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本帖最后由 __ay 于 2010-3-1 18:52 编辑
27# emteddybear
History, as one of the humanistic studies, is the study of human past, which will help us to understand how past changed, how current is changing, and even how future may change. To make history easily and effectively be studied, people trade off the two creators of history--the individuals and the groups of people. Sometimes people emphasize groups of people, while most of the time, some great individuals are paid more attention.
Great individuals, who are different
from other groups of people are reasonably placed more emphasis than groups of people. For one thing, great individuals are more characteristic and attractive so as to easily be remembered which makes history easily be studied. For example, when we are talking about Industrial Revolution as a rapid major change in an economy marked by the general introduction of power-driven machinery or by an important change in the prevailing types and methods of use of such machines, it is so abstract for us to imagine the vision of that period, and someone generally cannot understand what the power-driven machinery really is unless he/she is a engineer. However if we mention that James Watt invented the steam engine, marking the beginning of the Industrial Revolution, people will clearly understand the power-driven machinery was something like steam engine. For another, emphasizing great individuals provides some examples for contemporaries to study, which tells(imply/indicate/realize什么的) people what are needed if he/she wants to be a great(great可以换成outstanding remarkable unforgettable等等的词组试试) man or how to make our life better for a individual. People like to learn events of Albert Einstein, Newton, Madame Curie to know how to become a physical scientist, or learn events of Gorge Bush and Barack Obama to know how to become a leader.
这段提到了名人在历史中的作用 通过名人让人们更容易记住历史事件,从历史中学习 但是讨论的有些浅
其实最好是在升华到社会的角度 从历史意义角度出发来探讨 比如inspire people , shape the mind, 所以社会进步
题目讨论的是the study of history 后面又说什么能左右历史发展 可见更好的study history不仅仅只是memorize那么简单了 应该还有analyse的
However, when we follow the famous few in history, we should not forget(ignore会不会好些) groups of people, because both famous individuals and groups are creators of history, and they just play different roles in the stage of history.
Firstly, the development of society is achieved from the changes of social forms, which are formed and changed by group of people. In order to survive, people need basic necessity and other things, and people create material and moral wealth. In order to live better, people try their best to create more and more wealth, in other word, all of the normal people make society developed and the total condition of the society is defined as social forms. But when the development is restricted, which shows this kind of social form is not fit for that period because of economic stagnation or majority of people living unhappy, some new social form is needed by masses. For example, the Civil War in America was caused by whether to abolish slavery. At that time, slaveries were the bottom of the society, and they fight for their free and respect. Fortunately, the Civil war ended with the abolition of slavery; otherwise, there must be some other war for this problem.
逻辑有些混乱 人们的意愿决定了社会的动向 -> 因为人们为了满足需求的一系列动作导致社会进步 然后直接转到社会的群体变更决定社会发展 那么之间人们意愿和群体变更之间的关系说的很模糊 只是说发展得到抑制,那么为什么得到抑制呢? 说人们unhappy 那么什么东西导致了他们的unhappy呢? some new social form有什么优势可以取代原来的? 讨论停留在表面没有深入
Secondly, a great individual, who come form masses, is the decision maker in creating history, based on the history stage built by groups of people. For example, after 911 Incidents in USA, George Walker Bush, as the president of America, played an important role to recover the country economy destroyed by these incidents. Although, it is the special President System that gives him special power. But how to use it is his business. During that time, Bush showed America citizens his Firmness, braveness in controlling the situation at home and abroad. And he succeeded. But(转折不恰当吧?) I cannot guarantee the result would be better if the president was not Mr. Bush.
例子蛮契合的 但是结尾应该强调一下个人对历史的影响 铺垫有些仓促
To summarize, in order to analysis history better, we must pay attention both on elites and groups of people, because they both contribute a lot to the history creation. However, to make history more easily be studied and more funny, it is reasonable to place more emphasis on individuals
例子多挺好...不过应该多一些论证 词的重复频率蛮高的 多用一些同义词替代 多用一些衔接词来强化逻辑性 (after all, thus,therefore 啥的)
讨论的深度可以在深入些和具体些 表达方式有些单调 建议在这方面做一些强化
个人愚见~~~ 呵呵
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