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916 Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career.

Nowadays, some may hold the opinion that students in universities should start their first jobs before graduation. But others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned, I believe that there are far more advantages to try different jobs before the long term career.

When asked what kinds of jobs they would pursue upon graduation, many young people lacking work experiences would say that they have no idea, whereas those students with abundant working experiences are much more confident to answer this question. With rich experiences from different job areas, one can deepen his understanding of various jobs, which can help him figure out what kinds of jobs are suitable. Actually, I am the one who benefit from that. When I was an undergraduate student, I had tried several jobs, such as selling cosmetics, teaching mathmatics and doing internship in internet companies.  Based on those experiences, I made up my mind to work in an internet company, which meets my interests best. For those people always having some new ideas, working in an internet company is more challenging and instriguing.

Someone may argue that concentrating in one job would be a better choice than shifting jobs. Honestly, I don’t agree with this opinion. Although focusing on one job can provide a person professional technology in one area, it is too early for young people to stick to one field until they understand what they really want. Before devoting to a specific area, one should try multiple jobs so as to figure out what is his favorite. If young people fail to have a thorough understanding of that at their early ages, consequently they will miss the proper jobs meeting their interests and abilities.

Besides, young guys can obtain valuable experiences from their jobs, which will broaden their scopes. One the contrary, students who lack enough working experience will suffer from a cold shoulder in their job-hunting. Even survived, those greenhands would rather be at a loss as to how to meet the situation when encounter troubles in their first years of vocation. However, if one have got enough experience before graduation, it will not so tough for one to cope with this problems, at least they would know who to ask for help. Since the more perspectives you use for a problem, the more choices you have to handle it.  People with a wide scope will have better performances than others in their long term career. Another relevant reason is that doing different jobs gives them a unique opportunity to learn from their fellows in various areas, and provide them a variety of knowledge, which can assist them in handling problems. When they encounter problems in their work, the experience learned from others may help. Thus, we cannot emphasize the importance of advanced experience from working too much.

Although trying various jobs has a number of advantages, it doesn’t mean that young people should try as many different jobs as possible before graduation. Some jobs are just a waste of time and give you little useful experience. In this sense, young people should choose jobs carefully according to their interests and abilities. However, we can't deny that trying different jobs before long term vocation is crucial to students.

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916 Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career.

Nowadays, some may hold the opinion that students in universities should start their first jobs before graduation. But others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned, I believe that there are far more advantages to try different jobs before the long term career.

When asked what kinds of jobs they would pursue upon graduation, many young people lacking work experiences would say that they have no idea, whereas those students with abundant working experiences are much more confident to answer this question. With rich experiences from different job areas, one can deepen his understanding of different jobs, which can help him figure out what kinds of jobs they are more suitable to. Actually, I am the one who benefit from that. When I was an undergraduate student, I had tried various jobs, such as selling cosmetics, teaching mathematics and doing internship in internet companies.  Based on those experiences, I made up my mind to work in an internet company, which meets my interests best. For those people always having some new ideas, working in an internet company is more challenging. 感觉最后一句没什么用，画蛇添足。最后一个单词拼错了，但是我也不会改，word上指出来的错，干脆删掉了。

Someone may argue that concentrating on one job would be better than trying various jobs. Honestly, I don’t agree with this opinion. Although focusing on one job can provide a person professional technology in that area, it is too early for young people to stick to one job before they understand what they really like. Before devoting to a specific area, one should try multiple jobs to figure out what is his favorite. If young people do not try multiple jobs at their early ages, it is usually difficult for them to find proper jobs which meet their interests and abilities. Hence, experiencing various jobs will contribute to one's long term career.

Besides, young guys can obtain valuable experiences from their jobs, which will broaden their scopes. On the contrary, students who lack enough working experience will suffer a cold shoulder from their job-hunting. Even survived, those greenhands would be still at a loss to deal with troubles in their first year of vocation. However, if one has got enough experience before graduation, it will not be so tough for one to cope with these problems, at least they would know who to ask for help. Since the more perspectives you use for a problem, the more choices you will have to handle it.  People with a wide horizon will have better performances than others in their long term career. Another relevant reason is that doing different jobs gives them a unique opportunity to learn from their fellows in various areas, and provide them a variety of knowledge, which can assist them in handling problems. When they encounter problems in their work, the experience learned from others may help. Thus, we cannot emphasize too much on the importance of advanced experience from working. 不知道这句话是什么意思，感觉还没有结束，后面还要写点什么的样子。
  
Although trying various jobs has a number of advantages, it doesn’t mean that young people should try as many different jobs as possible before graduation. Some jobs are just a waste of time and give you little experience. In this sense, young people should choose jobs carefully according to their interests and abilities. However, we can't deny that trying different jobs before long term vocation is crucial to students.

