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逆风飞羊UID: 182440

It is for a long time (it is 后面怎么能跟for呢)that people have been misunderstanding that playing games is just significant to children but not to adults. In the light of this statement, adults cannot gain benefit much from games.（删） However, the fact is just the opposite. Playing games are as important for adults as they are for children, the reasons of which go as follows（删）.

On one hand, as for adults, playing games is rather beneficial, not only because it would help them relax but because it enables them to learn the spirit of teamwork. Nowadays the pace of life is becoming more and more rapid, it is in an urgent need that adults develop diverse games relaxing themselves. Just as playing Majong, which is very popular with the growing number of people in China, can provide an excellent emotional outlet for people from work pressure. It is common that people participate in the games after they finish all the work in the evening, which they consider as an excellent recreation.

In addition to relaxing, learning how to collaborate with other fellows is also significant for adults. Perhaps playing basketball is superexcellent way for adults to understand that principle. Only when all players cooperate well can the team approach the victory. Similarly, one of the prerequisites of succeeding in one’s career is cooperation, rather than working alone. Such a good quality has been attached more and more importance to by many adults.

On the other hand, playing games is also important for children. Obviously, it can contribute to developing their abilities of solving problems independently. For instance, when playing toy bricks in the beginning, children might fail to accomplish the task at a time. As they keep on trying independently, it is likely that they would succeed finally. Virtually in this process,（删） would gradually foster the ability of handling the difficulties by themselves.

Form the statements discussed above, it can be clearly seen that games are as important for adults as they are for children, based on the truth that both of them can learn much from the games. All in all, I am totally in favor of the opinion that not only children but adults need to play games.

对于后面说到的游戏和儿童的方面我依然认为没有必要写。如果写的话，应该强调成人与儿童的比较。只是各自列举游戏对成人和孩子的好处就得出结论两者重要性一样，这样很明显不科学哦

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

你说的是对adults更重要,可是从文章里并没有体现出来.且不说你又是在开头就让步,也不说你这一个无用的段落花了那么多笔墨还举了三个方面,单看后面的一个半段落(B3太简了,只能算半个哈)吧
B2: 你本来要说更~~~,可是TS上来就让人失望地用also necessary .充其量就是个同等重要嘛.而且第二句继续了这一方向:keep good health as they do for children.看来这个修改稿改的并不认真哦,修改观点意味着整篇都要改,而不只是改开头结尾TS.你这一段的内容都是在说两者一样重要,这样表里不一,首尾两样,还不如不改呢.而且,既然说更重要,就一定要有对比.(说一样重要的没有对比也就凑合了).
B3,用词依然是失望:another positive effect.这段严格来讲与主题无关,想法是好的,但是你的结论却是games could also make a family more compatible.
和题目有什么关系??其实你完全可以再多写一句,成人负担着使家庭更加compatible的责任.而游戏可以帮助他们实现这一点.这样就是一个非常好的观点啊

hotkenUID: 2135671

Originally posted by 逆风飞羊 at 2005-12-26 01:15
It is for a long time (it is 后面怎么能跟for呢)that people have been misunderstanding that playing games is just significant to children but not to adults. In the  ...

It is a long time that people have been misunderstanding that playing games is just significant to children but not to adults. However, the fact is just the opposite. Playing games is as important for adults as they are for children.

First and foremost, as for adults, playing games is rather beneficial, because it would help them greatly relax. Nowadays the pace of life is becoming more and more rapid, it is in an urgent need that adults develop diverse games to release themselves from various kinds of pressure. Just as playing Majong, which is very popular with the growing number of people in China, can provide an excellent emotional outlet for people from work pressure. It is common that people participate in the games after they finish all the work in the evening, which they consider as an excellent recreation.

In addition to relaxing, learning how to collaborate with other fellows is also significant for adults. Perhaps playing basketball is superexcellent way for adults to understand that principle. Only when all players cooperate well can the team approach the victory. Similarly, one of the prerequisites of succeeding in one’s career is cooperation, rather than working alone. Such a good quality has been attached more and more importance to by many adults.

Last but not least, playing games contributes to communicating with others, which seems to play a vital role in adults’ career. If one is particularly adept in holding intercourse with other persons, it is more than likely that he or she would obtain many benefits from others when in need of help. No wonder one manages to talk the president of a greatly influential company into a big deal when they are playing golf and enjoying themselves. At this point, golf is not just a game, but an excellent platform of doing business from the angle of businessmen.

