【独立写作】sodapeng 托福写作

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With one child policy published in China, every family has only one child. The child, to some extent, is regarded as the treasure of the family; their parents want to do everything they can for their off spring.(;前是the child,而;后变成their..) Helping with children’s school work allow them to have a better future as parents expected.（allows吧） While others claim that parents should encourage their students to do their work independently, thus would help children to gain the self-recognition and self-thinking ability.（thus是副词，可以and thus才能连成一句吧） I side up with the latter issue, the reason are as following. （reasons?）

i9First and foremost, encouraging children to do their work independently helps the children to develop their self-independence and to be mature. Without the parents’ help, the children have no choice but to do their school themselves, then they aware of the importance of class, (are aware?)because no one will help them. They have to learn how to find the solution to the problem, when there is no one can turn to. No matter how difficult the task may be, they are forced to keep going on, whether they reluctant or not. (are reluctant)It is an unnegligible part of growing. From this process, when confronting any problem, children will know how to find the approach by themselves to triumph over the adversity.  - b# t& J+ ~, t, Z3 V9 q6 `' u) w- m

Secondly, letting the children to do their work by themselves can also sparks the children’s creativity.(can spark) Yuanlongping, a Chinese agriculture scientist, is known as father of hybrid rice. When he suffered from the failure of corps, he didn’t cursorily attribute to climates as others did, he did some researches and the related experiments to find the real reasons and how to improve the productive rate to gratify the large number of people’s need. Through his long time period of working, he finally got the breed of corps which had high productive rate and feed the whole country. Same to the children’s work, encouraging children do their work independently, parents will cultivate children’s ability and triggers their creativity. (这个例子在这儿感觉和文章没什么关系啊，文章讲小孩子儿独立写作业。。虽然后来用了个same to the children's work,但还是觉得例子有点。。要是用这例子，要不把例子里多添几句话，跟孩子不拉关系，多跟独立完全作业拉拉关系？还有那个corp。。crop。。。)

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Undoubtedly, students may feel dispirited when they facing a tough job and finally they fail the task because of the lack of help.（fail the task..不知道有这个用法不） Thus, to some extent will lead to the seilf-confidenceless. （self-confidenceless..有这个词不。。没google出来）However, just like the old saying goes: failure is the mother of the success, if children don’t know how to stand up without others support when they fall down, they will never grow up, not to mention making progress. The only thing we should do is to summarize the mistakes that have made and stimulate experience and keep holding on. Only from this way can you reach the success.
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With the advent of science technology epoch, self-thinking and creativity are playing more and more important roles in developing a country, which should be converged in encouraging children to do work independently.

楼主是个好粗心滴银啊。。。
文章条理清楚，那个例子可能我没明白过来。。用词咱都继续积累哦，一起努力～～～

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In the lecture the professor says a example about the many people like to assemble a group when a new project started, it contrary 不确定这个词可不可以作动词，楼主再看下~to what they have expected.

in the lecture, the professor says that the responsibility won't be spread in a team. In the team, some members don't contribute at all, and when the team gets success, they also get the beneficial, but it is unfair to the individuals who provide a lot of insight views and recognition. This point is contrary to the reading passage that the group spreads responsibility for a decision to all the members.

Contrary to what have mentioned in the passage, the professor claim that it takes a long time for a group the reach the census. When a member comes up with an idea, an influential member may drag it out without further discussion. In addition, a member may figure out a highly creative solution, but the others are discussing the things which are far away from the direction, ignoring the advice. As a result, the team failed, all of the members will be blamed, because it is a group.

似乎少了一个点呢？

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2月11日 110115NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The main role of the university professor is to educate students rather than to do research.

As the flourishing development has taken place in the education career, many doctors and scientists are devoting themselves to the education career. Thus, they can convey the knowledge and newly technology to the university’s students, offering the opportunity for the undergraduates to make more progress. While others stand on the other ground, they argue that the professors, highly-educated individuals, paying too much attention to students, and to some extent, ignore the importance of doing research. They are equipped with profound knowledge but don’t research at all, which is kind of wasting human resources. I side with the latter issue. The reason is as follows.

Doing research is kind of studying, professors can promote their own development and the students can benefit from the researching at the meantime. Just as the old saying goes: never too old to learn. Doing research forced the professor to combine what they have learnt before with the newly theories, and the professor apply these theories to the research. Which is a good way for professor get fulfilled. On the other hand, doing research allows professors to be the top of a subject that they teach and students will obtain overall and profound knowledge of an exact subject.

For student, taking participate in the research is an effective way to combine the knowledge they have learnt on class with the practice, which is very useful for a students further studying. Last semester, I was so lucky to be a member of a very famous professor’s research. At the beginning, I knew nothing about the project. However, with the assistance of professor and seniors, I begun to search the correlative document and did some fundamental work in the laboratory. Although it wsa very difficult for me to understand the theory but never gave up. What I had learnt is not only some profound theory but also the train of thought when facing a project, which I will never acquaintance without this opportunity. Therefore, undergraduates can also benefit from the professor’s research.