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32# mint1412

谢谢修改～你改的很及时也很仔细～

不过一些改的不对，我更正一下，你改的时候可以多查查字典或者google

1，suitable 后面不应该加to 因为这里是jobs is suitable to sb的意思，但是没有加to sb，于是要加就都加不然省略……
2，on one job would be better，后里的in你给改成on了，on doing sth， in sth，所以这里还是in，不是on
3，which meet their interests and abilities 这里我原来写的meeting their interests and abilities算是定语重句，省略which are…
4，working experience will suffer from a cold shoulder，你改成了suffer a cold shoulder from their job-hunting …不过不对，是suffer from sth不是suffer sth from sth……
5，would rather be at a loss as to how to meet the situation这句算是某英文原句…虽然是绕了点，不过应该不是错误
6，wide scope＝wide horizon 这里哪个都行的
7，the more choices you will have to handle it;  the more...the more这个地方不一定要加will……当然加了也好不加也好

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Nowadays, some may hold the opinion that students in universities should start their first jobs
before graduation. But others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned, I believe that
there are far more advantages to try different jobs before the long term career.6r'T#z'a;l$B"A
When asked what kinds of jobs they would pursue upon graduation, many young people lacking
work experiences would say that they have no idea, whereas those students with abundant
working experiences are much more confident to answer this question. With rich experiences from
different job areas, one can deepen his understanding of various jobs, which can help him figure
out what kinds of jobs are （is）suitable. Actually, I am the one who benefit from that.When I was
an undergraduate student, I had tried several jobs, such as selling cosmetics, teaching mathmatics
and doing internship in internet companies. Based on those experiences, I made up my mind to
work in an internet company, which meets my interests best. For those people always having some
new ideas, working in an internet company is more challenging and instriguing（intriguing.
这段我好像在哪里见过啊
Someone may argue that concentrating in one job would be a better choice than shifting 好 jobs.
Honestly, I don’t agree with this opinion. Although focusing on one job can provide a person
professional technology in one area, it is too early for young people to stick to one field until they
understand what they really want. Before devoting to a specific area, one should try multiple jobs
so as to figure out what is his favorite. If young people fail to have a thorough 好 understanding
of that at their early ages, consequently they will miss the proper jobs meeting their interests and
abilities.
Besides, young guys can obtain valuable experiences from their jobs, which will broaden their
scopes. One the contrary, students who lack enough working experience will suffer from a cold
shoulder 好 in their job-hunting. Even survived, those greenhands would rather be at a loss as to
how to meet the situation when encounter（貌似 encountering） troubles in their first years of
vocation. However, if one have got enough experience before graduation, it will 加 be not so
tough for one to cope with this（these） problems, at least they would know who to ask for help.
Since the more perspectives you use for a problem, the more choices you have to handle it.（感觉
不妥） People with a wide scope will have better performances than others in their long term
career. Another relevant reason is that doing different jobs gives them a unique opportunity to
learn from their fellows in various areas, and provide them a variety of knowledge, which canassist them in handling problems. When they encounter problems in their work, the experience
learned from others may help. Thus, we cannot emphasize the importance of advanced experience
from working too much 好.0（好
Although trying various jobs has a number of advantages, it doesn’t mean that young people
should try as many different jobs as possible before graduation. Some jobs are just a waste of time
and give you little useful experience. In this sense, young people should choose jobs carefully
according to their interests and abilities. However, we can't deny that trying different jobs before
long term vocation is crucial to students.
总体来说写的不错
我前两天一直呆在实验室 改晚了 不好意思啊

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9.22 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children (ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, science, history and language.

There might be someone who argue that young children should not be required to take art and music classes, or at least they should have an option not to take them, because it seems that only a minority of students will become an artist or musician in the future. However, in my opinion,  it is important to cultivate children's sense of art at their early age, and such an early education will benefit them in the long run.

