[1010G精英组] ISSUE&ARGU 习作 by Group Energy

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The development of technology has brought great change to our society, since human beings came to birth hundreds of thousands of years ago. From the hand period to the mechanic period, and then to the information time, the every innovation of technology has changed he social circumstances, and the accumulation of knowledge applied to life has enlightened men and women. However, although the progress of technology has influenced the social customs and ethics, they are not determined by its progress.

Technology has changed our lives profoundly in history, and the prosperity and thrive on the modern civilization cannot be separated from the contribution of technology. In agriculture, without the introduction of the mechanization and various technologies to promote the production of produce, the burdens of the struggle for survival were not lessened. Thus, there would be hardly so much time to enjoy life. In industry, without so many technological innovations, for example, steam engine, which inaugurated the industrial revolution, people would not be freed from much burdensome labor, even to say have leisure time to play golf or watch football games. All these changes are benefited from technology and to some extent change the way of people's life, that is, social customs gradually change by the way.

Furthermore, technology has also influenced the traditions of the society in some sense. For instance, before the 20th century, women are thought to stay at home, nurture children and care for the elders, and this assumption is so well accepted by the people that no tentative attempts are tried to change it. But technology made such thinking change possible. After the industrial revolution, the unreasonable conviction was completely changed. Women are employed by many factories, government companies, and the role they played in the society is becoming more and more important.

On the other hand, the social ethics are challenged by the new appearance of technology, say, the cloning, euthanasia, and the internet victim and so on. As is commonly believed that the cycle of one's life is the nature of nature, but the euthanasia will break up the laws of the nature. However, some people think that to live or to die, a man in a democratic country has the right to choose. The controversy goes on, and nobody knows of the result, to respect the nature or to protect the right of a social man, but it is certain that technology gives us the opportunity to doubt.

However, the influence on the social customs and ethic does not mean that technology determines them. The existence of human being is based on some basic social customs and ethics, such as dignity, respect each other, sincerity, integrity, honesty and so forth. These are tested right and basic in history and different peoples in the world, so that we should confirm to them. As a result, the function of the technology should be restricted to guarantee that the basic system of social customs and ethics is not destroyed.

In short, technology has made a great many contributions to the progress of human, and the benefits it takes are immeasurable. However, we should use the technology correctly and ensure the development on the right way. Social customs and ethics and technologies affect each other, and they promote each other.

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Issue147

"Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them."

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The issue of weather Tradition and modernization are incompatible and we must choose between them is a complex and controversial one. Different people hold different opinions due to their respective ways of looking at an issue. In my point of view, however, I agree that, to some extent, there are indeed some conflictions between the tradition and modernization. Rather, I hold the opinion that it is unnecessary for us to choose one and abandon the other, and what we should do is absorbing its quintessence and discarding its dross, and finally maximizing the benefits of the two for our social civilization. My will be greatly strengthened by the following discussion.

To begin with, admittedly, the tradition and the modernization conflict in many ways, such as the traditional production methods and advanced manufacturing, and superstition beliefs and modern scientific knowledge. For example, in the automobile industry, instead of the traditional production whose most procedures are predominantly done by hand, the modern manufacturing is getting the more specific robots involved with higher precision, less time consuming, and lower cost. We definitely choose the modern ones rather than the traditional methods. Similarly in the field of medication, for example, the ancient Chinese believe that the alchemists' “gold cooks” can make people immortality and are not hesitate to obtain one even at great expense, while the modern science tells us that no one could avoid the destiny of death, and the so called “gold cooks” has little function about medical care and sometimes maybe poisons for people since they involve deadly heavy metal contamination.

However, some traditional customs and cultures are still preserved from generation to generation, whatever the continually modernization of society. For example, the Spring Festival which is used to be viewed as a convention for the ancient Chinese to eradicating the assumed monster “Xi” is passing down from the ancient times to now. Although, with the development of the modernization we know that there is no monster at all, we Chinese still keep the custom as the most important traditional holiday in which we get together with families, eat dumplings, shoot off firecrackers, draw festival pictures, and stick couplets. We still preserve such traditions in the modern time just as a way for people to express their feelings for best wishes of a new year. It is the same situation when it is comes to the culture. As we known, there are uncountable languages in the world because of different regions, nations, and counties. Some of languages are spoken widely, while others are not. Although, the languages of minorities are threatened with extinction, we try our best to use the modern technologies to preserve the traditional ones because we regard these languages as an indispensable treasure for human civilization.