Form the statements discussed above, it can be clearly seen that games are not only important for children but significant for adults, based on the truth that both of them can learn much from the games. All in all, I am totally in favor of the opinion that not only children but adults need to play games.

再次推出修订版，这次羊羊版主看看如何。。。
呵呵。。

[ Last edited by hotken on 2005-12-26 at 11:29 ]

hotkenUID: 2135671

顺便问下羊羊，如果题目说到“which one do you prefer?"时可不可以说看情况，就是两者都选阿？对那种A or B的题目而言。。。。。

north2326UID: 2123618

我的在17楼，恳请斑竹帮忙看看吧,谢谢!可能要过点了.

SnowShineUID: 185044

#56 yuchen (flypig)~~

Nowadays, there is no denying the fact that games are less automatically associated with children. Actually, games consisting (of) physical games, mental games and so on define much wider than children’s games and they are undoubtedly as important for adults as for children.

First of all, game is a very good way for modern adults who often feel tired and full of stress to have a rest. On the one hand, consider physical games for an example. When adults are playing a basketball game, they not only improve physical health but also release of （of是不是应删掉） their working stresses. After an interesting game, a shower and a sleep, it will be a new person who is full of energy and passion in the work tomorrow. On the other hand, you can also play chess with your old friends or family members and use this quiet game to rest yourself.（这里on the one hand 和 on the other hand 之后接的句式要是一样就更整齐了）

Sometimes, games can also enlighten adults in their work and even bring them success. For example, in 1995 the first computer animation, Toy story, was released and won large amount of praises. What attracted people （to） see this film is not only the technology in computer graphics but the moving story about toys. Just because John Lasseter, the director of this film loves games and toys, he could make a so （改成such a） successful animation. Furthermore, some adults even become professional game players. They earn money by playing games and have fun.

Admittedly, if an adult does not view playing games as a job, it is harmful to spend too much time on them. As a saying goes “it does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live”. （引用得好）Games are just like dreams. Some adults who play computer games called “role-play” on Internet day and night are lost in these artificial dreams, which may ruin their lives.

To sum up, for adults, games carry many advantages such as letting off of （of是不是应删掉） steam, increasing physical health and even bringing success. Thus we can say that if adults are not addicted in them, games may be very useful and significant.（结尾没有再与children比较，扣题不紧）

总的来说，过渡很不错，B2的观点很有新意，举例也很充分。就是语言上有一些小毛病。我认为属于中上了。
欢迎拍一下我的作文。当然离题较大了，不知道细节、语言部分如何改进。#54 楼 SnowShine
:handshake

wishuangUID: 2112728

评 #56 楼 yuchen (flypig)作文
Nowadays, there is no denying the fact that games are less automatically associated with children. Actually, games consisting physical games, mental games and so on define much wider than children’s games and they are undoubtedly as important for adults as for children.

First of all, game is a very good way for modern adults who often feel tired and full of （be full of）stress to have a rest. On the one hand, consider physical games for （as）an example. When adults are playing a basketball game, they（game？这里的指代关系不太正确） not only improve physical health but also release of their working stresses. After an interesting game, a shower and a sleep, it will be a new person who is full of energy and passion in the work tomorrow. On the other hand, you can also play chess with your old friends or family members and use this quiet game to rest yourself.
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Sometimes, games can also enlighten adults in their work and even bring them success. For example, in 1995 the first computer animation, Toy story, was released and won large amount of praises. What attracted people（to） see this film is not only the technology in computer graphics but （also） the moving story about toys. Just because John Lasseter, the director of this film， love（loves） games and toys, he could make a so successful animation（这句话放在because前面更好）. Furthermore, some adults even become professional game players. They（两句可以合成一句，用who） earn money by playing games and have fun.
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Admittedly, if an adult does not view playing games as a job（有的不是as a job只是a way to rest，这句话和B1有矛盾）, it is harmful to spend too much time on them. As a saying goes “it does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live”. Games are just like dreams. Some adults who play computer games called “role-play” on Internet day and night are lost in these artificial dreams, which may ruin their lives.
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To sum up, for adults, games carry many advantages such as letting off of steam, increasing physical health and even bringing success. Thus we can say that if adults are not addicted in them, games may be very useful and significant(最后一段提下children比较好吧).留学（）

