作文本1.21更新到今天！(低落)

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Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about which kind of teacher is effective. Some people hold the view that humorous and easygoing teachers are effective teachers. However, in my perspective, serious and strict teachers are effective and efficient for most of students.（背景+论题+正方观点+反方观点+我的观点，应该是最标准的写法吧，不过这一段没有问题，水平有限，仅供参考）

Initially（在写让步时我更习惯用admittedly）, most of students maybe like a humors or easygoing teacher. A humors or easygoing teachers（a…teachers 语法错误） always can let students feel easy and freedom in the class, which indeed lead students who tend to be nervous in the class to enjoy the pleasure of having class. Nevertheless, easygoing teachers finally lose respect from his students. For example, Mary, my English teacher, was an easygoing teacher when I was studying high school. Since her age was roughly the same as ours, I felt she just like an elder sister rather than a teacher. Mary also told us that she wanted to make friends with us, not just the relationship of teacher and students. Both of us agree with her idea. It was the irrefutable fact that we had enjoyed very happy English courses during the time when Mary taught us. Even though Mary tried her best to teach us, we still cannot concentrate on our English studies due to the fact that less English homework.(上课不能集中精力是因为作业少？ 好像逻辑有问题) Until she was transferred to another high school, we just realized few English we had learned. From my experience, I deem that Mary who is the example of easygoing and humors teachers is a disqualified teacher.很好的点题  学习！

From Chinese ancient time, teacher should be strict and serious, because if teachers treat students easygoing, students will relax themselves, which result in students’ failure（which will definitely decrease the efficiency of their study  这样是不是相对更好一点呢？）. Just like an English old saying goes: no pain, no gain. For example, when Vinci who is one of the greatest artists in the world learned how to paint, his teacher always insisted to require him to draw eggs. Once Vinci considered that drawing eggs was too boring task for him to give up his studying, his teacher advised him to keep drawing eggs. After painting for thousands of time to draw eggs（我感觉这句话有语法问题）, Vinci became a famous painter. If his teacher was an easygoing person, Vinci would stop drawing eggs and then quit his painting career when complaining that drawing eggs was meaningless. Therefore, strictness and seriousness of the teacher ultimately bring benefits to his students. That is the reason why I prefer to a serious and strict teacher.
In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned above, hardly I agree with those people opinion that humorous and easygoing teachers are effective teachers.

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A serious and strict teacher is more effective than a teacher who is humorous and easygoing.
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Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about which kind of teacher is effective. Some people hold the view that humorous and easygoing teachers are effective teachers. However, in my perspective, serious and strict teachers are effective and efficient(这两个不是一个意思吗？) for most of students.; p- o3 ~1

Initially, most of students maybe（may） like a humors（humorous） or easygoing teacher. A humors（humorous） or easygoing teachers always can let students feel easy and freedom（这里应该用形容词free吧？） in the class, which indeed lead students who tend to be nervous in the class to enjoy the pleasure of having class. Nevertheless, easygoing teachers finally lose respect from his students. For example, Mary, my English teacher, was an easygoing teacher when I was studying high school. Since her age was roughly the same as ours, I felt she just like an elder sister rather than the teacher. Mary also told us that she wanted to make friends with us, not just the relationship of teacher between students. Both of us agree with her idea. It was the irrefutable fact that we had been very happy（taking） English courses during the time when Mary taught us. Even though Mary tried her best to teach us, we still cannot concentrate on our English studies due to less English homework. Until she was transferred to another high school, we just realized few English we had learned. From my experience, I deem that Mary who is the example of easygoing and humors teachers is a disqualified teacher.（感觉这段有点罗嗦）

From Chinese ancient time, teacher should be strict and serious, because if teachers treat students easygoing（easygoing不能在这里作副词）, students will relax themselves, which result in students’ failure. Just like an English old saying goes: no pain, no gain. For example, when Vinci who is one of the greatest artists in the world learned how to paint, his teacher always insisted to（insist on doing） require him to draw eggs. Once Vinci considered that drawing eggs was too boring task for him to give up his studying, his teacher advised him to keep drawing eggs（这句话好啰嗦啊）. After painting for thousands of time to draw eggs, Vinci became a famous painter. If his teacher was an easygoing person, Vinci would stop drawing eggs and then quit his painting career when complaining that drawing eggs was meaningless. Therefore, strictness and seriousness of the teacher ultimately bring benefits to his students. That is the reason why I prefer to a serious and strict teacher.

In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned above, hardly I agree with those people opinion that humorous and easygoing teachers are effective teachers.

