作文本1.21更新到今天！(低落)

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Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about traveling. Some individuals hold the view that the best way to travel is a group led by a tour guide. From my perspective, I totally agree with their opinion. My reasons are as following.2 b( S- ?8 C- i3 I- A8 r模板经典！！！！！啊。。。。。。我也领教过了。嗯嗯，好！！！！

+ Z6 d) Q0 N7 H' r% R2 `To begin with, traveling by a tour guide will bring a host of benefits to travelers. A tour guide can constantly tell travelers a large amount of information and background about the traveling place. For example, last year I went to China. During my China trip, I learned a host of Chinese history and culture from the Chinese guide. If I had not traveled by a tour guide, I would have obtained much information and knowledge about China. Therefore, the best way to travel is lead by a tour guide.结合自身，好，
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In addition, traveling by a tour guide can save travelers' time and energy. It is universally acknowledged that travelers need much time to arrange their trips' plans before they start their traveling. But now our studying and working pressure becomes more and more serious, who is willing to spare the time to make a trip plan? The answer to solve the problem is that to find a tour guide. Once travelers have a tour guide, they will not worry about trip plans. Not only the trip plan can traveler acquires from a tour guide, but also a tour guide can recommend them to visit special places. Hence, traveling by a tour guide is the best way.* b$ f0 O' h- l) ^结合实情，好，但应对比不导游的来说会更好！！！

3 p: \0 H$ e% z! u1 g( ^6 f+ dNevertheless, traveling in a group lead by a tour guide will make trips safer and safer, because a tour guide is an experienced local people who are familiar with everything in the place. Furthermore, traveling in a group makes travelers to heip each other when any person is in emergency.
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In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, I believe that the best way to travel is in a group lead by a tour guide.领教过LZ的经典结尾，我都无语LZ的惊人毅力，在概括一下会更好！！！

s499992008UID: 2688967

Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about our land. Some individuals hold the view that we should save land for endangered animals. However, from my perspective, human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. My reasons are as following.
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To begin with, it is universally acknowledged that without food, houses, and job offers, we, human cannot survive in the world, so it is necessary for people to establish farmland, housing, and industry system. As following the world’s economy rapidly developing, the population is booming. Hence, human's demands for farmland, housing, and industry also are expanding. According to a survey by University of Virginia, some professors and experts point out that as United States Of American's population number has added 60000 since 1998, farmland has been increased 15% since 1998 in United States Of American; houses are more 500000 than those in 1998; industry provides more than 600000 job positions than that in 1988. It is obvious that the more people are born, the more land should to(to 去掉) be invested on farmland, housing, and industry. Since the tendency that the world population is increasing cannot be prevented, human needs for farmland, housing, and industry play a more and more crucial role in our society. 3 f" n7 ]! h! u9 e* S# ^' f
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In addition, comparing with saving land for endangered animals, anyone believes that human basic needs are obviously more vital. Whether those endangered species are dead out or living, which is not correlated with human basic needs, because until now, many endangered species have died, but our life is still peace and happy. If people never build farmland, housing, and industry, in other words, people ignore their basic needs, human will be endangered animals？？. Actually, it is nature that people require food, houses and jobs to satisfy their basic needs which cannot be ignored by anyone in that we all are people. Therefore, human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals（这段不知道在说什么）.4 k0 d& H1 S1 x. G
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Nevertheless, endangered animals should be protected. But, we cannot allow our life quality to be degraded. It is irrational for people to save endangered animals by the land which should be served for farmland, housing, and industry. If some people still desire to save endangered animals, why not consider to help those victims who have no food, houses, and jobs.
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8 t* m# m' M7 j( V- x3 v* g! XIn a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, I believe that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are the most important.（楼主啊。。既然说我语法不行。帮我指正下啊。。光说。。我也看不出来哪错了啊。。）

