进军美利坚作文组10月8日-狂狂

scutgongUID: 2564275

10.8  是telephone 还是television对人类的有more effects?


Owing to the highly development of science and technology, people’s lives are become increasingly comfortable and convenient. Telephone and television, which are both the most representative products of the past century, have influenced our lives styles greatly. As far as I am concerned, compared to the effects of telephone, the influence of television on our lives are much more impressive.



We can list a lot of advantages of telephone so as to make a comparison with the effects of television. The telephone facilities an amazing platform for people from different places of the world to communicate through the line. To send a message to another person, people no longer to travel to another place or waiting for letters. Compared to the traditional letter, the telephone also has the advantage of voice communication and passion could be passed.


However, when compared to the effects of television, the above advantages are of less significance. The television is superior to telephone from several points. People could be well informed by the help of television. To illustrate the point, one should think of our everyday life. Most of the information we get are from the news on television. What’s more, with the adding of voice and images, the television are much suitable to spread the information. For example, to convey the ideas of Chinese Military Exhibition, watching the program through television is the best choice. In this respect, television has more good points by spreading the information.



In addition, the television is an excellent time killer for most of us. If we have nothing to do in our sparing time, sitting on the sofa and watching our favorite program on television is very comfortable. Almost every family has several televisions because they become a necessary part in our lives. I cannot image our lives would be without of television. In short, the television has the effect to make our lives more colorful and is an indispensable part for entertainment.



To conclude, both telephone and television have great effects on our everyday lives: the telephone helps us to communicate easily and the television makes us well informed and gives us a more comfortable life. For my perspective, I maintain that the television has more effects on our lives.

karen_0315UID: 2590040

Owing to the highly development of science and technology, people’s lives are become（becoming） increasingly comfortable and convenient. Telephone and television, which are both the most representative products of the past century, have influenced our lives (life) styles greatly. As far as I am concerned, compared to the effects of telephone, the influence of television on our lives are much more impressive.5
We can list(chinglish, 可以说，there are) a lot of advantages of telephone so as to make a comparison with the effects of television.(这句话很别扭，so as to是为了，以至于的意思，是不是想表达comparing with television) The（没有具体指代可以去掉） telephone facilities an amazing platform for people from different places of the world to communicate through the line.(谓语在哪里？有点乱) To send a message（message不可数的说~） to another person, people no longer to（去掉） travel to another place or waiting for letters.（这句话还是别扭啊，Thanks to telephone can send message to another person, there is no need for people to travel far away to another place or waste plenty of time waiting for letters.） Compared to the traditional letter, the telephone also has the advantage of voice communication(应该是communicate voice 吧) and passion could be passed.电话的好处讲的太多了，你的point不是television吗？这样不仅浪费了很多时间和篇幅还不利于你主要观点的陈述，telephone好处一句话概括就可以了。昨天我只说了两句对立观点的好处就被指出来了。
However, when compared to the effects of television, the above advantages are of less significance. The television is superior to telephone from（for） several points. People could be well informed by the help of television. To illustrate the point, one should think of our everyday（daily） life. Most of the information we get are from the news on television. What’s more, with the adding of voice and images, the television are much suitable to spread the information. For example, to convey the ideas of Chinese Military Exhibition, watching the program through television is the best choice.[color=Magenta]（前后主宾不一致，要不是传递信息方，要不是接收信息方，两边混在一起了） In this respect, television has more good points by（in） spreading the information.
In addition, the television is an excellent time killer（这个有点过去口语化吧，不适合在文章中出现，我觉得） for most of us. If we have nothing to do in our sparing time, sitting on the sofa and watching our favorite program on television is very comfortable. Almost every family has several televisions because they become a necessary part in our lives. I cannot image our lives would be without of（去掉） television. In short, the television has the effect to make our lives more colorful and is an indispensable part for entertainment.
To conclude, both telephone and television have great effects on our everyday lives: the telephone helps us to communicate easily and the television makes us well informed and gives us a more comfortable life. For my perspective, I maintain that the television has more effects on our lives.
总结：语言有点chinglish并且词汇有点primary，语法问题多，和我一样，建议多看看范文，慢慢就进步了~我也是~:loveliness:
结构上可以去掉第二段，toefl作文和GRE作文不一样，你只要把你偏向的观点说清楚就行了，大正小负之类不需要的~

scutgongUID: 2564275

10.9 你同不同意现在的人们没有以前friendly了?

