【欢迎拍文小组】2010/07/10-----issue208

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提纲（实在没思路，大多参考了前人提纲）
（1）       1. 人的外貌就是外表和穿着，人的举止就是动作，这些都能揭示人的态度和兴趣，同时也能反映社会的理念和价值观。
（2）       2. 从人的外貌来看，外貌可以体现一个社会的很多问题。比如：阿拉伯国家的女人不能露脸，说明这些社会的女人地位高；法国人穿着随便休闲，说明他们很浪漫。另外，外貌还能体现一个社会的变化，比如：几十年前在中国穿牛仔裤的人甚至被认为是坏人，说明那时候的人想法很偏激传统，但现在这种想法已经消失了，任何人都可以穿，甚至被认为是时尚。
（3）       3. 但是人心叵测，通过人的外表有时很难看出他的真实想法，另外，社会方面也需要更多的素材才能全面认识。
（4）       4. 个人外貌举止反映了部分他的内心和思想，对于社会也是一样。要想广泛理解，我们还需要更充分的方面

TOPIC: ISSUE208 - "The way peoplelook, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell muchabout a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior ofits people."
WORDS: 452
TIME: 00:50:00
DATE: 2010/7/10 11:33:58

Do the people’s behavior and appearance canreflect their attitudes, interests and a society’s values and ideas. Partly, Iagree with the author’s assertion, because there are enormous unknowablefactors that influence the veracity of this deduction.

As for the author’s threshold claim, Iconcede that individual attitudes and interests determine what clothes one willbuy, how one will make up, what gestures one will act in daily life, viceversa, those looks and deeds can reveal certain personal matters. For instance,the conservative will never prefer fashionable wears, which shock them greatly.However, those punk style adolescents will never choose old-fashioned clothesneither, which constrain them tightly as they feel. X-sporters, in a largescale, have an open and brave heart rather than timid spirit. From this pointwe can see the appearance and behavior inform us people’s ideas, attitudes andvalues.

I turn to the speaker’s ultimate claim thatwe can also find the trace of society’s ideas and values through specific personalstyle. In Arabic, women‘s faces are abandoned to appear in the public places,indicating the high position of women. In contrast, romance can be aware of inany places of France by their casual dressing. What’s more, appearance changesinclude the development of one country in some extent. Several decades ago, itwas regarded as ill man, who wears jean, for the case that people‘s mind inthat ages were usually extreme and traditional. With the whole nation becomingmore and more open to the new things, it’s accepted that everyone can wear it.Thus, the society’s characters are visible among its people’s appearance andbehavior.

Meanwhile, we must not overlook other factors,which suffice indicate a genuine comprehension of a society. Under complicated thoughtsof human, we cannot easily figure out the authentic minds just according to hisartificial appearance or mannered behavior. Someone under wearing an elegant garmentmay has a dark heart inside, in contrasting with the first impression he or sheleaves to us; someone, who speaks highly of you, may just flatters you in orderto complete his plot; someone, who is always talking about integrity andpublic-spiritedness, may have licentious personal life without our imagination.
To our society, besides these, itshistory, policies, culture, etc. should all be considered to explain its ideasand values. Only by all the considerations taken into account can we draw anoverall blueprint of a society.

Just as I have demonstrate in the above,this issue is to my favor actually in that the appearance and behaviors doreveal the ideas and values of a society to some extent. Nevertheless, to gaina comprehensive understanding, there must be abundant aspects involved in a reasonableway.

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Do（Can） the people’s behavior and appearance can reflect their attitudes, interests and a society’s values and ideas.？ Partly, I agree with the author’s assertion, because there are enormous unknowable factors that influence the veracity of this deduction.（partly agree，先说一下为什么agree， 再说为什么partly）

As for the author’s threshold claim, I concede that individual attitudes and interests determine what clothes one will buy, how one will make up, what gestures one will act in daily life, vice versa, those looks and deeds can reveal certain personal matters.（题中的观点貌似不是这么提的，是说外貌会反映内心思想，不是内心思想决定衣着打扮，这点可以做为论证句，不失为一个很好的思路） For instance, the conservative will never prefer fashionable wears, which shock them greatly. However, those punk style adolescents will never choose old-fashioned clothes neither, which constrain them tightly as they feel. X-sporters, in a large scale, have an open and brave heart rather than timid spirit. From this point we can see the appearance and behavior inform us people’s ideas, attitudes and values.（多处never用的太绝对，你没有调查过怎么知道绝对没有，可以用可能性很小的词，Little，few， hardly，barely。。）

I turn to the speaker’s ultimate claim that we can also find the trace of society’s ideas and values through specific personal style. （不知道你的观点到底是什么，同意还是不同意）In Arabic, women‘s faces are abandoned（banned） to appear in the public places, indicating the high position of women.（不容许女人的脸露出来，是说明她们地位高吗） In contrast, romance can be aware of in any places of France by their casual dressing. What’s more, appearance changes include（as a society move forward） the development of one country in some extent. Several decades ago, it(在这儿指什么啊) was regarded as ill man, who wears jean, for the case that people‘s minds in that ages were usually extreme and traditional. With the whole nation becoming more and more open to the new things, it’s accepted that everyone can wear it. Thus, the society’s characters are visible among its people’s appearance and behavior.

Meanwhile, we must not overlook other factors, which suffice indicate a genuine comprehension of a society. Under complicated thoughts of human, we cannot easily figure out the authentic minds just according to（behind） his artificial appearance or mannered behavior.（Nice） Someone under wearing an elegant garment may has（情态词后是原形）a dark heart inside, in contrasting with the first impression he or she leaves to（on） us; someone, who speaks highly of you, may just flatters you in order to complete his plot; someone, who is always talking about integrity and public-spiritedness, may have licentious personal life without our imagination.（beyond the limits of imagination& more than we can imagine）

To(In) our society, besides these,(these 是什么) its history, policies, culture, etc. should all be considered to explain its ideas and values. Only by all the considerations taken into account can we draw an overall blueprint of a society.

Just as I have demonstrate in the above, this issue is to my favor actually in that the appearance and behaviors do reveal the ideas and values of a society to some extent（看不明白）. Nevertheless, to gain a comprehensive understanding, there must be abundant aspects involved in a reasonable way.

思路很好，就是表达不充分，个别地方有Chinglish的问题，还有词的选择，好多都不恰当（已用红色标出），要选自己知道意思并且有把握的词。
加油！
PS（好多地方两个词连在了一起，一个个给你分开了，可以写完放Word里自己先修改一下）