Yuki的作文贴

penn4uUID: 2696512

我和yuki一个小组，我不得不说，我的水平也有限
我觉得文章写的很好，词汇很丰富
整体结构也很好，给了我很好的参考
我不是没有认真修改，我很认真的看了两遍，还有j给yuki的修改
同楼上吧，我也只能说有点了
在此谢谢yuki给我的意见，很中肯

longxue26UID: 2687755

8-14-独立写作小组的作业

09.08.07NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children’s future for them+tpo1


It’s widely argued about the role parents are playing in the process of children development. Some insist that parents should allow children to make decisions on their own while some stress the necessity of parents’ determinations on children’s future. Well, in my opinion, it depends on the different growth stages of a child.

Children at a very young age, always refuse to try good things because of lacking in proper judgments. Parents’ instructions, in this case, are required. Some adults may remember in their childhood how reluctant they were sometimes before going to the kindergarten. It’s the same with what often happens to children nowadays. Children can experience interactions and communications with others in kindergarten, which is quite vital for their future development. But little kids might express against to unfamiliar things because they don’t know the reasons for going to the kindergarten and the benefits from it. So parents should help children figure out the situation and encourage them to be more confident and brave, teaching them to make the right choice.

However, as children grow up with full knowledge and sense of judgments, parents should allow them to determine future plans on their own. Too much interposal, sometimes, can result in misunderstandings and even foster emergence of family tragedy. It just occurred one week ago that a 20 year-old young man in my neighborhood drank poison after a big quarrel with his father. The father didn’t agree with the boy’s choice of giving up school since he thought the son should have studied better and longer. At this point, parents tend to neglect children’s innermost aspirations and implant their own ideas in children habitually. What’s more, when young people already have a much clear plan of their future life, parents’ disagreements or preventions are more likely to hinder the nature growth of the child, leading to their dependence or even radical behaviors.

As a matter of fact, no matter how old a child is, it’s necessary for parents to value his/her choice. Based on different growth stages of a child, blind directions and educations should be avoided.

In sum, when children are too young to make right decisions by themselves, parents should provide help and instruction. If children are knowledgeable enough to discuss issues with adults excellently, why not let them go, to live a life according to their own blueprint?

serena-blueUID: 2811284

很赞赏作者文笔，流利且有力，特别是很多好词的运用，让我学习了很多，文章没有找出什么错误。
在这儿有几个问题想请教一下作者：
1也曾看过作者前几次的文章，发觉作者最近在写走中间路线的文章，很特别，不过我个人在托福写作中比较避讳这样的选择，怕说理力度不够，不知作者如何看待这种辩证分析的写作。
2作者进行此类写作的时候，会先列一个提纲吗？
读这样的文章，对自己是一种学习，也希望作者能够在考场上发挥出自己的水平！
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In sum, when children are too young to make right decisions by themselves, parents should provide help and instruction. If children are knowledgeable enough to discuss issues with adults excellently, why not let them go, to live a life according to their own blueprint?

雅典城的包子UID: 2742653

额 说下812那篇文章~写得很不错 呵呵 提个小问题哈~应该是draw sb's eyes to sth~
不过确实我觉得中间立场的可能会比较难以把握~
顺便赞一下 楼主文章写得真不错~~~

雅典城的包子UID: 2742653

话说最新这篇竟然跟yuki大姐思路一样……

It’s widely argued about the role parents are playing in the process of children development. Some insist that parents should allow children to make decisions on their own while some stress the necessity of parents’ determinations on children’s future. Well, in my opinion, it depends on the different growth stages of a child.

Children at a very young age, always refuse to try good things because of lacking in proper judgments. Parents’ instructions, in this case, are required. Some adults may remember(是不是recall会亲切点呢) in their childhood how reluctant they were sometimes(觉得前面有了some这个sometimes就会显得有些多余) before going to the kindergarten. It’s the same with(as) what often happens to children nowadays. Children can experience interactions and communications with others in kindergarten, which is quite vital for their future development. But little kids might express against to unfamiliar things because they don’t know the reasons for going to the kindergarten and the benefits from it. So parents should help children figure out the situation and encourage them to be more confident and brave, teaching them to make the right choice.