Whether people are less friendly than the past or not is a heated debate nowadays. Some people hold the ideas that people have more chance to communicate by the help of the technology and people become more intimate. Others, however, claim that people are not as friendly as before. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter position. The following are some importanct reason for my view.

Even people have more opportunity to communicate, the communication is not friendly as before. Nowadays, people could take a amount of ways to contact with others. Advanced transportations, telephones and internet facilities the convenience for communication. However, at the same time, people have been distracted from the real relationship or friendship, so the relationship between people turns to apathy. For example, a white-collar would prefer to stay in front of the computer other than to talk with his friends. Briefly, people are reluctant to communicate with others, let alone to be friendly.

People become less friendly because they are more independent today. Usually, friends play a important role in sharing the happiness and facing the difficulties with us. However, people are more independent and they could achieve a lot of things easily and do not want to bother others. For instance, when  our electronic fan is broken, we are hesitant to turn to our friends and other people, we had better to pay the money to professional people.

The increasingly fierce competition among people make people less friendly. Modern technology have a lot of advantage to our society, however, it will impose the unhealthy relationship on people. Owing to the competition, stable friends may degrade to rivals or even enemies. To prove it, we could just observe a company. In order to be promoted and seize the limited resource, everyone is forced to be ambitious and aggressive. In this respect, most people have to behave less friendly.

To conclude, through it is more convenient for people to communicate with others, people are not as friendly as before.

doubledianUID: 2661760

10.9 你同不同意现在的人们没有以前friendly了?
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Whether people are less friendly than the past or not is a heated debate nowadays. Some people hold the ideas that people have more chance to communicate by the help of the technology and people become more intimate. Others, however, claim that people are not as friendly as before. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter position. The following are some importanct（拼写错误） reason for my view.
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Even people have more opportunity to communicate, the communication is not friendly as before. Nowadays, people could take a （an）amount of ways to contact with others. Advanced transportations, telephones and internet facilities（这之间是不是少了个动词？） the convenience for communication. However, at the same time, people have been distracted from the real relationship or friendship, so the relationship between people turns to apathy（这是个名词，turn to后面是不是应该来个adj或者动词？拙见，不一定对）. For example, a white-collar would prefer to stay in front of the computer other（是rather than吧） than to talk with his friends. Briefly, people are reluctant to communicate with others, let alone to be friendly.
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People become less friendly because they are more independent today. Usually, friends play a （an）important role in sharing the happiness and facing the difficulties with us. However, people are more independent and they could achieve a lot of things easily and do not want to bother others. For instance, when our electronic fan is broken, we are hesitant to turn to our friends and other people; we had better to pay the money to professional people.

The increasingly fierce competition among people make（加s） people less friendly. Modern technology have a lot of advantage（复数） to our society, however, it will impose the unhealthy relationship on people. Owing to the competition, stable friends may degrade to rivals or even enemies. To prove it, we could just observe a company. In order to be promoted and seize the limited resource, everyone is forced to be ambitious and aggressive. In this respect, most people have to behave less friendly.
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To conclude, through it is more convenient for people to communicate with others, people are not as friendly as before
这篇作文写得比较好，思路比较清晰，因为我自己作文比较差，所以也提不出什么建设性的意见，请谅解

fish1044UID: 2190500

Whether people are less friendly than the past or not is a heated debate nowadays. Some people hold the ideas that people have more chance to communicate by the help of the modern technology and people become more intimate. Others, however, claim that people are not as friendly as before. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter position. The following are some importanct reasons for my view.  q6 q0 W% p7 |0 n