总体语言我觉得还可以。
但我有个疑问，感觉这篇文章更让我感觉是在写games对adults的advantage和disadvantage ，这样算不算跑题呢？既然是as important as 是不是应该先写game对children的重要性，当然两句话带过即可，再对照着写adults，最后再总结下？不知道我的想法对不对，望大家互拍！
很不好意思的说，这几天不是很勤快，没赶上和大家一起写这篇，但是过去的一篇练习，https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=384413，希望大家能帮我改下，谢谢！

yuchenUID: 2111079

整体方面小羊已经在65楼帮你评价过了。
我的修改在下面，改一下语法
It's been often discussed the importance of games to adults. In my prospective, reasonably playing games give adults indispensable help while abandoning in games do great harm to both adults and children.【这句动名词做主语，谓语动词应该按单数算吧？】

First of all, games are practically necessary to adults, especially in modern world. Nowadays adults should deal with too many issues, for instance, the heat【heat不能做形容词吧】 competition, the sensitive social relationship, the quickly changing environment, and so on. It's hard to imagine in such a kind of stressful world, how can people survive without ways of rest. And as one of the most effective and interesting ways to relieve stress, games certainly play a very important role in adults' life
【这段感觉前面的引出太长了，就算游戏是一种重要的休息方式，而成人又需要休息，但并不等于说成人会选择游戏进行休息呀？】

Furthermore, playing games together with others contribute greatly to the construction of good social relationship. By playing games together, people can get rid of embarrassment with strangers and soon become good friends. In fact, games sometimes can also reflect the players' nature and preference. That may be the reason why more and more companies like to hold games among their stuff.
【这段把people换成adults会好些吧】

However, it must be noticed that relying too much on games is absolutely harmful to people, no matter adults nor children. Especially computer and Internet games, which often create an illusion of another kind of world to the players, keep them away from the reality and cost all their time. What's worse, as I often read in newspaper, some indulgent players even killed others to imitate the roles in games. These pieces of surprising news have already stricken alarms to us
这段写的挺好，就是把成人和儿童一起来说会有一种脱题的感觉，稍微改改就好了

Generally, games can help people but also can destroy them, depending on whether they constrict themselves with self-conscience and come back to the reality soon after games. But after all, games are of great importance to modern life which can not be ignored

tingslyUID: 2133576

晕，偶来晚了，还有没有第四期呀？

hotkenUID: 2135671

版主快来看看哦。。。

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

Originally posted by hotken at 2005-12-26 12:29
顺便问下羊羊，如果题目说到“which one do you prefer?"时可不可以说看情况，就是两者都选阿？对那种A or B的题目而言。。。。。

我觉得which one do you prefer是可以看情况的吧～～～～

bamboo2142003UID: 2135987

恩，上午模考的时候写的，第一次上来，写作文一头雾水，还请各位指教
我写的是不同意，对于成人更重要(40min,390words)

Some people always consider playing games as an activity for children only ,who grow up ,playing games ;Others are on the view that adults could play games and games are as important  for adults as they are for children .Which you prefer depends on your experiences ,life styles and emotional concerns .But as for me ,I do not agree with them and I agree that games are more important for adults than for children .

Children play games just for fun ,and there is no deny that they could learn something from games ,such as the importance of cooperation .However ,games for adults mean much more meanings .

Adults could relax themselves by playing games .Adults ,working all day and having  numorous things to do ,are always under deep pressure and fell tired .Imagine they play some kinds of games with others ,laughing or running happily ,we could not say it is useless for them to relax from pressure and tiredness .

furthermore ,it is a good way to acknowledge and communicate with others via playing games with others .To some extent ,it is difficult for adults to make a face-to face talk .Via playing games ,people could have an access to communicate and improve their relationships .Take golf for instance ,adults play the golf together,communicating at the intervals the methods to play the golf well ,gradually communicating other things .This case is not rare,in reality ,adults always use such kind of ways to communicate with others .

Eventually,adults could learn more from games for their experiences and emotions ."life is like a box of chocolate  ,you never know what you are gonna get "This is much alike playing games , which you never know what will happen next time .Adults could learn some essential spirits of life from games ;adults could taste the different changes from games to think how to do next in a short tiome ; also adults could feel the importance of confidence and so forth .On no account can we ignore the educating significance of games for adults .

