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Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about whether basic science which is not correlated with students' majors should be a mandatory course for all university students. Some individuals agree with the statement. However, from my perspective, it is unnecessary for university students to study basic science which is not related with their field of study. My reasons are as following.# @* i; s  X* R$ P* Y; _3 t* h
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To begin with, studying of students' majors plays a very crucial role in their future, because the situation which students will confront with is hunting suitable jobs, when finishing their college lives. It is universally acknowledged that most of basic sciences will not applied on students' working, so those basic science which is not related with their major also is useless and meaningless in students' working. What can really help students to find jobs and then acquire their careers' successes are their majors' knowledge and skills. Only by studying their majors' courses can university students will (will去掉)have their bright future. Of course, during the time when university students study their majors' courses, it is vital for them to learn some basic science relating with their field of study, in that those basic science is basement and foundation for them to learn more advanced courses in(on) their majors. Therefore, university students need not study basic science which is not related with their field of study.(这段先说不应该学，又说基础重要，那怎么得出来不需要学的结论？)
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In addition, as education develops, the pressure and difficult students facing with become more and more. Now, University students have spent a host of time on their study. For example, according to a survey by University of Virginia, some professors and experts point out that 80% university students cannot afford their study, even 20% students deem all their time has been taken place by study. If basic science should be a mandatory course for all university students, in other words, there are more courses for students to have, we can image all of university students will be teem with classes and homework. Who can really enjoy their four-year precious university lives? There is no any reason to make students' university lives become boring and dull. Hence, basic science should not be a mandatory course for all university students.
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Nevertheless, it is widely admitted that basic science indeed can bring some subtle benefits to university students, although it is not related with their field of study. But, we should accept the fact that there is nothing more important than students’ university lives and working future.9 s5 [; T# X0 ]1 s2 S+ b
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In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, hardly can I agree with the statement that basic science which is not correlated with students' majors should be a mandatory course for all university students.
楼主写的很好学习学习

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1Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Basic science should be a mandatory course for all university students even if it is not related with their field of study.
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Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about whether basic science which is not correlated with students' majors should be a mandatory course for all university students. Some individuals agree with the statement. However, from my perspective, it is unnecessary for university students to study basic science which is not related with their field of study. My reasons are as following.

To begin with, studying of students' majors plays a very crucial role in their future, because the situation which students will confront with is hunting suitable jobs, when finishing their college lives. It is universally acknowledged that most of basic sciences will not applied on students' working, so those basic science which is not related with their major also is useless and meaningless in students' working. What can really help students to find jobs and then acquire their careers' successes are their majors' knowledge and skills. Only by studying their majors' courses can university students will have their bright future. Of course, during the time when university students study their majors' courses, it is vital for them to learn some basic science relating with their field of study, in that those basic science is basement and foundation for them to learn more advanced courses in their majors. Therefore, university students need not study basic science which is not related with their field of study." [( F  o) ^" _: C8 J% E
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In addition, as education develops, the pressure and difficult students facing with become more and more. Now, University students have spent a host of time on their study. For example, according to a survey by University of Virginia, some professors and experts point out that 80% university students cannot afford their study, even 20% students deem all their time has been taken place by study. If basic science should be a mandatory course for all university students, in other words, there are more courses for students to have, we can image all of university students will be teem with classes and homework. Who can really enjoy their four-year precious university lives? There is no any reason to make students' university lives become boring and dull. Hence, basic science should not be a mandatory course for all university students.

Nevertheless, it is widely admitted that basic science indeed can bring some subtle benefits to university students, although it is not related with their field of study. But, we should accept the fact that there is nothing more important than students’ university lives and working future.（感觉这一段可以放第二段。。）  
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In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, hardly can I agree with the statement that basic science which is not correlated with students' majors should be a mandatory course for all university students.

好好的文章。。特别是倒装句。。一开始我还没读明白。。别提我写了。
感觉新东方老师说过，写的时候就自顾自的写了。。看来笔记还要认真看一遍啊。

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4.2Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to truly understand world events, reading newspaper is better than watching TV., F0 e& n' @6 Y( b$ N& u

Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about which media can help people to truly understand world events. Some individuals hold the view that reading newspaper is the best way to understand world events. However, from my perspective, watching TV is a better mean to be familiar with world events.

