Yuki的作文贴

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8-20 综合写作练习4 q8 {0 J- z* V8 F4 {( v9 ^2 U+ B , q  \) ]8 z, x8 R& }2 o. } TPO4 While the reading material argues dinosaursas endotherms, the speaker in the lecture casts her challenges on it with several opposite opinions. First, though fossils of Polar dinosaurs have been found in the cold Polar Regions, it cannot confirm that dinosaurs are endotherms. The temperature at that time was much warmer than that is in current days， so dinosaurs could easily survive in temperate seasons. Even in cold months, migration and hibernation were also ways for their survival. 你听的好细啊，我根本就没听到这句。。。。。 As for the legs of dinosaurs, they helped to support more weight, which allowed dinosaurs to grow into a large size. The use of legs benefits dinosaurs a lot from it, but it doesn’t necessarily indicate they’re endotherms这段联系的阅读内容比较少. Finally, admittedly some dinosaurs have abone structure of Haversian canals; however, they also have growth rings. 我听的是haversian canals的作用是提供growth ring，从而得出这个HC不是恐龙是恒温动物的原因。The growth rings provide evidence that dinosaurs didn’t grow rapidly in certain period.They probably had grown slowly or even stopped growing in cooler seasons. This periodic growth exactly demonstrates, on the adverse side of what reading materials discusses, that dinosaurs are not endotherms. 你能听出那么多的细节是在佩服佩服啊，而且语言很简练，不错

longxue26UID：2687755

120# louisa427

哇 你真好 给我提这么好的意见

高手高手!

非常感谢!

longxue26UID：2687755

121# louisa427

别~!

那个growth ring我不确定 还多听了几遍呢 单词量不行

serena-blueUID：2811284

While the reading material argues dinosaursas endotherms(这个短语学习了）, the speaker in the lecture casts her challenges on it with several opposite opinions.- f3 n  g* [; w, e& R; D  S0 a4 K

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First, though fossils of Polar dinosaurs have been found in the cold Polar Regions, it cannot confirm that dinosaurs are endotherms. The temperature at that time was much warmer than that in current days so dinosaurs could easily survive in temperate seasons. Even in cold months, migration and hibernation were also ways for their survival. ) P# |; {3 U、
简洁又周全，good!(不过我看到以前同学帮我修改的时候，让我稍微的结合一下reading passage，后来看到范文，也老出现reading passage,或者the author)

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As for the legs of dinosaurs, they helped to support more weight, which allowed dinosaurs to grow into a large size. The use of legs benefits dinosaurs a lot it, but it doesn’t necessarily indicate they’re endotherms. 6 D" G$ g- `% S4 G3 r5 \0 S
最好解释一下，恒温动物的legs和恐龙的legs位置相似，表达一下文中的观点，再反驳。

Finally, admittedly some dinosaurs have a bone structure of Haversian canals; however, they also have growth rings. Thegrowth rings provide evidence that dinosaurs didn’t grow rapidly in certain period.They probably had grown slowly or even stopped growing in cooler seasons. This periodic growth exactly demonstrates, on the adverse side of what reading materials discusses, that dinosaurs are not endotherms.
最好最后加一句总结的话

总体，楼主听的很仔细，像growth ring,我就没听出来。
不过能再紧密地结合一下文章就更好了。。。

jeanne_zjUID：2733238

改好了~

lghscuUID：2552043

我刚开始练习综合写
都不知道该怎么写

看看OG范文，非常实在地告诉我们如何写

longxue26UID：2687755

8-21 综合写作作业

TPO5


The professor in the lecture casts doubtson each theory that are explained in the reading material.

The inside structures of the Chaco housesexposes the first doubt about the conclusion that they were only residential. Thefire places for the daily cooking have been seldom found, which indicates itwas impossible to house hundreds of people living there as what this theoryassumed.

In addition, it is not convincing at all toconclude that the structures were used for storing maize. There are no maizecontainers that are necessary for storing maize remained in the houses and evenno spilled maize was found out. It couldn’t happen if people had stored anymaize in Chaco houses as the reading supposes.

Finally, though broken pots have beenexcavated at Pueblo Alto, there’re many other materials were discovered toosuch as building materials, constructional tools. It’s probable that the potswere thrown away as trash since people might drink up the milk in the pots andthen never use them again during the construction of Chaco houses. This isanother possibility opposite to the point provided in the reading.

