【1010G精英组】ISSUR&ARGU 习作——by Group Choice

lxklysUID: 2738043

限时的悲剧。。。
issue43 by lxklys

We always hope that a public official can be restrained by the ethical and moral standards so that it can avoid the flaws such as bribery effectively, for the function of overseen by people even society doesn't work at any time. As a result, a public official maintaining the highest ethical and moral standards as he thinks is always acquired more pros, which benefits his management of society. However, in my opinion, to be an effective leader, there is no necessity of maintaining the highest ethical and moral standards under any circumstances, what one should do is to have a savvy insight to identify the conditions of society and then take the relevant measures even against the ethical and moral standards he once insist to solve the problem.

Admittedly, the ethical and moral standards are constructive for confining the officials’' behaviors to some degree, which do help to decrease the possibility of their making mistakes for their own avarice. Under such circumstance, the populace of society will more cooperate with his work, for admiring even adoring his restraint on himself. In this case, when he acclaims a policy in public, the people may choose to obey it more easily. Even if they con just to be aimed at the policy itself rather than the official. Naturally, constrained by the high moral and ethical standards, the public official can operate his regulation smoother for the support by his countrymen.

However, whether an official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards he once believed under any circumstances in order to be an effective leader? In my analysis, the responses can't be simply to say yes. with respect to the WWII, when faced with the severe of people losing the confidences to gain a victory, Churchill, a supreme minster to be placed all hopes on, gave a speech in public and asserted they would succeed finally, even though he was not ensure if the victory would happen so absolutely as he showed. But in that case, in order to assemble the people to fight against Nazi, confirm their resolve to win, and protect the country from aggression, most people will agree that what is effective is what he did at that time and the history also certificated his sage tactics then, although it may seemed against the honest, which he may treat as the highest standards of morality and ethics.

Considering the condition if the public leader consistently maintains these highest standards he thinks as his own principle and never changes with the surroundings, what a serious problem may be caused in society. Knowing the Liuying, an emperor of Han dynasty in ancient china, obeyed his mother's decision even ridiculous at any time. To some degree, he maintained the standards of filial love, as the highest ethical and moral one at that time indeed. Nevertheless, as a leader to society, he didn't advance any development but made some absurd policies, such as slaughtering the loyal ministers without any persuasive evidence just to meet his mother's desire. In this case, we couldn't believe he is an effective leader even though he maintains his principles to obey the standards of ethics and morality..

In sum, the ethical and moral standards maintained by the officials could add the strength to supervise their behaviors by themselves. But to be an effective leader to society, the public officials must make the decision according to the changeable circumstances, even if it may be against the highest ethical and moral standards he once believed. Otherwise the aftermath a leader caused may be detrimental to his countrymen. After all, compared with the whole society's welfare, a public leader has to sacrifice his principles constrained by the moral and ethical to promote society onward effectively.

xingfuhbjUID: 2769976

我很火大，为什么总是掉色！！！！
yuanlinqinggre 发表于 2010-5-15 16:08

莫急莫燥~~~
你试试我这个方法看行不行？
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1090603-1-1.html

lxklysUID: 2738043

幸福，还是掉色了。。。

我传附件了


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toywangUID: 2700880

想给大家说声对不起，今天一天都不在状态，到了四次元世界，什么任务都没完成，对我改作文的同学和改我作文的同学说抱歉了，现在回到现实~~面对，然后写作文，非常抱歉，对自己太不负责了~~~

xingfuhbjUID: 2769976

想给大家说声对不起，今天一天都不在状态，到了四次元世界，什么任务都没完成，对我改作文的同学和改我作文的同学说抱歉了，现在回到现实~~面对，然后写作文，非常抱歉，对自己太不负责了~~~
toywang 发表于 2010-5-15 17:47

哪有啊~梦梦你还很好人的做啦BS表啊~~
转回来就好了~
现在限时其实也被迫把作文要耗的时间减少了哈~

cynthia313UID: 2765794

issue103 by Cynthia
放宽时间to80min....
It is undeniable that the study of history has great values to our daily life. However, it is superficial to limit the values to the day-to-day activities of human beings. The statement that the study of history only has guidances to our daily life is too narrow.
Admittedly, the study of history does have great values to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives. And most people study history because it can guide our behaviours and thinking patterns in our day-to-day lives. By reading biographies of great history figures, we can learn from their great personalities, such as justice, optimism, independence, which cause them stand out in their fields. In this case, history study is closely relevant to our daily lives and has great guidance to everyone.