To begin with, TV can transmit pictures manifesting world events to all of people watching it. These pictures are so important that it is impossible for newspaper to compete with TV. As we all know, newspaper only tells readers world events by words. Even though the reporters use every accurate word to create perfect news, all of words are compiled by people. In other words, all of newspaper is few subjective, because reporters cannot eschew the problem that the news he interviewing must embody his opinion towards world events. It is certain that newspaper cannot satisfy readers' requirement that they desire to know a totally objective would events. In contrast, TV can complete the requirement easily by showing pictures, in that pictures are immediately taken from the spot where the world event happened(还没论证完,要加上那些画面为什么又客观了). To sum up, TV can bring more objective world events to people. (这段的逻辑论证结构不错,但是还要点到为什么报道了客观世界就可以让人们更懂得世界大事)

In addition, TV can inform people of world events more quickly than newspaper. It is an irrefutable fact that when people get up every morning, they will pick up newspaper in front of their homes' doors, and then read it. One day's newspaper only tells us one day's world events, but, as our society develops, information becomes more and more crucial(最好加上是更快地收到信息越来越重要). For example, if you were an investor or a businessman, newspaper should be useless and meaningless for you to read, because some world events maybe influence stock prices seriously in stock markets. Just like a English saying goes: Time is money.(这句话是多余的) Comparing with newspaper, I believe TV can render any information on the screen, if investors' TV is open(这句话最好说成与报纸相比,电视可以让人们更快地了解新闻,只要人们打开电视;毕竟与报纸相比,电视可以让新闻在屏幕上呈现不是常识么,与了解世界大事也没什么必然关系是不= =). The earlier people know world events, the more time they can take advantage of to truly understand world events.

Nevertheless, it is widely admitted that newspaper also have(has) some subtle benefits. For instance, newspaper is easier to be carried out by people, so it can provide people to understand world events at any time in any places. But, we also are clear that in group to truly understand world events is better than reading newspaper.

In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, I cannot agree with the statement that watching TV rather than reading newspaper is the best way to understand world events any more.

这篇写得不错也~hohohoho~~~

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Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about whether mobile phone should be used in public transportation. （is there?呵呵）Some individuals hold the negative view that mobile phone should be inhibited（用词不太恰当） in public transportation. However, from my perspective, people may use mobile phone in public transportation.
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8 F6 [  Z0 R: ETo begin with, customers have rights to use mobile phone in public transportation. Since people are allowed to listen to music, watch videos, and play games, the right of using mobile phone should also be respected. As we all know, as our technology and science develops, mobile phone has been refined for many times. Now, not only a call by mobile phone can we make, but also a host of software of all kinds of functions could be installed into mobile phone. With software assisting, we freely take a picture, surf the Internet, and compile files. Of course, listening music, watching videos, and playing games are also included in those software’s functions. Therefore, people should be allowed to use mobile phone in public transportation.
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; G9 Z5 ~' p( w8 |  x2 R. M& u* RIn addition, now mobile phone plays a very crucial role in our daily lives, and which produces a profound effect in our society. It is an irrefutable fact that most of people have their mobile phones. According to a survey by University of Virginia, some professors and experts point out those 95% students in United States of American possess their mobile phone. Using mobile phone has been a part in our daily lives. Once the policy that people should be allowed to use mobile phone in public transportation was applied, people would lose the chance and convenience to communicate with their family and co-workers. In that situation, when their family and co-workers encounter troubles and need their help, but those people are in public transportation, which means their family and co-workers cannot connect with them, it will damage the relationship between people and their family and maybe lead to their business failure. Hence, that mobile phone should be banned in public transportation will bring much negative influences.
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9 k4 R- a0 |2 n6 q! oNevertheless, it is universally acknowledged that some people like talking aloud with their mobile phone in public transportation. I deem the behavior should be under control, but not limitied to mobile phone. From my experience, it is rare to see people talking aloud with their mobile phone in public transportation. So, it is irrational to stop people using mobile phone in public transportation.
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: ~$ o& j( o" H  ~8 W& h7 b8 D9 `In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned above, hardly can I agree with the statement that people should be allowed to use mobile phone in public transportation
句式很多样 结构很完整 例证也很多 两个主要论点 1 手机大家都有 大家都用 大家有权利用 2 手机有联系的作用 禁止它太不方便了
3 我们限制人们不要太吵 就好了 要文明使用手机

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4.4Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The car has had a greater influence on our life than the airplane has.: p! w) n( `8 n

Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about which transportation has had(可以不用完成时啦~) a greater influence. Some individuals hold the view that the airplane has a greatest(greater?!) effect on our life. However, from my perspective, the car should have a greater influence on our life than the airplane has. My reasons are following.

