【回报GTER】joyce的作文修改铺【13号打烊】

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171# whiteout

终于改好了：）

晚了点

见附件

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186# nieyong

改好了：）

写的很好

只是有点点小问题

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187# sky3721

很高兴看到那个文章对你有帮助

呵呵 目的达到啦：）

你发来的附件我没时间看了，这两天都在准备行李，买必要的东西，

多看看那篇文章，自己多想想，非常相信你的能力的：）

我也不过是个“过来人”而已

你发来的那3篇让我帮忙看的，我会尽快发给你我的想法的：）

当然提纲有空我也会看的

一切加油：）

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188# czj521

改好了，对I的感觉越来越好了

我记得我改过有一篇TS 写的非常好

见130楼的回复~~

你看看他的

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189# ichbinlzt

结尾有点草率了

其他的看起来没有什么特别大的问题

你说的抛弃了以前的习惯练了一篇，我没太理解是什么意思？

文章中的“模式”还是比较清楚的

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195# 溪汐河

本来我都复制到Word里面了准备改了

后来好好看了看 发现几乎没什么问题

很好的主题，Great Topic Sentence

我觉得写的已经很好了

不如你发个讨论帖，让的GTER们都来看看 提提意见：）

写的不错 Good job

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199# ppjoyce
谢谢，祝你一切顺利！

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189# ichbinlzt  

谢谢LZ帮我看argument~~！！

那个。。。

结尾有点草率了

其他的看起来没有什么特别大的问题

你说的抛弃了以前的习惯练了一篇，我没太理解是什么意思？

文章中的“模式”还是比较清楚的
ppjoyce 发表于 2010-8-13 09:15

(⊙o⊙)… 恩 那个结尾确实有点草率 因为当时想不好怎么写结尾于是乎就删掉了

现在觉得是不是应该说一下应该如何改进argument+可能带来的坏处？

还有就是ETS范文里面似乎从来没有对结尾作评价

结尾作为critique确实没有在反驳别人，是不是就完全不count？

以前的习惯是按照模板写， 还有restate之类的东西

看到ETS范文里面对于他因的叙述都会比较饱满，多样化，尤其是rollerskater的那篇

但是有些参考材料（我看的argument写作高分速成 新东方的）似乎拼命分析逻辑。。。

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哈哈 真的啊？ 太高兴了 谢谢Joyce 感谢你给了我这么多鼓励与支持！

祝Joyce永远幸福！

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前辈打烊了啊~我还是贴在上吧:loveliness:祝前辈考试顺利啦~！:victory:
"Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."
The speaker contents that students should bring a skeptical attitude in study, and should question what they are taught actively. Aside from undue skepticism, I strong agree with the speaker's broad assertion. If we always accepted the faiths passively in our study, our society would lose the power of progress.

The realm of physical sciences perhaps skepticism is the most important character for the scientists. It is well known that nothing in science is absolutely certain, a conclusion of today are always removed and replaced by a new concept of tomorrow. As a matter of fact, it is the scientists’ constantly doubt to those fixed notions that push the history of physics forward. For example, Copernicus, the science giant of the Renaissance, advanced the theory that the earth and other planets revolve around the sun, disrupting the Ptolemaic system of astronomy. In fact, the Heliocentric theory is an achievement of doubting to the authority. In other words, it is the skepticism that sets the natural science free from the theology.

Even in the traditional Chinese medicine, the experience are highly valued realm, also needs the spirit of suspicion. If doctors were all having blind faith in the traditional prescription, the Chinese medicine would not have the brilliant achievements of today. For instance, Li Shizhen, one of the greatest doctors of traditional Chinese medicine in the Chinese history, found that there were too many mistakes about the knowledge of the classic traditional medicine books and medicine concepts. Then, he determined to revise and prefect them. Through 29 years research, he finished the great medicine book - Compendium of materia medica.

Admittedly, extreme skepticism can cause inhibit learning. We can not just doubt for the purpose of doubting, this kind of skepticism only has destructiveness but without constructive criticism, proposals and remarks. The doubt must found on knowing the foundation knowledge of certain subject. A student of humanity criticizes a famous astronomer is unwarrantable. In other words, learners must have a deep understanding of the subject first. Only in this way can avoid that learners fall into the extreme skepticism's trap and make our learning more efficiency.

To sum up, except for the extreme skepticism, I concede that the speaker’s assertion is fundamentally correct. There are no perfect things in the world, the same as our cognitions. I believe our concepts and knowledge need to perfect and revise constantly, no matter which realm they are in. Thus, our society will not lose the motive force to go forward.