小组作业~Amanda_qinyy暧暧的作文帖

amanda_qinyyUID: 2632170

4.26 09.09.25 北美
do you agree or disagree the statement : Having jobs with low paying salary and being high secure is better than jobs with high salary but being easy to lost

As an undergraduate student, I have to consider about the future jobs. Of course the salary and the security of the job are the most important factors. Thus, some people would like to have a job with low paying salary and being high secured. On the contrary, I prefer a job with high salary but being easy to lose, for the following reasons.

To begin with, the jobs with high salary but being easy to lose are more risky and attractive, which can greatly stimulate our motivations in working. We should admit that the high paying salary is so appealing that nobody would like to lose it. As a result, we will spare no efforts to keep the job and the working enthusiasm and efficiency can be greatly improved. What's more, although we lose the risky jobs, we can still find a new one with a well-paid salary. Sometimes, a project designer, for instance, can get high salary in the project of a specific company. When the project finishes, the designer has to search for another company or maybe several companies are on the waiting list of the famous designer. Thus, we will concentrate ourselves better on the jobs and really enjoy in the jobs with high salary but easy to lose.

In addition, the high salary jobs, in some extent, achieve our personal values. Salary is a mean to clarify employers into different levels. For example, high paying salary belongs to high tech explores due to their invaluable contributions, but low paying salary is offered to cleaners because cleaning is an easy job. Thus, if we have the job with high paying salary, we are regarded as the highly devoted contributors and our personal values can achieve at the same time. There is no denying that, high paying salary is actually a great honor for us. Although it is easy to lose, people still would like to have a try. According to a recent survey, 75% of the employers prefer to attempt the easy lose job with a high salary, and 80% of them regard salary as the only mean to identify the job and the ability of themselves.

To sum up, high paying jobs bring us attractive salary and a personal approbation, those benefits outweigh its drawback of being easy to lose. Therefore, I prefer the job with high paying salary but easy to lose.

继续超时！！！严重超时！！

amanda_qinyyUID: 2632170

4.28It is important to know the event happening around the world that not affect your daily life, do you agree or disagree?

Due to the rapid development of technology, we can know what is happening all around the world through TV programs, newspapers, mobile news and the Internet by just sitting in the house and having no touch with the world. What's more, it is hard to imagine life without information which brings us knowledge and joy. Therefore, I hold the opinion that it is important to know the event happening around the world that not affects my daily life, for the following reasons.

To begin with, it is a great chance to broaden our horizons through the events happening around the world. Although those events do not affect our daily life directly, they may turn out to be an amount of precious sources later on. As we all know, every country in the world is having a closer cooperation with each other, and it seems that the earth is becoming a big family. Therefore, learning about the current events around the world helps to develop a better understanding about the foreign countries and their culture. For instance, I prefer collecting the events happened in America though they do not matter to my daily life in China, however, when I go abroad studying in USA for master degree next year, I will have a host of topics about American life talking with the native students. Besides, when I come across a foreigner in my city or even meet with foreign teachers on the campus someday, I can have a nice conversation with them and leave a good impression that I am a knowledgeable person.

In addition, the events happening around the world can add color to our regular life. Nowadays, a large number of youngsters are crazy about the foreign culture. Through the TV programs and the Internet, we can get to know how American celebrates Christmas and Thanks Giving, and who gets the award of Oscar and who is the MVP of NBA? Usually, after a day's hard work, the sport news about the International Game or even the gossip news about the celebrities can serve as a means of entertainment which perfectly helps us relax and bring joy to our life. Those events happening around the world are different from our daily life; as a result, they are more attractive and fresh to our eyes.

To sum up, with the benefits of knowledge and joy the events happening around the world bring us, I can safely draw the conclusion that, it is more important for us to know the events happening around the world but not affect our daily life.

