fish1044作业--写作

fish1044UID: 2190500

    Generally speaking, writing and speaking are two of the most essential means for human beings to communicate and exchange ideas. Thus, they are equally important for the sake of communication. However, for my own experience as a graduate student whose life mainly focuses on research in group, I think speaking is a little bit more important than writing.

    First of all, speaking is the most efficient way to communicate with others. As the case in many universities, researches have been done by groups, not just one person. So, frequently idea exchanging is required. In this situation, you have to talk to your colleague so you can know what he thinks about your work and how you could improve it. It would be consider ridiculous and time consuming to write down your questions or proposals and handed to your colleague to communicate which would be the case if you are the one who is lack of speaking skill.

    More over, while writing demonstrates your thought deep in mind, speaking reveals more about your immediate response. It true that writing reports is part of the life of graduate students in the lab, however, when it comes to the final judgment of your work, your presentation and answers to the questions the professors ask are the things that matters. Reports are merely some kind of reference material. Good speaking skill during the presentation, on one hand, can help your to pass through your idea fluently and precisely. On the other hand, your voice, which is also part of the speaking skill, could show your confidence and some other personal characteristics such as enthusiasm to the others. This is a task that writing work can never achieve.
   
    As a conclusion, the importance of speaking and writing varies from person to person thought they are all essentials in communication. For my current life, as a graduate student who needs to communicate to people face to face and having presentation all the time, speaking skill seems to be more important.

fish1044UID: 2190500

第一次写IBT作文，希望大家指教。

annskyaUID: 181142

写得真好，感动一下。

woshichensidaUID: 2623391

很好很强大

woshichensidaUID: 2623391

建议lz可考虑用些big word，想ridiculous可改为ludicrous

ly8768UID: 2452066

1# fish1044

Generally speaking(这个还是放结尾吧), writing and speaking are two of the most essential means for human beings to communicate and exchange ideas. Thus, they are equally important for the sake of communication. However, for my own experience as a graduate student whose life mainly focuses on research in group, I think speaking is a little bit(a little bit重复) more important than writing.

First of all, speaking is the most efficient way to communicate with others. As the case in many universities, researches have been done by groups, not just one person. So, frequently idea exchanging is required. In this situation, you have to talk to your colleague so you can know what he thinks about your work and how you could improve it. It would be consider ridiculous and time consuming to write down your questions or proposals and handed to your colleague to communicate which would be the case if you are the one who is lack of speaking skill.(这个例子举的不错)

Moreover, while writing demonstrates your thought deep in mind, speaking reveals more about your immediate response(deep in mind和immediate response没有轻重之分). It (it is) true that writing reports is part of the life of graduate students in the lab, however, when it comes to the final judgment of your work, your presentation and answers to the questions the professors ask are the things that matters. Reports are merely some kind of reference material. Good speaking skill during the presentation, on one hand, can help your(you) to pass through(pass及物) your idea fluently and precisely. On the other hand, your voice, which is also part of the speaking skill, could show your confidence and some other personal characteristics such as enthusiasm to the others. This is a task that writing work can never achieve.

As a conclusion, the importance of speaking and writing varies from person to person thought they are all essentials in communication. For my current life, as a graduate student who needs to communicate to people face to face and having presentation all the time, speaking skill seems to be more important.

第一个观点很好，例子也漂亮，只是第二个论点和论证的内容不一致

goback211UID: 2419259

Generallyspeaking, writing and speaking are two of the most essential means for humanbeings to communicate and exchange ideas. Thus, they are equally important forthe sake of communication. However, for my own experience as a graduate studentwhose life mainly focuses on research in group, I think speaking is a little bit(是不是有点口语化呢) more important than writing.
First of all,speaking is the most efficient way to communicate with others. As the case inmany universities, researches have been done by groups, not just one person.So, frequently idea exchanging is required. In this situation, you have to talkto your colleague so you can know what he thinks about your work and how youcould improve it. It would be considerridiculous and time consuming to write down your questions or proposals andhanded to your colleague to communicate which would be the case if you are theone who is lack of speaking skill.
More over, whilewriting demonstrates your thought deep in mind, speaking reveals more aboutyour immediate response（论点不错）. It true that writing reports is part of the life of graduate students inthe lab, however, when it comes to the final judgment of your work, yourpresentation and answers to the questions the professors ask are the thingsthat matters. Reports are merely some kind of reference material. Good speakingskill during the presentation, on one hand, can help your to pass through youridea fluently and precisely. On the other hand, your voice, which is also partof the speaking skill, could show your confidence and some other personalcharacteristics such as enthusiasm to the others. This is a task that writingwork can never achieve（有点片面哈，论文的内容才是关键，答辩时老师的问题一般都是随便问问的…论证不准确）.
As a conclusion,the importance of speaking and writing varies from person to person thought they are all essentialsin communication. For my current life, as a graduate student who needs tocommunicate to people face to face and having presentation all the time,speaking skill seems to be more important.

