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cyci90UID: 2717086

TOPIC: ISSUE114 - "Humanity has made little real progress over the past century or so. Technological innovations have taken place, but the overall condition of humanity is no better. War, violence, and poverty are still with us. Technology cannot change the condition of humanity."
WORDS: 739
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010/7/28 17:20:04

Can the condition of humanity be changed by means of technology? Some people, along with the speaker of the statement are convinced that the overall condition of humanity is no better with the advent of technological innovations for we human beings are still haunted by war, violence and poverty. Yet, from my perspective, I can hardly consent to this contention. As I see, though technology has not enhanced humanity over the past century or so, it does contribute to the improvement of humanity in several aspects. As for the undesirable aspects of humanity which are still with us, the root of these problems is deeply ingrained in human and social nature that could not be simply altered by technological advancement.

Admittedly, humanity, as one indication of human conditions, has merely made little, if any real progress during the past several centuries. The inveterate problems such as war, violence, and poverty, which have been problematic for quite a long period are nowadays still the central problems we could get off. To some extent, we have now been begot by these issues with more severity and complexity. There is no denying the fact that we can still see thousands of people dying from starvation or incurable diseases like AIDS in Africa; we can still encounter smirks, fightings or even wars in nearly every corner of the world; we can still witness violent and bloody scenes both around us and in the outside world.

However, the issue mentioned above is merely a limited reflection of reality. In effect, there exist one key question which is overlooked by the speaker and thus deserves our close attention---whether these unfavorable sights are caused by technological innovations and whether the role technology plays is in alleviating the severity of these problems.

Firstly, the definition of "technology", from my perspective, is a kind of tool invented and still being developed by mankind to create a more convenient world and liberate us beings from those fetters that have long enslaved us. Generally and frankly speaking, the past several decades, with the advent of the industrial revolution especially with the appearance of the information age,
have witnessed tremendous changes in our personal lives as well as the society as a whole. Nowadays, no housewives are imprisoned by the laborous chores; instead they have granted the convenient electrical applicance which offer them a higher level of freedom. Moreover, businessmen or entrepreneures are no longer deterred from conducting lucrative transactions simply because of the geographical obstacles. For that matter, it would be fair to conclude that technological innovations which have taken place in recent decades have brought about positive changes to our daily lives in a great proportion.

Secondly, as for war, violence, and poverty, I maintain that the speaker somewhat overstate the severity of these problems simply because those undesirable conditions of humanity have been existent as long as man have been once created by God. From my viewpoint, the root of war, violence and poverty lies in the ingrained human desire for better life or more meaningful existence and thus could not be easily mopped out by means of technology whatsoever. In fact, since the creation, mankinds have long been struggling for food, money, resources or power and nothing could deter their biological needs and prevent them from returning to savage or atavistic unreason when confronted with power, money, e.t.c. I argue therefore that though technology is conducive to a better condition of humanity, some deep-rooted chronic "diseases" can barely be cured simply by a dose of technological innovations.

There is no denying the fact that technology should bear a significant role in alleviating the severe condition of humanity. Yet, the very nature of war or violence determines the incurableness of such diseases.

In addition, the speaker fails to take into account other alternatives to tackle these issues. Since the fundamental cause of war and
violence rests on unsatisfiable human desires, lectures on morality and ethics must be carried out in schools and more strict regulations and laws should also be passed to provide a sense of prohibition towards these detrimental scenes.

In conclusion, I can barely agree with the speaker's contention for we could not neglect or dismiss the significant impact that technology has exerted on our personal lives in the past century or so. Moreover, such long-haunted issues should not be attributable to the development of technology but to the ingrained and unalterable human desires for power.

