马上就快考了, 独立写作，求狠批

juliagoUID: 2912431

我已经放入Word 中改了硑写错误

A or D:
It is better to finish one project then staring another than doing several at the same time.

Our life today is busy enough which requires us learn how to manage our time and finish our job effectively, since there are a lots of work waited to be accomplished, we should choose a way that are suit for ourselves, some people choose to start several project at the same time since this will not make them feel boring and tedious, however, I do believe it is better for us to finish one project then starting another, and I have the following reasons:

First of all, we disposal /manage our work efficiently, if we focus all our energy to finish one thing. the reason is quite obvious: every job ,especially a difficult one, requires us to concentrate on it, and only after several try out and got some experiences can we find a good way to solve it, however, suppose you deal with several work together you may be overwhelmed, so that you cannot to manage any of them, just like how we learn a second language which request us to put in/call for constant practice in order to fully master is, in contrast, in case you learn English by a kind of enthusiasm learn it a week and the next week you started to learn the Japanese, how could you handle two language the at same time?

Moreover, a sense of complement when we finish one thing can actually encourage us to finish other thing, and I wonder if you have this kinds of experiences too in your school age : one day you come back from the school, and there are homework about three subject that your need to finish, then you start one by one and there is no denying that you will feel more relieve after a few hours work since two of them has already been finished, and you will be inspired and try to finish the last one before the mid-night come, however, if there is none among these three have been done, you might get into an anxious circumstances cause it is already ten o’clock !

Admittedly, after some attempts， if we could still not find a solution to one problem, we should set it aside for the moment, for the reason that we sometimes can get inspiration from other projects. However, in most case, we should finish one project before starting another one

juliagoUID: 2912431

哪位好人帮忙改改吧

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自己顶！

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帮顶一个，比我的好多了！~

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来个人吧！

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1# juliago
见lz如此诚心求助，本人就上来冒次泡吧~
首段就一句长句……没有断句。OG的一项作文语言评分就是：too many long sentences. Lz应长短句结合。一些表达过于重复，eg. since。正文段，亦如此……
考试时要是通篇逗号，基本可以断定你这篇文挂了。除此之外，表达与语言运用上，感觉略有清涩，语言结构上的运用比较单调。不过应付托福考试足够了，lz安心吧~