However, limiting the great values of history study to the extent of daily lives is a shallow assertion. History itself is of great values. By study it, we can understand the process of human civilization, we can understand many aspects of our existing society, such as custom, culture, politics, science, art and religion. Besides our day-to-day life, studying history is of great values in many aspects.

History study is of great importance in the field of science, we can understand the development of science and technology and can abstract ideas for our own researches. For example , the study of the cancer history, which obviously has no relevant to the researcher's daily life, can help the researcher to find out the what kind of treatments to cancer was used before, in which what kind of methods were effective. Through this study, the researcher can avoid repeating the null treatments, and focus on improving the existing effective methods.

In addition, history also help us to maintain our culture and national identity, which also has little relationship with our daily lives. Every country has its distinctive culture and national identity, which are crutial for our children to cherish. The treasures of a society are passed down from generation to generation by history study. By learning the great achievements of our ancestors, we feel proud of our nation and patriotism is arouse this way. If we fail to pass down the distinct culture to our children, they might have no sense of patriotism and would not devote themselves to the country's future. In this case, the society would develop at a largo pace, and would be left behind by other nations. Hence, the study of history is essential for a nation to pass down its cultures and national identities, and is promotive to the country's development, since it cultivate the patriotism of our children.

In conclusion, regardless whether the study of history is relevant to our daily lives, history itself is of great values in various aspects. By study it, we can get inspirations to our daily life, we can avoid noneffective repeating of fallacies before, we can pass down our cherished cultures and values, to promote our children to better our society and country. Thus, limiting the significance of history study to the narrow extent, which is only relevant to our daily life, is superficial and would result the lose of our cherished cultures and values.

yuanlinqinggreUID: 2755904

这篇文章基本上没有什么语法以及词方面的错误，所以我主要分析的是你文章中的逻辑。
这个题目是针对于effective leader 是否需要highest ethical andmoral standard 进行讨论的，所以我认为不对effective的衡量标准做个定义的话，你是无法良好的去讨论Effectiveleader 是否需要highest ethical standard的.Thus, having failed todefine effective is a main deficiency of your Issue.
就拿你的第二段来做例子吧，林肯等人确实很有名，但是你在没有对effective 进行定义而且没有进行他们事迹的情况下，如何论述他们就是effective leader呢？
再说你的第三段，我觉得你在第三段中，对于不同实例所选用的标准是不同的，比如你对于唐朝选用的是，社会兴旺则领导有效，然而对于罗斯福则是任期长则是有效领导，这两个标准之前缺乏一个共同点，会让读者觉得你是根据他们的成就来定义有效领导的。所以我觉得你在分析例子前有必要进行一下定义吧。

"To be an effective leader, a publicofficial must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards."

The common sense of us tells the realitythat ethical and moral standards are very differently （adv 放在这里不合适吧） from time andplaces. In ancient china, the numbers of wives of a man are not limited inaccord with the ethnical standard （polygamy）, while at thecontemporary PRC; a Chinese man is only allowed to maintain marriage with awoman, which means that if a men married two women, he is not only act againstthe moral rule but also violate the legislation. However, in contemporarysociety, there are a plenty of countries still allow even encourage their malecitizenry to marry more than a women. Consider other kinds of cases, sendingparents to gerocomium (收下了) when they are old is an normal action in western countries, while ineastern culture which values breed parents when they are old as an basicobligation may criticized the children as losing moral. Thus, the standard ofethnic and moral I discuss follow should (be)
refer to the specific circumstancesthat is not a globally common sense.
(首段的最后两句就是thesis statement所以你这段句子的顺序需要调整一下吧)