感觉楼主写这篇文章的时候是不是状态不太好哦？论证过程很罗嗦，也没有很有力的论证，比起前两篇作文来说真的逊色不少。楼主一定要加油哦！期待你下一篇大作O(∩_∩)O~

51航海UID: 2738581

3.19Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Students are more influenced by teachers than by their friends.

Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about who influence students more. Some people hold the view that students' friends affect them more. In my perspective, students are more influenced by their teachers. My reasons are as following.

Initially, teachers indeed play a crucial role in students' school live（life?）. Teachers always accompany students to study, discuss, and debate during the time when students are at school. Furthermore, students' effects from teachers are so huge that nobody can deny teachers' function in students' lives. For example, Vinci who would be one of greatest artists in the world was taught by his teacher when he was eight. From beginning of learning how to paint, Vinci's teacher always required him to draw eggs. After painting eggs for thousands of time, Vinci finally lost his patience, and then he angrily yelled to his teacher: I am not come to here for learning how to count numbers of eggs. His teacher advised him that since eggs were the easiest object to draw, you would draw other objects perfectly when you can draw an egg vividly and quickly. At the moment, Vinci realized the reason why his teacher constantly asked him to draw eggs. When completing to draw eggs for ten years, Vinci had grasped the skill of how to draw any objects quickly and perfectly, which resulted in him（能这么用么？我觉得这样好：which leads to the emergence） to be a famous painter. If Vinci had rejected to follow his teacher's orders, he could not had understood the real meaning of persistence and controlled the skill. (这个虚拟好强悍~好久不写虚拟的了，呵呵)From Vinci' historical story, we can conclude that teachers' effect is so great that Vinic also was influenced by his teacher.（这个例子真不错~~~）

In addition, according to a survey investigated by University of Virginia, some professors and experts point out that most of people's friends are classmates in his life. Even though I admit the fact that friends' effect is unusual（unique会不会好些？）, it should be ignored when compared with teachers' effect. Since classmates are also students and teachers' knowledge and experience are richer than students（咋两个are?）, students are bound to be affected by teachers rather than students themselves. As a Chinese old saying goes, once a people becomes your teacher in academic, he is your academic father in some content. Nevertheless, there is a widely known English saying that a friend in need is a friend indeed. Therefore, it is obvious that teachers are more dependable(值要说可以依靠的么？reliable好吧？) than friends. In other words, teachers' effect is more than friends.!

In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, hardly I can agree with their opinion that students' friends affect them more.
还行倒数第二段有个例子就好了，加油

51航海UID: 2738581

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3.20 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Students who can keep their own rooms organized are more likely to succeed.:

Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about what kind of students will be successful. Some individuals hold the view that students who keep their own rooms organized tend to succeed. In my perspective, students who possess content scores in every subject and be good at communication are likely to be successful. My reasons are as following

Initially, those students whose rooms are organized are good at planning, but which does not mean they will get success. Since keeping people' rooms organized does not have direct relationship with their success. For example, Edison is one of the greatest inventors in the world（who） always liked to sleep in his laboratory which was dirty and disorder, because he devoted his whole life's energy and time to design and create what he desired to make, so that Edison had not time to concern his room. Nevertheless, after trying thousands of materials, Edison found a suitable material to be lamp wick. it is no doubt that lamp wick was one of the greatest inventors in human history, because it brings people lights. From Edison's case, we draw a conclusion that there is no any logic relationship between one's success and his organized room. (this instance is quite vivid)
So, what factors lead students to obtain success? My answers are content scores and communication skills. Firstly, students' job is studying. There is an irrefutable fact that scores are the most important standard for many students to measure their success in academic. Those students who have content scores will tend be successful. According to a survey investigated by University of Virginia, a host of professors and experts point out those students who have GPA 3.5 or 3.5 above always can hunt high salary jobs. In other words, those students generally will acquire their success in their different fields. Secondly, as our society develops, people's communication becomes more and more frequent, so how to make friend with other people become more and more vital. That is the reason why it is necessary for students to grasp communication skills. Even though one student's GPA is high, which just means that his ability is excellent, he still will confront with his failure without other co-workers cooperation. Therefore, one student who has content scores and communication skills is likely to be successful.(If there is an example, it will be better!)

In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned above, hardly can I agree with their opinion that students who keep their own rooms organized tend to succeed. I strongly argue that students who have content scores and communication skills will acquire success.
还不错了，不知道你的倒数第二段这样写好不好，因为没有related to the factor of keeping one's room organized   ,so,举个例子说一下某个人，score and communication are well, but cannot keep his room organized ,however, he had a big sucess,will it be better?  