fish1044UID: 2190500

1# fish1044  

Generally speaking(这个还是放结尾吧), writing and speaking are two of the most essential means for human beings to communicate and exchange ideas. Thus, they are equally important fo ...
ly8768 发表于 2009-9-13 19:39

感谢你的修改意见，下次作文要多加改进。
从你的批注能看出来，你的水平很高，以后多交流哦。

fish1044UID: 2190500

Generallyspeaking, writing and speaking are two of the most essential means for humanbeings to communicate and exchange ideas. Thus, they are equally important forthe sake of communication. However, f ...
goback211 发表于 2009-9-13 20:00

看来第二个论点问题比较大，谢谢大家～

fish1044UID: 2190500

建议lz可考虑用些big word，想ridiculous可改为ludicrous
woshichensida 发表于 2009-9-13 14:42

ludicrous这个词以前还没有用过呢，现在学会了，谢谢～

fish1044UID: 2190500

9-15作业

    With the rapid pace and booming development of the society, some people holds the opinion that its not possible or realistic to stay at just one company for his/her whole life anymore. Their theory is based on the following so call objective and subjective “facts”. Objectively, they think with the companion of fierce competition, company’s life spans are becoming shorter and they can not last long enough to hire on person lifelong. Subjectively, on the one hand, people have to pursue their career which is often characterized by earning more salary and could be more easily to realize if one is willing to change their company. On the other hand, the possibility of getting fired is getting higher due to higher requirement companies have for their employees. However, as for my opinion, these are just the unnecessarily excuses for the one who is not willing to or not capable to stay at one company for their whole life.
   
    First of all, the hardship that companies are suffering in the market actually helps them to grow. For the ones that survive in the competition, they are usually strong and steady which make them stands even longer. Microsoft and Apple for example, are those typical examples for this point of view. So, for most of the time, it’s not the company but your loyalty to the company that can’t last long enough to keep yourself in one company for your whole life.
   
    Second, the two aspects of subjective reason for some one that can not stay at one company their whole life can actually be concluded into one single fact: incapability. It may be true that some other company is willing to pay more for your work, but it will be a limit since your ability remains the same. It’s the increase of your ability that could finally leads to your raise in income. Therefore, if you want to pursue more salary as your career goal, the very thing you should do is to increase your ability, not just to keep wasting your time seeking someone else who is willing to pay more to your current work. Also, if you keep making process in increasing your own skill, I am sure that you will be the last one the company wants to fire.
   
    As a conclusion, as long as your loyalty last and your abilities enhancing, working for just one company for your whole life would be nothing but possible and realistic.

annskyaUID: 181142

With the rapid pace and booming development（喜欢） of the society, some people holds the opinion （喜欢，下次我也试试用）that its not possible or realistic to stay at just one company for his/her whole life anymore. Their theory is based on the following so call objective and subjective “facts”. Objectively, they think with the companion of fierce competition, company’s life spans are becoming shorter and they can not last long enough to hire on person lifelong. Subjectively, on the one hand, people have to pursue their career which is often characterized by earning more salary and could be more easily to realize if one is willing to change their company. On the other hand, the possibility of getting fired is getting higher due to higher requirement companies have for their employees. However, as for my opinion, these are just the unnecessarily excuses for the one who is not willing to or not capable to stay at one company for their whole life. 9 u) s7 v" L& R ) z ~# \" R# H7 ?# q9 X# I First of all, the hardship that companies are suffering in the market actually helps them to grow. For the ones that survive in the competition, they are usually strong and steady which make them stands even longer. Microsoft and Apple for example, are those typical examples for this point of view. So, for most of the time, it’s not the company but your loyalty to the company that can’t last long enough to keep yourself in one company for your whole life.% ], E) T( i3 G$ C2 L2 Q \: V . }6 l" Y) X& s8 t7 A* g8 q; y8 S+ X Second, the two aspects of subjective reason for some one that can not stay at one company their whole life can actually be concluded into one single fact: incapability.（这个观点不错） It may be true that some other company is willing to pay more for your work, but it will be a limit since your ability remains the same. It’s the increase of your ability that could finally leads to your raise in income. Therefore, if you want to pursue more salary as your career goal, the very thing you should do is to increase your ability, not just to keep wasting your time seeking someone else who is willing to pay more to your current work. Also, if you keep making process in increasing your own skill, I am sure that you will be the last one the company wants to fire.. S3 M, o6 G( y d9 { 9 A( w' d" N: {& T- F As a conclusion, as long as your loyalty last and your abilities enhancing, working for just one company for your whole life would be nothing but possible and realistic.

