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archi1919UID: 2318824

Topic: Letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that may destroy the friendship.


There are people in this world that prefer to be “good to all”, to keep silence even if they knew their friends’ behavior is inappropriate in avoid of the awkward of the quarrel and even to please friends and wish to be the center of the friend circle. For my part, I cannot image myself behaving like that. I really think sincere is the most important quality I looked for in my friendship. With the candid and the goodwill, I could hardly agree that it is better to let a friend make a mistake than to say or do something that may destroy the friendship.

Friendship resembles a contract between two people on the basis of open heartedness. If a friend is making a mistake, and meanwhile you could recognize it is a fault and know about the solution, why just keep away from it in fear of what you say will upset him and lose him? The silent toward a friend facing mistakes itself breaks the contract and needs one just quits the game called friendship.

Some deeds or words in this situation do hurt and even destroy the friendship, it could be an instruction combined with jeers --- when your friend is in trouble, you seem like coming by and saying “hey, buddy, something wrong with you, I knew it, and let me show you the right way…” it could be that your friend does not simply appreciate your advice or your behavior. If you are true friends, the two circumstances above could just mean that you are not mature enough to totally think of the other’s condition, or you put too much love on him and just want to control and force him.

We have a few real friends in our lifetime, and I think it would be a shame to keep indifferent towards friends’ dilemma. If we said or did something with goodwill and respect when a friend is likely to behave like something wrong, we still cause harm or destroy our relationship, maybe the best way could be “let it go” for you two may not real friends as your former thought.

S酱UID: 2883188

There are people in this world that prefer to be “good to all”,（They tend 或者加and ）to keep silence even if they knew（know 就行）their friends’ behavior is inappropriate in avoid of the awkward of the quarrel( 建议变成in order to 引导的句子，现在句子太长逻辑混乱）and even to please friends and wish to be the center of the friend circle. (句子都太长并且句式无变化）For my part, I cannot image myself behaving like that. I really think sincere is the most important quality I looked for in my friendship. With the candid（这是形容词？） and the goodwill, I could hardly agree that it is better to let a friend make a mistake than to say or do something that may destroy the friendship.

Friendship resembles a contract between two people on the basis of open heartedness. If a friend is making a mistake, and meanwhile you could recognize it is a fault and know about the solution, why just keep away from it in fear of （the words，觉得of 后面直接加名词好点） will upset him and lose him? The silent toward a friend facing mistakes itself（这词没懂是什么成分） breaks the contract and needs one just quits （need to do）the game called friendship.

deeds or words in this situation do hurt and even destroy the friendship, it could be an instruction combined with jeers --- when your friend is in trouble, you seem like coming by and saying “hey, buddy, something wrong with you, I knew it, and let me show you the right way…” it could be that (it could be 貌似不引导从句）your friend does not simply appreciate your advice or your behavior. If you are true friends, the two circumstances above could just mean that you are not mature enough to totally（觉得这词多余） think of （considerate）the other’s condition, or you put too much love on him and just want to control and force him.

We have a few real friends in our lifetime, and I think it would be a shame to keep indifferent towards friends’ dilemma. If we said or did something with goodwill and respect when a friend is likely to behave like something wrong（觉得说法有点不够明确), we still cause harm or destroy to our relationship, maybe the best way could be “let it go” for you two may not real friends as your former thought.（没懂),

1. 用词比较丰富，但是还需要更严谨和地道的用法，有时候感觉用词不当，词的搭配不够地道；
2. 句式冗长罗嗦，比较绕，并列句式也就是and特别多，导致语言节奏感不强，逻辑关系不强；
3. 例子比较单薄，如果举出比较详细的例子会更好

个人意见仅供参考~

lynn27UID: 2774627

para.doc (24.5 KB, 下载次数: 11)

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改好了

archi1919UID: 2318824

10月7日 TPO10

The speaker is mainly discussing predators, instead of the pollution, is the main cause of the decline in sea otter populations along the west coast of North American from California to Alaska. However, the reading passage contends that the reason is tend to be pollution.

To begin with, the speaker claim that nobody really sea any bodies of the sea otters along the beach. If the declining is result from the chemical pollutions, the dead bodies of them could be laid on the shore. From the lecturer, only eliminated by the predator could explain this fact.

Also, the speaker raises the issue that there are more human hunters there. They may just change their diet. But consider that only small mammals are accessible to them, the number of all of the small ones including sea otters, seals, and sea lions all decreasing, which also conflicts with the point that the death of seal and sea lions could be attribute to the pollution.

In addition, the speaker rebuts the reading material by emphasizing the uneven pattern of the otter decline. Since it is observed that the regions where the number of sea otter stays is the shallow and rocky areas where sea otters do not appear. This point completely opposes the viewpoint that the ocean currents or other environmental factors creating the uneven pollution along the coast, which lead to the uneven declining.

To sum up, all the three evidences of the lecture illustrate that the speaker opposes the points mentioned in the reading materials.

archi1919UID: 2318824

10.11 独立作文 Playing sports teaches people more about life.

Different cultures have their own favored sports: Chinese people are good at Ping-Pong, US people are fond of basketball while The Brazilian likes soccer. One reason for this is that people everywhere find that playing sports are not only good for health but also makes people releasing. More importantly, however, playing sports teaches people more lessons about life, like how to get along with people around, how to win and lose gracefully and how to make decisions while the situation keeps changing.

Playing sports teach us how to deal with other people. When we play basketball, soccer or sports like this, people must master the spirit of teamwork for no one can win the game himself even though he has good skills or he is strong. He must pass the ball at an appropriate timing and the partner must also recognize the band and get the ball appropriate. The harmony and inter-dependent may be very important in the game such as in one’s career to get along with the co-workers.

Playing sports also teaches us how to win and lose gracefully. When we watch a sports competition, what we focus most must be how fiercely the games is, whether they are enthusiasm not just judge who the winner is. When we play a game, we always dips up deeply in the game and forget about the circumstance. This is what we need to learn in real life, try our best and not to worry about other things, focus on the things we can do and forget about the final scores.

Meanwhile, the changing environment in sports exercises one’s decision-making ability. During the game, we always need to analyze the situation; think over what to do next may be the best solution and what the rivals would do to solve their problem. In real life, when we come across a challenge, the quick decision-making ability maybe very helpful.

We can not treat life as just a sport, but playing sports surely teaches people about life.

lynn27UID: 2774627

PARADOX by lynnnnn.doc (25 KB, 下载次数: 9)

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改好了。

melodramaUID: 2470523

6# lynn27

archi1919UID: 2318824

不好意思，晚上一定补上。。。
22# gamy