想跨专业申PHD，写了封信，语气是不是有些太直接了

lixiongdodoUID: 2681746

Prof
I’m sorry to bother you.
My name is XXX. I'm very interested in your research area of “computer keyboard and mice”, so wish to pursue a doctor degree thereof.
I will receive my master Degree majoring in sports biomechanics from Da Lian University of technology of China in July. 2012. In the period of master study, I did well in research of grip strength. That is also the theme in my thesis. And, I am not sure would you please intake students in sports biomechanics.
Maybe, I could share some research in your group depending this background. Through Cuergo web, I find some your paper, such as “Ergonomic comparison of slanted and vertical computer mouse designs”, “Ergonomic comparison of five mouse designs: Performance and posture differences”.etc. But, I can’t find the full text through SCI, Elsever or google search(free). If it is convinent for you please sending the paper above to me, I am very interesting about them.




  I sincerely appreciate your reply
.  Thank you very much!    Best regards,




大家尽管拍，我受得住，这是第一次套词，就是想知道对方愿不愿意收我这个专业的研究生。自己感觉专业背景还是有一些关系的，所以就写成这样了。另外我确实在SCI ，Elsever，和google search 搜不到文章的全文。就这样直接找老师要，也不知行不行，不想再找了。还要赶时间看GRE呢，就4个月了。才刚开始。祝福我吧。亲们。

lixiongdodoUID: 2681746

洗完澡挖耳朵，湿湿一大坨

JaztsongUID: 2882079

convenient 拼错了=。=

jiang08UID: 2391146

a bunch of grammar mistakes.
Also, don't place yourself too low. Your opening like "I’m sorry to bother you." seriously weakens your image and does not good whatsoever.
Just be straightforward.

SychoUID: 3089885

I'm very interesting about them... :dizzy:

勇气可嘉，不过下次发出去之前先贴上来大家给你改改，不然Prof肯定会被你bother的！

lian_zhuxiUID: 2151209

好好改改语法  读着别扭  第一印象就不好  。。。。

ad7023UID: 2332654

不用写的这么客气，而且写的内容不太合适，对研究感兴趣和要文章不要写在一起
你可以直接很明了的就说如果你收我做学生，有以下几方面的好处：1、...2、...3、...

mpromanusUID: 2565872

这东一榔头西一棒棰的 =.=

你是想问收不收转专业学生，还是想表达你对这人的兴趣，还是想兜售自己的背景，还是想要对方的paper看，还是这些都要？都是不同的事情，这么混杂在一起太乱了，整理一下内容的顺序吧。

lixiongdodoUID: 2681746

受教了，谢谢各位啦。看来问题确实不少。

sophiaqustUID: 3017453

学习了~