12月14日，1T作文第一期同主题写作。12.17更新 第一期总结

stoneSQUID: 2145827

嗯，+U together

stoneSQUID: 2145827

1）一般都是放在段首，清晰明了
2）没错，就应该是形容词
3）从你那段的第二句话中可以推测出你要表达的意思。

^_^

窗UID: 209565

恩，谢谢羊羊斑竹，我意识到问题的严重性，这两天一直在研究怎么谦辞造句，却忽视了结构和逻辑．我总结了几点您的意思，看看对不对？
1.开头表明观点，不可以放到最后一段去
2.对于与自己观点相背的观点的论述不要放在论述段的第一段
3.段落结构要紧密衔接
其实第二段我是想用那些论述表明广告充斥世界，让我们眼花缭乱的意思，可能没有衔接好吧，应该把负面的感觉再加强一些是吗？

[ Last edited by 窗 on 2005-12-15 at 19:29 ]

stoneSQUID: 2145827

一针见血，一语中的。
关键就是要地道的英语，努力中。。。
那还是it is true that 保险些哈，the truth的用法也可以在google上搜到的；
B2刚开始还没觉得，你这么一说，却是觉得问题大大的，纠其根本是曲线思维了，下次一定改；最后一句实际上是凑上去的，没想到犯了这么大的忌讳；
例子不简洁一直是我的死穴，根源是不是在中文啊，说话啰里啰唆的，咳~~~，大家有建议给我没？先行谢过了！

斑竹就是斑竹，出手果然不同凡响，革命的路还长着呢，我努力前行着。。。
thanks!

stoneSQUID: 2145827

第一句，引用斑竹的话，就是不地道，要说得地道，不容易啊；
问题句改成：There are so many manufacturers and kinds of cars on sale in the market, among which how many cars are suitable for us.
最后一句，在as前后加两个逗号，似乎也可以；

关于论证的问题，似乎是在中文底子了，哈哈

赞扬的话还是免了吧，咱们要将矛头直指问题所在，提高效率。:)

hotkenUID: 2135671

Originally posted by 逆风飞羊 at 2005-12-15 18:41

首先挺喜欢你的两个TS，站的高看的远，提到广告对社会经济的积极意义，比一味地说消费者吃亏还是占便宜好的多。
问题是，觉得你这两个段落基本说的是一个意思，差别不大。特别是第二段，TS说的非常好：adverti ...

谢谢小羊的点评，我觉得你说的很到位哦：）
再次看完自己的文章，发觉问题还真是不小。
我把第二段改了一下，你看看如何。。
Furthermore, advertising greatly contributes to people's consuming, which can stimulate the development of economy, hence improving the quality of our lives. Suppose people live in an environment without any advertisement, it is not likely that they can keep up with the changes and innovations, which have brought lots of pleasures in their lives. Because of the effects caused by advertising, people will purchase somewhat luxurious goods to make them living more comfortably, which, undoubtedly, also promoting the prosperity of our economy. For instance, in my hometown, a small city in Guangdong Province, nowadays many people own their private cars, convenient and practical vehicles that are becoming more popular in modern society. Ten years ago, although many people had become rich and been able to afford their private cars, they were still worried that the cars would aggravate their financial burdens. In fact, for most of them who   are very busy with their business every day, it is indispensable for them to buy such slightly expensive vehicles, because the public transportation is not accessible. Besides, the buses often seem a little crowded. Just on account of the advent of various advertisements, more and more rich people have been persuaded to own their private cars. Consequently, they can save much of their time and work more efficiently. Meanwhile, the wave of purchasing private cars largely boosts the development of our city’s economy.

[ Last edited by hotken on 2005-12-15 at 20:05 ]

hotkenUID: 2135671

版主快过来看看噢：）

amethyst111UID: 2147702

谢谢，你提的建议很是正确!

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

To 窗：
1。开头必须表明观点，否则死的极为难看
2。让步结构可以写，但是相反观点放到body最后一段，少写点。
3。肯定，中文作文也是如此啊，写前规划一下，不要想到什么写什么。
如果你的观点是负面的，当然要加强负面效果；你的观点是正面，负面当然要轻描淡写了

To stongeSQ：
例子不简洁其实是很正常的问题，现场写肯定会遇到，我也是。毕竟想到一个新颖点的例子不容易，不一般的例子当然会多说几句，这个有三个方面，一是中文功底，很多人都是小学中学作文写不好才写不好英文作文的。二是要多限时写作，逼自己提高功力。三是多涉猎各种知识，最好举公共的例子，比如名人啊，国际大事啊等等，不用多介绍，相对的，少拿自己说事，就可以少介绍了。

To hotken：
这段写的确实好多了，如果挑剔的话，应该注意再明确强调广告的宣传对人们心理变化的意义，你没有说。只需一句话，明了，剩了很多其他话。另外如果在现实考试中，不可能会让你写这么多。所以在这个反复写，改的过程中精练，就可以提高。