In addition, seemingly contradictory, the tradition is the base of the modernization, and it can be good for the development of modernization. The modernization is often an extension, or new interaction, of tradition, or at least a variation on it. For example, most the scientific research works are derived from the traditional ones. Just as Newton once says that if he can see farther, it is because he stands on the shoulder of giants. We learn from the traditions in order to figure out who we were and what we have done, which will finally enlighten us about who we want to be and what we will do. There is Chinese saying that when drinking water think of its source. That is to say that we get so many achievements which contribute to the modern society is because of the base of traditions. Without experience of our predecessors we cannot go far let alone having a promising future.

To sum up, basing my conclusion on the illustrations and exposition mentioned above, accordingly, I hold that tradition and modernization do conflict sometimes. However, the tradition and modernization are not incompatible and necessarily mutually exclusive. Therefore, we had better to combine the tradition and modernization in our pursuit of social development.

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The issue of whether tradition and modernization are incompatible and we must choose between them is a complex and controversial one(开篇指出本问题的复杂性). Different people hold different opinions due to their respective ways of looking at this issue. In my point of view, however, I agree that, to some extent, there are indeed some conflictions between the tradition and the modernization（部分肯定原观点）. Rather, I hold the opinion that it is unnecessary for us to choose one and abandon the other, what we should do is absorbing its quintessence and discarding its dross, and finally maximizing the benefits of the two for our social civilization. My will be greatly strengthened by the following discussion（连接句，感觉这么写有些奇怪）.（个人感觉开头部分写得过多，我不知道开头将自己的各个分论点也详细表述出来是不是合适，还是提炼出来观点写下就可以？）

To begin with, admittedly, the tradition and the modernization conflict in many ways, such as the obsolete production methods and advanced manufacturing （另加个词和methods对应？）, and superstition beliefs and modern scientific knowledge. For example, in the automobile industry, instead of the traditional production whose most procedures are predominantly completed by hand, the modern manufacturing is getting the more specific robots involved with higher precision, less time consuming（consumed 定语？）, and lower cost. We definitely choose the modern ones rather than the traditional methods（ones 和methods互换好些吧）（Finn对例子的描述概括很好，特点很明显，学习了）. Similarly in the field of medication, for example, the ancient Chinese believe that the alchemists' “gold cooks（cook是指人的，待确认？）” can make people immortality and are not hesitate to obtain one even at great expense, while the modern science tells us that no one could avoid the destiny of death, and the so called “gold cooks” has little function about medical care and sometimes maybe（与sometimes有意思上的重叠） even poisons for people since the “gold cooks” involves （contains? ） deadly heavy metal contamination. （这一段论点很明确，例子也论述得好，一方面讲社会生产，另一方面将社会思想，不同深度）

However, some traditional customs and cultures are still preserved from generation to generation, whatever（有些困惑） the continual(adj.) modernization of society. For example, the Spring Festival which is used to be viewed as a convention for the ancient Chinese to eradicating the assumed monster “Xi” is passing down from the ancient times to now. Although, with the development of the modernization we know that there is no monster at all, we Chinese still keep the custom as the most important traditional holiday in which we get together with families, eat dumplings, shoot off firecrackers, draw festival pictures, and stick couplets. We still preserve such traditions in the modern time just as a way for people to express their feelings for best wishes of a new year. It is the same situation when it is comes to the culture. As we known, there are uncountable languages in the world because of different regions, nations, and counties. Some of languages are spoken widely, while others are not. Although, the languages of minorities are threatened with extinction, we try our best to use the modern technologies to preserve the traditional ones because we regard these languages as an indispensable treasure for human civilization.(论证方法和第二段类似，采用两个相似的例子从不同的角度证明论点，个人感觉两个例子比较类似，第二个例子应该跨度更大或者尝试一个更高的层次总结。另外感觉观点总结深化不够，论证略显单薄，建议适当笔墨加深论述传统习俗和文化的意义)

