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johnmclainUID：2676153

Issue 3
“It is more importantto allocate money for immediate, existing social problems than to spend it onlong-term research that might help future generations.”

(1)    Since the complexity of a society under rein, moneyof a government is never sufficient for every issue. When the leaders are swayingbetween immediate, existing social problems and long-term research, they wouldtake a number of aspects and effects into consideration. So before making any sensiblesuggestions or conclusions, it is necessary to weigh over as many things aspossible.
(2)    To begin with, the most primary issue for anation is the stability of its society. When a country falls into turmoil,where laws and regulations are abused, law-abiding people would be alwaysanxious about their possession or even security of their families, yet thoseout-laws are trying to make full use of this precious period. Though somefields could be still growing, for most commercials and plants, a social turbulencewould be a nightmare by the break down of transportation and the financialsystems. And for those legitimated businesses that do have a growth, they coulddo better in a peaceful atmosphere. With social turbulences going on, damagingthe normal social regulations and facilities, which are the basis for a wellperforming economic cycle, a nation could hardly be described as prosperous. Tobe conscientious, history often move forward in troubled times, the people needno more additional unnecessary ones. So the emergent social problems such asfloods, earthquakes or enemy invasion that could lead directly to socialinstability deserve the priority, including financial support, over the longterm programs.
(3)    Existing stubborn problems, though they are notas urgent, say unemployment, crime, fake goods and environmental destruction, couldturn into severe problems if we lose control over them. It should be concedethat these problems have never been fully settled. But this is not the reasonfor lower priorities; on the contrary, however, it is just because they couldnot be permanently settled that explained their importance. Imagine what oursociety would be if our government give all the police a one year vacation.Imagine what our forests and rivers would be if the government set noboundaries to cutting down trees and pouring waste liquids into the rivers. Sothe strength upon such obstinate problems should never be eased off.
(4)    For existing problems that are neither emergentnor stubborn, they also demand immediate actions before they grow into stubbornor severe ones. It is proved in many fields such as environment protecting,disease controlling, and kids raising, that the early time is when the cost isthe lowest and effects are the best.
(5)    Compared with immediate, existing problems, longterm research seems at a subordinate status, because it does not influence ourdaily lives. However, we want to own a convenient living, so do our descendants.As their ancestors, we have the responsibility do our best making their liveseasier. Isn’t our today’s wisdom and tools the gifts from our own ancestors? Asa result, we should at least maintain the research fruits, and pass them to ouroff-springs. Moreover, from an economist’s view, money given to long termresearches has not been cut. The money that spent in the research is usedemploying scientists and paying for equipments, they flow into other fieldscreating more jobs and stimulating the economy. And with time flies, long termresearch approaches the products offering solutions for stubborn andemergencies. A good example is the nuclear power and the computer. The nuclearpower showed us a comparably green source of energy, and the computers haveturned us into the information age where tremendous jobs are created directly,not to mention those indirect ones. It should be point out that long termresearch is vulnerable. If the support is cut off, the little achievementswould probably be wasted if not carefully protected. Yet, still, theout-comings are merely at the stage of possibility. And the second hand effectsare could be slight and difficult to control.
(6)    From the analysis, when we have to choosebetween immediate, existing problems and long-term research, the former shouldhave some priorities and some of the unpromising research projects cut, butonly theoretically, since the government could lend some money from othercountries or raise money from the society to deal with emergencies at the sametime maintaining long term researches, if necessary. And pay the bills when thesituations are better.

qiongpingUID：2766031

Issue 3
“It is more important to allocate money for immediate, existing social problems than to spend it on long-term research that might help future generations.”

(1)    Since the complexity of a society under rein, (请解释一下under rein) money of a government is never sufficient for every issue. When the leaders are swaying between immediate, existing social problems and long-term research, they would take a number of aspects and effects into consideration. So （用Hence，Thus会更正式）before making any sensible suggestions or conclusions, it is necessary to weigh over两词连用时，最主要的意思是“重量达到…”，直接用weigh便可避免歧义 as many things as possible.
(2)    To begin with, themost（primary已经有most的含义了）primary issue for a nation is the stability of its society. When a country falls into （推荐bogged down in）turmoil, where laws and regulations are abused, law-abiding people would always be anxious about their possession or even security of their families, yet those out-laws are trying to make full use of this precious period. Though some fields could be still growing, for most commercials and plants, a social turbulence would be a nightmare by the breaking down of transportation and the financial systems. And for those legitimated businesses that do have a growth, they could do better in a peaceful atmosphere. With social turbulences going on, damaging the normal social regulations and facilities, which are the basis for a well performing economic cycle, a nation could hardly be described as prosperous. To be conscientious, history often moves forward in troubled times, the people need no
（more additional unnecessary有些赘余，more 和additional重复了） ones. So the emergent social problems such as floods, earthquakes or enemy invasion that could directly lead to social instability deserve the priority, including financial support, over the long-term programs.
(3)    Existing stubborn problems,（前面需要加定语the） though they are not as urgent, say unemployment, crime, fake goods（推荐用commodity） and environmental destruction, could turn into severe problems if we lose control over them. It should be concede that these problems have never been fully settled. But this is not the reason for lower priorities; on the contrary, however, it is just because they could not be permanently settled that explained their importance. Imagine what our society would be if our government give all the police a one year vacation. Imagine what our forests and rivers would be if the government set no boundaries to cutting down trees and pouring waste liquids into the rivers. So the strength upon such obstinate problems should never be eased off.
(4)    For existing problems that are neither emergent nor stubborn, they also demand immediate actions before they grow into stubborn or severe ones. It is proved in many fields such as environment protecting, disease controlling, and kids raising, that the early time is when the cost is the lowest and effects are the best.
(5)    Compared with immediate and existing problems, long-term research seems at a subordinate status, because it does not influence our daily lives. However, we want to own a convenient living, so do our descendants. As their ancestors, we have the responsibility do our best making their lives easier. Isn’t our today’s wisdom and tools the gifts from our own ancestors? As a result, we should at least maintain the research fruits, and pass them to our off-springs. Moreover, from an economist’s view, money given to long term researches has not been cut. The money that spent in the research is used employing scientists and paying for equipments, they flow into other fields creating more jobs and stimulating the economy. And with time flies, long term research approaches the products offering solutions for stubborn and emergencies. A good example is the nuclear power and the computer. (主谓不一致)The nuclear power showed us a comparably green source of energy, and the computers have turned us into the information age where tremendous jobs are created directly, not to mention those indirect ones. It should be point out that long term research is vulnerable. If the support is cut off, the little achievements would probably be wasted if not carefully protected. Yet, still, the out-comings are merely at the stage of possibility. And the second hand effects are could be slight and difficult to control.
(6)    From the analysis, when we have to choose between immediate, existing problems and long-term research, the former should have some priorities and some of the unpromising research projects cut, but only theoretically, since the government could lend some money from other countries or raise money from the society to deal with emergencies at the same time maintaining long term researches, if necessary. And pay the bills when the situations are better.

文中的拼写错误大致有40处左右，多半是没打空格键，需要注意。
开头有些欠缺章法，如果不是相当自信，学用些模板（Though…I contend that）还是比较整齐一点。
842字的篇幅太长了，最好有个中文提纲来助人理解。

johnmclainUID：2676153

2# qiongping 谢谢
under rein是在。。。的统治之下的意思。
其他的我都接受