考完托福了，跟大家分享一下有帮助的网站（响应版主号召，本帖现在开始为大家改作文）

zhswsyjUID: 2591809

谢谢楼主~~刚开始准备T

glamorouskyUID: 2459211

刚进版的童鞋们抓住机会哦~~~~~

glamorouskyUID: 2459211

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kongkong1212UID: 2581369

~~~ 写的第一篇托福的作文。。。

我知道很烂，总算凑够的字。。。。。

不嫌弃好吧~~~

帮我改改咯~~谢谢高手们~~~~~

Topic: universities should or should not give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Give specific reasons.
It is well known that we can not emphasize the significant of the health too much. Personality, my sports equipments, say dumbbell, running machine and sandbag, are piled in the bedroom since my mother request me to do exercise every morning in order to enhance my physical quality and resistibility. To be frank, probably do some sports activities benefit students’ body and mood. In my opinion, nevertheless, I deem highly that universities should not give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Following are what I believe to be two magnificent reasons.
The first reason is that the library is symbol of a heart of the university. Students need to abound their spare time with the library. What is more, there are multifarious information, which could be referred to write their own reports, multiply the knowledge, revise the examination, etc.. in contrast, sports equipment do not owner so much value.
The second reason is that PE, is not limited to every students, is an arbitrary subject that have exert fascinate to some students. Moreover, It is universally acknowledged that a common university must process basketball ground, football ground, tennis ground and some a fundamental demand in sports equipments. There is no denying that the sports equipments, one-time investments and not continue investments, can be maintained regularly.
In substance, do some sports activities are the great way to protect and relax yourself. These days , more and more young people is addicted to do them. In spite of people’s behaviors, I insist my standpoint for the reason that the mainly task in university is study. So precious is the time that we can’t afford to waste it by doing sport activities.
Above all, I have supported the statement that universities should not give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Because the library is much more crucial than sport equipments , PE is not limited to every student, and do exercise is minor event in university.

这个是我的另2一篇文章，有兴趣的给我看看！！！互相交流啊！！！！互相共勉啊！！！

http://bbs.xiaoma.com/thread-26810-1-1.html



另外问下，有2月22号在北京考试的托友吗？？一起努力哦~~~~

腾格里旅狼UID: 2573178

大哥，我都考完好久了，还跟你共勉呢……这还不如说谢谢好听呢……

glamorouskyUID: 2459211

;d: 看看旅狼胸前的大章~~

腾格里旅狼UID: 2573178

一篇文章，居然首段最长，看起来好像敷衍一样。第一段作为介绍段落阐明观点就好了，你现在看起来就好像主要段落一样……你应该把首段缩短，然后找例子填充以下你的观点段落。全篇文章居然看不到离子……。好好找一下离子然后把这篇文长再写一遍把。

腾格里旅狼UID: 2573178

哎，不爽归不爽，但是文章还是要改的。:handshake

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shellyyu9UID: 2519441

偶联系托福作文的第一篇，真诚期待大家的意见。谢谢。
One of the appropriate solutions to the dilemma is that school is responsible to the most classes and leaves a number of classes for students to choose from.

High school plays a significant role in students’ educational career and determines which university to attend. It is likely that students will pour in easier classes like music, arts as well as sports instead of abstruse subject such as math, physics and chemistry and so on if they have the chance to choose whatever they are interested in. It might exert a profound but negative influence- can not meet the requirement of college- on students and they are highly to regret years later.

High school students are mature enough to arrange all the classes and are absolutely not competent with experts and teachers who have abundant experience of teaching and studying in distinguishing which is right to them. Besides, avoiding disgusting is human’s natural and no one is willing to do laborious work thus leads to in one aspect rather than all round development. for instance, Da vanci is not only a celebrating artist but also good at math and anatomy. So students can not merely learn what they want. Furthermore, one is not supposed to be savant in every field but he should know how it works in other domain.

To draw a conclusion, school should be the chief decider to guarantee the students all-round development via a moderate and scientific curriculum meanwhile students should have the opportunities to select their favorite courses.

To draw a conclusion, school should be the chief decider to guarantee students all round studying via a moderate and scientific curriculum meanwhile students should have opportunities to select their favorite courses.

shellyyu9UID: 2519441

题目：should high schhol allow students to study the courses they want

shellyyu9UID: 2519441

Roommate who will live with you for 4 years every day and night is very vital to you. An ideal roommate shares the characteristics: cleanness, good manner as well as intelligence.

It is annoyed if my roommate seldom has a bath or washes his feet and smelled disgusting. Besides, I can not stand to shoulder all the clean work along and watch him enjoy the luster room with my efforts. I am the kind of person who wants everything in order so I can not bear his stuff is in a mess that will exert a negative influence on my mood. I believe everyone wish to have a clean roommate who place everything methodical.

Cleanness is the lowest request of a roommate; what’s more, a good roommate should be good at manner: polite, healthy habits and never overlook into other’s privacy. Well educated person always has good manner and thus make him easy to get along with. I hate people who shout at others or use vulgarity every now and then. If he possesses healthy habits like wake up early in the morning and jogging everyday, seldom eat junk food and never come back too late nor does he sing aloud in dormitory. Only in good manner could we have a peaceful and comfortable living environment. Since we live together it is ineluctability we will know each other’s secret. He had better not share my privacy with others nor does he look into my business too much.

The above two demands makes an eligible roommate but it will be perfect if he is intelligent as well. I might get trouble in my study and daily life, so I would be able to get advice from him. Maybe get tutorial help before final exams to ensure me get excellent marks. I fancy having meaningful and inspiring conversation with him at night, such as what is life and change opinions about love.

Having a good roommate is far more important than your best friend because you meet everyday, and a clean, polite and intelligent friend will guarantee your wonderful life.

shellyyu9UID: 2519441

个人意见哈，觉得托福的作文就是八股啊，开头就是表明观点，加总起，同意（or not）加主要原因。然后分开论述，详细例子，流利语言就行了。

shellyyu9UID: 2519441

我个人觉得写四六级作文的时候，是二选一的，但是看了新东方托福高分作文里的范文，觉得应该回答it depends，然后分情况讨论。是不是这样呢？？ 对于agree or disagree的文章，是不是都不可以输得太绝对啊？？
谁来说说托福作文和四六级作文的区别啊？

glamorouskyUID: 2459211

超级入口中有介绍啊~~  很详细 仔细看下~~:)