Even if people have more opportunity to communicate, the communication is not as friendly as before. Nowadays, people could take a amount of ways to contact with others. Advanced transportations, telephones and internet facilities the convenience for communication.(这句话的动词呢？？) However, at the same time, people have been distracted from the real relationship or friendship, so the relationship between people turns to apathy.(这个理由没有解释清楚) For example, a white-collar would prefer to stay in front of the computer other than to talk with his friends. Briefly, people are reluctant to communicate with others, let alone to be friendly.1 f1 ~) p6 Y1 d* O1 O& B/ `


People become less friendly because they are more independent today. Usually, friends play a important role in sharing the happiness and facing the difficulties with us. However, people are more independent and they could achieve a lot of things easily and do not want to bother others. For instance, when  our electronic fan is broken, we are hesitant to turn to our friends and other people, we had better to pay the money to professional people.(给钱叫人来修，是independent吗？？)
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    The increasingly fierce competition among people make people less friendly. Modern technologies have a lot of advantage to our society, however, it will impose the unhealthy relationship on people. Owing to the competition, stable friends may degrade to rivals or even enemies. To prove it, we could just observe a company. In order to be promoted and seize the limited resource, everyone is forced to be ambitious and aggressive. In this respect, most people have to behave less friendly.. f4 a. g, E! B( X9 ]


To conclude, through it is more convenient for people to communicate with others, people are not as friendly as before.

文章开头模板味很浓。
主题没有链接词，让人感觉结构松散。
几个论点比较明确，但是缺乏detail说明。例子举的不是很贴切。
结果过于简单，没有实质内容。

总的来说，还需要多加练习。虽然不能过于依赖模板，但是文章的结构要保证，不然要拿高分还是比较困难。

楼主加油。

scutgongUID: 2564275

谢谢你们的评审。

scutgongUID: 2564275

10.10 playing computer games is wasting time 。 Children should not allowed to play them.



Modern technology are influening our everyday life from all respects. On one hand, it makes our lives more convenient and healthy; on the other hand, it imposes a lot of dangers on us. When it comes to the role of computer games, people's opinions are different. Some people argues that it helps the children a lot because it offers opportunities for promoting children's intelligence and creativeness. However, as far as I am concerned, I hold that playing computer games are not only a waste of time, but also unhealthy to the development of children.

Playing computer games is really wasting time, and the children are able to take the time to do a lot of things. The main job for the children is to receive the education and prepare for the future. Some people may argue that limited time to play computer game may improve the studies. However, they are too young to self-control and most of them may immerse in the games while ingoring the time. There are a lot of reports about the computer addiction of young children, the children have difficulty to get away from computer games. As a result, they could not concentrate on their studies, not to mention about the cultivation of creativeness.

Playing computer may influence the socialization of the children. It is known that children should learn to communicate with others to be socilize in the future. Childern who are indulging in the computer games has no spare time to take some social activities and all they need is to be winner in the game. For example, many children would like to spend the weekend in front of the computer rather than to go out with his friends. In that case, the children is hardly to be qualified for the future because of the harm of the computer games.

The character of the children may be influenced owing the the indluge of computer games. For one thing, some games have the possibilities to spread some unhealthy things and the children could be easily be hurt. For example, children who like to play some violent games may try to behave like the character in the game and become violent. For another, some children may reluctant to consider other things which is around them. It is possible that they fail to form to health and integrated thinking system, even become abrnormal. For instance, a reported showed that a child killed his parents for the reason that the parents criticized about his playing on computer games.