爱烤鱼的小伙UID: 2580692

不好意思哦，可能是前几天睡太早了，没看到你发的链接。这是19号的作文
Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about who influence students more. Some people hold the view that students' friends affect them more. In my perspective, students are more influenced by their teachers. My reasons are as following. （很熟悉的开头呵呵，不过这段里面三个more挨得好近啊，看得人实在有点感觉怪怪的）
Initially, teachers indeed play a crucial role in students' school live（life）. Teachers always accompany students to study, discuss, and debate during the time when students are at school. Furthermore, students' effects from teachers（还不如写成the influence of teachers on students） are so huge that nobody can deny teachers' function in students' lives（这两个小论点之间是递进关系？）. For example, Vinci who would be one of greatest artists in the world was taught by his teacher when he was eight. From beginning of learning how to paint, Vinci's teacher always required him to draw eggs. After painting eggs for thousands of time, Vinci finally lost his patience, and then he angrily yelled to his teacher: I am not come to here for learning how to count numbers of eggs. His teacher advised him that since eggs were the easiest object to draw, you would draw other objects perfectly when you can draw an egg vividly and quickly. At the moment, Vinci realized the reason why his teacher constantly asked him to draw eggs. When completing to（complete是及物动词） draw eggs for ten years, Vinci had grasped the skill of how to draw any objects quickly and perfectly, which resulted in him to be a famous painter. If Vinci had rejected to follow his teacher's orders, he could not had understood the real meaning of persistence and controlled the skill. From Vinci' historical story, we can conclude that teachers' effect is so great that Vinic also was influenced by his teacher.（最后的总结句写的角度不好，如果从“如果老师没有用这样的方式严格要求达芬奇，就会…………”这个角度总结更扣题）
In addition, according to a survey investigated by University of Virginia, some professors and experts point out that most of people's friends are classmates in his life. Even though I admit the fact that friends' effect is unusual, it should be ignored when compared with teachers' effect. Since classmates are also students and teachers' knowledge and experience are richer than students, students are bound to be affected by teachers rather than students themselves. As a Chinese old saying goes, once a people becomes your teacher in academic, he is your academic father in some content. Nevertheless, there is a widely known English saying that a friend in need is a friend indeed（这个跟主题有什么关系？求解）. Therefore, it is obvious that teachers are more dependable than friends. In other words, teachers' effect is more than friends.感觉这一段有点牵强

In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, hardly I can（can I） agree with their opinion that students' friends affect them more.

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3.21 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: People should be allowed to use cell phones on public transportation such as buses and trains.
Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about whether people are allowed to use phones on public transportation. Some individuals oppose to the statement, holding the view that using cell phones is inhibited on public transportation. However, from my perspective, whether people use their cell phones on public transportation is people right which is no reasons to deprive.[用不用电话不叫权利，用电话才是权利，因为权利是可以放弃的。所以，这里最好说 people are authorized/have rights to use cell phones. 如果想实在表达用不用都可以那么就是 have freedom to use cell phones.]
Initially, when one is making a call, it is possible that the sound[voice] of their talking disturbs other people's rest or reading[?有点特别，好像规定了上车就得看书]. But, as our technology and science grow, cell phones' functions become more and more various. Now, not only make a call or text a message can we use cell phone to, but also surf the Internet or sent an Email. So, it is totally possible for us to communicate other people by other means except making a call, such as Email or message, which cannot make any noises. Since noises problems can be easily solved, it is unreasonable that public transportation companies forbid their customers to use cell phones.
In addition, if the policy that people cannot use cell phones on public transportation applied, most of customers like me would feel very uncomfortable during the time when we took buses and trains, which also would drive more and more people to purchase their own cars. For example, I used to utilize my cell phone to listen academic lectures and classical[虽然有n. but 牛津说，esp attrib 尤作定语. symphonic?  So do I..], when taking public buses or trains. Nevertheless, I would lost my time to enjoy academic lectures and classical when taking public transportation, if those companies[有可能是政府，所以用被动好点] made rule that no one can use cell phone on buses and trains. Consequently, some people finally cannot tolerate the rule, and then they will buy their own cars[同样，坐公交的反面不是买车，是不使用公交。楼主注意逻辑严密，像一开始就设定了这个条款是由于公司怕打扰其他乘客而制定的。实际上谁也说不准，或者它就是眼红移动赚钱多呢？这一段的观点打得好，从你这条款是搬起石头砸自己的脚来论证，才能真正驳倒对方立场。]. Once the number of private cars increases, more and more social problems will appear like traffic jams. More and more private cars people use to commute between their working places and homes, more and more polluted air will be released from those cars, which lead our environment which is foundation for us to survive to be damaged. Therefore, it is irrational that people is allowed to use cell phones.[建议，这段多论证没人用公交对公交公司的后果，以及对社会的不良影响，这个影响并不是单纯由私家车多了造成的，后者只是其中之一。]
In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned above, hardly I agree with their opinion that using cell phones is inhibited on public transportation.
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Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about whether people are allowed to use phones on public transportation. Some individuals oppose to the statement, holding the view that using cell phones is inhibited on public transportation（这句话有点奇怪，“他们认为在公交上用手机是被禁止的”，但是现在的问题讨论还是应不应该的范畴，是个假设性问题，不能用一般现在时表既定事实）. However, from my perspective, whether people use their cell phones on public transportation is people right which is no reasons to deprive(be deprived).
Initially, when one is making a call, it is possible that the sound of their talking disturbs other people's rest or reading. But, as our technology and science grow, cell phones' functions become more and more various. Now, not only make a call or text a message can we use cell phones to, but also surf the Internet or sent an Email. So, it is totally possible for us to communicate other people by other means except making a call, such as Email or message（这句话有点啰嗦）, which cannot make any noises. （从功能越来越多到这里的几句话可以简化，比如说：功能越来越多，比如可以发短信之类的，这类东西部发出噪音，which 使我们在沟通的同时不会打扰别人）Since noises problems can be easily solved, it is unreasonable that public transportation companies forbid their customers（passengers好点） to use cell phones.

