家家的阿狗们修改铺

家家☆yoonjaeUID: 2646910

发现最近家家好像完全没有为坛子做任何贡献。。。咳咳 = =！

既然来作文版帮忙，那就开个修改铺福利一下大家吧~ 希望能对大家有帮助，咳咳咳

第一阶段从1.28-2.09，因为2.10开始家家开始春假，到时候上网时间不固定，暂时关闭

第二阶段从2.21-待定~ 嘿嘿

规则是每晚21：00的第一位童鞋，内容为argument，原则上一周内不重复改同一个ID。

不支持占楼，以实时为准~ 请在楼内贴好链接，我会尽快去改，一般是第二天改完。

大家加油↖(^ω^)↗

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修改汇总：
1.28： rodgood, argument 59, https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=1055058&page=1&extra=
1.29： domudomu, argument 35, https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=1057384&page=1&extra=
1.30： splendidsun, argument 237, https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=1055978&page=1&extra=
1.31： hychlavender, argument 45, https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1056238-1-1.html
2.01： zzl1989, argument 6, https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=1056584&;page=1&extra=
2.02： brz2915, argument 238,https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=1056942&;page=1&extra=
2.03： xiwarts, argument 97, https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=1056969&pid=1773576695&page=1&extra=
2.04： itsuper, argument 15, https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=1057754&page=1&extra=
2.05： yimingleon, argument 220, https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=1058176&page=1&extra=
2.06： 紫陌纤尘o0, argument 18, https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=1058010&page=1&extra=

irvine666UID: 2575525

绝世沙发是要抢得！

家家☆yoonjaeUID: 2646910

自沙一下~ 哦呵呵

因为argument一开始的时候往往会有很多潜在的问题，用词如果比较激烈，请大家包涵~ 哦吼吼

家家☆yoonjaeUID: 2646910

额，66好速度~~~

话说家家滴阿狗启蒙还是拜66指点滴说~ =3=

银落UID: 2632560

地下室。。~

rodgoodUID: 2619326

期待啊~~~灰常感谢~~~

StefanaUID: 2143510

我要占个楼。。

zhaohanUID: 2595904

我直接发好了。。。我知道写的很烂。。。不许笑我哦。。。
26The following appeared in a memo from the chairperson of the school board in the town of Saluda.

"For the past five years, Mr. Charles Schade has been the music director at Steel City High School, and during that time the school band from Steel City High has won three regional band competitions. In addition, the quality of the music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments at Steel City High has improved markedly over the past five years. Because of such successes at Steel City High, the Saluda school board should hire Mr. Schade to plan and direct the general music education programs for the entire Saluda school system."
2010-1-28 19:46-20:28
In the argument, the author asssume that we should hire Mr.Schade to plan and derect the general music education programes for the entire Saluda school system. To support his/her argument, the chairperson cites the merit of Mr.Saluda in Steel City High School.Well-reasoned and seemingly logical though at first sight, the argument can hardly stands up to any scritiny for its apparent flaws.
First and foremost,the argument is based on an unreliable assumption that the two high schools are same-at least similar at ever aspect. Failing to inform us any information about the Ateel City High School, however, it is entirely possible that the two scjools are not comparable.For example, perhaps the Steel City’s music level is higher than Saluda’s and the residents,especilly the students are more likely to concern music.Thus, we can not hasty conclude that the case is also available for Saluda.

Furthermore,there is no evdence shoe that the champion and the improvement of musical instruments have necessarily relationship with Mr. Charles. The success of the school band is rely mostly on the members’ effort and their teacher’s cultivation.Also, we don’t know the condition of the school band when Mr. Charle hasn’t undertaken their music educational system.If their school band has been a prominion band for a long time, the fact may provide little-if there is any-support to show the ability of Mr.Charles.

Moreover, the auther’s inference that incentives which were effective in the past will be aso effective in the future rest in the poor assumption that during the last five years, all the condition have remain unchanged. However,it is obviously that the circumstance, the average of student’s level and the evem the atmosphere of the school have changed a lot. Consequently, unless the writer can rule out the fators that may influnce the result, the argument would be unwarranted.

Last but not the least, the chairperson fail to consider other candidate who may also have capabilities to direct and plan the general nusic education programme.Perhaps some other teachers who have worked for Saluda school can be more familiar about the environment of the school and the shortages of the education system.

In conclusion, the argument relies on the certain doubtable assumptions and ill-logical reasoning that lend it to the unreliable stands. To streghten the recommendation,the author should provide the evidence that these two high schools are comparable.Besides, Mr.Charles’s educational and administrative abilities also need to be demonstrated directlly and the author should rule out all the aspects that may change in the future. Only by these methods can we hire Mr.Charles as our director.

家家☆yoonjaeUID: 2646910

TO 楼上的童鞋，家家已经说过咯。。。占楼无效。。。

这里只放链接就可以了，不要全文，这样看起来不方便。请在作文版按照格式发帖后，把对应的链接贴到此楼，我会直接去乃滴帖子里改。

以上，谢谢~

顺便说一句，乃酱紫占楼无效哈。。咳咳咳 = =

rodgoodUID: 2619326

请家家斑竹指点指点哈~~不甚感激

https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1055058-1-3.html

家家☆yoonjaeUID: 2646910

请家家斑竹指点指点哈~~不甚感激

https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1055058-1-3.html
rodgood 发表于 2010-1-28 21:00

21：00点整~ umm，粉乖滴小盆友~ 一会就7改哈，么头~

zzl1989UID: 2755891

来晚了来晚了。。。5555
争取明天得到这个机会！！！

zhaohanUID: 2595904

囧。。。 10# 家家☆yoonjae

rodgoodUID: 2619326

12# 家家☆yoonjae

激动啊~~~尽管拍吧

家家☆yoonjaeUID: 2646910

Done, rodgood's argument 59.