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发表于 2012-4-9 00:10:30 |只看该作者
TPO15为了成为财政负责的成人,应当不应当从孩子教起?

In my point of view, maybe there is no issue for children as important as learning to manage their own money. Due to a general investigation conducted by a recent research team led by Professor King of Social Department of Hong Kong, discovers that 44.8 percent of the Chinese, 32.0 percent of the Thai, and an overwhelming 61.7 percent of the Japanese hold this point that it is necessary to motivate children how to manage money matters when they are young, because people cannot find other ways rather effective, resulty , and suitable for this modern society.

First, no one can doubts this idea because motiving any nice manners would be better done in early ages because it is more palatable for  children themselves. Take my experience to an example, it happened when I was a little girl, I'd like pick up my
Silverware and strike my bowl making sounds like ' ding' at the dinner table. My mother once tends to change the bad habit, because everyone realized it would be impolite on the table although there is just family members at dinner table. But my old grandpa thought this actually is cute and grand to see me making sounds while whole family having dinner around the kitchen table. Thus, my parents canceled do something for correcting my action. Finally, ten years ago, I cannot stop to want to make chopsticks or other silverware strikes my bowl-----although my boyfriend tried several hundred times to change my table manner. That means, maybe this bad manner could not be corrected in my lifetime. So I do agree with the statement that let children learn how to spend their money at young, no matter for becoming
financially responsible adults or other aims. It's really right to motive good manner.

Also, for parents, it is easier to surface that teaching something to their children, because they actually need knowledge for many aspects, for becoming a nice adults , so absorbing and following knowledge and actions from these people is usual . According to a report by Mirror Newspapers, it would be hard making a teenage follow something touch by his or her teacher and parents, because the psychology thing
working during the same time. Another case from my cousin sister, when choosing major after entering university, her parent ordered her have to choose Business law because her father operate one law firm and want she receive after graduation, but in fact we everyone known she has talents on music.  After three months inter fight approach within their family , thus my cousin sister left off her parents' house and choose music as her major. Both side was upset and disappoint for each other. So, in my view, it is necessary to make children learn something about financial responsible for avoiding the psychology thing. Hence, the educated plan would be easier to operated.

Final, this point of statement is beneficial for society, no matter the actors is child or adults. That is, when a child were child ,  becoming financially responsible child is beneficial for modern society absolutely. The elaborate explanation will be present bellow. How to spending money as a child is much influenced issue for whole society, because most children receive much money for their families. What will be caused when a large counting money spending on gambling or drug taking in the whole country? And according to Chinese annual report, Chinese children received more than 2.3 billion money as pocket money. Going education of manage money for children is necessary above this huge national data.


Based on the discussion above, I believe that no one could doubts the point from statement.
这是我不愿醒来的梦。

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发表于 2012-4-9 16:28:41 |只看该作者
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发表于 2012-4-10 13:01:30 |只看该作者
TPO14综合  化石买卖给收藏家好不好    计时写作  1230-1255

In the listening, the woman denies the point of passage and advocated three suggestions to confirm that some fossils putted on the market has several advantages.

First, personal fossil collectors always pay millions on finding valuable fossils. This means, professors of high school and the others, especially the public cannot have access to these valuable natural heritages. Hence, the fossil collectors made public watch fossil easier.

Also, speaker pointed putting fossil on the market would not hinder the scientists from them. On contrast, almost every collector has the good habit that inventing professional professor to identify these natural treasures. In fact, they would gain more chance access to the fossils.Hence, the gather that fossil buyers would became interference for scientists.

Finally, damaged accidents happens in both sides, public  pavilion or 'Closet' made by fossil buyers. And the woman mentions, nowadays, due to the condition, fossil buyers always done better on reservation.

In a conclusion, based on the three suggestions, the speaker does disagree with the point and the unsuitable gathers from passage.
这是我不愿醒来的梦。

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本帖最后由 坏绿的眼睛 于 2012-4-11 10:54 编辑

TPO14  独立作文
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than traveling to foreign countries.

Let me take a glance at the condition of native travelling market. Due to one general invesgation conducted by a team lead by Professor King from H.K University, 42.4 of Chinese, 30.1 of Thai, and the overwhelm 6O.4 of American tend to choose traveling abroad within the situation which has no economy affords. And I do agree with the point of the largest number of people, based three advantages of traveling overseas, that is these different at culture, scenery and food would make one journey more comfortable.