bruce520UID: 2634940

4.16 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The government should invest more money in sports rather than in arts.9 Q9 q, x2 _) W" u4 u1 C8 @# {
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Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about the government. Some individuals hold the view that the government should invest more money in arts. However, from my perspective, the government should invest more money in sports. My reasons are as following.【你这种开头方式似乎并不适和本题啊，人家问你agree or disagree，你再斟酌一下，貌似不贴切，】
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To begin with, sport plays a very crucial role in our daily life, because if one people 【改成person who吧】never take part in a kind of sport, he will get obsess【这是什么意思啊，没懂】 and various sicknesses. Sports such as basketball, football, and baseball can render a competitive spirit between one team and another team and culture a spirit of cooperation. If the government invests more money in sports, citizens will not only enjoy the pleasure and happiness which sports can bring to them, but also make them to be a people who possess a healthy body and a positive mood. Compared with art, sports are more vital than art【换一下指代嘛】, in that it is difficult for art to give people healthy bodies【你这些理由似乎有些牵强哦】. A healthy body is so important that on one dare ignore it. According to a survey by University of Virginia, some experts and professors point out that 58% American has realized how vital health is. As economy is booming, more and more people suffering under the working and studying pressure are struggling to their goals at the cost of their health. Finally, when they complete their tasks or finish their jobs, they find out that their healths have been damaged. In the situation, it is impossible for them to ask health back. In other words, when the health leaves us, we cannot pursue the health back. Since art cannot cure any people's diseases, what can improve citizens' health is sports rather than art. Therefore, the government should invest more money in sports.. q; P( E2 e( F# p

/ G* c' {) I  d: ^# t# D; o: `/ `In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, I believe that the government should invest more money in sports.

楼主，你不会是想去Virginia吧？我也有此打算哦。

蔓落UID: 2779470

Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring（这是不是有点夸张了。。。上次有人给我指出类似的地方，就是其实可能明明就只是一个小争论，我按照模板写得有点过了。。。） volume about the government. Some individuals hold the view that the government should invest more money in arts. However, from my perspective, the government should invest more money in sports.（这句可以改写一下，尽量不要重复题目） My reasons are as following.（可以改成HERE LIST SOME OF MY REASONS)
To begin with, sport plays a very crucial role in our daily life, because if one people never take part in a kind of sport, he will get obsess and various sicknesses. Sports such as basketball, football, and baseball can render a competitive spirit between one team and another team and(去掉and,用逗号） culture a spirit of cooperation. If the government invests（换词） more money in sports, citizens will not only enjoy the pleasure and happiness which sports can bring to them, but also make them to be a people（。。。。a？） who possess a healthy body and a positive mood. （这里的单复。。。）Compared with art, sports are more vital than art, in that it is difficult for art to give people healthy bodies. A healthy body is so important that on one dare ignore it. According to a survey by University of Virginia, some experts and professors point out that 58% American has realized how vital health is. As economy is booming, more and more people suffering under the working and studying pressure are struggling to their goals at the cost of their health. Finally, when they complete their tasks or finish their jobs, they find out that their healths have been damaged. In the situation, it is impossible for them to ask health back.（还是单复问题） In other words, when the health leaves us, we cannot pursue the health back. Since art cannot cure any people's diseases, what can improve citizens' health is sports rather than art. Therefore, the government should invest more money in sports.（楼主啊，多分几段吧。。。写在一起，有点混乱。。。不过值得学习的是你比较了art，sports，向你学习~~~）
In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, I believe that the government should invest more money in sports.（最后一段还是多写点吧~~~可以发表下自己的意见或者什么的，或是说现在需要发展SPORTS，以后发展ARTS什么的）

楼主的楼好高好高了啊~~~加油啊加油~~~

bruce520UID: 2634940

4.18 Do you agree or disagree the following statement？Successful people take new things and take risks rather than the thing that they've done well.; |: [+ [2 Z( C9 c

0 u$ S7 v& X9 f+ @3 p' ONowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about how people obtain the success. Some individuals hold the view that successful people finish their tasks well. However, from my perspective, people who try the new chance will get success. My reasons are as following./ a, t! r0 ]( |$ ^# `