In addition, while seemingly contradictory, the tradition is the base of the modernization, and it can be good for the development of modernization. The modernization is often an extension, or new interaction, of tradition, or at least a variation on it. For example, most the scientific research works are derived from the traditional ones. Just as Newton once says that if he can see farther, it is because he stands on the shoulder of giants. We learn from the traditions in order to figure out who we were and what we have done, which will finally enlighten us about who we want to be and what we will do. There is a Chinese saying that when drinking water think of its source. That is to say that we get so many achievements which contribute to the modern society is because of the base of traditions(此句读起来有些别扭). Without experience of our predecessors we cannot go far let alone having a promising future.（个人感觉，作为主体的最后一段，需要对观点进行深化拔高，本段举的例子似乎对论证现代化源于传统并不特别契合，使得本段读起来不是那么appealing）

To sum up, basing my conclusion on the illustrations and exposition mentioned above, accordingly, I hold that tradition and modernization do conflict sometimes. However, the tradition and modernization are not incompatible and necessarily mutually exclusive. Therefore, we had better to combine the tradition and modernization in our pursuit of social development.

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The issue of weather Tradition and modernization are incompatible and we must choose between them is a complex and controversial one(去掉a 和one). Different people hold different opinions due to their respective ways of looking at an(the) issue. In my point of view, however(去掉，这里没有转折的意味), I agree that, to some extent, there are indeed some conflictions between the tradition and modernization. However, I would rather hold the opinion that it is unnecessary for us to choose one and abandon the other, and what we should do is absorbing its quintessence and discarding its dross, and finally maximizing the benefits of the two for our social civilization. My will be greatly strengthened by the following discussion.

To begin with, admittedly, the tradition and the modernization conflict in many ways, such as the traditional production methods and advanced manufacturing, and superstition beliefs and modern scientific knowledge. For example, in the automobile industry, instead of the traditional production whose most procedures are predominantly done by hand, the modern manufacturing is getting the more specific robots involved with higher precision. Less(另起一句，加强语气)time consuming, and lower the cost. We definitely choose the modern ones rather than the traditional methods.(这一句可以去掉) Similarly in the field of medication, for example, the ancient Chinese believe that the alchemists' “gold cooks” can make people immortality and are not hesitate to obtain one even at great expense, while the modern science tells us that no one could avoid the destiny of death, and the so called “gold cooks” has little function about medical care and sometimes maybe poisons for people since they involve deadly heavy metal contamination.（第一个例子很好，但是第二个我怀疑美国老师看不懂，因为我一开始没想到长生药的时候也没明白，）

However, some traditional customs and cultures are still preserved from generation to generation, whatever the continually modernization of society.（这句话很怪，试试 no matter what the continually social form is） For example, the Spring Festival which is used to be viewed as a convention for the ancient Chinese to eradicating the assumed monster “Xi” is passing down from the ancient times(time) to now. Although, with the development of the modernization we know that there is no monster at all, we Chinese still keep the custom as the most important traditional holiday in which we get together with families, eat dumplings, shoot off firecrackers, draw festival pictures, and stick couplets. We still preserve such traditions in the modern time just as a way for people to express their feelings for best wishes of a new year. It is the same situation when it is comes to the culture. As we known, there are uncountable languages in the world because of different regions, nations, and counties. Some of languages are spoken widely, while others are not. Although, the languages of minorities are threatened with extinction, we try our best to use the modern technologies to preserve the traditional ones because we regard these languages as an indispensable treasure for human civilization.(这一段的所有一人称改成三人称，更客观和有说服力，因为这不是你本人的自身经历故事，)

In addition, seemingly contradictory, the tradition is the base of the modernization, and it can be（do） good for the development of modernization. The modernization is often an extension, or new interaction, of tradition, or at least a variation on it. For example, most the scientific research works are derived from the traditional ones. Just as Newton once says that if he can see farther, it is because he stands on the shoulder of giants. We learn from the traditions in order to figure out who we were and what we have done, which will finally enlighten us about who we want to be and what we will do. There is Chinese saying that when drinking water think of its source. That is to say that we get so many achievements which contribute to the modern society is because of the base of traditions. Without experience of our predecessors we cannot go far let alone having a promising future.

