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坏绿的眼睛UID: 3138294

2月3日  综合 TPO18
According to the reading passage, three ways to address the decline of Torreya.But the lecturer casts doubt on the reading by arguing that if it does work.

Firstly, in the listening, the professor advocates the fact that this solution will not having surfaced unlikely. Because the specific microclimate is different from surrounding, effecting by many factors as the global climate. But the author maintains that reestablish Torreya in the same location in which it thrived for thousands of years and mentions scientists have been working to plant Torreya seeds in the coolest. Thus, the professor challenges the author’s point.
     
Secondly, the lecturer holds the opinion that moving to another place will damage the new systems of there. According to him, take the black locos trees' experience to an example, their protection moving prompted many native plants' decline.  The reading passage contends that to move Torreya to an entirely different location. Hence, this is the second part the lecturer denies.

Lastly, the professor asserts that the population of Torreya trees that can be kept in the centres will probably not be able to resist diseases. Also, research centers would simply not have enough capacity to keep a large an diverse population of it.It refutes the point in the reading that preserve Torreya in research centers.

In conclusion, the lecture runs counter to the reading passage from the three aspects presented above.

坏绿的眼睛UID: 3138294

也行哈 我那个也是学来的固定搭配  就怕考官眼睛一滑以为我是too 少打一个o     = =
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坏绿的眼睛UID: 3138294

2月3日 110815NA One of your classmates needs help with some schoolwork. Which solution would you recommend your classmate should do: to ask you for help or to find a professional tutor for help. Include reasons and details to in your response.

Before rendering my stand, I think it is essential to take an glance at the argument on both sides. Asking a ordinary classmate, as me, for help seems to be convenient and more easier. On the other hand, it is efficient way of finding a tutor for professional help. In my point of view, I do recommend my classmate looking for help from our professional tutor. The elaborate explanation will be presented below.

First of all, I believe that a professional tutor could come up with the more professional suggestions about his/her major. Actually, according to a general investigation conducted by a recent research team led by Professor King of Social Department of Hong Kong discovers that 80.2 percent of surveyed students of university approve that students should asking help from their tutor when facing annoyings in schoolwork.

Also, as the mostly normal students, I am not sure about whether they want to give a hand to their classmate or not, when the one facing a difficult and annoying problem. Take my experience to an example. I meet an academic problem when working for my project of marine protecting law. Then, I sent an E-mail to my classmate who has talents on our major. At first, he was happy to help me, and discuss with me about aporia. But, they could not be solved even if our discussion had taking several daytime. Finally, he presented he have to deal with his own project, and suggested me looking for help from my professional tutor. Based On This Fact, I do want recommend my classmate who is in deep waters asking help from tutor.

Admittedly, sometimes it is difficult that making tutor to solved all the questions, because a limited number of tutors cannot ensure everyone's needs. But nobody can deny the fact that a student will get suggestion and solution of aporia exactly, and it is more important than convenience at academic problem of any majors.

From what has been discussed above, I do think that it is right asking help from tutor for these guys who have trouble finishing their schoolwork. If there is anyone out there who still doubts if a classmate is willing to help for these difficult issue, who still wonders if the help from tutor is professional, this essay is my answer.

idealibtUID: 2667256

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alexfanfanUID: 3133140

真不好意思！这么晚才给你改！

loveinwcUID: 3241878

2月3日 110815NA One of your classmates needs help with some schoolwork. Which solution would you recommend your classmate should do: to ask you for help or to find a professional tutor for help. Include reasons and details to in your response.

Before rendering my stand, I think it is essential to take an glance at the argument on both sides. (太牛逼了这句话。。) On one hand, asking an ordinary classmate, as me, for help seems to be convenient and much easier. On the other hand, it is an efficient way of finding a tutor for professional help. In my point of view, I do recommend my classmate looking for help from our professional tutor. The elaborate explanation will be presented below.（继续膜拜……）

First of all, I believe that a professional tutor could come up with the more professional suggestions about his/her major. Actually, according to a general investigation conducted by a recent research team led by Professor King of Social Department of Hong Kong discovers that 80.2 percent of surveyed students of university approve that students should asking help from their tutor when facing annoyances in schoolwork.- A3 W: j  l  W; r7 P

