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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Extended family is not as important as it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. (09/22/07)

There is no denying that an increasing number of people are getting tired of extended family nowadays. They independently take care of themselves without bearing any child. It seems that big family has been becoming an antiquated tradition. As far as I am concerned, the indispensability of extended family, as a matter of fact, is decreasing.

First and foremost, with the rapid development of our society, people are exhausted from their jobs, let alone carrying out repetitive chores or looking after little babies which is brought by big family. Just imagine that a young couple in a small but warm home. If they have free time, they can easily go out for fun by bike, sweetly and softly. However, if that happens in an extended family, they may be surrounded by hundreds of housework and domestic trifles. Considering the huge pressure in modern society, extended family, actually, is the last choice of current life.

In addition, big family is unfavorable for children’s growth to some extent. Chances that overindulging cultivates spoiled kids are larger in big family. A particular case in this point is my little cousin, who is only 8 years old and almost the king of his big family. As his sister, I feel a great pity to see him buy a plenty of unnecessary luxuries using his pocket money. I can not help thinking that his grandparents’ love would destroy his future instead of any help.

Last but not least, extended family would bring about more quarrels and frictions. There needs more communication in enlarged family which might easily engender flame among little things. It is so complex to keep balance in a big family.

In conclusion, considering from every perspective, including society and individuals, extended family is losing its critical role comparing with the past. That is to say, small family is increasingly prevalent owing to its function and sweetness.
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发表于 2009-5-14 15:54:49 |只看该作者
本帖最后由 gundammole 于 2009-5-14 15:58 编辑

1# lulufriend
There is no denying that an increasing number of people are getting tired of extended family nowadays. They independently take care of themselves without bearing any child. It seems that big family has been becoming an antiquated tradition. As far as I am concerned, the indispensability of extended family, as a matter of fact, is decreasing.

First and foremost, with the rapid development of our society, people are exhausted from their jobs, let alone carrying out repetitive chores or looking after little babies which is brought by big family. Just imagine that a young couple in a small but warm home. If they have(had) free time, they can easily go out for fun by bike, sweetly and softly. However, if that happens (happened) in an extended family, they may be surrounded by hundreds of housework and domestic trifles. Considering the huge pressure in modern society, extended family, actually, is the last choice of current life.


In addition, big family is unfavorable for children’s growth to some extent. Chances that overindulging cultivates spoiled kids are larger in big family. A particular case in this point is my little cousin, who is only 8 years old and almost the king of his big family. As his sister, I feel a great pity to see him buy a plenty of unnecessary luxuries using his pocket money. I can not help thinking that his grandparents’ love would destroy his future instead of any help.

Last but not least, extended family would bring about more quarrels and frictions. There needs more communication in enlarged family which might easily engender flame among little things. It is so complex to keep balance in a big family.


In conclusion, considering from every perspective, including society and individuals, extended family is losing its critical role comparing with the past. That is to say, small family is increasingly prevalent owing to its function and sweetness.

LZ的功底不错啊,几乎没发现错误.思路也非常清晰,要学习一下!
LZ的第二个例子有些疑问,为什么说家庭越大就越容易宠坏孩子呢,不是应该是独生子女更容易被宠坏吗?

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发表于 2009-5-17 17:15:09 |只看该作者
There is no denying that an increasing number of people are getting tired of extended family nowadays. They independently take care of themselves without bearing any child. It seems that big family has been becoming an antiquated tradition. As far as I am concerned, the indispensability of extended family, as a matter of fact, is decreasing.

First and foremost, with the rapid development of our society, people are exhausted from their jobs, let alone carrying out repetitive chores or looking after little babies which is(who are) brought by big family. Just imagine that a young couple in a small but warm home. If they have free time, they can easily go out for fun by bike, sweetly and softly. However, if that happens in an extended family, they may be surrounded by hundreds of housework and domestic trifles. Considering the huge pressure in modern society, extended family, actually, is the last choice of current life.(consider的主体应该是I吧...应该为considering the huge pressure in modern society, I think extended family, actually, is the last choice of current life...)

In addition, big family is unfavorable for children’s growth to some extent. Chances that overindulging cultivates spoiled kids are larger in big family. A particular case in this point is my little cousin, who is only 8 years old and almost the king of his big family. As his sister, I feel a great pity to see him buy a plenty of unnecessary luxuries using his pocket money. I can not help thinking that his grandparents’ love would destroy his future instead of any help.

Last but not least, extended family would bring about more quarrels and frictions. There needs more communication in enlarged family which might easily engender flame among little things. It is so complex to keep balance in a big family.

In conclusion, considering from every perspective, including society and individuals, extended family is losing its critical role comparing with the past(一样的是consider的主体的问题...). That is to say, small family is increasingly prevalent owing to its function and sweetness.

LZ基本功很扎实...没什么可改的...
改晚了不好意思...
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