Issue51 by zephyrqq

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ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

破题：对于这一道题目，我的看法是个人兴趣和需要不能混为一谈，个人需要不仅仅只是主观需要，还包括客观需要。不是what the individual want 而是what the individual really need whether he or she concede or not. 所以，尽管这种教育理想得有点难以实现我还是其本支持论者的观点的。下面是我写的i51，欢迎你们拍哦

提纲：
1.个性化设计的教育（因材施教）能提供给每个学生其所需，更加有利
2.个性化设计的教育有助于学生发展他们固有的优势和兴趣
3.尽管受条件限制这种教育很难实现，但是我们不能否认其理想的有效性



Should education be specifically designed to meet the needs and interests of each student? And why? How can we make education truly effective?What is a truly effective education? These complex questions have troubled educators for a long time. In someone's opinion, only by offering specifically designed education can we achieve the goal of teaching effectively. (make our education effective). Generally speaking, I fundamentally agree with this perspective.

First of all, specifically designed education might be more likely to provide every student with exactly what he or she needs, and therefore the student can benefit more from it. Confucius, the greatest educator in ancient China, ever pointed out that the best way to teach is to offer an individualized quality education for every student, in other words, to teach students in accordance with their aptitudes. Actually, as a teacher, Confucius always tried to teach in this way. One day, a student came to ask him: "If I decide to do something, should I begin to do it immediately?" He answered: "Yes, of course." Next(The next) day, however, another student went to ask the same question but got a different answer: "No, of course not!" Why? That is because the first student was one of those who were always meticulous and often hesitated to act, while the second one was quite mindless and never think twice before his action. By giving them entirely different answers to the same question, Confucius educated them to   identify their weaknesses,and improved their characters(and as a result of that, both of them successfully improved their characters to some degree). This case illustrates the point that individualized education is appropriate, for the reason that different students of (with) different deficiencies need different educations.

Furthermore, offering an individualized quality education can meet interests and needs of some unique students and enable them to develop their inherent advantages（ also help students to develop their inherent advantages as well as interests effectively）. There are extraordinarily great number of outstanding people whose success is(who succeed) due to individualized education. Picasso, the most creative Spanish painter,who began to learn how to draw from his father with interest at an aerly age, never received a general education. Mozart, the worldwide famous musician, followed  his interest in music and started to compose when he was a child of 4, accepting no traditional formal education. Another typical example is Helen, a female writer, who lost the abilities of hearing, speaking and seeing at an early age. It is obvious that without the specially designed education of herthat family teacher who taught her only student-Helen- all heart and soul (heart and soul全心全意地), she would not become a prominent writer but only a painful patient even though she had a talent (not only interests but also talents)  . The lesson we can draw from all these cases is that an individualized quality education might be helpful and efficient for students especially the unique ones.can be significant helpful to students . Since every student has his or her own latnet capacities and intersts, most effective education should make effort to draw out what is hidded in each student individually.

Admittedly, general education, the common method of teaching, also can make a difference to students' lives. But it can not be the most efficient way. Meanwhile, specifically designed education sometimes might be unavailable for most of people, for the reason that in contemporary society each teacher has so many students that it seems impossible for him or her to know each of his or her students well, let alone teach each of them in different ways. Despite of these, we can not deny the wonderful advantages of specifically designed education, which is seems to be somewhat idealistic （ideal）. idealistic不是个褒义词，是表示那种空想的理想主义式的东西，所以我用ideal理想的，完美的。因为我认为specially designed education 是教育的完美境界

On the basis of these analyses, I would conclude that education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. One does not have to go very far to see that the students would benefit significantly from the education, which is especially designed for each of them.

非常感谢各位，你们的意见我都认真地思考了。文章已经修改，加了下划线的黑色的字都删除
individual也不错，但是individualized是表示“个别地予以考虑的”，我是想表示这个意思。
heart and soul 全心全意地
第二段的改动比较大，现在把第二段变成侧重兴趣，这样在大家的帮助下，文章中间这几段的思路更加清楚一点也更加切题，即：
1.针对needs 2.针对interests 3. 让步承认困难之所在，但不否认有效性


以下是去掉修改痕迹的完全修订版
Should education be specifically designed to meet the needs and interests of each student? And why? What is a truly effective education? These complex questions have troubled educators for a long time. In someone's opinion, only by offering specifically designed education can we make our education most effective. Generally speaking, I fundamentally agree with this perspective.

