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Arg 12 terminate student evaluation of professors -o
Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Conclusion:
Omega University should stop student evaluation of professors in order that graduates can find better jobs.
Points:
1. Students' grade averages at Omega have risen by 30% after implementation of the evaluation system.
2. Potential employers believe that grades at Omega are inflated and don't reflect students' true academic performance.
3. Omega graduates are not as successful in seeking jobs as graduates from nearby Alpha University.
Outline:
1. We need more information to judge whether the scores were inflated. Whether there were other factors which caused the risen scores (improved teaching techniques or change of sources of students); the attitude of professors and students towards the evaluation system.
2. We need evidence to examine whether employers' viewpoints are correct. We also need to know are there other factors which could affect employers' attitude towards potential employees.
3. We need to know more information about students' academic performance at Alpha University, as well as information about the local job market.
In this argument, the author suggests that Omega University should stop the evaluation system of professors, because of the increase of students' grades, the possible attitudes from potential employers, and the fact that students from Alpha University are more successful in finding jobs. However, to better evaluate this argument, we still need more evidence about how this evaluation system works, more information about students at Omega University and their attitudes towards the system, potential employers' consideration towards their candidates, and more academic information about students from both universities.
To begin with, the author mentions that the student's grades may be inflated due to the evaluation system. However, we need to know how this system works. When do the students rate their professors? It is possible that students are required to score after each lecture. If that's the case, the professors are not likely to gain the students' favor by giving them higher scores. We still need to know how the students think about their grades and the evaluation system. For some majors, such as creative writing or artistic design, students usually pay more attention to their project or portfolio than their scores. In that case, students may want to improve professors' teaching techniques through this system, but not mere higher grades. Therefore, they may rate their professors according to their real performances, not the grades they give. Besides, we need to know more information about the students with risen grades. Are those students mentioned from the same class? It is possible that students with higher scores are from another grade, who are more intelligent than their schoolmates. It is also possible that students have committed more time and energy to their schoolwork. Without the information mentioned above, it is not safe to infer that the grades are inflated.
Secondly, the author argues that potential employers may make a negative judgment towards Omega University's student. As mentioned above, without adequate information, we cannot say that the grades are inflated, and thus the employers' judgment may not be correct. Even though their judgment is correct, we still need more information about the job market their company belongs to. When choosing future employees, do the employers have other considerations other than their scores? If they pay attention to other factors, for instance, students' internship or project experience, more than their scores, the students from Omega University may still get good job offers, and thus the argument the author brings about will certainly be weakened.
Thirdly, the author stated that students from Alpha University are more successful in finding jobs. However, we still need to learn more about students from both universities. It is possible that Alpha University has higher prestige than Omega University, and it has many more eminent professors and smarter students than the latter. Therefore, it is also possible that Alpha University students' success is because of their capability, not of their potential employers' viewpoints. We also need to know the major of mentioned students, and the local job market. If it turns out that Alpha University students' majors are more popular than that of Omega University student, and are in great need in the job market, then the phenomenon has nothing to do with the employers' opinion or Omega's evaluation system. If we are in lack of such evidence, we cannot well judge the author's argument.
WC
we still need more information about the job market their company belongs to.
修改:We still need more information about the local company's preference.
感觉原句是有点中式英语了,想表达的是当地就业市场的偏好,但写出来又觉得不对。还有有时定冠词the加不加也很纠结,希望老师指点。
WC
Do the employers have other considerations other than their scores?
If they pay attention to other factors...
修改:
Do employers have other considerations other than their scores?
If they pay attention to some other factors...
冠词好像有点不太合适
SS
If they pay attention to other factors, for instance, students' internship or project experience, more than their scores,
修改:
If they had paid more attention to some other factors, such as students' internship experience,...
这里感觉用虚拟语气好一点?而且more的位置在原句也不对 |
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