修改铺（要关门儿了哈）——BY 都说了不是又八

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36"The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries."

The process of recognisition to individual’ greatness reflects, in some sense, the improvement of technology, change of culture and movement of international circumstance. Because people’s comment on those eminent individuals depend on the temporal value, measurement approach, and many other facts, thus comments vary as facts vary. Albeit the speaker asserts that the following people judge the value of great people, in my opinion, the final judgement should lie in a case-by-case basis.

In the realm of science, because its own characters and purposes, achievements of scientists need rigorous test before people accept them. However, the proof of novel theories always laged by the temporal knowledge and tool, thus the recognization have to wait enough accumulation of data and improvement of technology. Albert Einstein, one of the greatest theoretical physicists of 20 century, was awarded the 1921 Nobel Prize in Physics, "for his services to Theoretical Physics, and especially for his discovery of the law of the photoelectric effect". As we know, his most important contribution is special and general theories of relativity, but the prize do not mention that at all, because it need more proofs. There are numerous examples can illuminate that scientists who receive resistance and outrage during their life time founded the basic theory of new science field. Such as Galileo suffered burning as heretic because he suspected the thory of earth’s position in the universe. Although this is a extreme example which tells who encouraged to recognise the world from new angle, and challege the traditional ways have to confront with the misunderstanding and criticism.

When it comes to the politics, in many case, it easierly evaluate the significance of one politician through his or her decisions. As these policies are made accroding to temporal social problems and crisis, which can be comprehended and perceived by contemporaries. For example, government plays an important role facing the latest economical crisis, and we can paise highly if leaders of government decrease the detriment effectively. Just as TIME choose Ben Bernanke, the current Chairman of the United States Federal Reserve, as its cover people for praising the contribution he made dealing the crisis. However, when we retrospect the history, some special events catch our eyes. On March 30, 1867, Secretary of State William H. Seward agreed to purchase Alaska from Russia for $7 million. At the time, critics thought Seward was crazy and called the deal "Seward's folly." Nevertheless, buying Alaska proved to be a very good move. Major discoveries of gold were made there in the 1880s and 1890s. These discoveries brought attention and people to Alaska. Today, petroleum transported across the state through a pipeline is Alaska's richest mineral resource. We can draw a conclusion that when estimate politicians his long-term strategy is significant as well as ability of meeting the emergence.

In the business world, business leaders are adored by their contemporaries, because people always equate money to success. From this perspective, Bill Gates and Warren Buffett can be this kind, one of them create the famous enterprise—Microsoft Corporation and become the richest man in the world, one of them is called “King of Investation ”and build the role model for our contemporary concept of success. Moreover, Bill and Buffett devote their money to the philanthropy and invest various vaccines, genetic modification of seed for drought-resistant crops and education system. I get a imagination that children, disables and other helplesses will be grateful for the help bringed by the benevolent projects in future, thus people behind us also respect them as great businessmen as well as philanthropists. In conclusion, great businessmen are praised highly by comteporaies, and they also have capability to get appreciation and respect from future.

In conclusion, based on different areas and situations, neither the contemporaries nor the later generations alone act as an efficient litmus stone to test to value of an individual. In the science realm, it is unreasonable to value the greateness of people without a history respective. Considering the business and politics area, conclusions always connect with their influence through the time, it is hard to give complete right comments.

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都说了不是又八 发表于 2010-2-5 23:40

lz保重……
好人有好报啦~^^

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ISSUE221 - "The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."
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TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010-2-4 10:15:01
提纲：
论点：尽管人们研究历史的根本目的是为了改善现在的社会，可是同时它也可以消除人们认为不同时代人基本上完全不同这个错误的观念
主一：分论点：研究历史可以让我们发现不同时代的相同之处从而消除认为不同的错误观点。

例1：老师教我们各种历史事件，让我们明白人们的共同追求是公平，和平

例2：研究社会的进程：封建-君主-民主，让我们明白人们的共同追求是自由
主二：分论点：飞速发展的科技蒙住了人们的视线，但其实不同时期的技术虽然不同，但是人们的根本目的还是相同的：让生活变得更加美好

