【回报GTER】joyce的作文修改铺【13号打烊】

宝宝树UID: 2759941

77# 美丽太阳花
弱弱请教一下，怎么发链接啊

宝宝树UID: 2759941

10# ppjoyce
啊，我也想要这个QQ啊，持续打扰啊

MaydaysjUID: 2805242

赶在你关铺子前，帮我改一篇issue吧，O(∩_∩)O谢谢~

师走99UID: 2857041

过几天就考试了，急求拍啊！谢谢楼主！

ISSUE36

"The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries."

     The speaker asserts that greatest figures who make significant contributions to the world can only be recognized objectively by those who live after them rather than those in the same era. Incontestably, this phenomenon is quite common in the history of mankind. However, in my point of view, it's not always the case. Many greatest giants' efforts that change the world were recognized by the contemporaries. In brief, it depends.
      Admittedly, most of the scientists and artists were not fairly decided by their contemporaries. For scientists, it's mostly due to a lack of proper way to examine the new findings in a certain field and the strong mind-sets affected by the old theory. For example, Galileo, a great mind that created the world's first telescope, challenged the infallibility of the Roman Catholic Church by altering the accepted theory of the earth's position in the universe, which he found unsubstantiated, and was burned as a heretic. The same tragedy occurred to Kopernik, a Polish astronomer who advanced the theory that the earth and other planets revolve around the sun disrupting the Ptolemaic system of astronomy. For artists, the nonrecognition of their prominent performances is primarily caused by their greatest mind that far more advance the contemporaries, which results in absent ability to appreciate. Van Gogh, a Dutch post-impressionist painter, is a typical example of that case.  His work had a far reaching influence on 20th century art for its vivid colors and emotional impact, which was considered ugly at his ages and therefore unaccepted. The same experiences can also be found in greatest artists such as Beethoven, O.Henry, William Blake and so forth.
       Nonetheless, the result is changed when talking to the fields of business and sports. Unlike the scientists and artists, the same characteristic that a successful business man and an outstanding sports star possess is that their success is due to the recognition of the people in the same ages. If a sports star's great achievement is not recognized by the contemporaries, this kind of sports that he or she has made great progress in would not exist. If a businessman’s product or concept is not accepted by contemporaries, he would not make great success and then be famous contrarily. It’s apt to illustrate for the example of Bill Gates and Michael Jordan, the ever richest man in the world and the most successful basketball player in NBA history who are now alive. For Gates, the father of Microsoft corporation, it’s the revolutionary operating system which easier and enrich people’s life that he gained great fame and wealth. Bill Gates has become a symbol of a successful businessman. For Michael, who won six championships in the NBA final games, he established his unshakable status in NBA history with his extraordinary performance and was regarded as the god in basketball realm. Besides, someone who searched for truth can be decided objectively by his contemporaries. For instance, Martin Luther King Jr., the leader of the campaign of civil rights for Black in the United States, is supported by a great many of followers who were inspired by his justice and philanthropism. Accordingly, the contribution or the great achievement of giants can be recognized in some cases.
       In sum, history will not leave the greatest men alone. Their greatest achievements that have made the world a better place to live in will be recognized early or later.

whiteoutUID: 2699068

辛苦LZ了！

刚写没几篇 但是18考试 时间很紧 希望狠批 谢谢

ppjoyceUID: 2623631

137# 1bueh17

晚了点

才改好

宝宝树UID: 2759941

172# ppjoyce
能不能发给我QQ，我把之前的改了，还有新写的，不会上传附件啊，笨的，QQ比较方便一些

ppjoyceUID: 2623631

161# 溪汐河

我理解为“训练以使孩子能够适应、融入社会，被社会所接受.
这个理解很好呀~~非常好，如果按照我说的把重点放在后半句的方法的话，你可以一开始就说
socialized是什么，真正的socialize是：引用你发给我的话“拥有能适应社会好的一面，并能改革黑暗的一面的能力。”

如果这么写的话， 下面的这些话可能不用说了：“但有些怪才，他们的思想，观念，可能不能被世人接受，他们自闭,不擅于与人沟通,难以融入社会，但也对社会做出了巨大的贡献。这个例子用来证明,socialized不一定会影响孩子对于社会建设的贡献大小.不一定要培养well socialized 孩子,我们的目标是培养出能将社会建设的更好的孩子.

那重点就在这儿： 目前的教育确实存在问题,但学校、家长都在做着努力，并且孩子们自身也在弥补不足。

把你说的那个问题，从几个方面扩展下，就好了。

我手头没有范文嘞， 我自己也没有写过，要不问问版主们？

ppjoyceUID: 2623631

166# 宝宝树

复制网址到回复里面

再点：参与/回复主题？

ppjoyceUID: 2623631

167# 宝宝树

只怕是给你QQ没太大用

我过2天就去南京了

然后飞美国~~一忙起来不确定能上网的....

要是想发附件 我邮箱发你行么？

ppjoyceUID: 2623631

171# whiteout

有部电影叫Whiteout

呵呵 好的

快考了更不要着急

我现在手头上还有4篇，不确定什么时候帮你改，不过我会尽快的

宝宝树UID: 2759941

176# ppjoyce
哇塞，这么巧，我就在南京。
我是自己打的WORD，没有参加组，所以就烦你把邮箱给我把。
你要是飞美了，还有时间改ISSUE吗？

ppjoyceUID: 2623631

165# 溪汐河

非常精彩的论述

几乎没有挑出问题

ppjoyceUID: 2623631

178# 宝宝树

呵呵 你在南京哈：）

听人说那边挺热的  哎我是从一个火炉跳到另外一个...

就是没有时间 所以才13号停止帮大家改文章了~~

那邮箱我短消息发给你