% c+ c/ M$ J) `% T! b: P: \( H& f! eTo begin with, most of people in our society pursue their success by trying new things. For example, it is universally acknowledged that Edison is one of the greatest inventors in the world. In order to find a suitable material to be the filament, Edison tried thousands of materials to make tests. Finally, Edison found that bamboo is the most suitable material to be the filament. And then Edison applied his discovery on business field, so we can use lamps to acquire light. With more and more filaments produced and sold, it is no doubt that Edison became the successful people. Therefore, we can conclude that trying new things makes people to be successful people. 【这个例子哦那个来说明trying new things有点牵强啊，说有毅力才是真的】2 d! i. y
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In addition, successful people are bound to try new things, because success requires them to constantly devote their time and energy.[不错的论点，但是后半句让人有点想不通和前面的联系] As our social competition becomes more and more fierce, it is difficult for any talents to be successful without trying some novel things. For instance, my father is a dress designer. He often tells me that if he cannot design new dresses, his salary will be decreased. Since my father can always add new element into dresses, he is a very successful in his field. From my father's experience, it is obvious that successful people need to take new things.
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In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, I believe that successful people take new things and take risks.
论述结构已经日趋模块化了，我学习的榜样哦。不过在结尾来个总结回应更好哦我认为

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Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about how people obtain the success.(我知道楼主的模板，我个人感觉有点不太恰当) Some individuals hold the view that successful people finish their tasks well. However, from my perspective, people who try the new chance will get success. My reasons are as following.
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/ h+ H( `0 ?9 L( `To begin with, most of people in our society pursue their success by trying new things. For example, it is universally acknowledged that Edison is one of the greatest inventors in the world. In order to find a suitable material to be the filament, Edison tried thousands of materials to make tests. Finally, Edison found that bamboo is the most suitable material to be the filament. And then Edison applied his discovery on business field, so we can use lamps to acquire light. With more and more filaments produced and sold, it is no doubt that Edison became the successful people. Therefore, we can conclude that trying new things makes people to be successful people. （多写一句，说发现新东西能够带来不一样的效果因此+总结）
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9 }' d0 O8 k" X; M# E2 _In addition, successful people are bound to try new things, because success requires them to constantly devote their time and energy. As our social competition becomes more and more fierce, it is difficult for any talents to be successful without trying some novel things. For instance, my father is a dress designer. He often tells me that if he cannot design new dresses, his salary will be decreased. Since my father can always add new element into dresses, he is a very successful in his field. From my father's experience, it is obvious that successful people need to take new things.（不是很说服人，新东西需要研究，已经研究过的东西也需要改进啊 应该加个让步）, [/ Q% p+ N- P0 _4 ]/ M- |' y% f
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In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, I believe that successful people take new things and take risk
我觉得写得不如以前的好 有点短，少一段.楼主很踏实 从来不曾改出个拼写错误 很厉害！ 加油！！！！

s499992008UID: 2688967

Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about whether most people prefer others making a decision for them. Some individuals agree with the statement. However, from my perspective, most people like to make a decision for themselves. My reasons are as following.
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4 p- ]* B9 F  t) K% jTo begin with, everyone should make decisions by himself, because some decisions need be made by themselves. For example, when I finished my college courses, I must make a decision about my job. It is universally acknowledged that the first job offer is very crucial for anyone in that any job offer is a chance for anyone to develop his career. Job offers are so important that people should consider them carefully, and then make decisions about whether we should accept job offers. It is obvious that making personal decisions such as accepting job offers is mostly depended on people's personal information. Since there is no one than people themselves to know their information better in the world, people prefer to make decisions for them(意思很明了。。但一些词可以用一些高级词汇。。像important 这些之类的词应该换一换。。。).
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( N$ j0 L9 X' S5 U& @7 X# X7 E1 J* IIn addition, most of people's decisions will make profound effect on themselves. If people let other people make decisions, once those decisions made by others produce some negative influence, those people must be suffered by others decisions. No matter how wise decisions they made, it is very unfair for those people who let other people make decisions to tolerate those loss. For example, when I was a child, my parent always bought math books to me. Actually, I was interested in history books rather than math books, but my parent still gave me math books to read. Hence, as soon as I encounter any math problems, I will refuse to deal with them. I believe I indeed have a talent in math, but my parent's decision ruins my interest on math这个例子不错。。。.* E6 d2 L; s4 ~$ v$ f: m5 S
Therefore, other people should not make decision for you.
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In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned above, I believe that most people prefer making a decision for themselves than others making decision for them.
楼主很明显已经练过很多篇了。。全文主旨很明显了。。也非常易懂，全文读下来我没有卡壳。。也许这是个优点，也是个缺点。。用词的选择上是不是还需要再加强些？好像还缺少亮点。。。当然这也是我作文缺少的地方。。
至于楼主说我我不认真修改。。。我倒是不太同意。。我修改作文的时候也是因人而异的。。我一般每天10点以后才上网。。上来的时候一般我的作文已经被人评完了。。这时候我就去评别人的。。有时候你会发现。。有些人批改的很尽力。。此时我也会尽我最大的能力去批改。。相反，有时候的一些人显然就是草草了之。。我也就。。。。。有时候我也想帮别人侧地的去该。。可是我发现我没有那个能力。。这也许是真正的瓶颈所在。。说这么多无非就是想说你对我可能有点误解。。