First, I really love touch some opera evens have different culture background. Take my experience for an example. Once upon a time, all the members of family travelled to China. We watched the Peking Opera named ‘Guan versus Qing' and I was surprised by the beauty costume and amazing voice from the traditional Chinese Singer. This excellent deal makes me cannot forgot many pieces of this Peking opera, and interested in foreign traditional music. After later, I once traveled many orient countries for finding these beautiful voices for their traditional culture. However, if I stay within my native country, it would be hard for me, I mean,maybe I still have chance to watching a 'cat' conducted by native actor maybe one time a year.

Also, in one journey, tasting food from different continent charm me mostly . Every one cannot deny the fact that many food materials could not reserve. Based this fact, the best way to meeting the need is going abroad when facing make traveling plan. In my point of view, Thai rice soft rather than Chinese rice, Indian black tea smells better rather than English tea. But if I just go around in one my own country, how can I gain these experiences as wealthy.

Final, nowadays plant crush theory has been confirmed, that is more evidence  advocates different continents would not have the same scenery even though two bars of several hundred seems be familiar. What's the shortcut for having the most beautiful scene? For me,  It is traveling abroad!

In a conclusion, If anyone deny my point that people gain most from traveling overseas, this essay is my answer.
这是我不愿醒来的梦。

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Let me take a glance at the condition of native travelling market. Due to one general invesgation conducted by a team lead by Professor King from H.K University, 42.4 of Chinese, 30.1 of Thai, and the overwhelm 6O.4 of American tend to choose traveling abroad within the situation which has no economy affords. And I do agree with the points of the largest number of people, based on three advantages of traveling overseas, that are these differences of culture, scenery and food would make one journey more comfortable.( q$ P8 W0 k9 c; {, r/ f

First, I really love to touch some opera evens which have different culture background. Take my experience for an example. Once upon a time, all the members of my family travelled to China. We watched the Peking Opera named ‘Guan versus Qing' and I was surprised by the beauty of their consume and the amazing voice from the traditional Chinese Singer. This excellent deal makes me cannot forgot many pieces of the opera, and interested in foreign traditional music.(这句感觉很奇怪,不是说traditional Chinese Singer,为什么会提到foreign music) After later(这个不太对吧), I once traveled to many oriental countries to find these beautiful voices of their traditional culture. However, if I stay within my native country, it would be hard for me, even though I still have chance to watching a 'cat' conducted by native actor maybe one time a year.
Also, in one journey, tasting food from different continent charm me mostly . Every one cannot deny the fact that many food materials could not be reserved. Based on this fact, the best way to meeting the need is to go abroad when facing make traveling plan(没看懂你的分句). In my point of view, Thai rice soft rather than Chinese rice, Indian black tea smells better rather than English tea. But if I just go around in one my own country, how can I gain these varieties of these experiences .2 e$ V% _8 ?. W, v

Final, nowadays plant crush theory has been confirmed, that is more evidence advocates different continents would not have the same scenery even though two bars of several hundred seems be familiar. What's the shortcut for having the most beautiful scene? For me, It is traveling abroad!(建议把这两句重新组织下)
In conclusion, If anyone deny my point that people gain most from traveling overseas, this essay is my answer.