On no account can we ignore the value of art and music education, That is because learning art and music will serve in the complement of the other subjects such as math and science. Although on the common sense, science and art are known as totally different realms, they actually complement and cooperate with each other so as to serve in the same purpose to improve our society. Scientists discover, while artists invent.  It is conceivable that art plays an important role in our world. That is the reason why we can’t overlook the education of art and music. Besides, it is widely acknowledge that the primary education is crucial to the development of children, hence we should set art and music classes for them as early as possible.  Learning science and math contribute to children’s logical thinking while the art will develop their divergent thinking. Since divergent has a close to creativity. which could also assists in science and mathematics.  In order to make our descendants become more creative, it is necessary to offer younger school children art and music lessons in addition to their other subjects.

Thus, an education without art and music courses couldn’t go far enough to cultivate our children. studying art and music in an early age enable children to have a good aesthetic sense. These lessons will leave a seed of aesthetic to the children's little heart, and it will probably thrive as they grow up, then will bring them unparalleled benefits in their future. As lack of aesthetic sense, people will unfortunately miss a lot of beautiful scenarios throughout their lives. On the other hand, the more sense of beauty an individual has,  the more beautiful things and joy them will obtain in their daily life. Furthermore, learning art and music will enhance one's charm. For an instance, boy or girl, who sings or dances well will easily become an eye-catcher in the school. For adult, who has a profound understanding of art or classic music will be considered a person of good taste. Hence, in order to train and foster the aesthetic sense, children should study art and music since their early age.

More over, learning art and music enable children to express themselves better. As language is a main way to deliver human's ideas and emotions, art and music could provide another way to express them. Children who learn art and music can express their emotion in more ways such as drawing, singing and playing instruments. Since art works and songs come from people’s emotion and thought, one could play guitar to deliver his sorrow, while the others could spray his passion on the big canvas, then I believe there will be a myriad of master pieces and outstanding artists that will emerge from these entertainments. Hence, even though only a few children will pursue art and music as their vocations, school should give a chance of early art education to those minority who are interested in it.

The world needs scientists, mathematicians, languishers, historians, and also musicians and artists. Even early education of art and music is not aiming at generating musicians or artists, children will still benefit from it, either immediately or in the future.

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写得挺好的，呵呵！！~~~

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924. Having jobs with low paying salary and being high secure is better than jobs with high salary but being easy to lose


Today, our people confronts two options: one is to get an unstable job with a high salary, the other is to have an secure job with a low salary. Actually, I’d like to say both of them has advantages and disadvantages. However, I’d rather to choose a job with a high salary but being easy to lose for the following reasons.

First and foremost, on no acount can one deny the power of money, and the typical advantage of the high-paid job is that one can make money more efficiently. Nowadays, fast rhythm of life requires people to do things quickly and efficiently. If one can gain wealth more quickly, one will be more successful in accumulating wealth than others, which will bring a much more stable life. My friend Lee is just a case in point.  As an investor in an client after graduation, Lee had earned a large amount of money from his high-paid job just in a few years. Then the economic crisis swept the entire world, Lee lost his high-paid job. However, Lee had made some investments with the money he earned before, that is he had bought three departments in Beijing. Henceforth, severely increasing price of houses had brought Lee huge wealth: the price of the departments Lee brought had been appreciated as much as 5 times higher than before. Even being jobless, Lee can still maintain a stable life by reaping considerable money from renting his departments. So I think there is nothing to be worried about taking a high-paid but easy to lose job, because it is enough to avoid risks by the wealth accumulated from the high-paid job.

To some extend, there is another advantage of the easy-lose job. That is because getting a new job might bring opportunities to one’s career. Most people are afraid to shift jobs since they are not willing to lose what they already have. Thus, in my opinion, disadvantages of changeless tend to be more apparent after years of working. After working in the same position for years, individuals will begin to lose  working passion and get tired of his job. At this moment, if one “unfortunately” lost his job, he could have a change to start a new one, of which the working environment will recall people’s passion of working. As for me, I am a person who have various interests. so I don’t like stick to one job or stay in one place for many years. Once I did a part-time job for almost two years, at last it made me feel extremely boring by dealing with the similar tasks every day. That’s why I think a , although unstable a job is, one can still benefit from its instability by welcoming new opportunities.

