作文贴

美蓝UID: 3211855

改好了~~~

stancy_zhangUID: 3235143

修改的~

美蓝UID: 3211855

谢谢修改~~我上网查了一下，有stand at the forefront of sth这种用法，http://www.jingdaily.com/en/luxu ... refront-of-fashion/ 不知道这个杂志上的有木有参考价值。。。不过倒是搜出了几条这样的搭配。
还有那个a university is not what it is called without students 我感觉应该是不需要加if的，但我没有可靠的依据，只是一种感觉。。。。

laozhanguotoeflUID: 3246339

2012.2.13 独立

yxy319UID: 3014935

2.13

xiesisiminervaUID: 2997765

没事过来看看楼主的文章，楼主思路一贯清晰，逻辑严密，羡慕。就是10日的作文写得有点失水准了。和我一样都局限于homework,而且第一段引言过长，后面也没有好好展开。

紫梦于UID: 3232379

改好啦~

laozhanguotoeflUID: 3246339

2.14独立

laozhanguotoeflUID: 3246339

2.15独立

yxy319UID: 3014935

2.14 独立

laozhanguotoeflUID: 3246339

2.16独立

nikiniki333UID: 2673802

2.15 done

kaddishingUID: 3247184

Everyone needs friends no matter he is rich or not, because friends can give you something special, such as happiness when you are in sorrow, help when you are in trouble and accompany (这个没有名词用法)when you feel lonely. As we all know, birds of a feather flock together. It is normal for us to find that rich men often get together with rich men meanwhile poor men usually have to make friends with poor fellows. Does it mean that the rich won’t be friends with the poor? To my point of view, the answer is no. My viewpoint will be interpreted as follows.
First of all, friends must have some common characters or hobbies, thus they can express their opinions on the same topic.(主旨句不够清晰，you can say: having common characters and hobbies is a main reason for people to be good friends weather their backgrounds are similar or not) If a rich man and a poor man both like playing basketball, they are likely to be good friends, because they can exchange their views about one special player when communicate with each other. May be they are supporting the same team, which further increase the possibility of being friends with each other. If you say that playing basketball is too luxury for the poor and it’s nearly impossible for the poor to share the same hobby with the rich, then I think you are wrong. It is of no doubt that many things which the rich are fond of can be afforded by poor people, such as reading the same book, singing the same song, adoring the same idol and so on. So, in my opinion, they have the chance to become good friends as long as they share the same hobby and the financial condition relatively does not matter.
Besides, as the saying goes, money is not everything, and everyone has a time of need.这里你的主旨句呢，true friends can give mutual help when in trouble For example, a rich merchant encountered robbers when freighting goods, then he have nothing but
have to struggle on the boarder of life and death, apparently, if someone give him a hand at that time, the merchant will be grateful for the help without thinking weather the man is rich or not. I believe that they will help each other from then on and be good friends.
Collectively, friendship is based on the foundation of mutual exchange and mutual aid, no matter spiritually or materially. If the rich and the poor have the same hobby or can help with each other, they can be fiends恩，还可以在论述的时候加上点细节会更好

laozhanguotoeflUID: 3246339

2012.2.17 独立

mliumUID: 2590149

先交上2月16日的修改作文~