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发表于 2012-4-11 10:03:48 |只看该作者
鸣谢这位童鞋的修改意见~~~~~~~~~
~~~~(>_<)~~~~ 还是好多语法错误  多谢指正!
关于为什么说是外国歌手  是这样的
我有时候写作文尤其是独立,会为了方便假设自己是别国家人,尤其在需要描述海外种种的时候,我尝试把自己设定为外国人然后来描写中国的种种
我觉得这样会比较方便  =  =   
再次感谢你的修改~~
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这是我不愿醒来的梦。

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发表于 2012-4-11 12:17:38 |只看该作者
写的不错..加油

4.10 坏绿的眼睛 revised by yyyfor.doc

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发表于 2012-4-11 20:08:30 |只看该作者
看完别人改的。。。再看我改的。。。。我是不是改的多了点。。。。

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发表于 2012-4-11 20:24:39 |只看该作者
67# yyyfor
嘿嘿~!鸣谢你的修改哦~!楼主是中国人~~不过 我有时候写作文尤其是独立,会为了方便假设自己是别国家人,尤其在需要描述海外种种的时候,我尝试把自己设定为外国人然后来描写中国的种种
我觉得这样会比较方便  =  =   
再次感谢你的修改~~
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发表于 2012-4-11 20:35:21 |只看该作者
69# idealibt
木有啦 其实看乃改的作文有一种特殊的爽的感觉。。。
= =   改得多挺好的~~~我在努力提升自己  争取也能给你提更多建议~
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412 独立 13. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.


In the fast-paced society, a huge number of people could pay attention on limited things arrounding them, and the number still increase yearly, so that many substance became less important.
For example, their big extended family and these relationships. Nowadays, so many youngers live on their own and far away from relationships. Hence, I do believe the whole big family is not as important as past and I do not trend to blame them. In my view, it is seeming necessary current.

First, in modern society, migrant performance is common. Every year several millions of graduate students choosing stay  and hunting job within the place which their school located, and several millions of people go abroad for better retirement and work. For these people, they mostly could not come back to their hometown, while their extended family always stay at the same place.In this kind of condition, migrants is busy for fighting and no one of their far relationships could help them or just give any suggestions when them fall into the deep water in others' city as in past.As far as I concerned, it let the lace between these guys and their big family not sturdy.

Also, people have less time to connect with their big family's members. No one could deny the fact that the pace of society is becoming faster and faster. Take my cousin sister to an example, when Kelly studied in campus, we chat with each other more than 5 hours a week. I know everything about her, and so did her. I truly feel her is close and important in my mind. However ,after her graduate ceremony, she go abroad and working there. At first, I try to touch with Kelly several times per week. But she always is busy at writing planning cases or other annoyings. This fact makes me upset. A day after day, I would not try to ask her for suggestions about my dating or something alse, because she is not important to me as in the past ages. My new friends placed her sit.

Adimitly, family is important all the time in human history and I do not thought this fact changed. But in the past, these families acted such a role that is always willing to support and encourage the other members in their big family. Uncle treats brother's daughters as his own little girl. However, members of big family could not do these thing well and their sit placed by close friends.

In a conclusion, I do believe the extended family is less important now than it was in the past, even though that is my hoped.

掐时间写的,感觉不是很好,求痛拍
这是我不愿醒来的梦。

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本帖最后由 坏绿的眼睛 于 2012-4-15 22:31 编辑

【2012年4月15日 星期日  TPO 11独立写作】
Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates
problems. Which view do you agree with.

Maybe no one inventions can be important for promoting people as computers as to us. But someone advocates computer truly made many troubles because of the overall information brought by it. In my point, I do agree with the suggestions first. Take a glance at the impacts that is made by some modern inventions, these advantages always more than troubles. Computer making many things run easier, just like recharging ourselves and gaining experiences from others by chatting online or reading posts at some forums.

First of all, Computer extends user's knowledge wide which is we can received by reserving and outputting educated sources. This invention, computer may be the most useful tool for students and white-collar. That is, students, no matter how old were them, using computer using teaching software or education disc to touch better tuition. I have a friend named Sully, she used the best educated software called HANLINHUI that collected many video of classes from these row one high school. And she really performance very well in acamident work.  Other example, when I entrance into university and doing several projects about marine law, I used my PC reserving, arranging and outputted all the information of my group into some perfect reports. Based the discussion above, I have enough supports to agree the point in the paragraph 1.

Then, computer offers more opportunities for us to collect needed information by suffering some professional forums. Nowadays, many factors have been block for gaining the valuable materials, for example the books' location. However, with the improvement of computer and internet, it is not hard even looking for a report from citizen library of your own city and located an old books from abroad library. For every one, that is a convenient thing that opens your PC and suffers in 'Google’. Due to one report from The mirror newspapers, more than 30,000 libraries and high schools shared their knowledge source online. So it is necessary for anyone eager for recharging, computer is necessary production.

Finally, without PC means lost much valuable information from communicating online. In my country, the largest web-site hold sever professional lecture online, and at the end everybody could quest argument. In fact, I watched the famous business professor for Chinese law and policy university and quested several questions last week on DUOWAN site. And I gain 5 minutes to chatting with professor Duan, and get needed answer.

Admitly, others hold the point that PC give too much information to people and it would make mass on them. But in my view, computer brings me many valuable things but any trouble so that I cannot leave it. And I do believe If anyone think computer create problems on someone, the only solution is this guy need to learn how to distinguish messages into useful and useless.

In a conclusion, I do believe PC makes us promoted. And it would not be the trouble maker.
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【2012年4月17日 星期二  TPO 10综合写作】

The passages pointed the fact that the sea otters' decreasing and three reasons of it.
However, the speaker argued by three opposite views.

First of all, the writer suggested pollution caused decreasing. But, the professor advocated that there is few evidence to confirm this opinion. In fact, the chemical pollution hardly found on the beach of Alaska. So the first gather is basing no facts and the truth.

Then, hunting by human beings for economy beneficial resulted in declining. The woman pointed sea otters, seals, and sea lions are small mammals. But hunting is towards these large prey or others. That is, escaping is easy is easy for these small mammal.  

Final, for the concentrated pollution view, the speaker mentions the fact that otter has not been declined and it does not decrease greatly. Based the fact, third explanation is full of gathers and subjective emotion, it is untrue.
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