To conclude, the computer games have the problems of wasting time, bad influence on socialization and character of children, and all these will prevent the children from a healthy and useful ones. In short, children should not be allowed to play them.

victorwzdfUID: 2696440

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10.10
Modern technology are influening(influencing) our everyday life from all respects. On the one hand, it makes our lives more convenient and healthy; on the other hand, it imposes a lot of dangers on us. When it comes to the role of computer games, people's opinions are different. Some people argues(argue) that it helps the children a lot because it offers opportunities for promoting children's intelligence and creativeness. However, as far as I am concerned, I hold the view that playing computer games are(is) not only a waste of time, but also unhealthy to the development of children.
Playing computer games is really wasting time, and the children are able to take the time to do a lot of other things. The main job for the children is to receive the education and prepare for the future. Some people may argue that limited time to play computer game(注意前后电脑游戏的单复数一致) may improve the studies. However, they are too young to self-control and most of them may immerse in the games while ingoring the time. There are a lot of reports about the computer addiction of young children, the children have difficulty to get away from computer games. As a result, they could not concentrate on their studies, not to mention about the cultivation of creativeness.
Playing computer games may influence(influence多用于正面影响，应改为affect) the socialization of the children. It is known that children should learn to communicate with others to be socilize(??) in the future. Childern who are indulging(没见过，学习下) in the computer games has(have) no spare time to take some social activities and all they need is to be the winner in the game. For example, many children would like to spend the weekend being in front of the computer rather than to go out with his friends. In that case, the children is hardly to be qualified for the future because of the harm of the computer games.
character of the children may be influenced(同上) owing to the indluge of computer games. For one thing, some games have the possibilities to spread some unhealthy things and the children could be easily （去掉多余的be）hurt. For example, children who like to play some violent games may try to behave like the character in the game and become violent(become violent重复). For another, some children may be reluctant to consider other things which is(are) around them. It is possible that they fail to form (去掉to,form可及物)health and integrated thinking system, even become abrnormal. For instance, a reported showed that a child killed his parents for the reason that the parents criticized about his playing on computer games.
To conclude, the computer games have the problems of wasting time, bad influence on socialization and character of children, and all these will prevent the children from a healthy and useful ones（from being healthy and useful ones）. In short, children should not be allowed to play them.
整体的结构不错，也用了些比较高级的用法，但小错误太多，以后写作时多注意。

joyce455UID: 2614743

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Modern technology are influening our everyday(daily)  life  from(  on  )all   respects . On  one hand, it makes our lives more convenient and healthy; on the other hand, it imposes a lot of dangers on us. When it comes to the role of computer games, people's opinions are different. Some people argues(argue) that it helps the children a lot because it offers opportunities for promoting children's intelligence and creativeness. However, as far as I am concerned, I hold that playing computer games are not only a waste of time, but also unhealthy to the development of children.# w% W& n2 a6 u# f/ [
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Playing computer games is really wasting time, and the children are able to take the time to do a lot of things. The main job for the children is to receive the education and prepare for the future. Some people may argue that limited time to play computer game may improve the studies. However, they(they指代不明确,是some people还是children？） are too   young to self-control and most of them may immerse in the games while ingoring the time. There are a lot of reports about the computer addiction of young children, the children have difficulty to get(getting) away from computer games. As a result, they could not concentrate on their studies, not (letting alone)to mention about the cultivation of creativeness., H6 [6 ~) z3 o

% J: }' S+ J5 {( zPlaying computer may influence the socialization of the children. It is known that children should learn to communicate with others to be socilize in the future. Childern who are indulging in the computer games has no spare time to take some social activities and all they need(what they all need) is to be(a) winner in the game. For example, many children would like to spend the weekend in front of the computer rather than to go out with his(their) friends. In that case, the children is (are)hardly to be qualified for the future because of the harm of the computer games（最后这两句可以合并成一句话：In the case    that many children  would like to spend the  weekend in front of the computer rather than go out with their friends ，they  are hardly to be qualified for the future because of the harm of the computer games.)
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The character of the children may be influenced owing the the indluge of computer games. For one thing, some games have the possibilities to spread some unhealthy things and the children could be easily be hurt(could be hurt easily  两个BE放在一起感觉太累赘). For example, children who like to play some violent games may try to behave like the character in the game and become violent. For another, some children may reluctant to consider other things which is (are)around them. It is possible that they fail to form to health and integrated thinking system, even become abrnormal. For instance, a reported showed that a child killed his parents for the reason that the parents criticized about his playing on computer games.
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To conclude, the computer games have the problems of wasting time, bad influence on socialization and character of children, and all these will prevent the children from a healthy and useful ones. In short, children should not be allowed to play them.