例：先进技术导致教育形式不断变化，但是本质上都是为了让学生能够更有效的学习到先进的知识，使得我们社会的将来能够更好的发展
主三：分论点：但是在艺术文化领域，越是研究历史，越会发现不同之处

例1：现在人们被涌现出的过多的流行文化淹没，而宝贵的古典文学正在逐渐消失，我们越是研究，就越会发现当代文学与古典文学的巨大不同


例2：古代艺术纯粹是为了表现自然地想法，而现代的流行艺术，尤其是电影，音乐，却是为了赚钱。我们越是研究，越会悲哀的发现艺术的根本目的正在被那些功利主义者改变
结尾：除了一些特定领域的研究，比如艺术文化之外，我同意作者的观点，它也可以消除人们认为不同时代人基本上完全不同这个错误的观念，并且这些研究可以使我们的生活和社会更好的发展
Do people in one period of time are dramatically different from people who lived at any other time in history? Do people study of history is premarily (primarily) for break down that illusion?（语法错。） Yet（YET不是这样用的，去掉） the basic notion of people studying history is thoroughly look back in order to better（也别这么用
有的词活用看着很舒服，有的词不是） our current society, but I agree with the speaker's contention that this study could ruling（语法错） out people's illusion that people in every period of time is significantly different and this is also one of the most important function.（最后一句太长，拆开。）

开头没有硬伤，只是话稍微罗嗦了点儿。入题不快。

To begin with, studying history could renders（同样的语法错误，这是第二次还是第三次了） us to understamd (understand) the similarity between every differnt （different） period of time, so that eliminate the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history.（这是你这一段的第一句。句子太长，不上口，而且这句话只是把ISSUE重复了一遍而已。不能算是一个论证方面。） Our every day experience informs me（慎用ME） that studing (studying) history is one of our foundamental (fundamental) subject at school.（学术一点儿，成熟一点儿。这里看上去好像小学生诶。） History teachers would like to teach us the historical events（TEACH AN EVENT. 换换） and associate with current matters in order to make students understand the nature（语法错） desire of people, seek for just and peace.（语法错） It is similar to the reform of our policy which seems greatly distict (distinct) in every period of time- feudal society, monarch society and democratic society- at first blush. However, if we could throughly (thoroughly) research every period and pass through（CHINGLISH了） those superficial differences to focus on the essence.（标点错） We may easily discover that every period of people are（语法错：are去掉） all desire and fight for the nature sense- freedom, and those changes of politics are due to this humans nature sense.

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提纲当中，你说的例一例二，在实际行文中只是方面一和方面二而已。没有看到例子。如果没有办法拿出具体的人名事件名团体名等等，就等于没有拿出例子。请自行积累。

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语言效率不高。请加大容量，减少点儿废话。

Moreover, some people argu (may argue) that looking back for history have no means may because they are masked by the advanced technology, so that overlook humans common sense of seeking for a well-bing (well-being) society.（这一段以【some people】开头，不大好。而且你的TS中也没有将其观点阐释清楚。换言之，你提出的SOME PEOPLE的观点实在是太脆弱了：【我们有了技术，我们就可以不学历史啦！】这种观点驳斥的味道不那么大，对吧。如果这个TS就有点儿不知所谓地提出这样一个诡异观点，下面就必然是对这一诡异观点的驳斥，而这一段就都没有味道了。） Aithough (Although) our science is in contant (constant) flux（in flux是啥= =） in every contemparay (contemporary) time, the essence of those changes may just for the reason that we desire to better（x） our life and improve our society. For instance, some people claim that our education is dramatically changes（语法错） in every period of time due to the change of our educational avenue. However, if we deeply research the improvment (improvement) of educational system, regardless the change of educational equipment, we could find that the change of our educational measure serves to give students effective and qualitical (quality) education in order to make sure our society would have a bright future.