To sum up, basing my conclusion on the illustrations and exposition mentioned above, accordingly, I hold that tradition and modernization do conflict sometimes. However, the tradition and modernization are not incompatible and necessarily mutually exclusive. Therefore, we had better to combine the tradition and modernization in our pursuit of social development.

nanfeng25899UID: 2629871

占。。。

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In the industrial society, tradition and modernization are always being considered as two contrary elements. Politicians, scholars, economists, use the controversial topic to sell their values or opinions on it. However, I believe that tradition and modernization are not necessarily incompatible, they can be uniformed together in people’s daily life.

In academic research area, it is difficult to distinguish which theory is completely traditional and which one hasn’t affected by former theories. Tradition and modernization both exist in the science research. We can use the modern equipment to verify a tradition theory. At the same time, tradition helps us to find the effective and efficient way to the answer. People even come up new idea which based on those traditions, for example, Philadelphia School was against Chicago School for the idea of architecture—“form follows the function” and then raised their idea—“form functional caused.” We can’t separate tradition and modernization in reality, especially in academic research area.

On culture level, tradition and modernization can’t be treated as individual as well. Festivals as heritages are still living after hundreds or even thousands of years. Spring festival in china, has already been celebrated since Qing dynasty, 221BC. Nowadays, Chinese people still celebrate the festival and even get national holidays for that. Tradition custom always helps people remember the past and maintain the positive spirit of our ancestor. We won’t allow Christmas Day or Thanksgiving Day being cancelled because we take them as a part of who we are. Tradition works in the same way to the society, it tells us who we are and what we want.

The last but not the least, art also includes tradition and modernization. People enjoy violin and guitar, listen to Bach and Michael Jordan. Even some musicians know both instrument and electronic recording operating system. I believe there is no insurmountable objection between modernization and tradition. Most of the time, we don’t have to make a decision from that two. Accept the way they exist probably is the best way to understand them.

However, modernization does differ from tradition especially when it comes to the equipment or facility we use. We use email more than real letter, washing machine more than our hands, vacuum more than broom. But can we say that we choose modernization other than tradition just based on what tool we use and what kind of house we are living in?

Tradition is the root of modernization, I’m convinced that holding both, is the best attitude to tradition and modernization.

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Issue040

"Scholars and researchers should not be concerned with whether their work makes a contribution

to the larger society. It is more important that they pursue their individual interests, however

unusual or idiosyncratic those interests may seem."

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The issue of whether it is more important for scholars and researchers pursuing their individual interests can make a greater contribution to the larger society is a complex and controversial one. Different people hold different opinions due to their respective ways of looking at this issue. In my point of view, I agree that we should allow academic scholars nearly unfettered freedom of intellectual inquiry. Rather, I hold that their scientific research should be restricted within the reasonable limits as determined by some related organizations such as the government. My view will be greatly strengthened by the following discussion.

To begin with, some research areas do not immediately address society’s pressing social problems, yet in the long term would make a great contribution to the society. For example, in the natural science field, Kepler, a German astronomer and mathematician, the founder of modern astronomy formulated three laws to clarify the theory that the planets revolve around the sun. It seems that it is useless but some scientific theory and could not yield economic benefits immediately. However, Kepler’s discoveries are extremely significant to the modern development of its aviation and space industries. Today, we can put the satellite and space ship out of the earth and even successfully landed on the moon. Similarly in the social science area, Marxism is a particular political philosophy, economic and sociological worldview derived from the work of Karl Marx and Friedrich Engels. Although some people may think it is not realizable and even ridiculous, the Chinese learned from the work and guide the Chinese revolutions which finally succeed. The Chinese even benefit from the developing theory which makes us led to a better life.