无奈，又超时~

lily@@UID: 2661882

4.28It is important to know the event happening around the world that not affect your daily life, do you agree or disagree?
Due to the rapid development of technology, we can know what is happening all around the world through TV programs, newspapers, mobile news and the Internet by just sitting in the house and having no touch with the world. What's more, it is hard to imagine life without information which brings us knowledge and joy. Therefore, I hold the opinion that it is important to know the event happening around the world that not affects my daily life, for the following reasons(觉得开头的论证貌似需要加强一下，强调了information，但是并没有着重在世界大事上面）
To begin with, it is a great chance to broaden our horizons through the events happening around the world. Although those events do not affect our daily life directly, they may turn out to be an amount of precious sources later on. As we all know, every country in the world is having a closer cooperation with each other, and it seems that the earth is becoming a big family. Therefore, learning about the current events around the world helps to（去掉to) develop a better understanding about the foreign countries and their culture. For instance, I prefer collecting the events happened(happening) in America though they do not matter to my daily life in China, however, when I go abroad studying in USA for master degree next year, I will have a host of (?可以这么用吗？没见过诶）topics about American life talking with the native students. Besides, when I come across a foreigner in my city or even meet with foreign teachers on the campus someday, I can have a nice conversation with them and leave a good impression that I am a knowledgeable person
In addition, the events happening around the world can add color to our regular life. Nowadays, a large number of youngsters are crazy about the foreign culture. Through the TV programs and the Internet, we can get to know how American celebrates Christmas and Thanks Giving, and who gets the award of Oscar and who is the MVP of NBA? Usually, after a day's hard work, the sport news about the International Game or even the gossip news about the celebrities can serve as a means of entertainment which perfectly helps us relax and bring joy to our life. Those events happening around the world are different from our daily life; as a result, they are more attractive and fresh to our eyes.
To sum up, with the benefits of knowledge and joy the events happening around the world bring us, I can safely draw the conclusion that, it is more important for us to know the events happening around the world but not affect our daily life
无奈，又超时~1 G7 q9 O4 l; U

amanda_qinyyUID: 2632170

94# lily@@

请问，我的作文您修改完了吗？

BriaIFUID: 2515589

Due to the rapid development of technology, we can know what is happening all around the world through TV programs, newspapers, mobile news（用mobile phones吧~mobile news的表达有点怪哦~） and the Internet by just sitting in the house and having no touch with the world. What's more, it is hard to imagine life without information which brings us knowledge and joy. Therefore, I hold the opinion that it is important to know the event happening around the world that not affects my daily life, for the following reasons.

To begin with, it is a great chance to broaden our horizons through the events happening around the world. Although those events do not affect our daily life directly, they may turn out to be an amount of precious sources later on（是想表达将来会成为宝贵的资源吗？恩……可以说，they will show their values later on...因为资源是resource，而且既然可数，和amount连起来就有点怪~）. As we all know, every country in the world is having a closer cooperation with each other, and it seems that the earth is becoming a big family. Therefore, learning about the current events around the world helps to develop a better understanding about the（删去） foreign countries and their culture. For instance, I prefer collecting the events happened in America though they do not matter to my daily life in China, however, when I go abroad studying in USA for master degree next year, I will have a host of topics about American life talking with the native students（to talk about with native students). Besides, when I come across a foreigner in my city or even meet with foreign teachers on the campus someday, I can have a nice conversation with them and leave a good impression that I am a knowledgeable person.

In addition, the events happening around the world can add color to our regular life. Nowadays, a large number of youngsters are crazy about the foreign culture. Through the TV programs and the Internet, we can get to know how American celebrates Christmas and Thanks Giving, and who gets the award of Oscar and who is the MVP of NBA?（啊……这里不应该用问号呀~~） Usually, after a day's hard work, the sport news about the International Game or even the gossip news about the celebrities can serve as a means of entertainment which perfectly helps us relax and bring joy to our life. Those events happening around the world are different from our daily life; as a result, they are more attractive and fresh to our eyes.（恩，这个idea不错）

To sum up, with the benefits of knowledge and joy the events happening around the world bring us, I can safely draw the conclusion that, it is more important for us to know the events happening around the world but not affect our daily life.