Admittedly, a public official who maintainsthe noble and majestic moral standard can bring effectiveness to his or herleading career. Mahatma Gandhi, whose life were so perfect that even be regardas a saint，isdoubtlessly an effective and great leader. Similarly, Lincoln,who is regarded as the most rigid and self-regulating president in America, isalso extremely success in effective leading. （感觉你这里缺少对于他们在哪里体现出了effective的论述）

However, whether only when a publicofficial sustain an unflawed moral virtue can he be a prominent leader is ancontroversial issue. From my point of view, moral and ethnic standard has twodifferent respects: the personal aspect and the public aspects. The personalaspect is primary related to marital honest while the public aspect is primaryconcerned with fairness of judging on public issues and the occupational virtuesuch as whit handed patient. For the personal one, I do believe it is notclosely correlated to the element of becoming gorgeous guidance. For example,the royal family of the most prosperous dynasty of china which wasinternationally acknowledged ---Tang dynasty, suffered a series of ethicalconcerned scandals. The second monarch of the dynasty married his deadbrothers’ wife, the third monarch married one of his father’s wife of a princeafter his father dead, ridiculously, the fourth monarch plunder his princess’shigh-ranked imperial concubine as his queen. However, such scandals castshallow shadow on their outstanding leading career. An even more remarkablemodern example was Theodore Roosevelt, who carried on a poorly concealedlifelong love affair with Lucy Rutherford. In spite of such affairs thought outhis life, FDR is the only man in the nation’s history elected to four terms inoffice, architect of both the New Deal and the steps that led the AppliedPowers to victory in World War 2. The chairman MAO, Martin Luther king, Clinton, a plenty ofexcellent guidance encountered personal moral or ethnic concerned scandal intheir life. From which, we may recognize that the flawed personal moral andethnic standard exerts negligible detrimental effect on the estimating of aeffective leader.（还是同样的问题，想问一下你是怎么评判effective的）


While consider the other aspect, the publicone is closely combined with being an excellent leader or not. The remarkablemodern example is the scandal in Taiwanpolitical area that the ex-president Chenshuibian was revealed to be a phonywho illegally collected more than 1 billion dollars tremendously influences theeconomical status of Taiwan.It has been proved that Chen hampered the well-being of denizens with abusivelyusing power in order to attain his own benefits, and was regarded the worst bigbrother of the Taiwanever by the citizenry.

From which I have discussed above, it canbe safely concluded that a public official maintain the highest ethical andmoral standards will help him or her to be an effective leader, however, suchelement is not a pre-requisite, especially the personal moral and ethicalstandard are not related to the efficiency of leading.

yuanlinqinggreUID: 2755904

每次都是中文掉色。。还是搞不定。。。

toywangUID: 2700880

issue 43 time 1:00  word: 498

I'm sorry for late~~~


Given to the fact in past and what present today, high ethical and moral are essential conditions to be a effective leader. Leaders are model to follow and lead a group of people to struggle for the set goals. No matter what kind of leaders are they, this function and obligation are come first, however, to be an effective leader, these are just premise and still many other qualities need to handle.

When people talk about leaders, what comes to mind is the CEO of some companies or prime minster of some countries. Maybe my thoughts are too easy, but if we take this two kinds of leaders as examples, the so called highest ethical and moral standards are different.

As a CEO of an international company or commercial organization, the ethic and moral inherent are obey the rule of fair competition and maximize the interests of his or her company. Let’s take Enron Corporation as example, the leader of this company only focus on the revenue and pay no attention to illegal actions made by his accountants. What comes last is the bankrupt of Enron and this scandal elaborate the moral standard of the bottom line. Only take as this as restriction before inviting interest, leaders can guide the corporation to long term development.

In addition, the discussion about political leaders, the standard of them is different from business field, they need to pay more attention to the global environment and find the suitable way to develop. In this field, the leaders who in position are almost have strong self-disciplines and the leaders who do not follow these standards will be dethroned such as Helter and Saddam are both the people who sacrifice for the disobey of this disciplines.