First of all, specifically designed education might be more likely to provide every student with exactly what he or she needs, and therefore the student can benefit more from it. Confucius, the greatest educator in ancient China, ever pointed out that the best way to teach is to offer an individualized quality education for every student, in other words, to teach students in accordance with their aptitudes. Actually, as a teacher, Confucius always tried to teach in this way. One day, a student came to ask him: "If I decide to do something, should I begin to do it immediately?" He answered: "Yes, of course."The next day, however, another student went to ask the same question but got a different answer: "No, of course not!" Why? That is because the first student was one of those who were always meticulous and often hesitated to act, while the second one was quite mindless and never think twice before his action. By giving them entirely different answers to the same question, Confucius educated them to   identify their weaknesses, and as a result of that, both of them successfully improved their characters to some degree. This case illustrates the point that individualized education is appropriate, for the reason that different students with different deficiencies need different educations.

Furthermore, offering an individualized quality education can also help students to develop their inherent advantages as well as interests effectively）. There are extraordinarily great number of outstanding people who succeed due to individualized education. Picasso, the most creative Spanish painter,who began to learn how to draw from his father with interest at an aerly age, never received a general education. Mozart, the worldwide famous musician, followed  his interest in music and started to compose when he was a child of 4, accepting no traditional formal education. Another typical example is Helen, a female writer, who lost the abilities of hearing, speaking and seeing at an early age. It is obvious that without the specially designed education of that family teacher who taught her only student-Helen- heart and soul she would not become a prominent writer but only a painful patient even though she had not only interests but also talents. The lesson we can draw from all these cases is that an individualized quality education can be significant helpful to students. Since every student has his or her own latnet capacities and intersts, most effective education should make effort to draw out what is hidded in each student individually.

Admittedly, general education, the common method of teaching, also can make a difference to students' lives. But it can not be the most efficient way. Meanwhile, specifically designed education sometimes might be unavailable for most of people, for the reason that in contemporary society each teacher has so many students that it seems impossible for him or her to know each of his or her students well, let alone teach each of them in different ways. Despite of these, we can not deny the wonderful advantages of specifically designed education, which is seems to be somewhat ideal.

On the basis of these analyses, I would conclude that education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. One does not have to go very far to see that the students would benefit significantly from the education, which is especially designed for each of them.





[ 本帖最后由 zephyrqq 于 2008-3-6 18:59 编辑 ]

wy86917UID: 2335014

ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."提纲：1.个性化的教育（因材施教）能提供给每个学生其所需，更加有利2.对于特殊的学生，个性化教育针对他们的成才起到了重要的作用3.尽管受条件限制这种教育很难实现，但是我们不能否认其理想的有效性

Should education be specifically designed to meet the needs and interests of each student? And why? How can we make education truly effective? These complex questions have troubled educators for a long time. In someone's opinion, only by offering specifically designed education can we achieve the goal of teaching effectively. Generally speaking, I fundamentally agree with this perspective.

（开头的连问很有气势）

First of all, specifically designed education might be more likely to provide every student with exactly what he or she need, and therefore the student can benefit more from it. Confucius, the greatest educator in ancient China, ever pointed out that the best way to teach is to offer an individualized quality education for every student, in other words, to teach students in accordance with their aptitudes. Actually, as a teacher, Confucius always tried to teach in this way. One day, a student came to ask him: "If I decide to do something, should I begin to do it immediately?" He answered: "Yes, of course." Next day, however, another student went to ask the same question but got a different answer: "No, of course not!" 【不知道该说有点冗长还是正好，因为后面的分析倒是不错】Why? That is because the first student was one of those who were always meticulous and often hesitated to act, while the second one was quite mindless and never think twice before his action. By giving them entirely different answers to the same question, Confucius educated them to identify their weakness and improved their characters. This case illustrates the point that individualized education is appropriate, for the reason that different students of different deficiencies need different educations.

