1006G【Ivy】的备考日记——既然选择了远方，便只顾风雨兼程

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Despite the content of this article, two aspects of this debate impressed me most.

First, although this is a long debate compared with our previous assignments, as we have been left two days to deal with it, there are not too much new vocabularies in it. However, both arguers are able to express their views clearly and support their conclusions convincingly. As for most of us, using long and complex sentences, as well as lesser-known vocabularies the first aim of their writing rather than to express points of views what he want to express, which may merely bring readers obstacles and have nothing to do with being considered as a writing master.

Second, both arguers’ debates are under a well organized logical structure, but they use long piece of writing respectively. As a examinee of AW who are only given 30mins for the argument structure organizing and words outputting, to express what we want to say within such a limited time is one of the most serious challenges we face.

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12月25日

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It seems that there is another follow-up debates after this rebuttal statements waiting for us to read, as the author claim that “in my response, I will explain how to do it right”.

Since I am not a professional specialist of financial crisis and executive pay and have little background knowledge in this field, I just want to comment this article in my view, that is, in a general reader’s view. There are two flaws in this statement I want to point out. First, the argument’s topic is “This house believes that on the whole, senior executives are worth what they are paid”. We should pay close attention to the key phrases “on the whole” and”worth” of the motion. As both of the key phrases are abstractive phrases and every reader holds a different perception on them, authors should debate after definiting the meaning of them. Second, both arguers use many examples which are focus on specific person hence, to some extent, not with a huge amount of sample to refute opposite arguer’s views, these examples are not under a “on the whole” situation.

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回访~
加油！！
"I know you could reach the top
make sure that you won't stop
you can be just the one you wanna be"--共勉，嘻。。

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回访~
加油！！
"I know you could reach the top
make sure that you won't stop
you can be just the one you wanna be"--共勉，嘻。。
qxn_1987 发表于 2009-12-26 01:24

We are all peerless guys, fighting!

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12月26日

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The form of this essay is very interesting. Its opening story makes me attracted and even thinks about myself in terms of password settings. To be honest, I have tried to use different passwords with every different logons and disdain to wrote it even on a post-it note, but it seems bring me a lot of troubles. Because I have a poor memory and the result of each time password forgotten and mixed up is applying a new logon. So form then on, I think it is better for me to set the same password for all the logons apart from some important registrations.

Another view I want to point out is that so many native words and phrases have been used in it, with which this report becomes vivid and readable.

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12月27日

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After going over the whole passage, the title- back to the future- confuses me a lot. Because except for introducing some auctions, painters, dealers, and paintings, the content of this report seems irrelevant to its title, which should not be seen in such an article of Economist. But the more it confused me, the more I want to figure it out, and so far there are three ideas about how does this title works come into my mind.

First, the author uses his interesting title as a gimmick to attract reader to read.

Second, “back” works as a none here, and the whole title means from back to the future. As the first sentence said: the taste for clutter and realism is curiously buoyant, art works of masterpiece would continue worth to collect from past to the future, although it may experienced a period of stagnation.

Third，the author use a oxymoron in this title. However, since every rhetoric used in an article has its own propose, such as expresses a specific kind of feeling or emphasizes at some extent, but if here the title have been used as oxymoron what kind of characteristic it works make me puzzled.

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刚看了篇精华帖，蛮受用的。贴上来
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=783960&extra=page%3D1%26amp%3Bfilter%3Ddigest

我看AW为什么低！大牛不适用

刚考完AW，觉得自己考得特别好。就开始准备笔试了。但是最后成绩下来以后就傻眼了。只有3.5。相当不爽，于是重判。

最近写了PS，找了一个在国外生活了很久的同学帮我看看。说了几句话，顿时恍然大悟。原来AW低是有原因的。

1、大家先看我PS中的一个逻辑。我一直做A工作——（换段了）在A工作之外，我也做B和C工作——我有着一个绰号叫救火车——意思就是我啥都能干。

不知道大家看到这个逻辑如何？如果觉得有问题，并且知道这个逻辑错在哪里的话，就不用往下看了。反正我那时觉得这个逻辑很正常。

但是我同学说，他是中国人，能够看明白。但是如果是一个外国人就看不明白了。用他们的逻辑表述应该是
  我一直做A工作——（换段）我还能干很多工作——比如在A工作之外，我也做B和C工作——于是我有着一个绰号叫救火车。
他说“比如在A工作之外，我也做B和C工作——于是我有着一个绰号叫救火车”这两个是用来举证“我还能干很多工作”。

可是我当时的思考就是，多有契口啊，我一直做A工作——（换段了）在A工作之外，在每一段开头，用上一段的东西来开头。多有连贯性。但是在外国人看来这样的逻辑就出了明显的问题。

2、连词过多，这个就不用说了。其实很多段落之间有内在的联系。可是也许他们联系不是furthermore等能够表达的。于是最好的方法就是用in addition 或者besides。他就认为使用太多。而且很多关系不是那样的。其实是因为我们并不明白其中的内在联系。然后乱用连词。导致段落开头表现的逻辑关系，和文章里头不一样。他认为，像besides这种联系都可以不用。

3、滥用which,who。我觉得这个的罪魁祸首就是新东方。记得以前上新东方的时候，老师说大家写长句子怎么办啊。就加上which who，whose。这样一个句子就能拉的很长。但是这个往往起到了相反的结果。因为GRE考得是逻辑，不是语言。而which who其实表达的是一种强烈的逻辑关系。比如我PS的一个例子。（都改了，一下子找不到，就随便说一个吧）These topics which are talked about a few days ago are quite important. 在我们看来，重心在于important.但是很多外国人一眼落在了which上头。由此可见他认为你的逻辑是否正确。而且特别是一些短句子，我们刻意的把他们拉长。用所谓的which whose，导致他们看其他特别变扭。