However, as children grow up with full knowledge and sense of judgments, parents should allow them to determine future plans on their own. Too much interposal, sometimes, can result in misunderstandings and even foster emergence of family tragedy (problem). It just occurred one week ago that a 20 year-old young man in my neighborhood drank poison after a big quarrel with his father. The father didn’t agree with the boy’s choice of giving up school since he thought the son should have studied better and longer. At this point, parents tend to neglect children’s innermost aspirations and implant their own ideas in children habitually. What’s more, when young people already have a much clear plan of their future life, parents’ disagreements or preventions are more likely to hinder the nature(natural) growth of the child, leading to their dependence or even radical behaviors.

As a matter of fact, no matter how old a child is, it’s necessary for parents to value his/her choice. Based on different growth stages of a child, blind directions and educations should be avoided.

In sum, when children are too young to make right decisions by themselves, parents should provide help and instruction. If children are knowledgeable enough to discuss issues with adults excellently, why not let them go, to live a life according to their own blueprint?
yuki姐的作文还是很犀利 赞一个

jjooyyUID: 2704028

真不知道放哪里 就找到这里来了
下次特训的作文 也贴这里吧！~

longxue26UID: 2687755

81# jjooyy

嗯 谢谢你哦 不好意思 没贴到自己的帖子里

longxue26UID: 2687755

80# 雅典城的包子

呵呵 你真可爱啊

longxue26UID: 2687755

78# serena-blue

谢谢你给我看作文哈  我水平一般的 写的也不好的

回答你的问题

1. 我觉得是可以的 这个也是分题目的 我觉得  还真是个棘手的问题  我也得再研究研究

2. 有的时候会想一下 该写哪几点  但是有的时候就想到哪 写哪儿

jjooyyUID: 2704028

继续放这里 很好很强大
特训营的作文 你应该贴这里，然后在特训营的帖子下面 贴链接啊啊啊啊啊

longxue26UID: 2687755

周一：2008.8.16
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
Most businesspeople are motivated only by the desire for more money.(Money)

minnielilyUID: 2879008

86# longxue26
Yuki的作文很强大啊～先学习一下，有个地方我觉得可以改进下（个人意见，如有不妥请忽视……）
第三段，strong motivation of making/earning money

longxue26UID: 2687755

87# minnielily

太过奖了...:L  我水平超级一般的

对了 下次你可以随便改 画 涂

然后附件发给我就好了  

谢谢你

louisa427UID: 2458920

很厉害啊！语言运用很娴熟，词汇很丰富，我下载了下来，看看没什么错误就不贴上去了。值得学习的好作文！！！我觉得真的要是美中不足的话，就是第三段有一个思想是，钱赚足了就drop business了，然后去做慈善，其实我认为是那些人not that into their business as before，他不做生意了，怎么维持自己的生活，谈何慈善？

longxue26UID: 2687755

第一次写

综合写作  8-17-TPO1

In the lecture, the speaker discusses about a new employment strategy, offering employees an option of four-day workweek, with disagreements.

Companies will not benefit from the shortened workweek and even might be cost a lot more. They will have to provide both more training courses and more medical benefits to new employees under this strategy. On the other hand, it will become necessary to increase the office space and computers as the number of employees rise. Therefore, companies will spend more when they offer an option of working four days a week.

Since hiring new employees is costly, there won’t be an increase in job opportunities. Companies prefer to choose ones who can even work overtime, so that they can make up the difference generated by the four-day workweek. In addition, the working atmosphere will not be pleasant because employees have to do the former five-day workload in four days. So, the over-all economic condition can’t be improved by this new strategy.

The additive one holiday will lead the four-day employees in higher risks and probably reduce the life quality. During big depression, they are probably the first ones to lose jobs. Worse, they might be passed over in the competition of promotion because companies are more likely to find one who can work five days a week in order to manage the entire work week.

欢迎批改