With the discussion above, I only want to address the importance of the moral and ethic standard in different field. However, if we come to the issue mention on the topic that to be an effective leader, the only have handle of these qualities are enough? Absolutely no. we can take the people who take part in the president election as example, they must already form the moral and ethic quality, and the real reason for their success is the action and promise they made to the public. This policies and action will not have effect if only relay on moral and ethic, the inner quality of leadership and the best choose of partners are more significant. The careless of the domestic development is also unacceptable, for example that the Japanese minster Yokio Hatoyama does not boost the domestic economic and people’s support is decline. It shows more abilities are need to handle.

What comes last is the restatement of my standpoint that the ignorance of moral and ethic discipline by leaders must lead to the failure no matter field are they in. and with a good foundation, they still need to from other qualities as decoration which made them more attractive and shorten the way to success.

xingfuhbjUID: 2769976

第十四次作业   ISSUE 103


限时失败.....写了一个小时四十分钟...而且还查了好多单词....好郁闷......不知道是不是晚上特别没有心情~思路特别不清晰的缘故....郁闷郁闷郁闷.....

“Take history as a mirror, one can know the rise and fall”, this aphorism, which
said by the Emperor Taizong of Tang Dynasty, has showed Taizong’s recognition of history, due to its function of foreseeing a nation’s destiny. However, considering the important role of history, such words have just reveal the tip of an iceberg. Almost every research about history is worth its price.

Just as the saying goes, “History repeats itself”, which may be regarded as a controversial phenomenon but, always be proved as a truth. Let’s take a glance on some history facts. In 1812, Napoleon Bonaparte, the emperor of France, who has conquered almost the entire euro continent, decided to put his hand into another country, Russian. However, with an arrogant heart, he didn’t expect the cold and frigid winter in Russia. Even he was once so closed to his victory—he has already occupied Moscow and nearly was able to take ST.Peterburg, he failed to realize his aspiration.
Such a fiasco contributed to Napoleon’s downfall. Similarly, Adolf Hitler, another powerful dictator, faced the same waterloo like napoleon, and also start to fall down after that. Take another example. After Titanic, which was considered to be the biggest thus the safest ship at that time, sank during its first voyage in 1912, the Britannic, a sister of Titanic with many improved safety measures, was sank in 1915 on its first voyage too. Just for those interesting coincident, maybe not coincident, people keep studying histories which not only relevant to our daily life, but also related to academy and relatively useless ones.

As no one can deny the importance of history, we reached consent on the study of history which is relevant to our daily lives. For instance, the theory of Technical analysis in stock market is just based on the sound ground of the saying “History repeats itself”. Maybe you just one of the investors who are keen on the fluctuant K-line, and familiar with using the MA lines, OBV lines and DMI lines to seek the very right time to invest. Moreover, you may feel insecure with the absence of those lines. And thanks to those cute lines, which just made by some historical figures, you feel like a man of your own, a real person who can control his own investment, even his destiny.
What’s more, some historical materials, such as some biographies of some famous and prodigious people, are made up the learning force of you. Those inspiring stories lead you a road to follow, to realize your own dreams. Without those outstanding examples, you may have no direction. Thus, the history that related to our daily life do plays an important role as facts indicates.

However, researches into other historical references, which are not relevant to our common life, also have a profound influence. Just try to imagine a world without Archeology. Almost everything within the realm of archeology is far from our routine life, and then can we stop the development of it and ignore such precious treasure? Will you be able to appreciate the Terra Cotta Warriors of the Qin Mausoleum, an astonishing marvel built by the ancients thousand years ago? Will you be able to adore the incredible mummies of Egyptian Pyramid or of some other relics? Will you be able to acknowledge that millions years ago, some giant animals—dinosaurs are in the globe we now lived in? The answers of those questions are definitely no. Without Archeology and some other history researches, we human, will feel lost about what we are. With the absence of archeology and history, we are just like man who have amnesia, with no memory of our past life, then will be as certain as we are now? Such an answer is self-evident.