Furthermore, offering an individualized quality education can meet interests and needs of some unique students and enable them to develop their inherent advantages. There are extraordinarily great number of outstanding people whose success is due to individualized education. Picasso, the most creative Spanish painter, who began to learn how to draw from his father, never received a general education. Mozart, the worldwide famous musician, started to compose when he was a child of 4, accepting no formal education. Another typical example is Helen, a female writer, who lost the abilities of hearing, speaking and seeing at an early age. It is obvious that without the special designed education of her family teacher who taught her only student all heart and soul, she would not become a prominent writer but only a painful patient even though she had a talent. The lesson we can draw from all these cases is that an individualized quality education might be helpful and efficient for students especially the unique ones.

Admittedly, general education, the common method of teaching, also can make a difference to students' lives. But it can not be the most efficient way. Meanwhile, specifically designed education sometimes might be unavailable for most of people, for the reason that in contemporary society each teacher has so many students that it seems impossible for him or her to know each of his or her students well, let alone teach each of them in different ways. Despite of these, we can not deny the wonderful advantage of specifically designed education, which is seems to be somewhat idealistic. (在加点支持专才教育的——“试想，等到社会发展到一定程度，有能力把每个人都当作海伦凯勒为每个人都专门设计，那么岂不是比现在更有效率”。。。)

On the basis of these analyses, I would conclude that education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. One does not have go very far to see that the students would benefit significantly from the education, which is especially designed for each of them.

觉得你写的真的蛮好的

[ 本帖最后由 wy86917 于 2008-2-4 00:42 编辑 ]

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Should education be specifically designed to meet the needs and interests of each student? And why? How can we make education truly effective? These complex questions have troubled educators for a long time. In someone's opinion, only by offering specifically designed education can we achieve the goal of teaching effectively. Generally speaking, I fundamentally agree with this perspective. 提问比较有层次,不错.

First of all, specifically designed education might be more likely to provide every student with exactly what he or she need, and therefore the student can benefit more from it. Confucius, the greatest educator in ancient China, ever pointed out that the best way to teach is to offer an individualized quality education for every student, in other words, to teach students in accordance with their aptitudes. Actually, as a teacher, Confucius always tried to teach in this way. One day, a student came to ask him: "If I decide to do something, should I begin to do it immediately?" He answered: "Yes, of course." Next day, however, another student went to ask the same question but got a different answer: "No, of course not!" Why? That is because the first student was one of those who were always meticulous and often hesitated to act, while the second one was quite mindless and never think twice before his action. By giving them entirely different answers to the same question, Confucius educated them to identify their weakness and improved their characters. This case illustrates the point that individualized education is appropriate, for the reason that different students of different deficiencies need different educations.例子比较新,但是感觉不是很能有效切合effective,如果后面再分析下,两个人都得到了很好的发展

Furthermore, offering an individualized quality education can meet interests and needs of some unique students and enable them to develop their inherent advantages. There are extraordinarily great number of outstanding people whose success is due to individualized education. Picasso, the most creative Spanish painter, who began to learn how to draw from his father, never received a general education. Mozart, the worldwide famous musician, started to compose when he was a child of 4, accepting no formal education. Another typical example is Helen, a female writer, who lost the abilities of hearing, speaking and seeing at an early age. It is obvious that without the special designed education of her family teacher who taught her only student all heart and soul, she would not become a prominent writer but only a painful patient even though sha had a talent. The lesson we can draw from all these cases is that an individualized quality education might be helpful and efficient for students especially the unique ones. 把专门人才拎出来说,有把人分三六九等之嫌,比较敏感,一家之言.

Admittedly, general education, the common method of teaching, also can make a difference to students' lives. But it can not be the most efficient way. Meanwhile, specifically designed education sometimes might be unavailable for most of people, for the reason that in contemporary society each teacher has so many students that it seems impossible for him or her to know each of his or her students well, let alone teach each of them in different ways. Despite of these, we can not deny the wonderful advantage of specifically designed education, which is seems to be somewhat idealistic. 这段单薄一点,展示观点,就是分析透彻点更好

On the basis of these analyses, I would conclude that education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. One does not have go very far to see that the students would benefit significantly from the education, which is especially designed for each of them.


Lz 观点比较新,模板痕迹没有,值得学习.

但我还是不太感自由行文,觉得比较难控制结构,而且不能很好体现critical thinking

语言流畅.比较舒服.

.8错


有空看看我的,提点意见 谢谢
同题 issue51 https://bbs.gter.net/thread-796663-1-1.html

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Should education be specifically designed to meet the needs and interests of each student? And why? How can we make education truly effective? These complex questions have troubled educators for a long time. In someone's opinion, only by offering specifically designed education can we achieve the goal of teaching effectively. Generally speaking, I fundamentally agree with this perspective.

