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发表于 2011-4-2 00:42:13 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

TOPIC: ISSUE56 - "Governments shouldfocus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying tosolve the anticipated problems of the future."
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TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2011-04-01 DD 0:44:52

Should governments pay more attention tothe current problems other than future problems? The speaker asserts so. I partly agree with the speaker because most time the immediate problem is usually the mosturgent one and, of course, needs more notice. However, As far as I amconcerned, government without care about future can never lead his people tohappiness.

Admittedly, government needs to concentrateon immediate problems. It is almost impossible for the government to controlboth the present as well as the uncertain future for the fact that the resourceis limited. For instance, every second there are 6 children died of hungerin Africa. In these countries, government needs to solve the hungry crisis inthe first priority, which has direct connection to the significance whygovernment exists. Many immediate problems such as unemployment, poverty willinfluence social stability and sustainable development, thus deservinggovernment’s immediate attention. Only when the government puts its center onthe current problems, can the country become better.

Nevertheless, a government lose the sightof future can cause serious consequence. What you achieve tomorrow depends onwhat you prepared today. Take the environment for example. During the World WarII, a magic medicine called DDT was widely used, it saved thousands of hundredsof lives, and the inventor even got a Noble Prize in reward. However, journalistRachel Carson wrote a book named silence of spring reveals the result thatafter using DDT, many infants were born with disability and people can find DDTeverywhere even in the Arctic. If a government does not havea plan for future, that is disaster would happen. Government needs to be awareof the future problem which might be the result of today’s action.

Another reason why government should focuson the anticipated problems is that human being demands to live for a long timewithout risking the next generation’s development. After the industryrevolution, oil has been extensively utilized. Unfortunately, oil is not inexhaustible.Scientists believe that in order to continue living in the future, human mustchoose sustainable development. We are not alone in the world, we will havesons and grandsons, we cannot enjoy our life at the expend of their future. Itis better for the government to have a plan for the future, it is much possiblefor the government to find the problems earlier and tackle the difficulties somuch better.

In sum, solving the immediate problems iscompatible with solving the anticipated problem. It is not enough to just workon the current problem, Government ought to consider more for the nextgeneration. With the blueprint of future, government can deal with theimmediate problems efficiently and effectively and offer his people a brightfuture.

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发表于 2011-4-2 00:42:37 |只看该作者

必大谢啊！！！

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发表于 2011-4-2 09:48:50 |只看该作者

most time？

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发表于 2011-4-2 10:36:29 |只看该作者

大多数时间用 most time不对吗?那该怎么说啊?

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发表于 2011-4-2 12:54:12 |只看该作者

不懂
most of the time

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发表于 2011-4-2 12:55:25 |只看该作者

we cannot enjoy our life at the expend of their future.

expense？

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发表于 2011-4-2 13:06:47 |只看该作者

说实话你的语言功底似乎是太弱了点。。。。不过挑具体问题似乎对你没太大帮助，如果指望高分的话恐怕比较难

结果上，两个要有长远见识的理由似乎有点类似

最后结果in sum那里，第一句话虽然没大错，但感觉好像意思是现在和未来都能兼顾。我个人建议你用balance这类的词来总结这个问题，因为其实都不能尽力解决，只能找平衡点。而且你后面的两句似乎还是强调要有远见，没有考虑immediate problem的解决上。

btw，immediate problem，我个人建议可以考虑一些诸如要抢时间的例子。例如Chernobyl核电站出事儿什么的，还有疫情隐瞒，都是没有把immediate problem解决好造成很惨痛的下场。

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发表于 2011-4-2 13:09:52 |只看该作者

嗯嗯嗯，谢谢啊，我好烦躁><

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发表于 2011-4-2 13:14:15 |只看该作者

anticipated problem有哪些例子可以举啊?

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发表于 2011-4-2 14:09:37 |只看该作者

能源是个很好的例子，还有环境，教育，干旱之类的。

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发表于 2011-4-2 14:51:46 |只看该作者

糊糊叔...在AW泡了一天？！

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发表于 2011-4-2 15:03:40 |只看该作者

没，随便翻翻

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发表于 2011-4-2 15:21:27 |只看该作者

既然来了，就发表点自己的拙见吧。

开头，LZ的立场很迷茫，个人猜测LZ是想keep balance，但是keep balance不代表眼前和未来之间没有内在联系，让人感觉有点模棱两可的味道，立场还是要具备点倾向性，究竟是要着眼于眼前还是放眼未来，由一个国家国情的具体需要来制定。

body第一段，不知LZ对immediate problems的定义是什么，个人觉得immediate problem应该是目前能够被有效解决的问题。那么，非洲的饥荒问题不是一个好例子。非洲大饥荒牵扯面太广了，涵盖了方方面面的因素，如：军阀混战，部族矛盾，地理位置，气候等诸多因素，算是一个历史遗留问题了，不是说解决就能解决的。例子方面，糊糊叔说得很好，能源问题就是一个典型的例子，还有灾难。日本福岛核泄漏问题就是个很好的佐证。

说实话，看了3个body段，不知道LZ想表达的思想是什么...

LZ的论证感觉只是一般的例子罗列，没有切中核心问题，也即是没有告诉我们“why”：
Why we should focus on immediate problems?
Why we also have to observe anticipated problems?
1. 解决眼前问题，因为关乎我们自己的生活
2.解决未来问题，为了造福子孙后代，地球仅仅属于我们
3.解决眼前的问题，可以防范于未然，有些眼前来看是小问题，到今后可能会造成严重后果

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