12月14日，1T作文第一期同主题写作。12.17更新 第一期总结

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

Originally posted by armstrong at 2005-12-16 02:42
It is ture that advertisement play a vital role in directing and introducting us how to purchase and select commodities we need. Particularly, with the advent of information time and globalization, ...

这篇文章可以看出你不错的文字功底呢。但是我晕了，你开头不是说Nevertheless, while benefiting and boosting our qoutidian  life, it surly has myriad negative impacts and side-effect.吗，不是要说他的negative impacts吗，怎么下面开始非常到位地介绍广告的各种优点，这是怎么回事啊？

amethyst111UID: 2147702

把原稿也贴上，方便对比
    With the development of the society and the improvement of the level of our common lives, advertising becomes more and more popular. There are some who would think that advertisements encourage them to buy things they do not want, while others hold that they can benefit from advertising. What effects does advertising do to our daily lives on earth? As far as I am concerned, the benefits we acquired from advertising are much larger than the harm it does to us.
    There are several reasons and examples serve well in my opinion.
    First, we can know some products by advertisements, which makes us get knowledge of the development trend of the society rapidly and timely and some new technology which might improve our daily lives' level. For instance, I am such a forgetful girl that I usually can not remember something that I plan to deal with. Once a time I forgot to turn off the gas stove while I leaving home, and then when I was back a kind of scorching smell pushed on me-the kitchen was nearly on fire! Some days later I happened to see an advertisement about electric stove which suited me well, so I bought one immediately and now I am never ever worried about something such as kitchen emergency.
    Second, we can purchase some bargains by the advertisement. As students, we do not have much money in our pockets, so there is probably nothing that makes us more satisfied than picking up some bargains. There are varieties of merchandises on sale on the advertisements, so if we look through advertisement at times, we could buy what we want at low price. That is, less money, more goods!
    Of course, sometimes there is still something that is of no use to us. In this case, it depends on our feelings and judgments to decide which should to be bought and which should not to.
In conclusion, advertising broadens our sight, improves our lives, and even strengthens our communications with each other. So I prefer to look through advertisements rather than turn a blind eye to them.

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    With the development of the society and the improvement of the standard of our living, advertising becomes more and more popular. There are some who would think that advertisements encourage them to buy things they do not want, while others hold that they can benefit from advertising. What effects does advertising do to our daily lives on earth? As far as I am concerned, the benefits we acquired from advertising are much larger than the harm it does to us.
    First, we can know some products by advertisements, which makes us get knowledge of both the development trend of the society rapidly and timely and some new technology which might improve our daily standard of living. Through advertising, we can get more information of varieties of merchandise, from commodities such as toothbrush to furniture, for example sofa, bed and so on. We could also make use of advertisements to find our part-time job. Once a job of family education I did was such a job that through putting up advertisements. Just several days before, my kitchen was nearly on fire because that I forgot turning off the gas stove when I leave home, and now through a piece of advertisement I have got a electric stove which makes me never ever worried about something such as kitchen emergency.      
    Second, we can purchase some bargains by the advertisement. As students, we do not have much money in our pockets, so there is probably nothing that makes us more satisfied than picking up some bargains. There are varieties of merchandises on sale on the advertisements, so if we look through advertisement at times, we could buy what we want at low price. That is, less money, more goods!
    The last but not least, if we see some advertisements in the newspaper or on TV, we can inform our classmates or our friends. At the same time, when people find something that they are all interested in, they can go together to the shopping mall. This naturally advances the communications with each other and confirms the friendly relations among persons.
    Of course, sometimes there is still something that is of no use to us. In this case, it depends on our feelings and judgments to decide which should to be bought and which should not to.
    In conclusion, advertising broadens our sight, improves our lives, and even strengthens our communications with each other. So I prefer to look through advertisements rather than turn a blind eye to them.

larrypjpUID: 2132266

我怕6段时间根本不够 能不能介绍一下每段大概几句话 多少字呢

watermelon53UID: 2159112

Originally posted by 逆风飞羊 at 2005-12-16 19:36

很好啊 思路和结构都挺清晰简洁，语言也不错呢 如果不是你用时太长了，我肯定想给你打个高分数。希望你能在30分钟内写出这样的文章，那就可以高枕无忧了。下一个努力方向，时间。

版主好辛苦啊，每天要帮我们看这么多文章，多谢！
我觉得除了时间问题以外，用词有些单调，句式也一般，还有292words少不少啊，我看他们都近400呢！努力！

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

３００字也差不多了

armstrongUID: 204256

Originally posted by 逆风飞羊 at 2005-12-16 19:39

这篇文章可以看出你不错的文字功底呢。但是我晕了，你开头不是说Nevertheless, while benefiting and boosting our qoutidian  life, it surly has myriad negative impacts and side-effect.吗，不是要说他的n ...

谢谢斑竹，
    我开头没写好，   那如果要在开头先写广告的缺点，在写广告嘚优点就可以了吗？？
  在twe 里是不是最好不要， 写那些有保留的观点， 是不是忌讳两方面都讲


羊羊辛苦了！

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

Originally posted by armstrong at 2005-12-17 12:19



谢谢斑竹，
    我开头没写好，   那如果要在开头先写广告的缺点，在写广告嘚优点就可以了吗？？
  在twe 里是不是最好不要， 写那些有保留的观点， 是不是忌讳两方面都讲


羊羊辛苦了！

最好只讲一方面．观点不是不能有保留，但是一定要审题，像这道要求你说出支持哪方的题就一定要有态度．

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

Originally posted by dillongeo at 2005-12-17 16:43

真实非常感谢羊羊版主的辛勤工作。但有几个观点和版主有点冲突：
1.一道题目所能提炼的观点，在不跑题的前提下，估计数目是有限的，1万个人写不可能就有1万个观点吧？
2. 对于第一期这道题，版主提供的思路有 ...