First of all, specifically designed education might be more likely to provide every student with exactly what he or she need, and therefore the student can benefit more from it. Confucius, the greatest educator in ancient China, ever pointed out that the best way to teach is to offer an individualized quality education for every student, in other words, to teach students in accordance with their aptitudes. Actually, as a teacher, Confucius always tried to teach in this way. One day, a student came to ask him: "If I decide to do something, should I begin to do it immediately?" He answered: "Yes, of course." Next day, however, another student went to ask the same question but got a different answer: "No, of course not!" Why? That is because the first student was one of those who were always meticulous and often hesitated to act, while the second one was quite mindless and never think twice before his action. By giving them entirely different answers to the same question, Confucius educated them to identify their weakness and improved (不该用过去式？） their characters. This case illustrates the point that individualized education is appropriate, for the reason that different students of different deficiencies need different educations.这一段里的例子是不是有点罗嗦？而且似乎因材施教和according to interests and needs 有一定的区别？

Furthermore, offering an individualized quality education can meet interests and needs of some unique students and enable them to develop their inherent advantages. There are extraordinarily great number of outstanding people whose success is due to individualized education. Picasso, the most creative Spanish painter, who began to learn how to draw from his father, never received a general education. Mozart, the worldwide famous musician, started to compose when he was a child of 4, accepting no formal education. Another typical example is Helen, a female writer, who lost the abilities of hearing, speaking and seeing at an early age. It is obvious that without the special designed education of her family teacher who taught her only student all heart and soul, she would not become a prominent writer but only a painful patient even though she had a talent. The lesson we can draw from all these cases is that an individualized quality education might be helpful and efficient for students especially the unique ones.

Admittedly, general education, the common method of teaching, also can make a difference to students' lives. But it can not be the most efficient way. Meanwhile, specifically designed education sometimes might be unavailable for most of people, for the reason that in contemporary society each teacher has so many students that it seems impossible for him or her to know each of his or her students well, let alone teach each of them in different ways. Despite of these, we can not deny the wonderful advantage of specifically designed education, which is seems to be somewhat idealistic. 我觉得攻击specialized education是idealistic蛮好的

On the basis of these analyses, I would conclude that education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. One does not have go very far to see that the students would benefit significantly from the education, which is especially designed for each of them.

我的文章
I129:https://bbs.gter.net/thread-797070-1-1.html
I51:https://bbs.gter.net/thread-797355-1-1.html

zephyrqqUID: 2260290

谢谢大家，我觉得写issue用模板不好操作，但可以准备一些常用句式。
你们的意见对我很有启发：）第一段的例子和分析都可以再修正一下。第二段我是想分析特例，用对特殊人群的special designed education证明一下它很有成效，没有想到会有把人分几等的危险。。
issue难写，大家加油~

Rainy1423UID: 2315816

Shouldeducation be specifically designed to meet the needs and interests ofeach student? And why? How can we make education truly effective? Thesecomplex questions have troubled educators for a long time. In someone'sopinion, only by offering specifically designed education can weachieve the goal of teaching effectively. Generally speaking, Ifundamentally agree with this perspective.[明显的论点句，只不过前半句看了会给人一种后面要否定的感觉，可是后面又是肯定的答案，呵呵~小怪一下]

First of all, specificallydesigned education might be more likely to provide every student withexactly what he or she needs, and therefore the student can benefit morefrom it.[分论点1] Confucius, the greatest educator in ancient China, everpointed out that the best way to teach is to offer an individualizedquality education for every student, in other words, to teach studentsin accordance with their aptitudes.[好牛的例子~~记下来呵呵~] Actually, as a teacher, Confuciusalways tried to teach in this way. One day, a student came to ask him:"If I decide to do something, should I begin to do it immediately?" Heanswered: "Yes, of course." Next day, however, another student went toask the same question but got a different answer: "No, of course not!"Why? That is because the first student was one of those who were alwaysmeticulous and often hesitated to act, while the second one was quitemindless and never think twice before his action. By giving thementirely different answers to the same question, Confucius educatedthem to identify their weakness and improved their characters. Thiscase illustrates the point that individualized education isappropriate, for the reason that different students of differentdeficiencies need different educations.
论证完美！

