【回报GTER】joyce的作文修改铺【13号打烊】

yinghui12UID: 2855397

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1bueh17UID: 2681271

第一次把Argu和issue连在一起写。。。。
虽然有些为难。。。但是。真的只有10天了。。。。而且请你改作文比我那些朋友对我的收获都大。。。。
所以。。。
拜谢！拜谢！拜谢！拜谢！

sky3721UID: 2566862

楼主你好，可以帮我修改一下第一篇习作吗？
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1136468-1-1.html
太谢谢你了，这年头寄托上热心的人不多了……
顺祝楼主托福考好！

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yaoxi28UID: 2864695

先谢谢楼主啦~~~
题目：ISSUE138 - "Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress."

The speaker asserts that the only way to make discovery or progress is of through mistakes. The statement may have merits to some extent, primarily because it points out the importance of mistakes for discovery or progress. Yet, no invariable connection exists between mistakes and success. As a result, erring is important, but not necessary for discovery or progress.

To begin with, no one can deny the fact that mistakes play a great role in one's success, no matter for an individual or for a country. In the respect of individual, one’s whole life is a process to make mistakes and draw lessons from them, which is very meaningful. To infants, a mistake is to fall when they learn how to walk; to children, a mistake is to fall off their bicycles; to teenagers, a mistake is a bold X on their paper; to adults, a mistake is to be fired or a bad investment. Only though countless mistakes can one find his or her own faults and thus, make oneself a better person by removing them. Take Steve Jobs, who was fired by his own company--Apple Computer a decade after he founded it for example, but he didn't give up. Moreover, he learned from his mistakes and started over, which make him a CEO of Apple Computer again several years later. Thus, the person who has the courage to face his or her mistakes and work hard to correct them often score more and greater achievements. In respect of country, none of them is able to do everything appropriately over the long history. What really matters is to take effective measures to correct the mistakes which hamper the development of the country. For example, a few decades ago some people suggested that capitalism was appropriate for China as well as for the western countries, but we paid a heavy price when we tried to adjust us to capitalism. Thanks to Mao Zedong, who learned from the mistakes we have made and put forward: "Only socialism can save China", our country has been developing so prosperously and strongly. In sum, mistakes do have great importance in most circumstances both to individual and country.

Beyond this concession, however, I tend to disagree with the statement because it seems claim that mistakes and progress are invariably linked and inseparable. Consider, if one makes a mistake, will he or she make progress definitely? Do more mistakes represent more progress? I guess the answer is no. Firstly, one can never make progress if he rejects to learn from his mistakes and correct them. Secondly, many people even have no idea about the mistake they have made, let alone correcting it. For instance, with the enhancing of the living standards and quality, many parents, especially Chinese ones, cosset their children as much as possible by giving them whatever they want and being in favor of them however wrong they do without a tiny knowledge that what they are doing is deleterious for their children. As the case illustrate, mistakes don't contribute to progress in all conditions.

Finally, and perhaps most importantly, it is not the mistake itself, but the attitude people treat it that help us make discovery and progress. When we make a mistake, we must have a positive attitude towards it and analysis the reason behind it without doubting ourselves. Furthermore, we should have the courage to overcome them without dejection. Only by the above can we learn from mistakes.
In the finale analysis, it is our attitude and courage when we facing the mistakes that really matter. We can succeed without making a mistake as long as we have the attitude and courage.

shengyong1990UID: 2810927

131# ppjoyce
按照楼主的方法改了一天 很有效果啊，多谢楼主了啊

宝宝树UID: 2759941

新写的一篇，真的辛苦你了，谢谢了，过几天就要考了，时间实在是很紧张，这两天如果不是很打扰的话，应该会不时的发一篇。求指正咯！
ISSUE 138
"Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress."
失败是成功之母

There is no denying the fact that there can be discovery or progress through mistakes, insofar as it describes at least an element of the positive aspect of mistake, but what is a matter of the debate is that whether we should ascribe the success only to mistakes. Upon further reflection it becomes apparent that we should not. In other words, I do agree the ostensible notion that mistakes can make positive push to be success. Yet, strictly followed, I believe the conclusion the speaker deems also deserves careful consideration.

Admittedly, the speaker’s claim, at first glance, seems to be somewhat appealing, for it is an approaching to success as offering us a wholly new perspective to observing, and also finds ample empirical supports. It accords with the history of the development of humankind, on societal level, which is filled with human making mistakes , and such trial-and-error, such as the bomb experiments Nobel have made, the bulb Edison have created and so on, provides the very foundation for discovery and true progress, in all realms of human endeavors. From personal level, our learning how to walk as infants, by falling down again and again, also lends credence to lots of help to success that mistakes offer.

However, considering the only way to success is to make mistakes is also an exclusive one would pose certain problems, which might outweigh the benefits, noted above.

Aside from the provisos mentioned above, we should reevaluate or to clarify what does mistake have to do with success? In this very notion lies my first contention with the speaker, who obstinately presumes with confidence that making mistake is the only way to make progress. Generally speaking, then, undue attention to the benefits from mistakes tends to lead us to fail to take into account the fact that there is no necessary connection between mistake and success. One needs look no further than the grudges, resentments, frustrations, as well as the damaging to self-confidence and assertiveness caused by making mistakes, which serves to underscore the point that mistakes cannot lead you immediate to success everytime.

An even more telling example opposing the speaker’s claim is the nuclear accident. We find ourselves on a slippery slope toward not been informed of the accident happened in the nuclear test center, which would apparently stimulate broad (pandemic) panic in the whole world. Reflecting on malpractice in hospital makes clear that mistake can cause great loss. Is making mistakes always the good one? Emphatically, no. Implicit implication behind the statement is the rationale that how you face the mistakes.

Considerable though the merit that mistakes do useful to achievements, people should never ignore the key point is not the mistake itself to decide whether to success or to fail, but the attitude facing the mistake and the courage of correcting it. When facing directly to mistakes,  we should not be arrogant and stubborn, by the same token, we should not be down-hearted and regretful, which on the contrary we should pursuing what accounts for it in combination of calmness and humility, simultaneously, we should be positive to find other ways to try.

With respect to all the problems discussed above, I agree that the speaker’s claim that making mistake is the only way to discovery and progress begs the question, notwithstanding the fact that mistake is one of the ways to success. In the final analysis, I would be willing to say that having the pursuit of progress and practical work seriously and be brave  to conquer the difficulties, success will await without mistakes.

怒放的生命UID: 2754391

楼主能不能帮我再看看呢 上次经过你的一番指点痛定思痛，理了下我的思路
这回你应该不会看不下去了 辛苦你了~~~！
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ppjoyceUID: 2623631

134# 溪汐河

你是怎么理解的？

请你具体说说

BTW
这篇文章如果你仅仅是socialize不能理解

就把自己的重点放在后面 have not yet。。。

对socialize只是套用，变着法的套用就好了

PS 去查下wikipedia~~Google下

ppjoyceUID: 2623631

144# 大白鲨

2010 08 10

第2篇

稍后上传附件

ppjoyceUID: 2623631

146# 怒放的生命

OK 稍等：）

待会上传附件

ppjoyceUID: 2623631

128# 宝宝树

不好意思 终于回复你了