谢谢dillongeo在看过总结后的发贴。
1。你说的当然没错，1万个人当然不可能有1万个观点。但是现在的问题是，1万个人很可能都使用2-3个相同的观点（不用一万个人，100个都会让人连续看过后受不了吧，而且我相信这个数字并不太夸张）。我们的目标不在可意地标新立异，而是为了避免完全没有个性。也许一个题目能提炼的观点不会超过10个，但是80%的人都会扎向一两个最能想得到的。我也没有很多时间，只思考一个与第一知觉相不同的有点新鲜感的观点，和另一两个大众化的放在一起，就会有好的效果啊，不必走极端呢。
2。我们来看看原题：Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.我认为，创新观点的提出在于对题目句子的与众不同的挖掘角度。题目提到new products that may improve our lives。什么是improve our lives？产品除了提供了使用的功能，还和艺术结合起来让人有美的享受，不是improve our lives了么？人们都把目光落在new products上，可是我放在从句中的improve our lives上了。不知你同不同意我的想法啊 呵呵;P

fluffUID: 2168025

能不能把我也加上？谢谢！

mypumpkinUID: 2152669

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Since a great variety of advertisements exist in the world for this period of econo-mic society,more and more people begin to pay attention to them. Some take them as useless but encouraging people to buy things they really do not need, while others treat them to be of great value, as advertisements tell customers about new products that may improve their lives. As far as I am concerned, it is the latter choice, and I do believe advertisements to improve people's lives. Reasons are illustrated as follows.
    If, and it is just an if here, there are no advertisements in the economic society, then what will be the customers' lives like? Perhaps, what comes first is that life seems not so easy or convenient. People always need to buy something to deal with certain matters, and it is the very time that those shops or supermarkets they are familiar with come to have no these these goods that they need. Because there are no advertisements around them, they may not be able to manage to get what they need. Another example, as we all know, what is advertised is usually new and fresh to peoplem, always of good quality as well. Since no advertisements are performed for these great and new products, perhaps there are more those of bad quality full of the markets, people will probably to by expensive products, however, when they come back, find them to be forged. All these are really a pity of the consumers and the society, but they are not the whole.
    In contrast, when advertisements are around the customers, it is certainly an absolutely different atomsphere. With  the techniques development day by day, new products are released all the time. With the assistance of those wonderful and fresh advertisements, people are informed that something new has come to the market, then they choose to buy what they really want, in this way, their lives are deeply improved, which cannot be descriped in a concrete way. What is most important is that new products are affiliated with new functions. To try something new and acquire something unexpected is really of great joy.
    From the analysis of the disadvantages of having no advertisements and the advantages of having advertisements, it is not difficult to conclude that, unlike what are perceived by those who resist advertisements, it is of great conventience and value with advertisements around people.

再次致歉，此次之后一定及时“上交作业”，大家共同努力！:)

fluffUID: 2168025

53分钟 451字

145 Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The definition of advertising is to convey the availability of a product, be it physical, a service, or an idea, and to provide information regarding the product. As advertisements become increasingly ubiquitous in many modern societies, the industry has come under criticism that advertisements actually stimulate demand for the product which people really do not need. Whereas others against this view claim that advertisements are helpful in providing information of new products which may benefit consumers. In my view, advertising should indeed be accused of promoting unnecessary consumption. My reasons are given as follows.

Over the years, advertisement is seen by public as a medium that either inherently emphasize, if not fakes, the advantages, or purposely omit the disadvantages of the new products. Advertising frequently uses persuasive appeals, both logical and emotional, sometimes even to the exclusion of any product information, in an attempt to boost selling and promote product brands rather than providing objective information about the commodity. The underlying reason for this negative perception is the increased awareness that advertising is the paid communication by which information about products is transmitted to potential consumers, and that advertising is intended for making profits. Recognizing the social impact of advertising, MediaWatch, a non-profit organization, has worked to educate consumers about how they can register their concerns with advertisers and regulators.

By means of overly emphasis on products, advertisements should be responsible for encouraging unnecessary purchases, because consumers, as passive receivers of advertising information, may lose discernment. People unaware of the hidden agenda of advertisers are likely to be attracted by the exaggerated benefits of certain products claimed in advertisements. For example, the magnified image of heroic young men being linked to smoking in tobacco advertisements has been criticized as deliberately luring the public, even including non-smokers, to cigarettes. Such criticisms have raised questions about whether such advertisements are creating rather than reflecting cultural trends.

However, admittedly, not all advertisements have a detrimental effect in the economy, or our society as a whole. For example, the advertisements promoting condom use to prevent the rapid spread of Aids have significantly increased condom sales. But more importantly, people are educated by this type of advertisement on how to protect themselves from the HIV disease, and the public awareness of fighting Aids has evidently increased in many countries where such advertisements have been displayed.

In conclusion, advertising that inadvertently or intentionally misleads consumers to submit to its cause, which is stimulating demands to make profits, has a damaging effect to the economy. Never the less, this is not sweeping generalisation such that all advertisements should be criticized. One should be discriminating in purchasing commodities and shall not be distracted to unnecessary products by exaggerated advertisements.

zhangheng1020UID: 2130513

Originally posted by 逆风飞羊 at 2005-12-14 12:49
12月17日更新　第一期同主题写作总结

这几天的第一期同主题写作得到了广大同学的积极响应，应该说效果还是不错的。
选这个题目的原因，不是从分类的角度考虑的。我认为这个题目首先比较好写，不会出现无从下手 ...

占个位位，学习~~~~

elangameUID: 2103703

谢谢各位，不知道有没有比较好的模板参考一下！！！！