Furthermore, offering anindividualized quality education can meet interests and needs of someunique students and enable them to develop their inherent advantages.There are extraordinarily great number of outstanding people whosesuccess is due to individualized education. Picasso, the most creativeSpanish painter, who began to learn how to draw from his father, neverreceived a general education. Mozart, the worldwide famous musician,started to compose when he was a child of 4, accepting no formaleducation. Another typical example is Helen, a female writer, who lostthe abilities of hearing, speaking and seeing at an early age. It isobvious that without the special designed education of her familyteacher who taught her only student all heart and soul, she would notbecome a prominent writer but only a painful patient even though sha [she]had a talent.[例子都很好] The lesson we can draw from all these cases is that anindividualized quality education might be helpful and efficient forstudents especially the unique ones.

Admittedly, generaleducation, the common method of teaching, also can make a difference tostudents' lives. But it can not be the most efficient way. Meanwhile,specifically designed education sometimes might be unavailable for mostof people, for the reason that in contemporary society each teacher hasso many students that it seems impossible for him or her to know eachof his or her students well, let alone teach each of them in differentways. Despite of these, we can not deny the wonderful advantage ofspecifically designed education, which is seems to be somewhatidealistic.
这一段的让步也掌握了较好的度。

On the basis of theseanalyses, I would conclude that education will be truly effective onlywhen it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs andinterests of each student. One does not have go very far to see thatthe students would benefit significantly from the education, which isespecially designed for each of them.

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个人观点：
作者的文章读起来很轻松，又容易接受，应该会是5分的作文，我觉的哈~可能会更好
作者的观点，以及突破方式都很独特，但是也有风险，那就是很小众。忽略了教育的时代性，只是给出了专才的特殊教育事例，却没有证据证明这种教育是适合大众的，这是一个问题。解决起来也很简单，可以大致说一说教育也参考学生的兴趣，可以给学生更多空间，或者给学生更多乐趣等等的好处就好了。反正这种大趋势的优势一定要编两个。
作者的文章几乎没有语法错误，用词也很熟练，似乎对描述事件尤其在行（看例子就知道），这是我需要学习的地方哈~

xiahsoulUID: 2441730

Should education be specifically designed to meet the needs and interests of each student? And why? How can we make education truly effective? These complex questions have troubled educators for a long time. In someone's opinion, only by offering specifically designed education can we achieve the goal of teaching effectively. Generally speaking, I fundamentally agree with this perspective.(不错的开头，除了简单的SHOULD，还有WHY? HOW? 破题仔细)

First of all, specifically designed education might be more likely to provide every student with exactly what he or she need(needs), and therefore the student(students) can benefit more from it. Confucius, the greatest educator in ancient China, ever pointed out that the best way to teach is to offer an individualized(individual,我查了下是individual, 比如individual education) quality education for every student, in other words, to teach students in accordance with their aptitudes. Actually, as a teacher, Confucius always tried to teach in this way. One day, a student came to ask him: "If I decide to do something, should I begin to do it immediately?" He answered: "Yes, of course." Next day, however, another student went to ask the same question but got a different answer: "No, of course not!" Why? That is because the first student was one of those who were always meticulous and often hesitated to act, while the second one was quite mindless and never think twice before his action. By giving them entirely different answers to the same question, Confucius educated them to identify their weakness and improved their characters. This case illustrates the point that individualized education is appropriate, for the reason that different students of different deficiencies need different educations.(很新的例子，赞一下)

Furthermore, offering an individualized（individual）quality education can meet interests and needs of some unique students and enable them to develop their inherent advantages. There are extraordinarily great number of outstanding people whose success is due to individualized education. Picasso, the most creative Spanish painter, who began to learn how to draw from his father, never received a general education. Mozart, the worldwide famous musician, started to compose when he was a child of 4, accepting no formal education（你这里说的是正式教育，而不管是不是specially designed都是正式教育的一种）. Another typical example is Helen, a female writer, who lost the abilities of hearing, speaking and seeing at an early age. It is obvious that without the special（specially） designed education of her family teacher who taught her（容易指代不清，最好换掉）only student all heart and soul（heart and soul就行了，没有all heart and soul 的说法）, she would not become a prominent writer but only a painful patient even though she had a talent. The lesson we can draw from all these cases is that an individualized quality education might be helpful and efficient for students especially the unique ones.