What’s more, engaging one’s individual talents in one’s particular area of fascination is most likely to yield advantages, discoveries, and innovations. For example, with the rapid Chinese opening policies, nowadays more and more elite scholars and researchers go to other countries such as American, and Canada, to do their research. It is not because these top scientists do not love their own country but imperfect academic freedom of China. Most Chinese scholars and researchers are “assigned” to some field of study by the government who provided considerable financial support. Scholars could do their free research but only and only if they have enough funds, otherwise they have to do the research that the government or other organizations wanted. Ironically, in most time it is the scholars not the officers in the government are more competent for deciding which areas of academic inquiry are worthwhile. Therefore scholars and researchers want to go a place where provide them with good experiment environment and importantly academic freedom. Only in this way can the scientists make great contribution to the society.

However, some areas of scientific research should be restricted within the reasonable limits by the government. For example, the nuclear weapon which plays an important role to the victory of allied armies in the World War II is now forbidden to use and restricted by government regulations. We still clearly remember that tens of thousands of innocent Japanese people instantly died because of the nuclear bombs. And the nuclear radiations have badly affected the local citizens and environment for generations. Governments do their best to prevent the development of nuclear weapon, and it is good for human peace. Otherwise, another tragedy might happen finally just as Einstein says that, “I do not know with what weapons World War III will be fought, but World War IV will be fought with sticks and stones.” Similarly in today’s world, the American scientific declare that they have successfully created the first artificial life in the world recently, which put the issue that artificial life is a blessing or a curse into a hot debate. This scientific research has greatly astonished the world and even let Obama has to order a hearing to assess the ethical risks. Maybe the chief scientist will feel regret for what he had done just like Einstein who helped to create the nuclear bomb because it will turn out to be a catastrophe for the human beings.

To sum up, basing my conclusion on the illustrations and exposition mentioned above, accordingly, I hold that we should give the researchers a maximized freedom that can extremely inspire their creative abilities. Yet governments or other related organizations can and do play a central role in spurring scientific research of scholars, and make sure the scientific development delivers benefits to the human beings.

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小肯0113UID: 2590901

话说这是占3篇文章的么？？？？

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Argument207

It is known that in recent years, industrial pollution has caused the Earth's ozone layer to thin,

allowing an increase in the amount of ultraviolet radiation that reaches the Earth's surface. At the

same time, scientists have discovered, the population of a species of salamander that lays its eggs

in mountain lakes has declined. Since ultraviolet radiation is known to be damaging to delicate

tissues and since salamander eggs have no protective shells, it must be the case that the increase

in ultraviolet radiation has damaged many salamander eggs and prevented them from hatching.

This process will no doubt cause population declines in other species, just as it has in the salamander

species.

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Issue144

"It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."

*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

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In this argument, the author points out that the reason for the decline of a certain kind of salamander's eggs is the ultraviolet radiation which can damage tissues. And the salamander population was decreased increased because that the ozone layer is thinner than before. Furthermore, the author predicts that the same situation would happen to the other species. This argument suffers some critical flaws that seriously undermine the author’s conclusion and accordingly is not thoroughly well-reasoned. The main flaws of the letter will be discussed respectively.

To begin with, the arguer falsely assumes a direct cause-and-effect relationship between the ultraviolet radiation and the decline of salamander eggs. Based on the existing information, this causal relationship cannot stand firmly. Even though, the arguer points out that salamander eggs have no protective shells, it does not necessarily mean that the egg is too fragile to protect ultraviolet radiation. Maybe the shells contain a kind of chemicals which can effectively prevent the inner kernel of the eggs form damaging by the ultraviolet radiation. What’s more, the hatching procedure can be disturbed by the other reasons. It is possible that the lake has been polluted, so the quality of the water is not suitable for hatching. Without alternative explanations for the decline of salamander eggs, the author’s assentation is not credible to be trustworthy.

In addition, besides the declination of eggs, there also exists other factors can influence the population of salamander. Perhaps, this certain kind of salamander is incapable of adapting or changing to meet circumstances. According the natural selection theory proposed by Darwin, the species of salamander might be extinct, because the living condition, such as food, water, temperature, is not fit for this species. Maybe the population of predator which feed on this kind of salamander has increased, so more salamander has been consumed as food. The argument is critically weakened by failing to address these additional possible causes for the decline of salamander's population.

