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When it comes to jobs, a picture of a manworking late in his office came to my mind immediately .In today's society, itis common that people spend as much as they can on working, in order to getenough money to support themselves and their family. But I prefer a job withmore extra time, which I could spend more time enjoying my life.
First, people tend to suffer less stress .Highpaying job is usually competitive, most people would do whatever they could toget the job .Therefore they need to work harder and harder with stress, becausethey know that if they were not admired by boss, they will soon replaced byother competitors .It is pressure that push them away from sunny beaches.
Further, more vacation let people behealthier .Due to work overtime and lack of relax in such a stressful environment,people who hardly have a rest are more likely to become a workaholic .If workingall the round year and have barely no time to relax, they could be exhaustingand anxious .It is observed that most employee are sleep-deprived, what wasworse, they are at high risk of stress-included disease such as insomnia anddepression .Vacation may offer our body chance to recovery itself and reduce negative emotion.
Besides, having less vacation means haveless time to share with family .Never have come to children’s baseball game,their birthday party, their graduate ceremony make them bad parents .Paying novisit to their parents turn them to be cold daughter/son .
Some people may argued that spending tomuch time on relaxing is a kind of excuse of being lazy .But we need it to helpus to enjoy our short life, find passion in our job, and take back something thatwe lost during seeking for money .In turns it will boost efficency after we goback to work .A job with more vacation, balance survival and entertainment, couldmake us live a better life.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Playing sports teaches people more lessons about the life.



There are thousands of sports across theworld, almost every culture has its unique sports .Type of sports are differentfrom culture to culture, but love for sports are the same all over the world.Not only doing some sports makes people exciting, but also teach us somethingabout life, socialization, responsibility when we work as a team, tenacity andperseverance when facing crisis.
First of all, sports require teamwork, andthen, it becomes socialization .As the old saying goes, human is social animal.The ability of getting along with others is essential for people who want to survivein this competitive world .Most of the sports require team to participate in,even those in which player seen to fight alone, actually, they have a team tosupport them .This makes it necessary for one to communicate with others, justlike what we do in our daily life.
Further, it told us to be a person withresponsibility .As we do some sports, it is very common that we lose the gamebecause someone made a mistake, but the whole team rather than someone is to becommented .It will force us to do our best , and have a better understanding ofresponsibility .
Last but not the least, sports teach uswhat is perseverance .Not until having practiced thousands of time will weeventually master it .After all, it is true that practice make perfect .And forthat, I have experienced it last summer .I have a four days per week’s swimmingtraining in school for almost a year .At the first semester it can hardly seeany improvement in my swimming, when I was about to give up, my coach encourageme to keep on training ,And just after a month a achieve a great improvement.There is no life without difficulties, tenacity is always a great way toconquer them .
In conclusion, sports can not only a meansto leisure and a method of being healthy, but it also tell us vital lessonsabout our life, which we can merely learn .And we had better keep in mind thatsports may not always be as easy as it seem to be.

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今天作文写的有点纠结
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Being creative, rather than planning carefully, will come up with best solution to a problem?

Confidence & passion
Efficiency

Newspapers and magazines never tired to tell people that someone succeed by being creative, but stories of people who fulfill them goals by years of hard-working are really rare(删除) .In my point of view, for people who eager to success, it is never too（not） essential to make a careful plan .A careful plan could help people find confident, passion on their work, and increase efficiency of your ( 和前面的their人称不搭)working,
As the old saying goes, a good beginning is half the battle .An elaborated plan makes you feel confident on the job for paining（painting） a beautiful blueprint of your future, which makes you are (to be )convinced of the coming success .Showing you the way to achieve the goal(这句不通顺，谓语没有), which you thought it too difficult for you, by doing step by step .Unlike waiting anxious （anxiously用副词）for a chance to have a creative idea which could accomplish their work, it is much easier for people to immerse themselves in the job with confident and passion .
Moreover, a good plan always have a positive effect on increasing efficiency .It is very common that people feel (a little )去掉比较好pressure during executing a plan .Under pressure, people are force（forced  be forced to do） to working harder when they are thinking of taking a needless relax .More importantly, people could have an estimate before they start working, which will help them working in a reasonable order rather than working without destination.
Last but not the least, making a plan is helping (help 建议用一般现在时较好)people look further on the issues .Plan can be flexible, following it doesn’t mean to do exact things which had been planed just like what computers do .When having a creative idea which may be in mind, one can add the idea convenient (conveniently) by changing the plan .In other words, one could hardly have a creative idea which is totally reasonable without considering the whole situation.
In conclusion, even though, one cannot deny the fact that being creative is an aspect of solving problem .But making plan with a steady and sure progress has been the cornerstone of being creative.
1 感觉LZ语法错误较多，需要加强
2 句式较单一，而且有点changlish，嘿嘿，我也是，要改进

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