学习榜样。词汇量明显比我多。

观点和逻辑没有仔细看，明天再来好好读一下>_<

尽管没有什么实质性贡献，但是精神上强烈支持一下！Fish加油！

fish1044UID: 2190500

:loveliness:
谢谢支持～！

fish1044UID: 2190500

    9.17作业。。。

    Recently, the debate of whether or not young people could enjoy life better than the old has been brought forth by some people. Although it is true that most of the people who presented their ideas would agree with the statement that young people enjoy their life better, these people are, in fact, young people themselves. The truth is, the old people who are really enjoying their life have many reasons to win the debate and they are also the one who don’t want to participate this debate at all.

    To begin with, aged people would have more time for relaxation. While young people spend most of their time struggling for life in their work, the old people are sitting on their porch drinking tea. One secret of enjoying life is that you have to feel it and appreciate it. A short time walking in the park in the morning, some sunshine in one’s backyard and even enjoying one’s coffee in the afternoon is the way to appreciate life. None of those listed above could be afford by young people since they require the much time they don’t have.

    Secondly, old people have more life experience than young man ever have, it help them to understand life more which makes them even more capable to appreciate life. Enjoying life is the same as enjoying a painting, the more you know it, the better you can appreciate it and thus, the more you enjoy it. What a young man could think of when fishing by the lake might be how many fish he could got, however, for the old people, what they really enjoy is the peace and the beauty of the scene which they knew is the most precious thing in life.

    Last but not the least, the old people might have more money to enjoy their life than young people. Money is a thing that is not a must to enjoy life, but it is surely necessary. Young people have more things to worry such as their student loan to pay, their housing plan as well as the family daily spend. On the contrary, the old people have accumulated fortune for their whole life. No matter how their material wealth been achieved, they don’t need to pursue more. These give the old people more financial freedom to enjoy their life.

    In general, old people have more time, more life experience and even more money to enjoy their lives. In other words, they have every thing it needs for appreciating life. Therefore, as stated in the first paragraph, they don’t even need to participate to that debate, since the answer is way too obvious.

goback211UID: 2419259

Recently, the debate of whether or notyoung people could enjoy life better than the old has been brought forth bysome people. Although it is true that most of the people who presented theirideas would agree with the statement that young people enjoy their life better,these people are, in fact, young people themselves. The truth is, the oldpeople who are really enjoying their life have many reasons to win the debateand they are also the one who don’t want to participate this debate at all.
To begin with,aged people would have more time for relaxation. While young people spend mostof their time struggling for life in their work, the old people are sitting ontheir porch drinking tea（这个不错）. One secret of enjoying life is that you have to feel it andappreciate it. A short time walking in the park in the morning, some sunshinein one’s backyard and even enjoying one’s coffee in the afternoon is the way toappreciate life. None of those listed above could beafford by young people since they require the much time they don’t have.
Secondly, oldpeople have more life experience than young man ever have, （貌似不能直接用逗号连吧）it helps them to understand life morewhich makes them even more capable to appreciate life. Enjoying life is thesame as enjoying a painting, (同上)the more you know it, thebetter you can appreciate it and thus, the more you enjoy it（比喻很好）. What a young mancould think of（think就可以了） when fishing by the lake might be how many fish he could got(get), however, for the old people, what theyreally enjoy is the peace and the beauty of the scene which they knew(时态很其他的不一致) is the most preciousthing in life.
Last but not theleast, the old people might have more money to enjoy their life than youngpeople. Money is a thing that is not a must to enjoylife, but it is surely necessary（我没理解must和necessary表达的意思有什么不一样…）. Young people have more things to worry such as their student loanto pay, their housing plan as well as the family daily spend(用名词). On the contrary, the old people have accumulated fortune for theirwhole life. No matter how their material wealth beenachieved, they don’t need to pursue more. These give the old people morefinancial freedom to enjoy their life
In general, oldpeople have more time, more life experience and even more money to enjoy theirlives. In other words, they have every thing it needs for appreciating life.Therefore, as stated in the first paragraph, they don’t even need toparticipate to that debate, since the answer is way too obvious.