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Considering the immaturity and the special need of young children, advertising designed for children are advisable, if strictly controlled. Accordingly, children will have fun and even learn something in those ads.虽然很好的开头,但是没有点到不良饮食习惯啊,要点题。
begin with, children are more likely to be driven by various commercials, no matter whether the context of the ads is right or wrong, owing to a lack of experience. There are some behaviors not suitable for their ages, like taking diet pills to get thinner. More importantly, if the behaviors of the characters on the advertisements are inappropriate, such as drinking, smoking, and driving at a crazy speed, kids will still take them in easily and imitate to some degree if they get a chance, which will at least lead to a negative lifestyle. For example, my five-year-old cousin learnt how to smoke just by watch those advertisements on TV.这段还是一样,只说了吃减肥药,刚扣题就飞了,后面就开始说别的了,就看这第一段,只能感觉你是在写广告对孩子的影响,但看不出是对饮食习惯的影响。
In addition, if not making advertisements for children, many other advertisements put some "best" in them什么意思?, which even deceive adults, confusing children about fantasy and reality. It is not uncommon that commercials exaggerate their products and services to sell. They display how healthily it could be if having those junk foods, how happily life could be if using those useless gadgets and how easily work could be done if utilizing those "amazing" tools. All these ads eventually make children to believe that how wonderful life could be if having those products and that money can solve any problems in real life. Of course, that is definitely not the truth.
Finally, kids will entertain themselves and concentrate more on the healthy ads that are particularly directed to them, if there do exist such advertisements. Given the passionate that children possess to wait eagerly in front of the screen for cartoons, it will not be surprising that they will be more amused to watch some commercials for them. They may memorize the songs, the words and the characters in those special ads, which can be helpful for education. Since they do no harm to children's growth mentally and physically, it will be a relief to parents and society as a whole.
Therefore, designing some advertisements for young children will avoid other commercials influencing on them negatively, and impart some healthy concepts to them.
语言词汇没有问题,但是从开头开始,没有点名你是同意还是不同意这个观点,然后后面的叙述中我感觉你是同意的,那么按照思路,就是广告怎么样影响不良饮食习惯的形成?而且论题中没有设定限制是kids,你的观点就设定为kids,那么大人和老人的不良习惯就不是广告引起的?这篇思路有点范了,要再缩小下 |
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