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TOPIC: ARGUMENT200 - Statistics collectedfrom dentists indicate that three times more men than women faint whilevisiting the dentist. This evidence suggests that men are more

likely to be distressed about having dentalwork done than women are. Thus, dentists who advertise to attract patientsshould target the male consumer and emphasize both the

effectiveness of their anesthetictechniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients.





According to a statistics showing thatthree times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist, the authorconcludes that men are more likely to be distressed about have dental work downthan women. Then the writer accordingly suggest that dentists should target themale consumer and emphasize both their anesthetic techniques' s effectivenessand their staff's sensitivity when attracting patients. However, this argumentsuffers several flaws ,which render it unconvincing.

To begin with, the result of thatstatistics is not sufficient to demonstrate that men are more likely to bedistressed than women are when having dental work done. The author provide noevidence to show that faint is mainlycaused by distress .Lacking that evidence ,it is entirely possible
that other factors ,such as nervous, allergyto anesthetic, that mainly cause the faint. Perhaps, nervous should beresponsible for most faint in dentist's and men are more likely to be nervousthan woman. If this is the case,it could also result the phenomenon that more men get faint than women whilevisiting the dentist.

Secondly, supposing that men is likely tobe distressed about having dental work done than woman are , the arguer'srecommendation that dentist should target the male consumer is not convincing as it stands. The arguer fails toprovide the numbers of both men and women who would need to go to thedentist's. It is likely that the numberof women who need to visit the dentist is much larger than that of men. If thatis true , it seems more reasonable to target the female consumer because theyhave more potential consumers.


Finally, the writer' s recommendation thatdentist should emphasize the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or sufferingpatients seems
unnecessary. As we know,a patient at dentists' s feel nervous mainly because they are uncertainingabout the safety of the dental work or they are afraid to be too distressed andthe sensitivity of their staff may not help to reduce nervous.

In sum, the author'srecommendation is not convincing as it stands. To bolster it , the author mustprovide clear evidence to show that men are more likely to be distressed abouthaving dental work done than women are and the numbers of both men and womenwho would go to the dentists' s. To better access the argument, I would need toknow what is the first thing that dentist's patient care about and what appealto them.



//此argument，只找到三个错误（第三个基本是凑用的），找不其它的错误了
// 1  statistics 不能说明男人比女人更怕痛
// 2  就算男人比女人怕痛，也没理由将目标锁定在男顾客上
// 3 强调对病人的周到对于紧张的病人是不必要的