issue 48 求改 求改 谢谢谢谢谢谢谢谢，谢谢谢谢谢谢

yanhan8862UID: 2852159

TOPIC: ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
WORDS: 560

TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010-7-23 10:01:12

in order to maintain a stable and relatively fast speed of development, people research the events and the tendency of the history, which could help us to find the regular pattern of human civilization. but during the last decade, when talked about who made the most significant events and the trends in history, the famous figures? or the group of public? while the debate become increasingly heated, both sides hold there own opinion. personally in my point of view, we need to find a balance to solve the problem and the answer should be contingent.

initially, no one can neglect the importance of the famous few. in more cases, these famous persons played a crucial role in many significant events. sometimes they act as a leader to raise a campaign, sometimes they make efforts by their own research to discovery an important theory. obviously, these great events are closely associated with these few famous figures during the development of the human race. for instance, Albert Einstein is the only one who set up the relativity theory in the history, and he achieved this feat by his own strive but not the public's help. moreover, Darwin found the theory of Evolution also through his long-time research. Pronouncedly, for these two great events, there are little help by the majority of people and the key factor lies in their endless hard work and perceivable mind.

on the other hand, there are also some events which we should attribute to the public group. Usually when talked about the racial race of America, most people will think of the famous leader-martin luther king, and his famous speech: "i have a dream". however, in my opinion, the crucial factor is not the leadership of martin luther king, but is the public's aspiration, the aspiration for the human's equality, the aspiration to go against the racial segregation and long for the fair of right so much that they disposed to devote themselves to the campaign and follow Martin Luther King to fight for their own right, eventually they got the great triumph. after many years, when we go back to this great event in human history, people regard martin luther king as a symbol of the racial campaign, but regardless the big group of people who stand behind of him and support him so much. however, actually just because there are so many people that stand by Martin that enabled him managed to make it significant. Sometimes, too much emphasize on the famous few or neglect the public group could mislead us in thinking about the history problem.

in sum, this controversy describes the dilemma faced by many people in this era. from what has been discussed above, we see that even though the dilemma still exists, it is not difficult to draw the conclusion that in different cases we should maintain different point of view to consider the problem. The great effect achieved by the famous few in these most significant events is no doubtable indispensible, but simultaneously, we should also acknowledge the greatness of our majority of the public. So, that would be somewhat extreme to generally saying the famous few overweigh the public group or the public group is more important than the famous few. However, sometime we have many other issues at hand, sometimes we need a balance to solve the problem.

zhangjunzjUID: 2658970

既然打这么多个谢，还是看下吧。

第一段：‘we need to find a balance to solve the problem and the answer should be contingent.’看来看去就这几像你的观点，但我觉得最好明确些，同意？不同意？有保留的同意？

第二段：‘and he achieved this feat by his own strive but not the public's help’，太绝对，最好换种说法。例子还行

第三段：马丁的例子还行，但谈马丁谈的太多，反而表明了领袖的重要性，在这里你是要说群众的重要性，那么应该多谈些群众，例如什么芝加哥工人大罢工导致了8小时工作日和51劳动节。

第四段：总结还行，最后一句话多余。

你的观点是有保留的赞成，那么在第一段最后说明

yanhan8862UID: 2852159

2# zhangjunzj

谢谢你的评价，其实我自己也承认，我的模板痕迹太重了，而且我速度很慢，练了7，8篇了，还是只能写500个字左右，还有拼写错误