Also, as one of the mostly normal students, I am not sure about whether they want to give a hand to their classmate or not (whether or not的意思貌似“不管是否”哦……是不是得把or not 去掉？), when the one facing a difficult and annoying problem. Take my experience to an example. I meet an academic problem when working for my project of marine protecting law. So I sent an E-mail to my classmate who has talents on our major. At first, he was happy to help me, and discussed with me about the aporia. But then, the problem could not be solved even if our discussion had been taking several daytime （查不到several daytime 汗，改成days如何？). Finally, he presented that he has to deal with his own project, and suggested me looking for help from my professional tutor. Based On This Fact, I do want recommend my classmate who is in deep waters (又学到一个用法了哈哈) asking help from the tutor.) |' ?3 ^9 W& a  v, C

Admittedly, sometimes it is difficult that making the tutor to solved all the questions, because a limited number of tutors cannot ensure (meet怎样？) everyone's needs. But nobody can deny the fact that a student will get suggestion and solution of aporia exactly, and it is more important than convenience at academic problem of any majors.（困惑了几分钟…有点没看懂……这样改如何？No one can deny that the accuracy and explicity weighs more than convenience in the suggestions or solutions given to an academic aporia.）

jFrom what has been discussed above, I do think that it is right asking help from tutor for these guys who have trouble finishing their schoolwork. If there is anyone out there who still doubts if a classmate is willing to help for (with怎样？) these difficult issue, who still wonders if the help from the tutor is professional, this essay is my answer.  




坏绿君您写的太好了…………跟您比起来，我简直就是一团渣渣！！！！鸡蛋里挑骨头才挑出了好些…………您千万别在意………………

坏绿的眼睛UID: 3138294

你太可爱了LOVE君 = =
其实我也是渣渣一枚   那些乃膜拜的句子 都是我看别人作文偷来的 嗷嗷
谢谢修改~！！其实我觉得如果你想快速提高 可以多看看 蜗牛同志 还有ideal同志 鸟儿同志的文文  她们比我强多了~~~~~可以学到很多
21# loveinwc

坏绿的眼睛UID: 3138294

2月4日 100619NA When people need to discuss upseting or controversial problems with others, some people prefer to use e-mail or text messaging, other like to use telephone or voice messaging. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your answer.

There is no reason to deny the fact that people need to having a discussion with their close friends, facing upsetting or controversial problems. Recently, people raised a hot discussion about how to choose the way of chat while facing this condition. Text messaging or voice messaging, this is a question. In my point of view, I prefer to tell story by text messaging, because this way is more exactly and organized. I will give the reasons below.

First and foremost, I believe the way of text messaging or e-mail is easy to organized words, and I do think everyone willing to learn exactly description of a problem while having discussion about it. According to a general investigation conducted by a recent research team led by Professor King of Social Department of Hong Kong, discovers that 44.8 percent of the Chinese, 32.0 percent of the Thai, and an overwhelming 61.7 percent of the Japanese hold this point that the best way to chat with others is e-mail and text-massaging or letter, because they can present the more elaborate and organized explanation by it. So I tend to prefer to them, too.

Secondly, you can chat with a friend by e-mill, even if he is far away from your country. Take my experience to an example, l meet a academic aporia about my project while having a overseas investigation of the marine protection law.  Then I wanna contect with my partner who is in another continent, at that time. But the fact is my phone's telecom operators do not support the international call. So I choose to writing e-mail to present condition, several days later, I got the solution of this case.

Finally, due to the development of mobile technology in society, the serving of e-mail or text-messaging has been continent as voice messaging. Beside this, in this day and age, the serving of text-messaging always be free, while having conversation by mobile phone takes too much fees. Perhaps there is no means will be better than e-mail or text-messaging for having discussion with others.

Basing on the reasons above, I argue that it is better to to use e-mail or text messaging having discussion.

坏绿的眼睛UID: 3138294

2月4日 综合
According to the reading passage, the new tactic of advertisement called "buzzing" is harmful for  consumers and society basing on three reasons. But the lecturer casts doubt on the reading.

Firstly, in the listening, Bill advocates the fact that many buzzers used a conduct and really thought it is good, so the company hired them to tell the truth. But the author buzzers always mislead consumers, because they are being paid.

Secondly, the lecturer holds the opinion that consumers will ask many questions about this conduct. Then, consumers will not buy it, if they cannot give a satisfied answer. On the other hand,  the reading passage contends that consumers should believe everyone is buzzer, this is the second part the lecturer denies.

Lastly, compared the point of reading, the speakers asserts that buzzing will not reduce trustful society. If someone misleaded by buzzers trys a terrible conduct, he/she will spread this experience to more people.