今天非常的忙，晚上就不会再上网了，即使上也会是凌晨了 大家明天见，另外，关于下一期同主题写作的时间，希望大家提意见，发到这个帖子里吧
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

hotkenUID: 2135671

版主确实辛苦了。。
顶一下。

夜婴UID: 2153521

我找到我的“另一伴”了，我们已经自建了一个专门发作文的帖子，欢迎你来玩。

那个，“There are ”的句子，我还是不明白为什么有“how many”这样的提问形式出现？是设问吧。那应该以问号结尾，我就不会傻呆呆的想不明白了。设问的写法很好呵，就更应该突现这个标点了。

最后一句加逗号果然好多了呢。
赞扬的话还是不该免，像我这样少了鼓励就活不下去了。

stoneSQUID: 2145827

就是就是！

stoneSQUID: 2145827

本意不是设问的，how many引导名词性从句，是我杜撰的，哈哈。继续改。。。

luoluo1978UID: 2159364

After the TV was introduced to us, all kinds of advertisements appeared which have more influence on our life than before. But the debate about the advertisement never stopped. Some people say advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Whereas others hold the opinion that advertisement tell us about new products that may improve our lives. I prefer the latter. Here I demonstrate why I prefer that.

Firstly, advertisements make us convenient in every aspect of life. Hundred years ago, the human beings produced most of what they needed in person, so they may not know the importance of the advertisement. But now, most of us focus on special fields; they have no possibility to provide everything they need by themselves. So without advertisement, we maybe not know where we can buy what we need and which product is best for us. That is a terrible thing. Maybe someone express that your classmates or neighbors know. But how did they know that, in fact, all the information is from advertisement. For instance, when you see a huge brand with the word: Computer Plaza hung on a building, after that you knew where you can buy the computer. The brand is also an advertisement.

Secondly, if the people who express advertising encourages us to buy things that we do not need really do not want buy some products, only advertisement can not persuade you to do that. The reason why you do that is that the product can bring you some advantages. For instance, there have an advertisement about the food of dogs, if you hate dog and have no dog, will you buy the dog food?

In conclusion, the advertisements give us much information about the new product which will bring us some advantages. Maybe it is not useful to you now, but I will use it in the future.

larrypjpUID: 2132266

不好意思宿舍断网了 信息不对称了 没能及时看到互改消息 不过今天马上赶上了 下次肯定注意纪律问题
首先有个很白痴的问题，如果because从句在主句后面要加逗号吗？
第二篇作文 写了差不多一个小时 晕 看起来水平差到一定程度了 希望大家多多帮助谢谢！请sweetspite看到这贴pm我一下 没回我信呢呵呵
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It appears to be a hot topic of a dilemma in modern society that how advertising impacts on our daily lives.Some people share a belief that advertising influences our lives in a more adverse way rather than positive.They argue that,for example,advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need.Yet I admit that advertising virtually has some disadvantages,however,as far as I am concerned,I doubt if they ignore that advertising has significantly improved our lives.

First of all,advertising makes our lives more convenient and efficient by providing us a great deal of necessary information,if not redundant,of various commodities promptly.I can hardly imagine how inconvenient will be without advertisements.Without advertisements,how can we know where to buy some newly-invented matters not available nearby?Without advertisements,how can we judge from so many different goods from first sight?Without advertisements,how can we find out the latest information of our favorite items far away?It is impossible to obtain the information ourselves,because the opportunity cost,that is whatever must be given up to obtain some items（P rinciples of Economics,Mankiw）,is too high to afford.Hence,advertising makes our society more efficient by reducing the opportunity cost.

Moreover,advertising,as an art,makes our lives more colorful and interesting.Some advertisements are absolutely unbelievable ,which pour deeply into our impressions.One that impressed me most is a car advertisement,in which there are a car,a lion and the moon sleeping together on a tranquil grassland at midnight,then the car wakes up,slowly and quietly move onto the moon which now turns out to be more like a rainbow without disturbing the lion.What a harmonious picture!And how incredibly amazing!There are also many other excellent advertisements, beautiful or spectacular, humorous or touching,which deserve to be called as arts.

However,it is true that advertising intrinsically has some disadvantages. Firstly,some advertisements seems to deliberately exaggerate the quality of the goods.This may be prevented by legislation.Secondly, advertising is likely to be a waste of money.Yet consider the opportunity cost without it,make a trade-off curve,and then maybe we will reach a quite different conclusion.Thirdly,but not finally,some advertisements are coarsely-designed.I think it is designer’s fault,not advertisements’.

All in all,from my view of point we incline to exaggerate the disadvantages of advertising,and ignore the advantages it brings about that it not only makes our lives more convenient and efficient,but also makes our lives more colorful and interesting.Therefore,I agree with the latter given statement,and I believe that advertisements are of great importance in modern society.

[ Last edited by larrypjp on 2005-12-16 at 13:38 ]