08年10G We are gters 小组作文大帖

mading612UID: 2519378

[08年10G We are gters 小组作文大帖]
目标：尽可能的高

    第一次发帖就是这种大帖，希望经验丰富的同仁批评建议。感谢“征服GRE组”，这个大帖是大量参考你们改写的。
组员名单：人数较少，大家都知道了，不再详述

1 时间总体安排
   请看群主的日程安排，这里也会每天更新。

2 作业提交，提交时间，每晚九点前
(1)每位组员在主贴内只占一楼，标题为gter-qq的ID+“的作业”
如 gter-boluo的作业
(2)发帖规范格式
   交作业时请把每篇作文按发帖规范格式发在作文互动论坛里，然后把链接地址编辑到您的座位下面，并表明是第几次作业
   请大家注意，在发作业的时候，issue/argument与题号之间不能有空格，方便其他人在论坛中搜索您的习作
   格式参考： https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D7
(3)互改要求
    由于人较少，这个安排在群里讨论

3 惩罚措施
  未能按时交作业的组员必须在两天内补上，三次不交则要深刻反思。

4 友情提示
(1)需要请假的请事先报告。
(2)对帮忙改作文的同学致以感谢。

5 作业公布栏
2008．8．1第一次作业
必做Issue 130；argu188.
选作Issue 169，6，93，3，41，1；argu26，171，68.

2008．8．2第二次作业
必做Issue 43，argu7.

2008．8．3第三次作业
必做Issue 50，argu53.

[ 本帖最后由 mading612 于 2008-8-1 21:38 编辑 ]

eaglewatchUID: 2374680

第一次作业
issue130
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-864640-1-1.html
argument 7
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-864643-1-1.html
argument 188
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-864641-1-1.html
第二次作业

[ 本帖最后由 eaglewatch 于 2008-8-1 20:45 编辑 ]

mading612UID: 2519378

第一次作业argu188
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-864638-1-1.html
issue130
待补：（
第一次作业argu7
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=864970&extra=page%3D1

大家好，这算是个留言吧。话说今天又是只熬出一篇，再惭愧。发觉这样下去，我将连续产出20篇垃圾文章，于是我考虑先去打基础了。所以至少这头十天是不可能完成任务了，先反省。但我会尽量写得。另外，G友的文章我也会按时批改借鉴，只是批改我文章的同学少了自信的机会L.请群主把每天的批改顺序写在二楼吧，以免混淆。话说这时我正在惨淡的补基础。另外，有问题求助：argu的前提批不批，有什么注意的呢？还有就是，是不是要弄个模板阿，我这样每天新编太慢了，是不是弄个自己的模板就可以每次使了？

拜谢各位！

重要的一点是，斑竹提醒大家发帖要格式正确，还有题目，请群主指导。

[ 本帖最后由 mading612 于 2008-8-2 18:00 编辑 ]

jillydreamUID: 2516287

issue130
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=864657&extra=page%3D4

[ 本帖最后由 jillydream 于 2008-8-1 21:01 编辑 ]

aq1988aqUID: 2479042

Issue130
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-864648-1-1.html
Augue188.7
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-864651-1-1.html
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-864653-1-1.html

Nickyu_220UID: 2516382

The author contends that to be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards. I concede to a specific extent that ethical and moral criteria do contribute to the shaping of effective leaders. The significance and contribution, however, should not be overstated and the pursuit of extremely highest levels of those aspects seems to be unnecessary.
Admittedly, to a broad sphere including political, commercial and social layers, the crucial influences of ethical and moral standards, though vary slightly on account of particular circumstances, are inevitably, considerably and profoundly. Focus on the political layers. A political leader's primary concern is to construct, maintain and distend the wealth, prosperity and political influence of his/her district and nation. Many more times than you and I would like to think, the realization of those objectives demands them to make choices or resolutions within the boundary of ethic and morality. Abraham Lincoln, 16th president of America, bore in mind the conviction that everyone could become wealthy and successful through hard work with their intelligences and capabilities in sharply contrast to conventional hierarchy of races, announced the distinguished Emancipation Proclamation resulting in the naissance of a nation, united and calling for equality. But Hitler，transgressor of that boundary, waged desperately the World War two, disastrous calamity for all human beings, bringing us with infinite tribulations and afflictions.  
However, we may not take for granted the conclusion that the ethical and moral standards take precedence of other traits a effective leader should have, such as the capabilities of reconciliation, management in hardship and so forth. The 32nd President of the United States Roosevelt is preeminent for his decisive actions during the Great Depression. The New Deal as he promised not only successfully retrieved his nation from the abysm of hopelessness but paved the way for its prosperity. Steven Jobes, the founder of the Apple Empire, also acts as a salvation on the verge of its bankruption，due to his persistence in the introduction of IPOD. Now the IPOD has pervaded into every aspects our society, fundamentally revolutionizing our thinking and living styles.
To each individuals in current society, it is gradually becoming an irreversible trend that people are much more fastidious than ever: they put equal emphases on ethical and moral standards and others，for in some cases, far-ranging and intangible influences would be much more vital. While Bill Clinton has made remarkable achievements in the efforts to strengthen the American economy, his sexual scandal，a negative impact to the foundation of overall social ethic and morality, finally undermined his reputation and popularity among his proponents. He had to step down the throne.
To sum up, relatively high ethical and moral standards are indispensable features an effective leader should have, yet other traits such as the capabilities of of reconciliation, management in hardship and so on could not be underestimated. An authentic effective leader should succeed icalling for a balance among them.