4、这一点其实应该和上面是一样的。不过我自己还是对这一点还是有一点点异议。因为我们的英语水平达不上长句子。所以尽量用短句子。文章是给别人看得。看看《老人与海》就知道短句子的力量。长句子就必然会有不少亢余，他就认为我写的显得很啰嗦，明明可以用几个短句子可以说清楚，生生的给拉成了一个句子。下一个句子有要重复一下前面的因果关系。
   此外，文章最主要的表达思想，而不是假假的长句子。
   我觉得在论坛里看了很多帖子，从GRE和TOEFL来看，这个简单句反而成为了现在高分作文的主流。大家可以注意一下。

以上几点我觉得还是有些道理的。不过已经开始rescore了，也不能中止了。写下这篇文章，为后来者提个醒吧。


更新一下，ETS 绝对官方说的，作文错误，我就截取其中的句子部分。
too many passive sentences.
too many long sentences
too many short sentences
ton many sentences beginning with coordinating conjunctions

段落部分
Does each of your main ideas begin with a topic sentence.由此可见第一句话必须写啥
use your topic sentence to prepare the reader for understanding what is written in the essay.
use topic sentences to connect two paragraphs or two main ideas.

有些朋友可能见过。这个绝对是ETS 官方的，我在考GRE之前要是看见就好了。

此外，字数绝对不是王道，我考试的时候，ISSUE彪到了700+。

PS,有朋友想看这个ETS所说的在哪里，就是TOEFL OG后面的Writer's book. 考GRE和TOEFL都应该看看，我那时候，后悔啊！

第一段的逻辑问题我没太看懂~~

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看精华帖看到眼花，但是那些真不愧为精华啊。
首楼贴之，便于日后细细揣摩~

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前两天忙死了，补作业~！

嘱咐贴上
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1046838-1-1.html

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https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1046820-1-1.html
一篇来自LSAT阅读的典型ARGUMENT

Nico Frijda writes that emotions are governed by a psychological principle called the “law of apparent reality”: emotions are elicited only by events appraised as real, and the intensity of these emotions corresponds to the degree to which these events are appraised as real. This observation seems psychologically plausible, but emotional responses elicited by works of art raise counterexamples.


Frijda’s law accounts for my panic if I am afraid of snakes and see an object I correctly appraise as a rattlesnake, and also for my identical response if I see a coiled garden hose I mistakenly perceive to be a snake. However, suppose I am watching a movie and see a snake gliding toward its victim. Surely I might experience the same emotions of panic and distress, though I know the snake is not real. These responses extend even to phenomena not conventionally accepted as real. A movie about ghosts, for example, may be terrifying to all viewers, even those who firmly reject the possibility of ghosts, but this is not because viewers are confusing cinematic depiction with reality. Moreover, I can feel strong emotions in response to objects of art that are interpretations, rather than representations, of reality: I am moved by Mozart’s Requiem, but I know that I am not at a real funeral. However, if Frijda’s law is to explain all emotional reactions, there should be no emotional response at all to aesthetic objects or events, because we know they are not real in the way a living rattlesnake is real.

Most psychologists, perplexed by the feelings they acknowledge are aroused by aesthetic experience, have claimed that these emotions are genuine, but different in kind from nonaesthetic emotions. This, however, is a descriptive distinction rather than an empirical observation and consequently lacks explanatory value. On the other hand, Gombrich argues that emotional responses to art are ersatz; art triggers remembrances of previously experienced emotions. These debates have prompted the psychologist Radford to argue that people do experience real melancholy or joy in responding to art, but that these are irrational responses precisely because people know they are reacting to illusory stimuli. Frijda’s law does not help us to untangle these positions, since it simply implies that events we recognize as being represented rather than real cannot elicit emotion in the first place (in the first place: adv.首先).

Frijda does suggest that a vivid imagination has “properties of reality”—implying, without explanation, that we make aesthetic objects or events “real” in the act of experiencing them. However, as Scruton argues, a necessary characteristic of the imaginative construction that can occur in an emotional response to art is that the person knows he or she is pretending. This is what distinguishes imagination from psychotic fantasy.

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过来学习一下，嘻。。
加油！

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happy new year!:loveliness:

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12月29

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Undoubtedly, all religions are concerned in varying degree with moral norms and ecstasy. With some sorts of mystical experiences, all believers of a specific religion would believe in their god, whose power will be considered that can surpass all the human beings, also, they would believe they can gain favors of the god hence complete their wish if they obey any moral rules of this religion. Thus, the relationship between moral norms and ecstasy in a religion is mutual support, that means, the more it mystery the more moral rules it may have, or, conversely, the more norms it has the more mystical it looks like. However, my opinion seems opposed with the author’s.

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12月31日

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While reading this beautiful article named Beauty, I begin to realize that if you try love something or someone you must be able to perceive its or his/her beauty. The author noted that anyone with eyes can take delight in a face or a flower, however, to perceive the beauty in some abstract things, such as a subject like mathematics or physics as well as the architecture of tree, we need trainings. Why does it happens is easy to find, since we people tend to find the beauty of things that have an outstanding appearance, things without which tends to ignored by us. In fact, everything existing in the planet has its value to exist, as it is said by Auguste Rodin, a famous French artist, “It is not a lack of beauty of our life, it is our lack of discovery”. And if we are willing to set our mind to explore the beauty of every object, including which looks not that beauty, we would find that our grandma’s hands with winkles is a kind of beauty, also mum’s chatters, and children’s crying. Because all these are come from a sense of love, which is the most incomprehensible word in the earth and has an endless power to melt the hardest ice in everyone’s heart.

P.S As this is a selection essay, I want to find and read the rest.