In conclusion, the lecture runs counter to the reading passage from the three aspects presented above.

lovely_hippo123UID: 3209964

2月4日 100619NA
When people need to discuss upseting or controversial problems with others, some people prefer to use e-mail or text messaging, other like to use telephone or voice messaging. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your answer.# Z, X# |" Z" z
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There is no reason to deny the fact-undeniable that people need to having-have a discussion with their close friends,-when facing upsetting or controversial problems. Recently, people raised a hot discussion about how? 不是how吧，应该是不知道选择哪种方式to choose the way of chat while facing this condition. Text messaging or voice messaging, this is a question. In my point of view, I prefer to tell story by text messaging-我赞成。。。, because this way is more exactly and organized. I will give the reasons below.% i' e; U. t3 U
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First and foremost, I believe the way of text messaging or e-mail is easy to organized words, and I do think everyone willing to learn ？用还是学啊exactly description of a problem while having discussion about it. According to a general investigation conducted by a recent research team led by Professor King of Social Department of Hong Kong, discovers that 44.8 percent of the Chinese, 32.0 percent of the Thai, and an overwhelming 61.7 percent of the Japanese hold this point that the best way to chat with others is e-mail and text-massaging or letter—有意思，不过你在用这个的时候，感觉铺垫要多一下 更有说服力。。呵呵, because they can present the more elaborate and organized explanation by it. So I tend to prefer to them, too.


Secondly-没有firstly还是不要secondly 吧，你用furthermore, you can chat with a friend by e-mill, even if he is far away from your country—这个例证好啊。。. Take my experience to an example, l meet a-an academic aporia about my project while having a overseas investigation of the marine protection law.  Then I wanna contect with my partner who is in another continent, at that time. But the fact is my phone's telecom operators do not support the international call. So I choose to writing e-mail to present condition, several days later, I got the solution of this case. ( i2 J# P! d" B# E
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Finally, due to the development of mobile technology in society, the serving of e-mail or text-messaging has been continent as voice messaging. Beside this, in this day and age, the serving of text-messaging always be free, while having conversation by mobile phone takes too much fees-这个观点好啊哈哈. Perhaps there is no means will be better than e-mail or text-messaging for having discussion with others.
Basing on the reasons above, I argue that it is better to to use e-mail or text messaging having discussion.

我觉的楼主的观点都狠好，这一篇我写的很烂，想不出观点来，楼主的这些观点让我受益匪浅啊。。。句子在提炼一下，好文章啊。佩服啊。。一起加油！
红色-correction
紫色-excellent

sodapengUID: 3242849

坏绿眼睛
2月4日 100619NA When people need to discuss upseting or controversial problems with others, some people prefer to use e-mail or text messaging, other like to use telephone or voice messaging. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your answer.$ _6 \6 W  i4 V/ {; o

There is no reason to deny the fact that people need to having (have) a discussion with their close friends, facing upsetting or controversial problems. Recently, people raised a hot discussion about how to choose the way of chat (chatting) while facing this condition. Text messaging or voice messaging, this is a question. In my point of view, I prefer to tell story by text messaging, because this way is more exactly and organized (well-organized).I will give the reasons below.

First and foremost, I believe the way of text (texting) messaging or e-mail is easy to organized (organize) words, and I do think everyone willing to learn exactly description of a problem while having discussion about it. According to a general investigation conducted by a recent research team led by Professor King of Social Department of Hong Kong, discovers (用shows比较妥当吧) that 44.8 percent of the Chinese, 32.0 percent of the Thai, and an overwhelming 61.7 percent of the Japanese hold this point that the best way to chat with others is e-mail and text-massaging or letter, because they can present the more elaborate and organized explanation by it. So I tend to prefer to them(前面都是it 这里怎么是them), too., k, x5 ~2 w4 _7 @
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Secondly, you can chat with a friend by e-mill, even if he is far away from your country (your  country 改为you 比较好吧，前面是人后面对应人会比较好). Take (taking) my experience to an example, l meet a (an) academic aporia about my project while having a (an) overseas investigation of the marine protection law.  Then I wanna contect with my partner who is in another continent, at that time. But the fact is my phone's telecom operators do not support the international call. So I choose to writing e-mail (write an e-mail) to present condition, (write to condition? 什么意思？) several days later, I got the solution of this case.(这段既然讲的过去的经历，用全部过去式会比较好吧) $ B( g8 X- y1 t7 u
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Finally, due to the development of mobile technology in society, the serving of e-mail or text-messaging has been continent as voice messaging. Beside this, in this day and age, the serving of text-messaging always be free, while having conversation by mobile phone takes too much fees. Perhaps there is no means will be better than e-mail or text-messaging for having discussion with others.
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Basing on the reasons above, I argue that it is better to to (删去一个to) use e-mail or text messaging having discussion.
总体来说，楼主文章论点很清晰，论证也蛮充分。列举数字和经历我还没用过，向你学习下~
但是有些小的语法错误，楼主以后多注意就好啦~

idealibtUID: 2667256

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2月4日 综合
According to the reading passage, the new tactic of advertisement called "buzzing" is harmful for  consumers and society basing on three reasons. But the lecturer casts doubt on the reading.