Nickyu_220UID: 2516382

Issue 43
The author contends that to be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards. I concede to a specific extent that ethical and moral criteria do contribute to the shaping of effective leaders. The significance and contribution, however, should not be overstated and the pursuit of extremely highest levels of those aspects seems to be unnecessary.
Admittedly, to a broad sphere including political, commercial and social layers, the crucial influences of ethical and moral standards, though vary slightly on account of particular circumstances, are inevitably, considerably and profoundly. Focus on the political layers. A political leader's primary concern is to construct, maintain and distend the wealth, prosperity and political influence of his/her district and nation. Many more times than you and I would like to think, the realization of those objectives demands them to make choices or resolutions within the boundary of ethic and morality. Abraham Lincoln, 16th president of America, bore in mind the conviction that everyone could become wealthy and successful through hard work with their intelligences and capabilities in sharply contrast to conventional hierarchy of races, announced the distinguished Emancipation Proclamation resulting in the naissance of a nation, united and calling for equality. But Hitler，transgressor of that boundary, waged desperately the World War two, disastrous calamity for all human beings, bringing us with infinite tribulations and afflictions.  
However, we may not take for granted the conclusion that the ethical and moral standards take precedence of other traits a effective leader should have, such as the capabilities of reconciliation, management in hardship and so forth. The 32nd President of the United States Roosevelt is preeminent for his decisive actions during the Great Depression. The New Deal as he promised not only successfully retrieved his nation from the abysm of hopelessness but paved the way for its prosperity. Steven Jobes, the founder of the Apple Empire, also acts as a salvation on the verge of its bankruption，due to his persistence in the introduction of IPOD. Now the IPOD has pervaded into every aspects our society, fundamentally revolutionizing our thinking and living styles.
To each individuals in current society, it is gradually becoming an irreversible trend that people are much more fastidious than ever: they put equal emphases on ethical and moral standards and others，for in some cases, far-ranging and intangible influences would be much more vital. While Bill Clinton has made remarkable achievements in the efforts to strengthen the American economy, his sexual scandal，a negative impact to the foundation of overall social ethic and morality, finally undermined his reputation and popularity among his proponents. He had to step down the throne.
To sum up, relatively high ethical and moral standards are indispensable features an effective leader should have, yet other traits such as the capabilities of of reconciliation, management in hardship and so on could not be underestimated. An authentic effective leader should succeed icalling for a balance among them.

