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The author, in the argument, predicts that the Mason City council will need to increase its budget for improvements to the publicly owned lands along the Mason River. This prediction is grounded on three factors: Mason City residents seldom use the nearby Mason River for recreation in spite of water sports as their favorite form of recreation; residents have complained about the quality of the water in the river so they must be avoiding the river; the agency responsible for rivers had announced to clean up Mason River. Based on the last prerequisite, the author deduces that recreational use of Mason River is likely to increase. However, both the deduction and prediction are problematic and unwarranted.
(是的 承认 在时间保证的基础上还是想用这样的开头 而且不是每个argu都可以的 喜欢这种开门见山呢。。。)
First of all, it is unknown whether Mason River is suitable for recreational activity or not. If not, this can substantiate that residents nearby Mason River seldom use it for recreation although they love water sports. In detail, if along the river are crowded with factories and companies but without park or recreational facilities, the river can not appeal residents to come for recreational activity due to its surroundings and inconvenience, which is to say, people consider the river anything but a recreational plot.
Similarly, it is unclear how much the quality of the water accounts for the recreational use of the river even if the Mason River is suitable for recreation. Suppose the water in the river is one of the many considerations people take when choosing which river to go for fun. Complaints about the quality of the water in the river can verify people's dissatisfaction about the quality, but can not corroborate that the water, once improved, will definitely increase visitors of the Mason River.Because to increase recreational use of Mason River involves more than the quality of water in the river. It comprises smooth transportation, humane convenience (such as, shower rooms, taps, restaurants, shops, and so forth), necessary facilities (including decks, ropes, and others) and so forth. To attract the first pioneers also needs advertisement propaganda and marketing tactics.
Third, if the recreational use of the Mason River increases, this can not justify the need for government to allot funds to improve the publicly owned land along this river. If the land is already capacable and suitable for recreational use of vast population, there is no need to improve. Alternatively, government may allocate these budgets to other elements, ranging public transportations, marine safeguards and others related to this river.
In sum, the conclusion drawn in the argument is not firm and convincing. To strengthen its credibility, the author should point out the possibility and feasibility of Mason River as a place of recreation. To make it logically acceptable, the arguer need to prove that water improvement can increase visitors of the river as well as necessity of improvements to the publicly owned lands along the river as an effective action.
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