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Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about how to use our land. Some individuals hold the view that we should reserve land for endanger animals. However, in my perspective, it is more vital to reserve land for human beings. My reasons are as following.

To begin with, It is universally acknowledged that nobody cannot(can) survive without houses, food, and jobs. Hence, people must reserve land for building houses, planting wheat, and establishing factories. No matter how advanced technology people use, land is necessary to provide people houses, food, and jobs. If we do not reserve land for ourselves, it is certain for us not to satisfy our demands. So, we should reserve land for human beings.

In addition, it is a tendency that people become more and more (什么呀？忘写咯~^^等等……你的意思是the world population is soaring at a staggering rate吧？). The more people are born, the more requirements for houses, food, jobs（额……第三次出现了诶，不妨改成food and shelter?）, which means the more demands for land. According to a survey by Virginia University, some professors and experts point out that the population in the world has been doubled since 1900, so the speed of investing on land also is increasing. Untill now, there is an irrefutable fact that most of land has been occupied by people rather than animals, so it is impossible for those people to move out of their homes. As some scientists predict that the population is increased, more and more land should be reserved for people. Therefore, reserving land for human beings plays a more crucial role in our society.

Nevertheless, we should spare some land for endanger（endangered) animals, in that animals are our human being's friends. I believe that no one desires to see that only one species human being live in the world, but how to deal with such many people? Sometimes, we should confront with the fact and then choose an rational solution.

In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, hardly can I agree with some people's opinion that we should reserve land for endanger(endangered) animals.

加油！

happyxixi1011UID: 2755572

Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about how to use our land. Some individuals hold the view that we should reserve land for endanger(endangered) animals. However, in my perspective, it is more vital to reserve land for human beings. My reasons are

as following.

begin with, It(it) is universally acknowledged that nobody cannot survive without houses, food, and jobs. Hence, people must reserve land for building houses, planting wheat(我觉得用Grain比较好哦), and establishing factories. No matter how advanced technology people use, land is necessary to provide people houses, food, and jobs. If we do not reserve land for ourselves, it is certain for us not to satisfy our demands. （这句话的读起来好怪，建议改成 our demand certainly can not be satisfied）So, we should reserve land for human beings.

In addition, it is a tendency that people become more and more(建议改成it is a tendency that the population in the world is increasing continuing). The more people are born, the more requirements for houses, food, jobs, which means the more demands for land. According to a survey by Virginia University, some professors and experts point out that the population in the world has been doubled since 1900, so the speed of investing on land also is increasing. Untill now, there is an irrefutable fact that most of land has been occupied by people rather than animals, so it is impossible for those people to move out of their homes. As some scientists predict that the population is increased, more and more land should be reserved for people. Therefore, reserving land for human beings plays a more crucial role in our society.

Nevertheless, we should spare some land for endanger animals, in(for) that animals are our human being's friends. I believe that no one desires(建议改成want) to see that only one species(改成our) human being live in the world, but how to deal with such(so) many people? Sometimes, we should confront with the fact and then choose an rational solution.! d' ^& ~1 n! h; ~
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In a nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, hardly can I agree with some people's opinion that we should reserve land for endanger animals.