咱们从FOR INSTANCE开始看。

（叹）教育。在任何一个时代都是一方面树人，一方面愚民的。作为政府来看，目标不会变。

但是在你的文章中，从FOR INSTANCE开始，some people是谁没有说，他们的观点极其不清楚。而且他们说的“教育随时代而改变”，指的是具体的教学制度。他们也不会去质疑目标吧。教育制度与理念有着日新月异的变化，时代的冲击不仅仅是技术上的辅助。技术这个东西，不仅是我们查字典可以不用手翻而是用电子字典这样简单的事情；它会彻彻底地深入你的骨髓，改变你的理念。

这个问题在你的文章里看来不止一次了。什么问题？假想敌问题。

你的假想敌水平似乎都不是很高嘛。如果要假想出一些人，提出了异议，然后你把他们一一驳倒，这种写法其实不错。但是你的假想敌提出的观点不清不楚，你的辩驳也是不明不白。这样一来一去虽然很容易撑起字数，但是真的没什么味道。

While it would be tempting to concede that people in different period of time virtually have some different (differences) such as culture and arts, and with studying deeply, people would be likely to found that difference more and more huge.（语法错。Huger） For example, with the development of our Internet and the globalnization (globalization), our culture and arts are gravely changed.（这不是for example。） People are emerage (immersed) in a plethora of so-called popular culture and pop arts, but omit so many treasours (valued) culture and arts.（非常不地道，非常别扭。） The culture and arts in history are continuously disappearing and dramaticaly (dramatically) changing. And the more we study of our history culture and arts, we may somewhat pain (sorrily) found that those changes are significantly different. For example, the previous arts are almost represent the nature sense of artists, but current arts, especially those popular movies and pop music are published for the mere reason that make money.（孩子，我不得不说，这个一方面是你的偏见，另一方面纯粹是扯淡中的扯淡。刚才看到这行字儿心头一颤右手一抖你知道么。真是平地起惊雷……如果俺是考官，你已经挂了。拜托说话之前过过脑子。【流行文化和CURRENT ART是一个东西么。】
确实有很多人说电影已死，有人说现代音乐走进了死胡同，有人说唱片业遭遇了很大危机——但是你这样的理念，只能说明你对流行文化与先锋现代艺术两个巨大的领域都完完全全没有任何的SENSE）

（再还有哈，语法错。）

Thus, the basic purpose of arts is regrettably changed by utilitarian.

看到这里我要说的话很简单：

不懂别瞎说，你会死得很惨。对现代艺术没有了解可以，但是即使你说的话是对的，也要想想【这句话放在卷子上“会不会很像”一个纯粹的“偏见”】。

啊看了这里我真都不想再看下去了= =语法错误可以忍
拼写错误你的态度也挺好都改过来了
但是言之凿凿的纯偏见真是忍不了啊啊啊啊！

这段的论述结构我就不多说了。老问题，我没有看到你任何一个例子。

In conclusion, besides the study history of some special areas such as culture and arts, I strongly agree with the speaker's claim that studying history could eliminate our illusion that people are significantly different from every period of time and find the basis of humans need, and those studies could much more benefit to better our society.

结尾不说了，不说了……

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赞又八~

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楼主真好~顺便问一下，可不可以看看child的作文~最近的几篇都在，能帮我看下最新的不？https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1056609-1-1.html

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楼主~这是我按照你的建议思路重新修改的~可以说是彻底大换血了！
你的建议太棒了！我非常有启发~你看看这回成了不？
ISSUE221 - "The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."
论点：任何时期人们做的相同的事情的本质追求都是不会变的
主一：分论点：研究历史上的政治变革我们会发现，其主要根本目的是为了利益。
      
主二：分论点：研究艺术的不断发展，我们会发现人们对艺术的追求都是为了自我实现
      
主三：分论点：研究科技的发展我们可以发现，新发明的产生都是为了让我们的生活更好

With time passed, politics reformed, technology developed, new arts emerged. We may find that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history. Were we could thoroughly study of history, overlook the superficial appearance and touch the essence, we could break down that illusion and discover the common desire of every matter. That is the chief benefit of studying history as the speaker claims.