Firstly, in the listening, Bill advocates the fact that many buzzers used a conduct and really thought it is good, so the company hired them to tell the truth. But the author buzzers always mislead consumers, because they are being paid.

Secondly, the lecturer holds the opinion that consumers will ask many questions about this conduct. Then, consumers will not buy it, if they cannot give a satisfied answer. On the other hand, the reading passage contends that consumers should believe everyone is buzzer, this(which) is the second part the lecturer denies.

Lastly, compared (comparing with)the point of reading, the speakers asserts that buzzing will not reduce trustful society(reduce social trust 或者根据原文，destroy civilization？). If someone misleaded by buzzers tries a terrible conduct, he/she will spread this experience to more people.8 i2 $ m* W

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In conclusion, the lecture runs counter（简略又很棒的用法，学到了！） to the reading passage from the three aspects presented above.

坏绿君，您的综合好简略哦，真是干净又利落，我实在改不出什么了喵，对不起您呐泪奔………………

ps 第一段不是要小介绍下buzzing核心内容撒？

坏绿的眼睛UID: 3138294

受教了哇~~
其实你可以直接批评我说字数写少了。。我懂的 = =
这篇才一百七十个字好像
我突然想起你的综合我好像还没改呢 啊哈哈哈啊哈哈哈 额  我会尽快改好的
28# loveinwc

iBT20120304UID: 3228839

您好。我是个新手，主要是来学习的。
我尝试着给出一些建议，希望能对您有用。

Nobody can deny the fact （后面紧接的这句话，并非一个fact，而是一个opinion。这里似乎不够严谨哦） that the key issue in a team is sense of community team spirit. My point of view （一般情况下，说出 my point of view，别人就期待下面马上能够简明扼要地列出您的观点。然而，接下来的这个长句子似乎有些冗长哦）, someone who always cannot accept criticism have a lot negative impact for cooperation of a team, the mates （mate这个词似乎更多地用于配偶，这里似乎collaborator更合适一点？） and their project so that the one will be not succeed in a team. Due to the position, I tend to agree with the statement. The elaborate explanation will be presented bellow.- N# c0 Q' e. a" ?$ T6 V()() （段末的这句话，似乎有些多余）











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First and foremost, people who reject comments （not accept并不意味着reject，这里有些不准确；而且，英文里似乎也没有reject comment这个说法哦） again and again will disrupt sense of community team spirit which included pardon, common progress and trust, because selfish departmentalism is caused, stand high above the masses, do not wish thorough a team. According to report 20.8 percent of the Japanese employees, 17.0 percent of the American employees, and 30.0 percent of the Thai employees hold this point that a die-hard guy is not beneficial absolutely for group spirit because he/she never acquire criticism or suggestion from others.

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Also, other mates of a team hate a person who is so stubborn that cannot accept criticism. Take my experience as an example, one years ago, I had recruited a die-hard guy who has talents in jurisprudence into my team for major project of Marine protection law. Then（这个连词在这儿，用得似乎不准确）, he always against criticism and suggestion from others, and lay the blame upon members. Thus, I have to kick out him since everyone deemed working in this team which including him is restless. 1 d% h- a) m' `5 _% F5 C
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Finally, the terrible character of a member will make negative influence for the whole project of a team. In this day and age, facing mistakes and disadvantages, the most imminent response is recharge yourself（这儿怎么突然变成了第二称谓呢？似乎有点说教的味道了哦）. A team whose member can tolerating criticism, and advice each other is able to effectively handle the responsibilities of the position.

From what has been discussed above, because people who cannot accept criticism has so much disadvantages, so I do agree with the statement that they will not successed in a team.




楼主的英文功底还是不错的，语法很好，而且具备较好的逻辑思维和总结能力。


我个人认为，楼主如果希望进一步提高写作能力，可能需要在词句方面下点儿功夫。多加积累，让词汇更加简洁准确，让句子更加流畅紧凑。


班门弄斧，见笑了。


祝您取得优秀的成绩。