In sum, it is reason enough for us to lay more emphasis on the study of history which is relevant of our daily life, and it is not sensible for us to overlook other history researches for their significant importance. However, if anyone just insists on ignore other history, just invite him to live in the world without any archeology, then he will surly know how precious they are.

yuanlinqinggreUID: 2755904

TOPIC: ISSUE103 - "The study ofhistory has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our dailylives."
WORDS:620
TIME: 01:05:00
DATE: 2010-5-15 19:24:11

Dose the study of history, includingstudying on analyzing the big event in history as well as studying on a detailin that event, have value, which is measured by where it can be applied? Ithink the answer is positive. Although there are still lots of studies whichhas practical value which can help us in our daily lives, some studies ofhistory, such as study of specific philosophy in Ancient Greek, only haveacademic value

As history is the record of the process ofthe evolution of human culture, some studies of history do have academic valuewhich is relevant to our daily lives because the more you know about thehistory of a culture, the more you can know about the meaning of their habit inpeople's daily lives. Consider this case. When it comes to the study of therenaissance, we may know a lot about the reason why humanism as well as realismacted as the center of the magnificent event which finally affected thewesterners' value system. As artists and writers in that time began to realizethat human, rather than gods, should be regarded as the centre of culture,people, who are inspired by these illuminati, began to concentrate on theirreal lives rather than religious imagination. From this study of history, wecan perfected tell the reason why people in west emphasize human as the centreof a culture. And there is no surprising that they respect human dignity andhuman life so much that capital punishment is. Thus, it is true that somestudies of history do have practical value which is relevant to our lives.

Further refection about the study ofhistory will reveal that some studies do have practical values while some othersonly have academic value which is irrelevant to our daily lives. When it comesto the further study of the renaissance, such as the study of perspective, wemay find it irrelevant to our daily lives while it is inspiring and significantto most painters for the advent of perspective symbolize a new way of drawing.Moreover, when it comes to the study of Boccaccio, one of the founder of therenaissance, it can tell a lot about his opinion about using vernacular andLatin in literature works, which is also rather irrelevant to our daily liveswhile lots of writers are inspired by there ideas. For that matter, it is indubitablethat the value of the study of history is not limited to people's daily livesbut can be academically useful.

What is more, the history of study, sayingnothing of it practical values and academic values, still have social values,which can help a society to speculate on its flaws and find a way to advance.The study of recession, which result from the imbalance between supply anddemand, an innate deficiency in capitalism market system, can help a lot toimprove market system when we find out the importance of supervision from thegovernment. When we come to the study of World War Two, we may shock by numberof the dead and therefore become conscious of the importance of peace. As aresult, International communication and cooperation, an absolute advancement inhuman society, are proposed to prevent another war, which manifest the socialvalue of the study of history. Thus, the social value of the study of historycannot be ignored.

In sum, since the history is a record ofthe developing process of human and society, it is presumptuous to limit itsvalue to daily lives. Some studies of history, which concentrate on humanbehavior in history, do have practical values while some other studies haveacademic values and social values.

xingfuhbjUID: 2769976

修改ISSUE43梦梦


Given to the fact in past and what present today, high ethical and moral (standards) are essential conditions to be a effective leader. Leaders are model to follow and lead a group of people to struggle for the set goals.(这句and前后的并列感觉有些许奇怪) No matter what kind of leaders are they, this function and obligation are come first, however, to be an effective leader, these(结合前面的this,我感觉你的指代很不明确) are just premise and still many other qualities need to handle.

When people talk about leaders, what comes to mind (first) is the CEO of some companies or prime minster(这个和CEO后面要加s不?我不太确定哈~) of some countries. Maybe my thoughts are too easy(simple.这句话太不native了哈~), but if we take this two kinds of leaders as examples, the so called highest ethical and moral standards are different.(表意不清)

As a CEO of an international company or commercial organization, the ethic and moral inherent are obey(这儿应该接名词形式) the rule of fair competition and maximize the interests of his or her company. Let’s take Enron Corporation as example, the leader of this company only focus on the revenue and pay no attention to illegal actions made by his accountants.(我觉得你和我对题意的理解不一样.我觉得那个道德标准主要是讲leader本身的道德.可以讨论下)
What comes last(有这种表达么?) is the bankrupt of Enron and this scandal elaborate the moral standard of the bottom line. Only take as this as restriction (不了解这是什么用法)before inviting interest, leaders can guide the corporation to long term development.