cyci90UID: 2717086

自己up下 还有5天啊 大家看看什么问题啊~~

349295094UID: 2809040

好厉害啊，能否传授下秘诀怎么在这么短的时间内写出700+我都要哭死了

cyci90UID: 2717086

再up 下啊 大家看看有没逻辑啥的混乱之类的问题啊 明儿考试啦 帮忙啊

lingli_xiaoaiUID: 172506

因为你要考了。。不过还有一天就考，再说写啥意义也不大。粗略看了一下觉得写得不错，破题立意比较深刻。但是这个立意看上去是是不是某xdf的思路。主要感觉是比较散。

尤其是后面

Secondly, as for war, violence, and poverty, I maintain that the speaker somewhat overstate the severity of these problems simply because those undesirable conditions of humanity have been existent as long as man have been once created by God. From my viewpoint, the root of war, violence and poverty lies in the ingrained human desire for better life or more meaningful existence and thus could not be easily mopped out by means of technology whatsoever. In fact, since the creation, mankinds have long been struggling for food, money, resources or power and nothing could deter their biological needs and prevent them from returning to savage or atavistic unreason when confronted with power, money, e.t.c. I argue therefore that though technology is conducive to a better condition of humanity, some deep-rooted chronic "diseases" can barely be cured simply by a dose of technological innovations.

There is no denying the fact that technology should bear a significant role in alleviating the severe condition of humanity. Yet, the very nature of war or violence determines the incurableness of such diseases.

In addition, the speaker fails to take into account other alternatives to tackle these issues. Since the fundamental cause of war and
violence rests on unsatisfiable human desires, lectures on morality and ethics must be carried out in schools and more strict regulations and laws should also be passed to provide a sense of prohibition towards these detrimental scenes.

这两段，虽然内容很不错，但是跟前面第一点的承接很模糊，TS也模糊，主要是没办法跟题目直接联系的比较好。题目后半句说，tech不能解决人性问题，你第一点就明确说了tech的证明意义，后面的主题是解释为什么tech不能改变人性（这是题目中的内容，简单来讲technology对于解决人性问题是无力的）。但是作者没有说人性的弊端，战争是tech引起的啊。。你后面这几段是否有点偏了。。

cyci90UID: 2717086

5# lingli_xiaoai

亲爱滴版主 首先要谢谢你 噶忙的还给我改改作文 这是我泡寄托第一次大人物改的作文那..咳咳~

再有，我想起来这最后两段是当时计时写的时候硬加上去的， 因为我觉得光分析tech的优点跟弊端好像不够，是不是要留上点tech以外的、能解决humanity问题的方法，所以才加了这最后两段。 看来这考试时候不用加这种的，是咩？免得偏题？

thx~

wdx19861106UID: 2821198

楼主~放松身心，考试只要放松，时间很快就过去了。
推荐一个帖子，感觉很有用，https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=705350&highlight=
帖子内容有：“先上一个小赠品～如何缓解AW复习考试中紧张情绪小TIPS：

1。首当其冲的方法就素——当当当当，骚扰版主。我试过了，很爽。当然言辞不要过激。如今的各位版主大多是考完了6G也忙完了期末，所以对其骚扰不要有心理负担，作文版版主十八般武艺样样……勉强拿得出手，所以任何关于模考受挫没话可说鸡飞狗跳招猫逗狗等诸多不爽都可以骚扰骚扰他们～没关系的，效果很赞

2。就是重点分析各个击破。害怕上考场看到题就蒙了，考的正是阿拉放掉的那个。那么我建议你，最好花一点时间把你最烦，最讨厌，最不想考到的题目都抄在一块，集中所有人的智慧和各种资源将其列出一个基本提纲，可以让你就算碰到也至少能写出一个基本的论述，而不至于当场傻眼。

3。就是尽量在考前看一看你的考场，只要是上午去（北京上午不安排考试），就可以进入机房看机器。进不去也无所谓，等你对你的考场有一个具体的轮廓时你就可以消除一大部分的紧张感。也可以事先想想要用什么姿势坐电脑前，或者把草稿纸放拿比较顺手之类的。

4。不要性急。在候考的时候。尽量不要再翻别的东西了。越翻越慌乱。你就安安静静的坐在那儿，观察一下四周，慢慢的做好每一个步骤。那个时候其实每个人都是惊弓之鸟。如果你一急，填错了表格，或者找不到什么东西是非常影响心情的。所以宁愿放慢速度，反正伊总不能不让你考伐。我在考试的时候，已经开始录资料了，一个男生问：“老师能不能带手机？”那老师说：“你看了你刚才填的注意事项了吗？”男生说：“看了啊。”老师说：“我看你没看，你坐回去重新看吧。”愣是让那男生回去看去了。。你说，这么弱智的问题，非得多那句嘴干吗呢。多影响心情状态啊。”