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Do you think success is important, or it is more important to remain happy and optimistic when you fail?
Nowadays, many people believe that wining is the only way to make their lives meaningful. Once they are lost, or failed, they became too frustrated. For me, I believe that it's more important to remain happy and optimistic when you fail than getting (我不太确定这里用这个形式的动词是否正确,我感觉应该和remain保持对应,但是又没有什么理由,不知道你的想法是?) success.
In the first place, I would like to say that failure is not a bad thing, that’s why we should remain happy and optimistic (可以换些类似的表达之类的哦,be confident之类的,我觉得就是相同的表达尽量别出现在一篇文章,当然我也有这个问题,就是因为平时积累的少,写的时候又写不出来,还是要多写多积累). Failure doesn't mean the end of your career, it is just a short stop on your way to success. Once you fail, you must have got something from it, right? (这句话的意思我是这样理解的:一旦你失败,你肯定会从中得到些什么。我觉得不管你失败不失败,不管你成功还是失败,总归在做的过程中都会得到经验的,你这里说一旦失败就肯定会得到经验我感觉不是很妥,就是说表达的意思不是很地道。You can get lots of relative useful experience though you fail in the end. 或者 no matter success or failure, you will get some useful experience from the process)So you have the experience to get things right. Thomas Edison failed many times before he invented bulbs, but he never stops trying. It’s his optimism that brought him the success he deserved. (爱迪生的例子和强调句都写的很不错,赞)
Also, remaining happy and optimistic (还是表达上的问题) when you fail can make you tougher than ever. Don’t be defeated by failure, and once you stand up, you are tougher than before. It’s not easy to success, people are always being beaten, but if you don't stand up when you fall, you will never see the bright dawn in the near future. So, don't be afraid of failure, dare to fall, and stand up with happiness and optimism.(这段要表达的意思是失败可以使人变得更严格,更坚强之类的意思,是吧。给你的文章看到这里,我突然想到一点,如果我们在写到这个点上的时候举个反面的例子,就是失败了然后放弃了然后肯定没有成功的例子,不知道这样会不会对文章有比较大的起色)
Last but not the least, failure can make you appreciate more about success. Being through failure(这里确定需要放上being?我感觉不放being也可以) can let you know the preciousness of success, and appreciate more about hard working. When you success and look back what you did and what you paid on the way to your goal, you will finally find out that they are all worthy doing. (不管怎样,享受成功带来的喜悦, 失败带来的痛苦,这才是真实的生活,不错的idea)
Everybody want success, because success can bring you fame, money, and satisfaction. But the road to win is hard. It’s a road full of stumbling rocks and brambles.(不错的比喻,呵呵) But without hardship, the road can't be perfect. So, we can't deny the failures in the way, but what we can do is to keep happy and optimistic when we fail, which can lead us to success, and more important than success itself. (结尾简短的总结前面表诉的观点即可)
俺是菜鸟,我也刚刚写了这篇文章,然后看到你的就给你修改了一版,你写的比我的好多了,跟你学习。
一起修改,一起进步,一起加油 |
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