In addition, the discussion about political leaders, the (ethical) standard of them is different from business field, they need to pay more attention to the global environment and find the suitable way to develop. In this field, the leaders who in position are almost have(一个是almost用错位置,还有一个,你把almost去掉,看看是不是两个动词直接连一起) strong self-disciplines(加个逗号或句号) and the leaders who do not follow these standards will be dethroned
such as Helter and Saddam are both the people who sacrifice for the disobey of this disciplines. (我发现梦梦你不知道断句.你看你这句话写了多长,实际完全可以隔开的.而且这样会导致你的很多语法错误~)

With the discussion above, I only want to address the importance(搭配不对) of the moral and ethic standard in different field.(你表达并非是道德的重要性,而是不同领域道德的标准不同.这篇你写偏了) However, if we come to the issue mention on the topic that to be an effective leader, the only have handle of these qualities are enough?(不知道这是什么表达方式~) Absolutely no. we can take the people who take part in the president election as example, they must already form the moral and ethic quality, and the real reason for their success is the action and promise they made to the public. This policies and action will not have effect if only(乱用) relay on moral and ethic, the inner quality of leadership and the best choose(应该用名词形式) of partners are more significant. The careless of the domestic development is also unacceptable, for example that the Japanese minster Yokio Hatoyama does not boost the domestic economic and people’s support is decline. It shows more abilities are need to handle(to handle what?不能就这么断了吧~).

What comes last is the restatement of my standpoint that the ignorance of moral and ethic discipline by leaders must lead to the failure no matter field are they in. and with a good foundation, they still need to from other qualities as decoration(其他的应该也不能算装饰吧~) which made them more attractive and shorten the way to success.

基本上问题还是跟上次的差不多~不过连接词的乱用基本上没有了~!
但是又出现了一个新的问题就是不会断句,米国人好像很重视逗号句号的~而且这样导致了结构和表达的混乱，要多注意哦~！

xingfuhbjUID: 2769976

第十五次作业  ISSUE51
TIME: 55min    WORDS：567
今天感觉写的还不错~看来白天写感觉还是好一些~
但是由于手腕的问题让我觉得很郁闷~上午都米做什么事儿~
哎  我的手腕怎么办啊~~~

As the Chinese saying goes, "it takes 10 years for a tree to grow but 100 years to bring up a generation of good man”. Education is not a concept as simple as some people hold in mind. The most effective way of education has been on fierce debate over hundreds of even thousands of years. And Confucius promoted the idea that teachers should teach according to the student's ability two thousand years ago. An original prospective as it is, this method do can achieve an effective result. But it is too arbitrary for us to hold the conviction that this is the only useful way to make our education truly effective.


It is beyond doubt that when education is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student, we could definitely improve the effectiveness and efficiency of education. It is natural for people to have more force to do the things they prefer, and it is no exception for students. Being as a student, if my individual needs are be satisfied, I will be excited to get rid of those subjects which I disliked, and will be encouraged then feel mettlesome to seek the truth of the subject I like most. Children as we are, we are easy to reach our effectiveness—just give us the candy we want.

However, such a good point will become idealism when facing the number of the entire students. As we human now is a big family with over 6 billion members--at least one third of them are students, it is not easy for us to meet each student’ special needs and interests. We should take the money and time and faculty into account. Maybe rich countries don’t have to worry about the expenditure, then what about the time? Do they have enough teachers to meet every individual’s needs? The answers may remain in doubt. So, even if education will be truly effective through this approach, the unaffordable price will turn it into an ineffective one. And if richer countries can’t afford the price to put such a measure into effect, how could poorer countries be able to afford it?