In sum, the speaker challenges the threetheories about Chaco great houses in the reading material as above.

longxue26UID：2687755

8-21 独立写作作业

09.04.03NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to improve the quality of education in a country is to increase teachers' salaries.

Education, theprimary requirement for a country to become prosperous and strong, is alwaysunder the most extensive concerns about how to improve its quality to the best.Some people suggest increasing teachers’ salaries. However, in my opinion, it’snot the best way to enhance the educational quality.

First, no matterhow talented a runner is, without comfortable shoes he/she can’t achieve thebest records. It means the same with the equipments and facilities ineducational system. Laboratory equipments can help students develop betterunderstanding of the knowledge on books and encourage them to do further studyon what they’re interested in. Excellent sports facilities always decorate theschool life more colorful and enjoyable. So no matter how much added toteachers’ salaries, without good equipments and facilities, teaching only seemsdull and weak, not to mention any progress in educational quality.

Rather thanincrease the salary, high-level teachers are more necessary. The quality ofeducation in a country greatly depends on that of the native teachers. Forprojects like financing researchers who have been dedicating to high-end technology,this big encouragement will not only cultivate larger amount of professionalteachers and also be able to arouse them to contribute more to the developmentof education. This exactly is an essential way to reach the aim for progressiveeducational quality nationally.

Admittedly,teaching is a difficult task and raising salaries of teachers is a strongimpulse for them to work harder. However, it’s barely achievable to develop anoverall improvement in a country’s educational quality, especially in a longrun.

In sum, as whathave been discussed above, I disagree that the best way to improve the qualityof education in a country is to increase teachers' salaries.




我憋了半天 写不出来   憋到我头疼欲裂 做听力错好多 做阅读<都做过一次了>错更多!!! 我真是 "爱"死这个作文了 !

就这些字了 288  爱咋咋地吧 水平就这么多点level 越学越没信心 放弃好了 省的我这么头疼! 姐姐我本可以..*^&_#


哎~　

matlab007UID：2865031

8.19 matlab修改对不起咯。传的晚了。谢谢你帮我改的

jianndqinUID：2492884

谢谢你的意见，你的改好了

bearseuUID：2873933

20号的作文替你改好了。。。但等级貌似不够，附件发不上来。。。等水够了等级发给你。。。

bearseuUID：2873933

修改好了，多指教

longxue26UID：2687755

130# jianndqin

谢谢你哦!!

csleeUID：2693790

TPO5 Integrated Writing 已修改  by cslee

longxue26UID：2687755

8-23 独立作文 作业

09.01.10NA

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Improvingschools is the most important factor in the successful development of acountry.


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With extensive concerns about educationalquality from the public, some people assert that improving schools is the mostimportant factor in developing a country successfully. Admittedly, schoolscultivate amounts of useful talents conducive to a country’s futuredevelopment, however, in my opinion, it’s far from the most crucial part in thislong-term process.

The prerequisite for a country to stepfurther is the situation of economy. There comes the most basic questionwhether one can afford to study at school. In other words, without a full-blownmarket providing enough jobs most families may not able to pay the tuition feesfor their children. If the market is weak and unhealthy nationwide, not only canlots of children lose opportunities of receiving formal education, but alsoliving condition of a family might be affected. On the other hand, only if hasthe government stored up adequate money, investment can be achieved inimproving schools. So before taking other factors into account, the developmentof economy should be valued first.

In addition, a healthy legal system isanother important element for a country to develop successfully. Withoutregulation in markets, inequitable competition will emerge and ruin the communityinterest including both the public and government. Without punishment in law todecrease crimes, there will be severe threat to people’s lives, property andpersonal security. All of these offer nothing but obstacles to the whole growthin society, not to mention any guarantee to enhancing learning conditions. Therefore,it’s too much exaggerated to put improving schools above other respects.

Though many people insist that improvementsof schools benefit children’s growing and directly influence on the future of acountry; they tend to overstate the role regardless of some social problemsinvolved in it. People who have learned a certain skill privately from a youngage have turned out to earn more money than graduates who have been followingthe ordinary and stereotype route arranged in school. Moreover, many parentscast doubts on school education and even encourage their children to study athome instead. Also, a considerable period has to be waited to estimate theeffect of improving schools in a nationwide progress.

In sum, considering from differentperspectives, I disagree that improving schools is the most significant factorin the development of a country. There’re many other factors more valuable forus to focus like economy and law.