Admittedly, professors may be fully occupied by doing research, and to some extent, distract their attention from educating the students. Reasonable as it seem to be, as we all know that professors take no more than five classes a week that they have considerable time to do research. Also, professors can make arrangement of their time, ensuring that both of their classes and research can be successfully carried on.

Doing research can make full use of the professors’ time and knowledge, the result of the research may promote the development of science technology. Why not do it? Thus, I strongly believe that professor should separate his time both to educating and researching rather than only focusing on the teaching.

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谢谢楼主的批改！我们的思路好像啊~

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今天没有按照题目要求的写，因为写过了，希望和我分在一组的能帮忙改一下，肯定是互改，就是麻烦各位稍微辛苦一点。。因为看不同题目的文章。在此谢过！
The way a person is dressed in is a good indication of his/her character or personality.

The flourishing development in economy presaged the end of the era of people is dressed only for covering the body. Nowadays people put more concentration on what they wear. Despite various responses people may have on the topic concerning the issue regarding whether a person’s dress can indicate his or her character or not, I, given the chance, prefer to endorse that people’s dress, to some extent, is decided by the condition and the fashion trend, which can not show the true character or personality of a person. The reasons are just as follows.

First and foremost, a person’s dress depends to a great extent on the situation they are going to face today. We have to put on various style of the cloth to be more suitable to the changing occasion. For instance, people have to wear formal dress when having an interview or working to indicate they are professional and have respect-work spirit; people have to put on sports wear when doing exercise to increase their flexibility, people have to dress in black when attending funeral to express the deep sorrow, which do not means they are stubborn, casual or sophisticated. In fact, dressing variability is a way to cater to the requirement of different occasion rather than to express personality.

Secondly, the fashionable trend may also influence a people’s dress in dramatic way. With the advent of information era, human beings are gradually submerged into the information ocean including the fashionable news. Take me for an example, I always scan the fashionable news although I am busily engaged some time, and then changing the recommendation with like-minded individuals, changing the garment to follow the popular trend. I will also wear skirt because of the prevalent trend although I have boy’s character inside my mind. Ultimately, dressing is way for people to express their favor of fashionable trend and reflect their understanding of the aesthetics.

There is no doubt that some people argue that the color people are dressed in can be a symbol of their mood. Black reflected as mysterious, white is the symbol of unsophisticated, and the red represented as glad. Reasonable as it seems to be. A recent poll, conducted online, offered a world wide report about the color of the clothes they prefer and the reason to the preference. It is the answer spoken by young and old, the people who sent a message to the poll. Most of them prefer dressing in black, 75 percent of which claim that black clothes can be cleaned readily, also it seems to be more formal than the other color. However only 5 percent of surveyed people wear black garment because of they are sophisticated in deed.

Taking into account all these factors, we may safely dram the conclusion that the way people is dressed can not suggest what the character or personality traits.

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今天没有按照题目要求的写，因为写过了，希望和我分在一组的能帮忙改一下，肯定是互改，就是麻烦各位稍微辛苦一点。。因为看不同题目的文章。在此谢过！

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People will spend less time incooking or preparing food in twenty years than nowadays.


Perhaps no issue in this world is as significance to people as the need of the food. People may get food from restaurant or cooking at home. The advent of the science technology era arouses a heated debate that whether will we spend more time on cooking or not in the future. Some people claim that the since new technology has brought us a lot of convenience, people will spend less time on preparing food with the help of new implement. While others stand on the opposite ground argue that people will pay less attention on the food and pursue a further need.

The flourishing development has taken place in the science technology, thus the breakthrough has made in many realms including the tools for cooking. For instance, the invention of the automobile has largely shortened the time people use on commuting; the development in cell-phone has made people get into connection in just a few seconds into possibility; the breakthrough in the internet has made the spread of news at a speed which is beyond our imagination. Same to the instrument for cooking, the new technology will bring individuals a quicker and more convenient life.

Furthermore, people will pay less attention on preparing food; they want to save time to pursue self-actualization. Abraham Mslow, an American psychologist, develops a theory of the hierarchy of need, a pyramid depicting the levels of human needs, psychological and physical. The past decades has witness the remarkable developments in the economic, people don’t worry about the subsistence problem. The physiological needs, the first level includes the need for water and food, have been largely taken care of, people tend to pursue higher need, such as safety, love and belong. From this part, people may to some extent spend less time on the food.

Just as what have told above, many people may seek more healthy food instead, thus collecting the non-polluted materials and the process for cooking may cost a pool of time. reasonable as it seems to be. It is known to all that it is process for cooking that add the harmful ingredients in the meal, illegal cooking oil and too much salt are both the cause of many diseases. The raw ingredients are full of the nutrition and vitamin, just some simple steps of cooking can let us gain the all these benefit which also well tasting and time is saving.

The incredible change has made in almost every parts of our daily life, which bring us a lot of convenience. So do the cooking implements. Ultimately, I strongly believe that people will pay less time on food preparing in the future.