呵呵，刚开始写的话超时很正常，努力做到时间一次比一次短就是进步。
小建议：增加语句的精简度，比如其实你可以不用那么长的段落来引出开头。把中间主体段缩一下，说不定还能有空写出第三个supporting argument。当然，慢慢练习吧：）
总之，加油！

amanda_qinyyUID: 2632170

96# BriaIF

嗯，明白了，开头短点比较好，我写个开头都8分钟左右，写的巨纠结还没什么效果。。。

哎，我写IBT作文都大半年了，超时依旧啊，都快三战了。。。

PS：谢谢点评~

amanda_qinyyUID: 2632170

5.2
09.7.25北美
Being creative, rather than planning carefully, will come up with best solution to a problem

Nowadays, people are encouraged to be creative in every aspect of life, especially on work and study. Admittedly, creation adds color to our life. However, when we meet problems, I firmly believe that a careful plan is better than being creative, for the following reasons.

To begin with, a careful plan is like an instructor which leads us to successfully solve the problems. Usually, we will have an all-rounded consideration before making a detailed plan for the problem. We will consider the advantages and disadvantages of the solution, we will choose a best solution among lots of ideas, and we have to consider the possibility of whether can we perfectly solving the problems. However, being creative do really come up with wonderful ideas or amazing solutions, those are hardly becoming the best solutions. Last term, my group made a survey concerning about students' attitude towards shopping. In order to compete with other groups attracting more students to fill our survey papers, Lily, our group leader suggested to send little gifts to them. It was a new attempt on survey, and it did really attractive large amount of students. But we omitted to pay more attention on designing each questions on the survey paper and we lost 20% of the finished papers for mistake. Finally, we failed. On the contrary, if we had carefully planned every step in making survey, we would not make such dull mistakes.

In addition, the ability of carefully planning is a prerequisite for solving problems in a long run and it will offer us plenty of best solutions. We have to meet with problems almost every day, however, nobody can be creative all the time. Therefore, a regular solution with detailed plan is probable the best solution. For instance, if we lost our credit card by mistake, what we should do? Try to find them in every possible places where we may lose it and then go to the bank to annul this card in case of somebody else withdrawing cash through the card, or we can make a creative announcement that we will give 500 dollars to the man returning the card to us on the Internet. With no hesitation, we will choose the former one. In most extent, the ability of carefully planning things is far more enough for us to solve problems, and the seemingly common solution is the best solution.

To sum up, being creative is sometimes helpful for us to come up with solutions. However, a careful plan is the real origin of best solutions. That' why I deem carefully plan is better than being creative.

继续超时，差点就粘贴丢失了的作文呀~~~
愿意用word修改的就下载附件吧。

wyl_stevenUID: 2728535

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Nowadays, people are encouraged to be creative in every aspect of life, especially in work and study. Admittedly, creation adds color to our life. However, when we meet problems, I firmly believe that a careful plan is better than being creative, for the following reasons." w+ i" @/ ^% Z#

To begin with, a careful plan is like an instructor which leads us to successfully solve the problems. Usually, we will have an all-rounded consideration before making a detailed plan for the problem. We will consider the advantages and disadvantages of the solution, we will choose a best solution among lots of ideas,(only if we consider the advantages and disadvantages can we choose the best solution among lots of ideas) .Thus, we have to consider the possibility of whether can we perfectly solving the problems. However, being creative do really come up with wonderful ideas or amazing solutions, those are hardly becoming the best solutions. Last term, my group made a survey concerning about students' attitude towards shopping. In order to compete with other groups attracting more students to fill our survey papers, Lily, our group leader suggested to send little gifts to them. It was a new attempt on survey, and it did really attract large amount of students. But we omitted to pay more attention on designing each questions on the survey paper and we lost 20% of the finished papers for mistake. Finally, we failed. On the contrary, if we had carefully planned every step in making a survey, we would not make such dull mistakes. + g6 K0 r" ?0 O0 Z; E$ H + R6 f: z9 e4 x; m3 d; X In addition, the ability of carefully planning is a prerequisite for solving problems in a long run and it will offer us plenty of best solutions(论点重复). We have to meet with problems almost every day, however, nobody can be creative all the time. Therefore, a regular solution with detailed plan is probable the best solution. For instance, if we lost our credit card by mistake, what we should do? Try to find them in every possible places where we may lose it and then go to the bank to annul this card in case of somebody else withdrawing cash through the card, or we can make a creative announcement that we will give 500 dollars to the man returning the card to us on the Internet. With no hesitation, we will choose the former one(why? reason is necessary). In most extent, the ability of carefully planning things is far more enough for us to solve problems, and the seemingly common solution is the best solution. : I# u0 A1 ~. L( f' U7 F+ h; w& S+ ^% z# j2 i" n) G To sum up, being creative is sometimes helpful for us to come up with solutions. However, a careful plan is the real origin of a best solution. That' why I deem carefully plan is better than being creative. 7 c* T. S* i/ u9 m5 r