In addition, if the policy that people cannot use cell phones on public transportation （is）applied, most of customers like me would feel very uncomfortable during the time when we took buses and trains, which also would drive more and more people to purchase their own cars. For example, I used to utilize my cell phone to listen academic lectures and classical, when taking public buses or trains. Nevertheless, I would lost my time to enjoy academic lectures and classical when taking public transportation, if those companies made rule that no one can use cell phone on buses and trains. Consequently, some people finally cannot tolerate the rule, and then they will buy their own cars. （这个逻辑论证得有些牵强，为什么lz的例子陡然从自己不能听学术讲座陡然跳到了人们不能忍受规则了？还有为什么不能忍受就一定要买车呢？）Once the number of private cars increases, more and more social problems will appear like traffic jams. More and more private cars people use to commute between their working places and homes, more and more polluted air will be released from those cars, which lead our environment which is foundation for us to survive to be damaged. （感觉more and more用多了，是要用排比句来得吗？）Therefore, it is irrational that people is allowed to use cell phones.' R) [1 V1 P  W2 Y! y* R
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In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned above, hardly （do）I agree with their opinion that using cell phones is（should be） inhibited on public transportation.

51航海UID: 2738581

3.22Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should assign homework to their students every day.

Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about whether teachers should assign homework to their students every day. Some individuals hold the view that students should do homework every day. Nevertheless, from my perspective, teachers should not assign homework to their students every day. My reasons are as following.

Initially, finishing homework every day is a tough task for students. It is human's nature that students like to play rather than do homework. So, homework is a tough task for every student. However, homework is merely a mean of measure for students to review what they had learned today. Consequently, if teachers can instruct knowledge to students deeply, it will be unnecessary for students to complete their homework which teachers assign. (这里举个自己的例子来说就更好的~)Therefore, it is irrational to take students' pain coming from homework to replace teachers' responsibility.

In addition, now students' homework will bring a host of drawbacks. According to the survey investigated by University of Virginia, some professors and experts points out that 78% American students are confronted to too much studying pressure which coming from very complex homework. Last week, I heard the news that a college student cannot tolerate too much homework to kill himself with a gun. These cases totally manifest the problems our education system has encountered. Now many students cannot enjoy sport games, play their musical instrument and（or） watch TVs, even have no time to read newspapers. Students only devote all their energy and time to solve homework. If teachers assign homework to their students every day, it is obvious that there are more tragedies (which will appear)appeared in our education system. Hence, tasks of teachers are improving the effect and efficient of their courses rather than assign homework every day.

In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, hardly can I agree with those people opinion. I believe that teachers should not assign homework to their students every day.

还不错， 就是感觉好像还没论证到位就结束了的感觉， 可能是时间的关系吧，30分钟要写的更详尽不那么容易。我的也是。。。在~加油

单钓妖鸡UID: 2748892

真是好多啊，有点晕