ARGUMENT 7 第一次写 求狠拍

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题目：ARGUMENT7－The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Clearview newspaper.
“In the next mayoral election, residents of Clearview should vote for Ann Green, who is a member of the Good Earth Coalition, rather than for Frank Braun, a member of the Clearview town council, because the current members are not protecting our environment. For example, during the past year the number of factories in Clearview has doubled, air pollution levels have increased, and the local hospital has treated 25 percent more patients with respiratory illnesses. If we elect Ann Green, the environmental problems in Clearview will certainly be solved."

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This argument concludes that the residents of Claearview should vote for Ann Green rather than Frank Braun in the next mayoral election. To justify this conclusion, the argument points out during the past year the number of factories in Clearview has doubled and air pollution levels have increased. In addition, the arguer also points out that the patients with respiratory illnesses of local hospital has risen 25 percent. The argument relies on several doubtful assumptions and is therefor unconvincing.

First, the author assumes that the increasing of air pollution levels and the 25 percent more patients with respiratory illnesses in hospital during the past year was indeed caused by the double number of factories in Cleaview. Although this is entirely possible, the arguer fails to provide any evidence. It’s very likely that the air pollutions witch cause more people have respiratory illnesses should be accused of the factories around Cleaview in other states. It’s also possible that some companies cut a large amount of trees in country last year which take an very important effect on the air pollutions prevention.

Second, even if the double number of factories caused the air pollution. There is no evidence to prove Frank Braun as well as the Clearview town council should take the responsibility. It’s entirely possible that the member of the Clearview town council have done much more work on the pollution in Clearview than Good Earth Coalition which focus on various pollutions in the whole earth. Perhaps Frank Braun with other members of the Clearview town council have made some effective plan to treat the air pollutions in this year which will improve the air condition thoroughly. In short, lacking evidence about the atitude for the air pollutions of the two person, the author cannot persuade me to vote any one of them.

What further weakens the argument is the arguer commit a fallacy of false dilemma. Even if the assumptions above turns out to be true, the arguer just simply assumes that the environmental problems in Clearview will certainly be solved if Ann Green is the mayor was totally doubtful. On one hand, the Good Earth Coalition may be a corporation concentrate on the environment of the whole planet, rather than a city or a country. On the other hand, as a member of the Good Earth Coalition, Ann Green may have to treat some problem about the badly earth pollution, and then have less time to solve the tiny air pollution just in Clearview. Furthermore, a mayor isn’t a person just treat environment problems. Residents should elect one to solve all the trouble in Clearview and make life here better.

In sum, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen it the author must show more about the two candidates and the two corporations.

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结尾有些仓促，不知道该怎么写，同时打算通过2天内集中练习，提炼出一个自己的模板，求大家指点！谢谢！