. Last but not the least, these surveillance cameras could also help the government collect and broadcast traffic information so as to prevent more serious
traffic problems.


5.很多人去了外滩。

There  were many people going to the Bund.

6.从前有座山，山上有个庙。

Once upon a time, there existed a hill where there lay a temple.

7.随着中国改革开放政策的实施，在过去的二十年中，经济和社会取得了巨大的进步，人们的生活水平提高了。但与此同时也产生了一些严重的社会问题。

Thanks to China's policy of reform and opening-up, in the past 2 decades, there has been great progress in economy and society, and people's standard of living has vastly improved. But at the same time, it gives rise to a host of serious social problems.

注意：There be 句式只有一个中心动词和一个中心名词~

几个短语：

1.正因为     because of; due to; owing to; thanks to

2.再者说     in addition; additionally; besides; moreover

3.与此同时  meanwhile; in the meantime; at the same time; simultaneously

4.financially independent position

5.develop/foster/cultivate one's independent thinking ability

几个单词：

1.完全地  wholly; entirly; thoroughly

myopia             n.近视，缺乏远见
turmoil             n.骚动，混乱，动乱
era                    n.时代，纪元

candid            adj. 忠实的, 率直的, 坦诚的
personality       n.人格，品质；人物，名人

character          n. 个性, 品质

individuality       n. 个性, 人格, 特徵

comprehensive adj. 综合的, 广泛的, 理解的
magnitude       n.重要性，重大；巨大，广大

altitude            n. 高度, 海拔, 高地

latitude            n. 纬度, 界限, 自由选择权
longitude         n.经度

aptitude          n. 才能, 资质

platitude         n. 陈词滥调

psychological adj. 心理(学)的

buddy              n. 伙伴, 好朋友, 兄弟