What’s more, the true effectiveness of education can be measure by the quality of instruction. According to a survey conducted by Pennsylvania University, the quality of instruction is consisted of eight part, clarity, classroom management, knowledge, intellectually stimulating, organized, enthusiasm, fairness and approachability. Which means the education won’t be truly effective if teachers didn’t do well in those respects mentioned above. For instance, a poor teacher may be unable to explicitly convey what he mean to express, in other words, he lost the element—clarity, and then how can this education process be effective if his students even can’t understand the knowledge well? What’s more, there is no bad science in this world, and a good teacher should help students discover the interests of every subject.

In sum, there is no certain means that can lead to the absolutely effectiveness of education. Education is a science subject, not just an occupation. In some degrees, it even could be regarded as the most central science of human. Then how could expect to find a unique and certain way to do perfectly on it? So let’s come back to the ground, to be a realist, and to consider more approaches together to reach the truly effectiveness of education.

toywangUID: 2700880

第十四次作业   ISSUE 103
xingfu
限时失败.....写了一个小时四十分钟...而且还查了好多单词....好郁闷......不知道是不是晚上特别没有心情~思路特别不清晰的缘故....郁闷郁闷郁闷.....
“Take history as a mirror, one can know the rise and fall”, this aphorism, which
said by the Emperor Taizong of Tang Dynasty, has showed Taizong’s recognition of history, due to its function of foreseeing a nation’s destiny. 【这里可以简化一下，毕竟字数过多了】However, considering the important role of history, such words have just reveal the tip of an iceberg. Almost every research about history is worth its price.【其实可以在这一需要扩充一下，毕竟你说了冰上一角，感觉没说完，把冰上的总体轮廓描述一下。除此之外，不觉得这个however前后不在一个维度里吗？
我给你翻译一下
以古为镜就是说~~~however，这只是冰山一角，说有对历史的研究都是有用。】
如果要贴合题目，就应该把however前面的改为对题目的另一种说法。
Just as the saying goes, “History repeats itself”, which may be regarded as a controversial phenomenon but, always be proved as a truth. Let’s take a glance on some history facts. In 1812, Napoleon Bonaparte, the emperor of France, who has conquered almost the entire euro continent, decided to put his hand into another country, Russian. However, with an arrogant heart, he didn’t expect the cold and frigid winter in Russia. Even he was once so closed to his victory—he has already occupied Moscow and nearly was able to take ST.Peterburg, he failed to realize his aspiration.
Such a fiasco contributed to Napoleon’s downfall. Similarly, Adolf Hitler, another powerful dictator, faced the same waterloo like napoleon, and also start to fall down after that. Take another example. After Titanic, which was considered to be the biggest thus the safest ship at that time, sank during its first voyage in 1912, the Britannic, a sister of Titanic with many improved safety measures, was sank in 1915 on its first voyage too. Just for those interesting coincident, maybe not coincident, people keep studying histories which not only relevant to our daily life, but also related to academy and relatively useless ones. 【这里举着三个例子说明是么呢？说明历史repeat itself吗？那你说repeat itself 干嘛？这里完全没有必要讲啊，题目是通过历史对现实的关系而判断是否有价值。这里让人很费解~~~】

