【回报GTER】joyce的作文修改铺【13号打烊】

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132# ppjoyce
楼主啊，别忘了还有我的哦，等候啊

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135# amendaliu

行 我看看 你说你是理解题意的问题

那我主要看这个方面了

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151# 宝宝树

呵呵 看你上一楼
我已经回复啦：）

今天第一个改的就是你的

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ISsue208    to   amendaliu

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https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1136577-1-1.html
多谢楼主了，Issue31

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143# 大白鲨

以后注意审题

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156# ppjoyce
楼主我是138楼，期待你的修改啊，谢谢。
什么时候轮到我啊……

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145# 宝宝树

不客气，文笔不错：）

+U+U

今天改了2个多小时了 我得休息下~~下午有空再说了

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157# sky3721

我今天刚改到135楼，作文有点多，我已经改了2个多小时了，我现在想去休息下


你看这样行么

发你一个文档，你研究研究

我觉得这篇文档对我很有启发， 你看看

自己在研究研究，咱们讨论问题~~

至于文章，因为是第一篇，挺重要的，等讨论完，

你再改改 再给我改行么？

你看？

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159# ppjoyce
好的，谢谢楼主！你真热心啊。

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对于how children are socialized 的理解
XDF翻译为“孩子社会化程度决定了社会的命运”，一直觉得这个解释有问题，
查韦氏“to socialize”意思是“to fit  or train for a social environment ”
我理解为“训练以使孩子能够适应、融入社会，被社会所接受.

我想的是，要适应社会,能在社会生存，那有2种方式，一是用一些黑暗的手段熏陶孩子，二是学习传统的优良品质，靠自己的真材实料来融入社会。我就在文中重新定义socialized, 真正的“socialized”应该是，拥有能适应社会好的一面，并能改革黑暗的一面的能力。

但有些怪才，他们的思想，观念，可能不能被世人接受，他们自闭,不擅于与人沟通,难以融入社会，但也对社会做出了巨大的贡献。这个例子用来证明,socialized不一定会影响孩子对于社会建设的贡献大小.不一定要培养well socialized 孩子,我们的目标是培养出能将社会建设的更好的孩子.

下面我就想写,目前的教育确实存在问题,但学校、家长都在做着努力，并且孩子们自身也在弥补不足。

这就是我对整个题目的构思，但是总感觉这个思路不是太清晰，并且别人理解起来会有困难。

Joyce有没有130比较好的范文发我一篇看看，我在网上找了几篇，但是我也不知道它们对socialized的理解
有没有偏差。

你说的可以尝试把重点放在后半句，这个我再想想怎么写，我感觉也是一个很不错的方法！

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158# ppjoyce 太激动了，感谢感谢啊，好的，晚上我应该还会发一篇，实在是没办法跟你客气啦。。。

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多想想题目

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多想想题目

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再次麻烦，请帮忙修改！谢谢！
TOPIC: ISSUE144 - "It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."

*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.


There seems to be confusion about whether it is the artist or the critic provides something of permanent value to the society. Some maintain that it the artist, rather than the critic create the priceless treasure of the society.Personally, the issue has been over simplified. The critics also play a crucial role in attaching value to art works.

Admittedly, it is the artists create the masterpieces of great value, not only material but also spiritual. Annually at large auctions, many art collectors are willing to pay thousands of millions of dollars to buy a piece of art of a prestigious painter for different reasons. Some regard the collection as a symbol of their wealth and status, while others are impressed with fabulous imagination, as well as the spirit, like peace, heroism, and belief, presented by art. People around the world are immersed in the Moonlight Sonata of Beethoven, inspired by the Liberty Leading the People of Delacroix, and touched by the Schindler's List of Spielberg the value of which will endure in the future.

The critics, however, also add value to works by assessing the quality of the art works, as well as by enriching the public’s interpretation of the works. The constructive comments drawn by some influential critics exert a far-reaching impact on the value of the works. Many masterpieces, like Van Gogh's paintings and Thoreau’s “Walden”, failed to cater the taste of the critics in their time. As a result, Van Gogh merely managed to sell one piece of his painting, and Thoreau had seven tenth of his published books in his cottage. Not until the later critics recognized the profound meanings of their works did they become internationally famous. Moreover, the critics make the meaning of the art work easier to be comprehended by the layman. Without the professional criticism, we can hardly understand what the surrealist painter, Salvador Dali, expresses in the painting, “the Persistence of Memory” It is not uncommon that people refer to the criticism in the newspapers, art bulletins and books to learn the background and true meaning of these works precisely. Although subjective judgments cannot be fully avoided, most critics with a sharp eye for art and a good command of art theories and history make the impartial comments on the works.

Additionally, the critics largely influence the improvement of the artists, and even promote the advancement of the art area. Some artists realize their deficiency through the unbiased comments on their works and therefore they can correct them. Besides, some critics boosted the development of the art world. For example, internationally famous French critic Pierre Restany, coined the term "New Realism" and led a group of artists to launch the evolution of the new aspect of art. The critics, through their own ways, raise the value of the works created by the artists. Only with the stimuli of the praise and criticism of the critics can the artists and the whole art world keep making progress.

Overall, What the critics to the artists is the gardeners to the trees. Without each other, neither of them will be able to create any value to the society. Both the artist and the critic are integral parts of the art world, bringing new valuable things, no matter material or spiritual, to the society.