ISSUE173【小猪第一篇习作，接受回拍。】

PigwidgeanUID: 2759931

TOPIC: ISSUE173 -"Originality does not mean thinking something that was never thoughtbefore; it means putting old ideas together in new ways."
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by Pigwidgeon


Originalityis, no doubt, always considered as one of the greatest powers that push ourcivilization forward and the most beautiful flower of human intelligence. Whenit comes to the precise definition of originality, there are always a host ofdifferent ideas held by different people coming from different fields. Have youever agreed with the statement that originality does not mean thinkingsomething that was never thought before, but putting old ideas together in newways? Admittedly, this claim perfectly describes most kinds of today'soriginality, which indicates that there're still some exceptions of greatersignificance in history.

Anyone travelling by aircraft might be surprised by its convenience, which is theresult of the application of bionics, defined as a kind of marriage betweenbiology and electronics, and has no reason to deny that it's really a brilliantinnovation. According to its definition, bionics is absolutely that kind oforiginality coming from old ideas in the separate fields of biology andelectronics.
Actually, this is how theso-called originality comes into being in most cases. Other examples can be theinvention of video telephone which is the combination of video and telephone,and the birth of air cooler, a kind of machine combining the function of aircondition and fan. As the old saying goes that rubbish is treasure in a rightplace, sometimes old, simple,
commonideas can create a new, complex, wonderful idea that impresses all the worldall of a sudden.

Nevertheless,if you have ever heard about the two black clouds in physics in the 19thcentury, you might not be so convinced that thinking something that was neverthought before, relativity theory and quantum mechanics I mean, cannot beregarded as originality. Yes, when it comes to originality that changes ourhabit of thinking so greatly that almost no one can easily accept it, we cannotstick to the old definition any more.

Furthermore,it's safe to say that it is the completely new ideas that contribute most toour world and history. They are the bricks and stones of the tall buildingcalled originality. Without these fundamental ideas, originality putting oldideas in new ways is no more than daydreaming. Just see what has happened sinceFaraday made the first dynamo: all kinds of electrical appliance, e.g.television, air condition, desktop, etc., gradually brought our civilizationinto a new era. Today, absence of electricity may disturb a lot of masses,while air condition breakdown may just affect part of that.

Sinceso many ideas have already existed, originality can be more likely produced byputting old ideas in a different way. However it's not the whole oforiginality. Given that you're lucky enough to take a look at what god's doing,a new idea that has never been thought before might come into your mind and then,you can change the world.

PigwidgeanUID: 2759931

建议还是看doc版的，gter的帖子就是粘贴也会缺空格啊……汗

angeyasusieUID: 2696799

觉得语言太过生活化，不符合学术英语的表达哦。bionics, defined as a kind of marriage between biology and electronics你可以把marriage换成combination是不是好一些呢？类似换词问题还不少，你自己先想想吧。

sapidUID: 2893300

IMHO, this essay has flawed a little bit in every apsect and may not taken as what considered to be a good written essay in general.

First, the beginning paragraph misses the thesis statement, which, I think, usually require more than simply saying agree or not agree with the TOPIC.
The sentence "Admittedly, this claim perfectly describes most kinds of today'soriginality, which indicates that there're still some exceptions of greatersignificance in history." appear to be the thesis statement of the essay but it just vaquely or partially conveys the author's standpoint.

Instead it could have been rephrased more elegantly and strongly but can be concise and clear and points out the author's position on the given statement.

Again, the concluding paragraph repeated the same mistake.

The body paragraphs cited many examples that seem to relate them with the given TOPIC. but again not so clear what point the author is trying to make or support.

Overall, I guess, this essay may get no more than 3.