又要辛苦和我同组的童鞋了·~~今儿还是写的自己题。。。谢谢谢谢啦~~~

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第一次改作文，楼主要是觉得有异议，我们可以继续交流哈~


People will spend less time incooking or preparing food in twenty years than nowadays.

Perhaps no issue in this world is as significance to people as the need of the food. People may get food from restaurant or cooking at home. (感觉这里少个衔接词)The advent of the science technology era arouses a heated debate that whether will we spend more time on cooking or not in the future. Some people claim that the（没有这个the感觉会更好点，个人观点~）since new technology has brought us a lot of convenience, people will spend less time on preparing food with the help of new implement. While others stand on the opposite ground argue that people will pay less attention on the food（food selection） and pursue a further need.

The flourishing development has taken place in the science technology, thus the breakthrough has made in many realms including the tools for cooking. For instance, the invention of the automobile has largely shortened the time people use on commuting; the development in cell-phone has made people get into connection in just a few seconds into possibility（觉得有点小绕，可能是自己水平还不够吧，句子越复杂越容易出问题）; the breakthrough(如果换个别的同义词肯定更好) in the internet has made the spread of news at a speed which is beyond our imagination. Same to the instrument for cooking, the new technology will bring individuals a quicker and more convenient life.（个人觉得应该多举一些和食物准备变得快捷的例子，后面只提了一句关于食物准备的话，在此段中支持你的观点会略显单薄。）

Furthermore, people will pay less attention on preparing food; they want to save time to pursue self-actualization. Abraham Mslow, an American psychologist, develops a theory of the hierarchy of need, a pyramid depicting the levels of human needs, psychological and physical. The past decades has witness the remarkable developments in the economic, people don’t worry about the subsistence problem. The physiological needs, the first level includes the need for water and food, have been largely taken care of, （我觉得该用。号，因为一个意群已经结束了）people tend to pursue higher need, such as safety, love and belong. From this part, people may to some extent spend less time on the food.

Just as what have told above, many people may seek more healthy food instead, thus collecting the non-polluted materials and the process for cooking may cost a pool of time. reasonable as it seems to be. It is known to all that it is process（possible？） for cooking that add the harmful ingredients in the meal, illegal cooking oil and too much salt are both the cause (causes)of many diseases. The raw ingredients are full of the nutrition and vitamin, just some simple steps of cooking can let us gain the all these benefit which also well tasting and time is saving(which is also well tasting and time saving.不知是我水平太低还是别的原因，有点看不懂这句话运用的语法。).

The incredible change has made in almost every parts of our daily life, which bring us a lot of convenience. So do the cooking implements. Ultimately, I strongly believe that people will pay less time on food preparing in the future.

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昨天的作文给你改好了~~~

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2月15日 100213NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People who cannot accept criticism will not succeed in a team

As the team spirit has gained more and more popularity among people, in many organizations, perhaps the best way to approach a certain new project is to assemble a group of people into a team. But the problem raises that whether people accept criticism in a team or not. Some people claim that only from accepting criticism can people get improvement, while others hold on opposite view, they argue that whether the criticism is worth to be accepted or not remains a question, sometime it may even lead to a wrong direction. I prefer to endorse the former point that people will not succeed in a team if they cannot accept criticism.

Accepting the criticism is a way for people to recognize their deficiency, and then supply the gap to get improvement. Take me for an example. I, a freshman in university at that time, was very lucky to be chosen as a member of biology research project, and we always spent time together discussing the process and the drawback of the experiment. Because lacking of the specialized knowledge and short-tempered character, I put up many immature or even totally wrong suggestion and made a lot of mistakes. Thus, I got a bulk of criticism but also many experience from the individuals in lab. Ultimately I tried best to search the documents and practiced more which lead me to get a great progress beyond my expectation. Criticism helps people to correct the error and stimulates individuals to be more hard-working and finally lead to success.

Teams are more likely to make a breakthrough in a project if the team members absorbing criticism from each other. Different people hold different ideas, same in the team. It usually takes a long period of time for a team to reach the agreement. Under this kind of circumstance, the leader may roughly draw a conclusion which sometimes is wrong but regardless others advice, finally the project fail and all the members are to blame. Nonetheless, if the all the members including the leader accept the criticism and then come up with feasible solution to a problem, the team can get great improvement.

Admittedly, there may be some criticisms that are harmful to you. For instance, some people may hasty criticize others because of a tiny mistake in one’s achievement which also cost them a long time working, and to some extend, it may lead to the self- contemptuous. Reasonable as it seems to be, people have the ability to distinguish the beneficial one to the harmful one. Like the China’s strategy to the exotic culture as china continuing its policy of opening, Take the essence and discard the scum. We should learn from the pertinent criticism and regardless of the bad ones. Thus criticism will help to promote ourselves.

If there anyone out there who still doubts that the criticism make no sense both to a person’s and a teams’ success, this essay is my answer.

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