Admittedly, general education, the common method of teaching, also can make a difference to students' lives. But it can not be the most efficient way. Meanwhile, specifically designed education sometimes might be unavailable for most of people, for the reason that in contemporary society each teacher has so many students that it seems impossible for him or her to know each of his or her students well, let alone teach each of them in different ways. Despite of these, we can not deny the wonderful advantage(advantages) of specifically designed education, which is seems to be somewhat idealistic.

On the basis of these analyses, I would conclude that education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. One does not have go very far to see that the students would benefit significantly from the education, which is especially designed for each of them

一点看法：
1.论证逻辑清晰，但是语言有待加强
2.句式多做变换
3.除了例子外，演绎分析可以再多一点
优点我就不说了 前面几楼也都说的差不多了 :loveliness:

欢迎拍拍我的  狠狠拍 不吝赐教   :handshake ISSUE 51 https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=798172&extra=page%3D1

[ 本帖最后由 xiahsoul 于 2008-2-6 03:45 编辑 ]

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提纲：
1.个性化的教育（因材施教）能提供给每个学生其所需，更加有利
2.对于特殊的学生，个性化教育针对他们的成才起到了重要的作用
3.尽管受条件限制这种教育很难实现，但是我们不能否认其理想的有效性

Should education be specifically designed to meet the needs and interests of each student? And why? How can we make education truly effective? [感觉在“如何使得教育有效？”加上“什么是有效的教育？”更好一些，逻辑性更强]These complex questions have troubled educators for a long time. In someone's opinion, only by offering specifically designed education can we achieve the goal of teaching [我没看出来前面哪里提到了教育的目的] effectively. Generally speaking, I fundamentally agree with this perspective.

First of all, specifically designed education might be more likely to provide every student with exactly what he or she need, and therefore the student can benefit more from it. Confucius, the greatest educator in ancient China, ever pointed out that the best way to teach is to offer an individualized quality education for every student, in other words, to teach students in accordance with their aptitudes.（很好的例子，尤其是“teach students in accordance with their aptitudes”,学习中） Actually, as a teacher, Confucius always tried to teach in this way. One day, a student came to ask him: "If I decide to do something, should I begin to do it immediately?" He answered: "Yes, of course." Next day, however, another student went to ask the same question but got a different answer: "No, of course not!" Why? That is because the first student was one of those who were always meticulous and often hesitated to act, while the second one was quite mindless and never think twice before his action. By giving them entirely different answers to the same question, Confucius educated them to identify their weakness and improved their characters. This case illustrates the point that individualized education is appropriate, for the reason that different students of different deficiencies（可以这样说吗？觉得of有些别扭，with好像好一些） need different educations.

Furthermore, offering an individualized quality education can meet interests and needs of some unique students and enable them to develop their inherent advantages. There are extraordinarily great number of outstanding people whose success is due to individualized education. Picasso, the most creative Spanish painter, who began to learn how to draw from his father, never received a general education. Mozart, the worldwide famous musician, started to compose when he was a child of 4, accepting no formal education. Another typical example is Helen, a female writer, who lost the abilities of hearing, speaking and seeing at an early age. It is obvious that without the special designed education of her family teacher who taught her only student all heart and soul（没看懂是什么意思）, she would not become a prominent writer but only a painful patient even though sha（she） had a talent. The lesson we can draw from all these cases is that an individualized quality education might be helpful and efficient for students especially the unique ones. (感觉没有必要把unique student单独提出来说，会感觉有些以偏盖全的嫌疑，而且本段中似乎可以用student 来代替作者说的unique student)

Admittedly, general education, the common method of teaching, also can make a difference to students' lives. But it can not be the most efficient way. Meanwhile, specifically designed education sometimes might be unavailable for most of people, for the reason that in contemporary society each teacher has so many students that it seems impossible for him or her to know each of his or her students well, let alone teach each of them in different ways.（这个长句很是值得学习） Despite of these, we can not deny the wonderful advantage of specifically designed education, which is seems to be somewhat idealistic.

On the basis of these analyses, I would conclude that education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. One does not have go（？gone） very far to see that the students would benefit significantly from the education, which is especially designed for each of them.

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