In conclusion ,games are important for children ,but they are much more important for adults for their function of relaxation,convenience to communicate and educations .I therefore disagree the statement and support that games are much more important for adults than for children.

poraporaUID: 2156020

311 words / 44min

Somebody agree that games are not only important but such things that wasting time, especially for student just like me; In other hand, others accept that they relax our mindas well as improve intelligence both for adults or children. I prefer the later one thatthey play an important role in our daily life.

The most common reason for parents disagree is games took too much time for their children to do the their mission, such as doing homework commonly. Indeed, some games may seduce people to spend a lot of time on it. Especially for adults, as they have more things, seemed much more important than playing game, to do. It could not be imagined that President Bush plays tv game overnight instead of solving the national affairs. Therefore, the time management of playing game is necessary while playing.

But, games are not always time consuming. From traditionally games, such as chess, porker, to modern technique used on computer just like some small flash games, we find it requires only few minutes for a round.  In addition,that is to say, resting is for the further way. With the function of entertainment, we adults need them more as we are getting into the rush society to relief our tension on work or study for more effective performance. Of course, we adults have more ability of self-control than kids, thus time wasting could be reduced as much as possible.

Children need games for their inteligence development and play together to learn how to be one member of this society. For adult, although playing games seems not worth to spend time playing game rather than working for a better life, it has the greater function of relaxation for us, busy persons to work better.  Conclusively, I do believe that under the appropriate time controlling, games are as important for adults as they are for children.

[ Last edited by porapora on 2005-12-30 at 02:40 ]

cuteUID: 2152397

谢谢蝴蝶结mm啊！！
Games become one part of human’s life that can no longer be ignored, not only for children who worry little about life but even for adults under heave social responsibilities. I reckon that games are equally important to adults, compared with its impact on children, for they can bring relaxation, intelligence and usually unexpected profit.

Adults enjoys games as much as children do. It is usually believed that games are essentially connected with the growing of each child, no matter which race or class he or she belongs to, for their great joy they bring.  After an exciting football match, for instance, children get totally wet, always with smiles on their faces. Football, as we all know, is the most popular game in the world, whose biggest grand celebration, the world cup every fourth year, are always expected by different ages, genders and races all over the world.

Not only can games relax us, they are also able to develop mentality. Parents always buy kids such interesting toys as 拼图，juggle，hand-knitted games, which are though easy for adults to work out, but indeed improve a child’s way of thinking and ability to experiment. Likewise, there’re plenty of games, online game for instance, to get through which, we have to think hard and play quickly, accurately. Games are not always so simple a thing as some people consider.

Despite the obvious benefits that I have mentioned above, another reason may de serve some attention. Inventing and improving a good game can benefit a company greatly. So many games are needed for both children and adults, so the game industry has already become a hot topic. People who turn to games catch hold of an industry that will have a long-term profitable thing.

All work and no play makes jack a dull boy. So we’re convinced that games is one thing whose magic we can never deny.

zhengsunshineUID: 2171401

60. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Agree with this statement.

outline:
•Entertainment. Heavy pressure form word and family; light the burden.
•Learn new things. Team sprit, intelligence.
•Communications.

Children, as we all know, grown up with games which are very important for them in their childhood. Many games are designed especially for them. But that does not mean that adults do not need games. I think games are also necessary for adults and the reasons are given blew.

The first reason I would like in here to point out is that adults also have a strong requirement to entertainment. It is easy to see this point clearly through the following example. In modern society, adults meet many problems from work and family which make them tired of living. So they need games to light their burden and to release their pressures given by society. Therefore games are important in the busy lives of the adults.

Another reason why I agree with the above argument is that adults might learn new things when they are playing games. It is said that the team spirit which is vital in company is much stronger in a person who usually play bridge than the one who hardly do it. Also chess plays an important role in not only relaxing the players but also exploit their intelligence. Generally, games, such as bridge and chess, can teach you a lot.

Last, but not least, games played with partners increase the communications between them. In fact, it is a basic skill for people to maintain in our society. Sometimes problems which are hard to resolve in work can be easily to figure out during games. Family relationship between members may be improved if they play game together. In short, people might have more communications in games.

In a word, the reason I discussed above might be summarized to that games can give adults as well as children enjoyment, knowledge and communication. So we can finally draw the conclusion that adults need games just as children do.