结构很清晰.三点理由也很充分，但文章没有很复杂的句子和大词，有很多小的语法错误和搭配错误，稍加纠正就很完美了。
如有所述不妥之处，欢迎批评指正！:)

beangtUID: 2691375

Modern technology are influening(influencing) our everyday life from all respects(aspects). On one hand, it makes our lives more convenient and healthy; on the other hand, it imposes a lot of dangers on us. When it comes to the role of computer games, people's opinions are different. Some people argues(argue) that it helps the children a lot because it offers opportunities for promoting children's intelligence and creativeness. However, as far as I am concerned, I hold that playing computer games are not only a waste of time, but also unhealthy to the development of children.: g( a  l0 f0 G
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Playing computer games is really wasting time, and the children are able to take the time to do a lot of things. The main job for the children is to receive the education and prepare(preparing) for the future. Some people may argue that limited time to play computer game may improve the studies. However, they are too young to self-control(self-controlled,self-control好像是名词) and most of them may immerse (themselves)in the games while ingoring the time. There are a lot of reports about the computer addiction of young children, the children have difficulty to get away from computer games. As a result, they could not concentrate on their studies, not to mention about(感觉应该去掉about) the cultivation of creativeness(这句写得好~)
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Playing computer may influence the socialization of the children. It is known that children should learn to communicate with others to be socilize(socialized) in the future. Childern who are indulging in the computer games has no spare time to take some social activities and all they need is to be winner in the game. For example, many children would like to spend the weekend in front of the computer rather than to go out with his friends. In that case, the children is hardly to be qualified for the future because of the harm of the computer games.; I/ m+ V; Q! x4 ~+ u6 i6 m* U
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The character of the children may be influenced owing the the indluge(indulgence用名词) of computer games. For one thing, some games have the possibilities to spread some unhealthy things and the children could be easily be hurt. For example, children who like to play some violent games may try to behave like the character in the game and become violent. For another, some children may （be）reluctant to consider other things which is around them. It is possible that they fail to form to health and integrated thinking system, even become abrnormal. For instance, a reported(report) showed that a child killed his parents for the reason that the parents criticized about his playing on computer games.

To conclude, the computer games have the problems of wasting time, bad influence on socialization and character of children, and all these will prevent the children from （from being healthy and useful ones）. a healthy and useful ones.（from being healthy and useful ones）.  In short, children should not be allowed to play them.
结构很好，内容清晰，一些用词错误需要避免~
这是我第一次评作文，有什么说的不对的地方请指出~
谢谢~

scutgongUID: 2564275

10月11日的作文


Do you agree or disagree: people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place.

With the highly development of technology, it is much more convenient for people to move to another place. Whether to stay at one place for a life time, different people have different ideas. Some people prefer to live in the city or country all life. While, others hope to move during their life time. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the second opinion, I would like to move to a new place after several years' residence.

People who reside at one place for long time may cause a lot of problems, especially for the young people. During the old days, it is very difficult for people to move because of the poor transportation and their pursuit for stability. Even if they hope to own a new house far from the hometown, the reality prevent them from moving. But now, things have been very different. Long time living in one place may make people feel bored and even depressed. Most people may be tired of their lives, searching for new place will help them to own better feeling, which is good to their health.  

People will get more opportunities of their career due to the change of place. If people cling to a place, they may lose a lot of chances for development. For example, it is known that the developped cities are the best choice for studying and business, people who studied and do business in these cities are able to acquire success with the help of best resource. In this respect, if it is possible, people should make some change of the residence.