我觉得楼主应该把第二个支持的观点换一个说法。要不然总是提BEST SOLUTION 会让人觉得你观点重复。 你可以这么说比如说更容易成功？ 更容易避免错误的发生……   一起加油！

amanda_qinyyUID: 2632170

99# wyl_steven

谢谢你的修改~ 不是还没分组么？

hzd515976083UID: 2487213

楼主能给个邮箱么，我将改好的作文发给你。我下载附件改完了才发现自己级别不够，发不了附件，多谢了。

amanda_qinyyUID: 2632170

101# hzd515976083

站内信你了，貌似你没收到，再发一遍~
107650889@qq.com 谢谢！

hzd515976083UID: 2487213

102# amanda_qinyy 已经发到邮箱了

amanda_qinyyUID: 2632170

5.3
09.9.12北美
Some people think children should study and play, other people think children should help with household chores. Which opinion do you prefer?

Nowadays, students are suffering a substantial amount of pressure from study. Therefore, parents try their best to provide them a relaxed life and household chores are no longer done by children. However, I, as a student, disagree with this behavior. On the contrary, I firmly believe that doing household chores are beneficial for children, for the following reasons.


Admittedly, doing housework is a time consuming job. Many children avoid doing it and they prefer playing games with friends or just watching TV for instead. Moreover, some diligent students even claims they can do a sum of assignments during the housework time. Nevertheless, we should not ignore the current benefits and the potential benefits which household chores bring to children.


To begin with, household chores are not a burden on children. Learning knowledge in science and technology at school is undoubtedly important, however, the basic living skills learning through household chores are essential to children as well. For instance, making their rooms clean and organized may develop the ability of being systematic on study and work, washing the cloth and dishes will form a good habit of being independent, and cutting the grass in the garden lead them close to the nature. All these life abilities and experiences cannot be taught by teachers at school, but are precious to the children themselves.


In addition, sharing the household chores is what a good kid should do at home. With uncountable homework and exams day after night, children are regarded as the most exhausting ones. However, our parents have to suffering the pressure on both complex work and complicated family, neither of which is easy to handle. Therefore, we should share some of the housework to release the burden on them. When I was in middle school, I always waked up early in the morning helping my mother prepare for the breakfast and I would do the cleanings when I was free. My mother appreciated my job very much, and she felt much comfort and relaxed. In fact, the housework is simple and won't occupy so much of our time. What's more, it not only releases the burden on parents, but also improves the relationships among the whole family.

To sum up, we may learn a lot from the household chores and become a responsible kid during the process. However, it is difficult to get so much benefit from just study and play. That's why I support children doing household chores.

最近几乎没写过不超时的作文~~~！！！
愿意用word修改的就下载附件吧。
PS：我会认真修改作文，也请帮我修改作文的你也同样对待我的作文。拒绝无颜色区别的作文修改！！

amanda_qinyyUID: 2632170

105# jbc88

哎，第二段我也觉得挺奇怪的。本来那内容是放在to begin with那一段的，但感觉写太长了，就把它给分出来了。。。有点不合理的感觉，很久没写让步的单独段了，失败了~