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ISSUE7 The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records.
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The statement asserts that as the video camera provides us such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life, it is more important than written records in documentation. Admittedly, video camera has such advantages. Yet whether it is more crucial than written records remains a question, and the answer to it depends on different occasions and different intentions.

Compared with written records, the documentations made by video camera are more objective and can provide more details. While written records can only describe or present events on paper, video camera creates vivid, direct images and voice, serving as a reappearance of contemporary life. Seeing how you skied down from the top of the mountain and how you fell down with unskillful manners through the videos you took by video cameras may remain you much of happiness. Additionally, in the field of scientific experiments, scientists can use what video camera caught factually and exactly during the process of last failed experiments to find out the mistakes they took and the way to meliorate it. It is the ascendency of video camera that written records cannot afford.


Nevertheless, the important role of written records in documentation should not be neglected. First of all, written records are used more frequently than video cameras because video cameras are usually too expensive to most people, especially in developing nations. Moreover, written records are far more convenient than video cameras in many occasions. When you are studying in the class or recording scores that players get in a basketball match, you may usually pick up a pen and write what you want on the paper. Last but not the least, through video camera provides an accurate record of physical life and phenomena, it cannot competently provide insight in the mind. Written records carry both Cultural Significance and Metaphoric Significance.

What’s more, written records, or documents in another way of saying, are the manifestation of business process, instruments of Governance and Law. Documents play many roles in the internal management of a business as well as in the interfaces between businesses their suppliers, employees, and customs. Current trends toward longer value chains and increased regulation increase the number of documents that must be generated and processed. The same situation happens in the field of Governance and Law. The unchanging aspect of documents is crucial to the consistent communication of policy and administration of law to citizens. Documents that play such roles include constitutions, corporate annual reports and religious text. Obviously, video cameras cannot make such credible efforts as written records do.

In sum, just as that has been stated, although video camera has its own characteristic to record our contemporary life, written records should never be replaced in any time. We can use both video cameras and written records to document our rich and varied life.

qianzyl220UID: 2681697

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Admittedly, video camera has such advantages  much advantages




Compared with written records, the documentations made by video camera are more objective and can provide more details.
‘While written records can only describe or present events on paper’这句感觉有点多余 拙见


从山顶上滑下的那个列子和video camera are more objective and can provide more details也有点不是很相称 应该紧贴论点  科学家的那个列子好喜欢呢




What’s more, written records, or documents in another way of saying  建议删去or documents in another way of saying  显得冗长 完全有凑字数之嫌






开头说Yet whether it is more crucial than written records remains a question, and the answer to it depends on different occasions and different intentions.应该分情况来看哪个更重要


但是结尾又说应该use both  把他们结合起来的意思  


感觉有点不妥






本人目前还没有入作文的门道 以上全属拙见  只是看见这篇文章有点感触 多谢楼主的文章让我有了点启发


哈哈  看书去了