Were we deeply research the fundamental purpose of historical wars and political reforms, we may find that their same destination is achieve individual benefits. Some people may argue that the purposes of wars are significantly varies from each other, such as American Civil War is due to eliminate Blacks discrimination and abolish slavery, but World War II was triggered by the political ambition of Hitler. However, if we could see through the appearance to the essence, individual benefits appear, and then justice and unjust also draw a distinction. The destination of eliminate Blacks represent the benefits of Black American and the political ambition reflect Hitler’s own benefits. If there is a difference, it lies in that one represents most people’s benefits but not their own, but the other one only represents a few people’s benefits. That is also a difference between justice and unjust. After understand the same purpose of different wars, we would clear that war cannot disappear, at least in temporary. But an effective avenue to diminish war and maintain peace is struggling to make more people satisfaction about their life and the society.

On the other hand, the basic causation of arts is due to the spirit of self-definition. No matter the artists use what tool, in which approach and for what purpose in different periods of time, their works will embody their true inner world and reflect their self-realization. According to what Freud has said art, in essence, is a kind of release of individual lust, converting the human libido into plentiful creativity. It is through the work of art that artists express their passions, emotions, and desires in different periods of arts. However, if we are masked by different forms, we could not discover the essential common without thoroughly studying the history of arts, and then cannot truly comprehend the essence of arts.

Also, retrospect the history of technology, we may discover that almost every outstanding new invention due to the common reason-serve to people and also the society as a whole. As the invention of electricity, it makes people get rid of the order of nature and bring a myriad of subsequent inventions which on the basis of electricity. All those technologies make our life better and propel the improvement of our society. The history of our vehicle development is also an exact case about this standpoint. This development process- bicycle, motorbike, train and plane- demonstrate that the technology makes our lifestyle more and more convenient, effective and speedy, it also reflects the desire of people. Thus, studying the history of technology give a bright light to scientists- think more about what contribution they could bring to our society, but not just pursue their individual interests.

In conclusion, the more study of history whatever in which areas (not just politics, arts and technology), the more you will find equal point, and may also conscious of some principles, then apply to our current society. Thus, our society should more and more prosperous and our people’s life will better and better.

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挺起，就喜欢您这种风格的~

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LZ我再次来找拍~还是感觉思路混乱。。。=      =
Iusse51 “Education can be truly effective only when it’s specially designed to meet the needs and interests of students.”
   
The task of education is to make people more competence in this society.
But nowadays, many teachers and parents seems to be misguided, they thought their children go to school to receive education is just to get a diplomat, they think a good diplomat means a good job, so they just focus on the grade the students get in their classes, not how much they learn from school. In that case, students are weary in trying to get higher scores in all the subjects even though they don’t like it. In fact, the purpose that we receive education is not how much we learn about the subjects, it’s that whether we learn how to think or act when we face a problems in works or lives.
I still remember the time when I was in school, after the time we finished the final exam of a semester, a lot of classmates just forgot what we were learning almost immediately, why? That’s because not all of us are really interested in what we were learning, sometimes, we just forced ourselves to memorize what we were learning right before the exam in order to get higher score to satisfied our parents. I couldn’t help wondering, what’s the use of education if we receive it just to know how to deal with exam?
There is a saying, interest is the best teacher. When a person is interested in something, he or she will focus on it spontaneously, you needn’t force he or she to do it, but if he or she is not interested, even though you can forced him or her to do it, you can’t make them to pay attention on it.
For example, if a boy is interested in painting, but his parents ask him to play piano, maybe he will pretend that he is playing, but he can’t focus on it, and he will be weary and bored soon, the time wasted and he get no progress.
When the school can design the classes really aim at the students’ interests and needs, the students will be more active and more concentrate in the class, they will think deeply on what they are learning, so every second of the class can be fully make use of and the students’ ability to analyze and creativity can be inspire quite well. In nowadays society, these two skills are very important when someone face a problem in his or her works or lives.
   As I have said, the purpose of education is to make people more competence than they are educated before, schools have to make their best to inspire their students’ analytical ability and creativity, and what could do more than interest?