It is a good opportunities for people to experience the new sightseeing and culture. Some may argue that travelling is also a good choice to get touch with the new things in other place. However, sometimes, it is impossible for people to be impressed by the beautiful scenery or cultural value. It takes time for people who is interested to the new place. For instance, Beijing is seen as a amazing city not only for its gorgeous history and uncomparable modernization. To know the city well, living in the city for several years is sensible. Residing in a another place will give us a lot of chance to acquire a lot of knowledge.

We could get a lot of inspiration and knowledge of culture by moving to new places. While if we live at one place all life, people will feel bored. To conclude, people should move to another place to reside during the life time.

scutgongUID: 2564275

10月12日的作文

Do you agree or disagree getting university education is the most important factor for success?

Our life is colorful because of different kinds of opportunities and challenges. Whether receiving university education is the vital factor for success, people's ideas are divergent. Some people hold that college education is not a necesary prerequsite to be sucessful and many people even make a success without fruitful education. However, as far as I'm concerned, I think the college education plays the most important role in people's successful life.

People who receive university education are able to acquire more knowledge. It is known the university is the best place to acquire knowledge. Nowadays, with the development of science and technology, it is undeniable that knowledge is a key factor for success. People, no matter what to do in the future, should recognize the importance of  knowledge. For example, farming is seen as a simple work even a illiterated man could do a good job in the old days. However, things have been changed, it is necessary for a farmer to know farming technology, such as how to choose the seeds professionally, prevent the vegetable from spoiling by the pests, and so on.

Colledge provides people the best way to be specilized. Without the college degree, it is difficult for a person to receive professional skills, which is prerequisite to be employed. Although high school education has the ability to spread the fundamental knowledge which is indispenable to live in the society. However, most of the companies are seeking job hunters with a certain amount of professional skills. For example, a graduate with a biology degree may have more opportunities to hunt a decent job, while the other people without college degree might have limited chance to be employed. In this respect, it is reasonable to be specilized in a university.

People with college degree have more chance to get advancement in career. For one thing, the college diploma demonstrate the high quality of knowledge and ability.  For another, the high educated people are more likely to contribute to the career because they are have more potential to work perfectly. The university degree owners are easily to be promoted and achieve success.

The university education could make us progressive in many aspects, such as we could acquire more knowledge, become specilized, and get promotion. To conclude, university eduction is the most importanct factor in order to achieve success.

joyce455UID: 2614743

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Our life is colorful because of different kinds of opportunities and challenges. Whether receiving university education is the（第一次提及用a） vital factor for success, people's ideas are divergent. Some people hold that college education is not a necesary prerequsite to be sucessful and many people even make a success without fruitful education. However, as far as I'm concerned, I think the college education plays the most important role in people's successful life.% W5 a9 o" W; K* j3 N1 v* j3 o% R

People who receive university education are able to acquire more knowledge. It is known the university is the best place to acquire knowledge. Nowadays, with the development of science and technology, it is undeniable that knowledge is a key factor for success. People, no matter what （job） to do in the future, should recognize the importance of  knowledge. For example, farming is seen as a simple work even a illiterated man could do a good job in the old days(这是两句话，中间应该有连词，或者把两句合为一句：farming is a good job which an illiterated man can do well). However, things have been changed, it is necessary for a farmer to know farming technology, such as how to choose the seeds professionally, (to)prevent the vegetable from spoiling by the pests, and so on.
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Colledge （college）provides people the best way to be specilized. Without the college degree, it is difficult for a person to receive professional skills（感觉这句逻辑有问题，没大学文凭就没有专业技能了？那技工呢?）, which is prerequisite to be employed. Although high school education has the ability to spread the fundamental knowledge which is indispenable to live in the society. However, most of the companies are seeking job hunters with(感觉用having更好些) a certain amount of professional skills. For example, a graduate with a biology （为什么要指明是biology呢？）degree may have more opportunities to hunt a decent job, while the other people without college degree might have limited chance to be employed. In this respect, it is reasonable to be specilized in a university.! A( V6 [9 ]0 w6 I: D
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People with college degree have more chance to get advancement in career. For one thing, the college diploma demonstrate the high quality of knowledge and ability.  For another, the high educated people are more likely to contribute to the career because they are have(去掉have) more potential to work perfectly. The university degree owners are easily to be promoted and achieve success.+ O4 e4 F# S3 M# i! s# O