Thirdly, even if the ultraviolet radiation is the only killer for eggs and also the very reason for the population decline of this certain kind of salamander, this argument is still questionable. The arguer makes a false analogy that the decline of certain salamander does not necessarily indicate that the population of other species will also be affected. Without further science evidence, it is too hasty to claim that other species will die out. Maybe, this certain kind of salamander could be the only specie damaged by ultraviolet. Due to the situation describing in article only limit to one specific area, the arguer fails to assert that the ultraviolet radiation cause population declines in other species.

To sum up, this argument, while seems well-supported at first, has several flaws as discussed above. Hence it is unacceptable and not persuasive as it stands. Yet, it could be substantiated by provide more detailed information about the cause-and-effect relationship between the ultraviolet radiation and the salamander population diminishing. I would also need to know much more information to prove the declination also happened in the other species, which I can evaluate the author’s assertion more efficiently.

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The issue is a complex and controversial one, which of whether it is the artist who gives society something of lasting value. Different people have their respective ways of looking at this issue. In my point of view, I agree that the critics can well-interpret the value of art works, and it is the artists who create these grate works. Therefore, I hold that only the critics and the artists complement each other will give the society something of lasting value. My view will be greatly strengthened by the following discussion.

To begin with, the artists create innumerable works which profoundly impressed the world, and people value their works as the most precious treasures of human beings. Take the ancient Chinese artists for example. As is well known, with a long history of thousands of years, China had numerous painter artists whose works are still remembered by the people for generations and presented in the museums. One piece of panting works, the Qingming Festival by the Riverside, has enjoyed a high prestige in the world. This painting, which is the witness of prosperity in ancient China, depicts the daily social life and customs of the capital city in Northern-Song Dynasty. And this great and rare realistic painting is shown in the national pavilion of 2010 Shanghai World Expo. Although it is the huge enlarged electronic version, not the real one, this “patting” still attracts the attention of visitors from all around the world.

Admittedly, the critics can help people to appreciate and understand the art works by proving some objective and clear interpretations. The art works can be regarded as the highest level creative activities of human beings. The value of some art works are obvious and can be easily accepted by the mass, while others may too obscure for people. For instance, the paintings of Van Gogh can best to prove this. Whereas, Van Gogh’s works are hard for people to understand let alone being valued by people during his lifetime. Thanks to the critics’ effort, the mass gradually understand the profound meaning that lies behind the works and finally evaluating the prominent painting highly. Today, the Van Gogh’s works have broken all records in the selling of art works, even though he just sold only one of his paintings in his lifetime.

However, the artists and the critics both are indispensable. The artists are the ones who create the extraordinary art woks which leave the society with lasing value. The critics, on the hand, are the ones who help to ensure wide acknowledgment of artists and their values among the mass and ensure their value being passed down from generation to generation, whose effort also contribute to the society with enduring value. In addition, the critics can provide useful and objective feedback and also some constructive criticisms for the artists, which would extremely helpful for artists improving their art works.

To sum up, the truth as always lies somewhere in the middle, basing my conclusion on the illustrations and exposition mentioned above, accordingly, I hold that the artists and the critics are both significant to give society something of lasting value. We are unnecessary to tell whose providing value is more important since they are playing different roles as discussed above, but we can unequivocal confirm that both are indispensible for the society. Only complementary each other will give the society something of lasting value.

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Argument237

The following appeared as part of an article in a local Beauville newspaper.

"According to a government report, last year the city of Dillton reduced its corporate tax rate by

15 percent; at the same time, it began offering relocation grants and favorable rates on city utilities

to any company that would relocate to Dillton. Within 18 months, two manufacturing companies

moved to Dillton, where they employ a total of 300 people. Therefore, the fastest way for Beauville

to stimulate economic development and hence reduce unemployment is to provide tax incentives

and other financial inducements that encourage private companies to relocate here."


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"It is a grave mistake to theorize before one has data."

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