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嗯先改了这篇吧= =



With time passed, politics reformed, technology developed, new arts emerged. （标点错）We may find that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history. Were we could thoroughly study of history,（语法错） overlook（这个词多表因为没注意到而漏掉。） the superficial appearance and touch the essence, we could break down that illusion and discover the common desire of every matter. That is the chief benefit of studying history as the speaker claims. 文辞漂亮好多 唉看来下了很大功夫……而且和题目咬合得挺好的。



Were we deeply research the fundamental purpose of historical wars and political reforms,（HAD WE,语法错） we may find that their same destination is （加TO） achieve individual benefits.（其实说DESTINY是ACHIEVEMENT就可以了，不要用BENEFIT这样功利主义的词儿） Some people may argue that the purposes of wars are significantly varies（语法错） from each other, such as American Civil War is due to eliminate Blacks discrimination and abolish slavery, but World War II was triggered by the political ambition of Hitler. However, if we could see through the appearance to the essence, individual benefits appear, and then justice and unjust also draw a distinction. The destination of eliminate（语法错） Blacks（哈？谁要灭绝黑人？） represent the benefits of Black American and the political ambition reflect Hitler’s own benefits. If there is a difference, it lies in that one represents most people’s benefits but not their own, but（不要俩BUT连用） the other one only represents a few people’s benefits. That is also a difference between justice and unjust. After understand（语法错） the same purpose of different wars, we would clear that war cannot disappear, at least in temporary. But an effective avenue to diminish war and maintain peace is struggling（语法错） to make more people satisfaction（语法错） about their life（单复数） and the society. 第一段着重从战争与改革入手……嗯，挺好的，而且归到了战争和政治的本质上头就最好了。问题在于句子与句子之间的逻辑联系，看着并不是那样连贯而一气呵成，逻辑之间也没有非常明晰的导向链儿。大结构清晰，段内结构混乱，论证点并没有那么清楚。






On the other hand, the basic causation of arts is due to the spirit of self-definition. No matter the artists use what tool, in which approach and for what purpose in different periods of time, their works will embody their true inner world and reflect their self-realization. According to what Freud has said art, in essence, is a kind of release of individual lust, converting the human libido into plentiful creativity.（嗯，要是说出LEBIDO就更好啦……是这么拼的吧。） It is through the work of art that artists express their passions, emotions, and desires in different periods of arts. However, if we are masked by different forms, we could not discover the essential common without thoroughly studying the history of arts, and then cannot truly comprehend the essence of arts.嗯，这一段挺好的。只是少点儿例证支持啦。






Also, retrospect the history of technology,（语法错） we may discover that almost every outstanding new invention due to the common reason-serve to people and also the society as a whole. As the invention of electricity, it makes people get rid of the order of nature（说得不够清楚。） and bring a myriad of subsequent inventions which on the basis of electricity. All those technologies make our life better and propel the improvement of our society. The history of our vehicle development is also an exact case about this standpoint. This development process- bicycle, motorbike, train and plane- demonstrate that the technology makes our lifestyle more and more convenient, effective and speedy, it also reflects the desire of people. Thus, studying the history of technology give a bright light to scientists- think more about what contribution they could bring to our society, but not just pursue their individual interests. 这一段看来你的文字的确进步了不少啦。科学技术的历史也是反映了永恒的这个那个主题，嗯展开也没有大问题。





In conclusion, the more study of history whatever in which areas (not just politics, arts and technology), the more you will find equal point, and may also conscious of some principles, then apply to our current society. Thus, our society should more and more prosperous and our people’s life will better and better.最后这里又露出了中小学生的样貌啦 多去看看洋鬼子写的社评结尾就好 稍微含蓄点儿留点味道更好了