As no one can deny the importance of history, we reached consent on the study of history which is relevant to our daily lives. For instance, the theory of Technical analysis in stock market is just based on the sound ground of the saying “History repeats itself”. Maybe you just one of the investors who are keen on the fluctuant K-line, and familiar with using the MA lines, OBV lines and DMI lines to seek the very right time to invest. Moreover, you may feel insecure with the absence of those lines. And thanks to those cute lines, which just made by some historical figures, you feel like a man of your own, a real person who can control his own investment, even his destiny. 【这个例子还可以，不过下面的例子就偏向历史的作用了，而题目讨论的是对历史的研究的价值。这点我自己也把握不准】What’s more, some historical materials, such as some biographies of some famous and prodigious people, are made up the learning force of you. Those inspiring stories lead you a road to follow, to realize your own dreams. Without those outstanding examples, you may have no direction. Thus, the history that related to our daily life do plays an important role as facts indicates.
However, researches into other historical references, which are not relevant to our common life, also have a profound influence.
【ts也里出来了~~】Just try to imagine a world without Archeology. Almost everything within the realm of archeology is far from our routine life, and then can we stop the development of it and ignore such precious treasure? Will you be able to appreciate the Terra Cotta Warriors of the Qin Mausoleum, an astonishing marvel built by the ancients thousand years ago? Will you be able to adore the incredible mummies of Egyptian Pyramid or of some other relics? Will you be able to acknowledge that millions years ago, some giant animals—dinosaurs are in the globe we now lived in? The answers of those questions are definitely no. Without Archeology and some other history researches, we human, will feel lost about what we are. With the absence of archeology and history, we are just like man who have amnesia, with no memory of our past life, then will be as certain as we are now? Such an answer is self-evident.【考古学的例子不仅选的好，用的反问和回答的力度也够有力度，有点北美的味道~~~】
In sum, it is reason enough for【这是什么句式啊？】
us to lay more emphasis on the study of history which is relevant of our daily life, and it is not sensible for us to overlook other history researches for their significant importance. 【这句话看了半天，没理解你要说什么~~】However, if anyone just insists on ignore other history, just invite him to live in the world without any archeology, then he will surly know how precious they are【写的有点不正式。不object ~~~~有一个问题，这里又提到对history的ignore ，但是实际上题目要说的是历史研究
是否有价值的
讨论】

幸福：
1 你这篇绝对是思绪混乱，而且字数写的也太多了吧，同时没有形成你自己说的thesis statement
尤其是开头和第二段。 后面还是很精彩的。
问题是，你提出history 是repeat itself是有什么用意吗？是我没理解吗？

2 如果省略第一个body段，那么后面虽然是很精彩的正反论证，但应该还是少一段来突出重点立场吧

3语法错误还好，至少大部分我都理解了~~逻辑确实跟你自己说的一样，前面和收尾都有点混乱

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issue103 by lxklys

As we know, history is required as a curriculum in the education, from the elementary school to the university. I always think that the value of studying history for us in a modern society. As many people say, it helps us realize the development of a nation's culture, region, even environment, which will enrich one’s knowledge and broaden their horizons. However, in my opinion, the propounding value of studying history mainly appears in how it is served for the commentary society. Namely, when it is relevant to our daily lives, the only value it has.

History can provide vast experience for us to absorb. But the valuable one is that which can help us solve the problems we face now. And studying history is just to find out the useful experience. For example, studying a nation’s revolution history we can know the process of its development. But its value is aimed at affording the lessons that only if the revolution evolves with the productivity, it will be successful. So when one promotes an innovation in society now, he can employ the historical analysis to take the action so that avoid the similar tragedy once happened.

Someone may say that if history's value is only to the daily lives, why we learn something disappeared and not exist now? In the first sight of this view, it may be a good example to against the statement. To study the disappeared civilization seems no any meaning but knowing that what once existed and then exterminated. However, the historians always do not just satisfy these and they will research deeply to find out the explanation, which may have some warning for us today and remind us what to notice in the daily life. For instances, the consistent studying Maya civilization once existed is mainly to search for its disappearing reason so that help human beings avoid the suffering.

With respect to the famous few emerging in the history, we could find they almost have the personalities such as courage, wisdom and honesty. Maybe someone will say that learning their characteristics can benefit an individual’s quality’s forming, which has a little relationship with the daily lives. Nevertheless, If the people are encouraged deeply and willing to be a person like the famous few, if they know the success can’t be made easily, will they be prone to give up when faced with the hardship? Maybe they will add the optical attitude and confidence to the life, want to contribute themselves to the work, family, and society. From this perspective, we can’t deny its relevance with the daily lives.

In sum, studying history can help us find what once occurred, exterminated, failed, and succeeded. But its only value is aimed at reminding, inspiring and encouraging us so that advancing the society’s development. Otherwise, in the pragmatic times, why the nation will invest money to support it?