Nickyu_220UID: 2516382

I fundamentally disagree with the assertion brought about by the author with respect to the dual aspects involved in it, namely, how children are socialized determines the destiny of future society and we have not yet worked out how to cultivate the coming generations seemly.
Firstly, consider the essence or internal value of the process of socialization among children in different societies respectively. I maintain that socialization is indispensable and significant for any new individuals to accommodate to and more importantly accepted by their society. During this process, they learn to how to communicate and corporate appropriately with the peers who may become their life-long partners in later life, and bear in mind some particular social taboos within a single culture, otherwise they would be confronted with same embarrassment as outsiders did. Eventually, they develop distinctive but general philosophies and become better prepared for the challenges to propel the social development.  
Admittedly, the principal role they play should not be neglected or underestimated, but this may not necessarily result in the assertion that it is the socialization of children that determines the directions our society marches. In the long history of our human beings, those distinguished transitions are usually ascribed to particular individuals instead. Without Abraham Lincoln's firmness, far sightedness and wise leadership, the American society would be still be bogged in the swamp of extremely inequality, let alone be a worldwide model for the unequally-treated to struggle for a brighter tomorrow. On the other hand, owing to Hegel's blind veneration for Germany’s past, World War one and World War two, disastrous calamities that agonized human race, was paved the way for. Thus, just as what is stated in the Convergence theory, crowd behavior is not a product of the crowd itself, but is carried into the crowd by certain individuals. That is, the dominant status of the mass will be supplanted naturally by those few elites existing in each society.  
Secondly, consider the author's assertion that we have not yet worked out how to cultivate the coming generations properly. As far as I'm concerned, the answer is largely attributed to the paraphrase of the so called "better society". In the perspective of Mr.Gahli, former UN Secretary General, who appreciated French Promotion Programs sponsored by Ameson Educational & Cultural Exchange Foundation in an effort to promote cultural understanding and peace, the "better society" will undoubtedly be the one without misunderstanding and unavoidable conflicts resulting from the undesirable aspects of our human nature. While another society, one full of benevolence and warmth would be much more preferable to Rousseau who holds that humanity is essentially good but corrupted by society. Then if we tend to interpret a "better society" as Mr.Gahli does, our society does walk towards a desirable direction in that currently the UN and other regional associations of some sorts are making joint efforts, aimed at bridging through the gaps between certain incompatible societies. Their deeds are precious lessons to later generations, etching in their memory forever.
In the final analysis, the functions of socialization should not and will not be overlooked, yet ignoring the compelling reasons discussed above, the author's assertion is incomplete. Moreover, without a definite paraphrase, the claim that we have not yet worked out how to cultivate the coming generations seemly may not be made too hastily.

Nickyu_220UID: 2516382

Based on the unwarranted assumption and suspicious evidences, the report draws the conclusion that Kappa opioids, a painkiller, is much more  effective to women than to men, and then suggests that it should be prescribed to women whenever pain medication is required while men should be given other kinds of pain medication. To comprehensively attest this conclusion, it cites the new result. At first glance, this conclusion seems to be relatively convincing, but further investigations of it indicate some concerns it may neglect, which should be demonstrated in the argument. Logically, the conclusion suffers from three flaws.
The threshold problem with this argument is that we have to doubt the validity of the survey involved. For one thing, the number of respondents, 28 men and 20 women, can not ensure representative. It is possible that the samples may consist of, accidentally, the very individuals that could prove its result. For another thing, we haven't been informed that those people are randomly selected, which further give rise to its meaningless. Even if the samples do cover all the situations, we can not naturally make the assumption that the Kappa opioids are more effective to women. Perhaps, after their wisdom teeth extracted, the wounds of women are smaller than that of men, for which Kappa opioids are more effective.
Another problem that undermines the logical of this argument is that without any comparison, it unfoundedly concludes that Kappa opioids should be prescribed for women whenever pain medication is needed, whereas men should be given other kinds of pain medications. Perhaps, Kappa opioids is the most effective medicine, while there are still some other better pain-killers for women. Furthermore, even though we concede the validity of those flaws discussed above, we again fail to draw the same conclusion as the report does, one that suggests that researchers should reevaluate the effects of all medications on men versus women. We can not ignore the possibility that Kappa opioids is very few kind of medicines that have different effects between men and women.
To sum up, owing to those meaningless evidences and assumptions, the report fails to substantiate its conclusion that Kappa opioids, a painkiller, is much more effective to women than to men, and then suggests that it should be prescribed to women whenever pain medication is required while men should be given other kinds of pain medication. To more convincingly support this conclusion, the report needs to demonstrate the validity of the survey, in addition, it should provide us with more details such as the comparison between Kappa opioids and other medications of the same sort. Thus, if the argument had embraced those factors discussed above, it would become more authentic and logically accepted.

firstzy1110UID: 2463526

还能加入吗

zwmiracleUID: 2355996

我也要加入~

iamylUID: 2462489

怎么加啊？

hyukiezhuUID: 2291070

还能加入么

flyingjoysUID: 2449032

https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=865424&extra=page%3D1
之前写的，第三次作业的Issue50,之前的明天补上~
第一次作业I130
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-864386-1-1.html
A7
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=865633&extra=page%3D1
ISSUE43
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-865827-1-1.html

[ 本帖最后由 flyingjoys 于 2008-8-4 19:36 编辑 ]

cartographer08UID: 2523568

还可以再加入吗
还有一个月考