The university education could make us progressive in many aspects, such as we could acquire more knowledge, become specilized, and get promotion. To conclude, university eduction is the most importanct factor in order to achieve success.
感觉你举得都是范例，少了实际的例子，感觉逻辑不是很清晰，文凭和专业技能是不挂钩的，也没说明为什么大学生更容易promote。

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The parents do not understand their children as well today as parents understood their children 50 years ago?


The parents play an important role in the offspring's whole life. It is undeniable that the parents are the earlist teachers of their children. Considering the importance of the education from parents, it is necessary for the parents to understand their children well. However, the situation is not optimistic. I agree with the claim that the parents do not understand their children as well today as parents undertood their children 50 years ago.

Nowadays, the parents fail to understand their children well because they have less time to contact with their children. Although the development of science and technology has made our life more convenient and we become more efficient, people are getting busier. It is true that we are able to finish our work at 8 hours, however, we should work in more spare time even holiday to get a career advancement. To adapt to the fierce competition, everyone should prepare well, otherwise, he will lose the competition. The direct effect of this is the decrease of time spending with families. As a result, compared with the families 50 years ago, parents has less time to communicate with their children and can not understand the offsprings better.

The increase of the generation gap is also negative to the understanding between the parents and children. Children are exposed in a society with developed technology and diversed cultures. In contrast, their parents may still keep the old thinkings. The difference of the cultural background could prevent the meaningful communication from two generations. For example, the Chinese children are fond of American music, Japanese suits and Korean food and they may despise the life styles of their parents. The contact between the parents and children can hardly make sense and it lead to the lack of understanding.

Owing to the less time to communticate and increased generation gap, it is apparently that the parents could not understand thier children as well today as they did before. In order to develop a harmony in families and the development of the children, it is necessary for the profund understanding between each part.

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The parents play an important role in the offspring's whole life. It is undeniable that the parents are the earlist(earliest) teachers of their children. Considering the importance of the education from parents, it is necessary for the parents to understand their children well. However, the situation is not optimistic. I agree with the claim that the parents do not understand their children as well today as parents undertood(understood) their children 50 years ago.
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Nowadays, the parents fail to understand their children well because they have less time to contact with their children. Although the development of science and technology has made our life more convenient and we become more efficient, people are getting busier. It is true that we are able to finish our work at(in) 8 hours; however, we should work in more spare time even holiday to get a career advancement. To adapt to the fierce competition, everyone should prepare well, otherwise, he will lose the competition. The direct effect of this is the decrease of time spending with families. As a result, compared with the families 50 years ago, parents has less time to communicate with their children and can not understand the offsprings(offspring单复同型) better.


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The increase of the generation gap is also negative to the understanding between the parents and children. Children are exposed in a society with developed technology and diversed（diverse） cultures. In(by) contrast, their parents may still keep the old thinkings. The difference of the cultural background could prevent the meaningful communication from two generations. For example, the Chinese children are fond of American music, Japanese suits and Korean food and they may despise(好词，记下了) the life styles of their parents. The contact between the parents and children can hardly make sense and it leads to the lack of understanding.

Owing to the less time to communticate(communicate) and increased generation gap, it is apparently that the parents could not understand thier(their) children as well today as they did before. In order to develop a harmony in families and the development of the children, it is necessary for the profund(profound) understanding between each part.
结构还不错，中间段缺乏必要的连接词，例子有些少显得内容有点空泛。