To begin with, the number of cars is more than the number of(可以用that代替~) airplanes in the world. According to the survey by University of Virginia, some experts and professors point out that the number of cars is 15 times more than the number of airplanes in the world. Not only science statistic, but my experience also can prove the fact that the number of cars is more than the number of airplanes in the world. It is very common for each family to possess one car or more than one cars, in contrast, it is rare to hear the news that some families have their own airplanes. Therefore, we can draw a conclusion that the frequency of using cars is more than the frequency of using airplanes. （感觉单纯说数量多还没有论证到影响大的点子上也=w=）
In addition, most of transportation companies use cars rather airplanes to convey goods. Even though the airplane has a lot of benefits, for example, airplanes can render goods quickly and safely, the greatest drawback which cannot be ignored is transportation by airplanes cost companies so much money that few companies are willing to use airplanes. During the time when I worked for three transportation companies I never found any goods had been transported by airplanes. Most of goods are sent to those customers by cars. From my working experience, it is obvious that cars are widely used in transportation, but airplanes cannot show their potential in transportation. Since transportation correlates with our life every aspect such as living, dining, and traveling（这句话的论点上文并没有论证到哦~）. Hence, cars produce a profounder influence on our life than airplanes exert.

Nevertheless, it is widely admitted that airplanes indeed make some subtle effect（s） on some people's life. For instance, airplanes provide a（n） excellent way of transportation from China to American for most of Chinese students who desire to study in American. Comparing with cars, i believe（这句话的语法结构不对哦~分句的逻辑主语如果是I的话就变成了我与汽车相比较了；应该是compared with cars , airplanes have more functions?!好吧，也许是这样的= =） airplanes' function to our daily life is far from cars' function. 这个让步段没有打回去。

In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, hardly can I agree with those people's opinion that the airplane has a greatest（如果是最高级前面冠词要用the） effect on our life. I deem that the car should have a deeper effect on our life than the airplane has.
这次的段内逻辑没什么问题了，但感觉第一个理由有点没论证到位呢~让步段记得要打回去啊！！！

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4.6Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Advertisement is a waste of a company's money and time, because consumers have already known what they want to buy.
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Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about advertisement. Some individuals hold the view that advertisement is a waste of a company's money and time. However, from my perspective, the advertisement is a necessary payment for any companies which desire to obtain their success. My reasons are as following.
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To begin with, it is universally acknowledged that competition in business become more and more serious.(个人建议用fierce形容竞争） It is a common phenomenon that several companies sell the same product or provide the same service to their customers. The first decision to confronting the competition is making advertisements, because advertisement can amplify the popularity of the company' goods. For example, Pepsi Company and Coca Cola Company are two competitors in selling Coke(Coke特指可口可乐，原来百事用过cola不过现在也不用了，就用pepsi) market. As I know, their products are basically the same flavor(flavor 放their后面吧，要不然按照主系表结构这句话就变成products are flavor了） for most of people, but it is an irrefutable fact that Pepsi's Coke is sold more than Coca cola's Coke.（最好加个限定，比如在我家乡，因为全球看来百事卖的没有可口可乐好，题外话可口可乐在中国最巅峰的时候据说碳酸饮料市场占有率高达75%牛X啊） The reason why Pepsi Company can defeat Coca Cola Company is Pepsi company take advantage of advertisements to make more and more people realize its brand. Therefore, the advertisement is a sharply weapon to compete with other rivals rather than a waste of a company's money and time in business field.
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In addition, as our technology and science boost, more and more inventions will be invented. The more inventions appear, the more new products should be produced, whereas customers have insufficient information and knowledge to understand new products' function, trait and usage. It is a high time for advertisements to make a breakthrough. For instance, when every year Ford's novel cars was invented, Ford company always publicize its novel cars by advertisements in TV, radio, and the Internet. Hence, advertisement is an essential mean to introduce companies' products to the public.
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Even though some people deem they are very clear about what they want to buy, few people can restrain lures of new products. Since the history told us that people's demands is always increasing and varying, it is certain and obvious that consumers like try new products. So, most of consumers have no idea about what they want to purchase when entering their local supermarkets.5 {( T5 J2 l( Q- V( C3 I

0 B$ P8 o% h0 X+ {- p/ m3 zIn a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, hardly can I agree with the statement that advertisement is a waste of a company's money and time, because consumers have already known what they want to buy. I deem that the advertisement will play a crucial role in companies' marketing.

语法上我几乎看不出错误，就几个用词我个人觉得可以做的更好。