进步很大，但是总体看来你的所有段落是如何串起来的？都是用的同一个概念：不管在哪一个方面，人类都是做着多少年来一样的事情。在艺术方面有艺术的相同，在技术，历史，政治方面，一切都有一切的相同。这种展开方法可以，但是其实这种文章的逻辑很简单：彻头彻尾的总分。其实每一段，都是同样一句话的改写。哪一句话的改写？题目中ISSUE的改写…… 换言之，这种写法固然不错，也可以从多方面撑起来你的文章。因为从全文来看，你的文章非常简单，就是一个题目（上面的ISSUE）加上若干例证（政治历史，艺术，科学技术）。每一段就像一个小变奏一样，主旋律没有变。这种情况下，可能就显得略微单薄了。在你的文章中我们见到了很多比较工整的文辞，见到了在多个方面的历史事件，等等……但是在文中的【观点】，我们没有见到。我们看到的只是你对文章的变相复述，甚至完全的顺从。 虽然这篇文章很规矩，但可以试试在立意上面多加入一些自己的东西。

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嗯，抱歉下一篇就是你的啦。

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

哈哈~看完了~算是肯定了吧~我就这么理解了~嘿嘿
1.不是灭绝黑人，是消除对黑人的歧视啦~少了个discrimination
2.主一我的结构就是先抛出反方观点，我反驳，最后说明消除误区，找到相同点后的好处-减少战争，保证社会稳定
3.要是说出LEBIDO就更好啦~是嘛？
4.it makes people get rid of the order of nature这句我是想说人们因此摆脱了日出而作日入而息的自然规律，但是不会表达，想了半天，最后放弃了，就简单的写了个nature，让别人自己想去吧~哈哈
5.我还觉得我小学生作文情怀掩藏的很好呢~末了暴露了~太丧了~那应该咋说？
6.结构问题~我当时也想了半天，可是我想不出本质上有什么不同点，难不成最后我再回归到表面，说但其实表面上还是有很大不同的，blablabla？这样会不会很诡异的说。。。

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118. "In any field of endeavor--the sciences, the humanities, the social sciences, industry, etc.--it is not the attainment of a goal that matters, but rather the ideas and discoveries that are encountered on the way to the goal."

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According to the statement, it is the ideas and discoveries that are encountered during attaining goals rather than the attainment of a goal that matters. In my view, which one does matter depends largely on their dedication to the society. While ideas and discoveries made on the way to the goal may solve specific problems which at first were not endeavored to be, on balance, it is the attaining of goals already decided made our society progress step by step and enlarge our knowledge of the world.

It is true that many great ideas and discoveries are coming out of accidents in some way. The byproducts, or even failures in experiments, can turn out to be perfect solutions solving long-lasting problems or simply become new inventions that facilitate our life. Example from a kind of well-known beverage, namely Coke, serves to illustrate this point. As we all know, the marvelous liquid sells thousands of millions bottles around the world everyday as a popular recreation.  However, the coke was at first invented aiming to be used as medical stuff to cure cold. Of course, this goal of curing cold fails on its way but the inventor of then encountered with the idea of turning coke to beverage and he made it a most successful case. Simply put, it is the idea encountered on the way to invent new medicine that creates a better product, Coke. This kind of illustrations can also be found in other fields of endeavor, which clearly exemplify the significance of ideas and discoveries encountered on the way to attainting a goal.

However, without clearly goals and the endeavor made to attain these goals, only the accidentally encountered ideas and discoveries are far from improving our lives. The sciences, the humanities and industry can not be in such rapid growth if all the scientists and researchers think the attaining of goals do not matter. The progress of these fields must be made step by step, which means each period of time has its own goal to achieve. If the basic goals can not be attained, the further research just simply can not be done. One apt illustration of this point involves the field of physics. In order to discover the basic components of articles, scientists can not wait for the ideas and discoveries made in other fields to help them. Instead, they must make specific research plans to explore how the molecules are organized, then how the atoms are organized, and so on. If we don't care whether these goals can be achieved, our physics could not be as advanced as it is now.  Further, the attainment of a goal give us clear direction to focus our attention to thus we would not lost in the sea of unsolved problems in every fields.  

In the final analysis, we call for a balance between the attainment of a goal and the ideas and discoveries encountered on the way to the goal. Each of them has its own merits to the progress of our society, science, industry and humanities. In other words, our society can not be so advanced if we only care one of them, either goals or the ideas and discoveries made during achieving the goals.