However, getting a secure job is a good choice for people who dislike taking risks. They just want to lead a steady life so they don’t need to worry too much about their future. But for me, the changeless job is a signal of boring and invariable. I ‘d like to take a high-paid job but being easy to lose. If I lose it, I can have a vacation to relax then prepare for a fresh start in my life.

After all, it is not proper to draw the conclusion that one job is better than the other. One should choose career according to his situation. But for me I will prefer a high paid but easy to lose job which meet my needs and will bring me a life with both challenges and surprises.

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35# S酱 抱歉，晚了一点

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926  The best way to improve the quality of education in a country is to increase teachers' salaries.



It is widely acknowledged that education is crucial to the country's further development. Thus, we cannot emphasize too much on the importance of education quality in our country. Someone believes that the key to improve the quality of education is to increase the teachers' salaries. It sounds rational but suffers from logical flaws and has ignore some other important aspects which contribute to the promotion of education quality.

Firstly, I admit that there might be some good influence to the quality of education if the country increase the teacher's salaries. However, it is irrational to conclude there are causal relationships between them. For on no account should we ignore the other elements such as teachers' quality, the facilities of schools and the setting of courses, which are combined and calculated to make an increase of the nation's education quality. For instance, why people around the world are eager to pursue their further education in the United States? No doubt that people are attracted by the excellent quality of education. There are good teachers who can give an intriguing class, unique teaching methods which can broaden one's horizon, beautiful campus which provide a delightful studying environment. All of those contribute to the good quality of education.

Among all of above, I think the quality of teachers is essential to the quality of education. If the quality of teachers in the country are not promoted, though a high salaries are paid to them, there are few improvement with their teaching skills, and so does the quality of education. If the government take more effort in promoting the quality of their teacher, then the teacher can give much more valuable classes to the students, which is the sign of good education quality. Take my high school as an example. Before 2006, the proportion of students who got the admission of  universities is 60%. In order to stimulate the teacher's passion for teaching, our school increase their salaries. But on the following test, the quantity of admission didn't change much. Then our school started to reform by adjusting the structure of courses and absorbing several famous teachers. One years passed when the students had attended the admission examination again, the proportion of admitted students had risen to 80%, which showed that the teacher's quality is the most significant factor to the education quality.                                                                                                                        

Even though some one will argue that the high-paid salary can provide a more stable life so teachers can concentrate on their teaching. However it fail to take into account that the instinct value is more effective than money. For the teachers who love their vocation with all their heart, there is nothing to do with money because they like teaching, which is the initial motivation to good teachers. If our government or school could select much more people who are willing to dedicate to the teaching career, the education quality of our nation will be improved.

From the discussion above, we can draw the conclusion that increasing teacher’s salaries can’ t be the best way to improve the education quality of one country. If we want to enhance the quality of education, there are much things to do rather than increase the salary of teacher.

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927 If you were an employer, which kind of worker would you prefer to hire: an inexperienced worker at a lower salary or an experienced worker at a higher salary? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Nowadays some employers face two options, one is to hire an inexperienced workers at a lower salary, the other is to hire someone who have sufficient experience at a higher salary. Both of the options have advantages and disadvantages. However as far as I concern, I will prefer to hire an experienced worker at a higher salary for the following reasons.

First and formost, no one could deny the importance of efficiency to a company. The more efficiently a company produces,  the more profit they will make. If an employee is sophisticated with his work, he would know how to work in an most efficient way. If there are more experienced workers,  the company will have more change to occupy the market, which is essential to success. For instance. Why the products of Apple always attract the attention of people all over the world? Why the brand “APPLE” could become a sigh of coolness? The answer to this question is that they have the most skillful workers in the world. Although the total number of Apple‘s workers is approximately 400, they could propose the upmost fascinating design and make them into reality, both of which go beyond our imagination. Then there is little doubt the workers of apple deserve a high salary.  regardless of the great conception of design, it is impossible for them to make the sketches into real iphone or ipad without their knowledges and experiences,.

Another relevant reason to support my statement is that an experienced worker tend to make less mistakes and is more acknowledged in solving problems which they confront at work. Even a high salary is paid, the profit which ascribe to their excellent working can be enough to cover their salary. Besides, the whole company will achieve success in shorter time, and that is the final goal, which will bring long-term benefit to the company. It is common that salaries of the most acknowledged companies are higher than most of the rest ones, such as google and microsoft. They only choose the most experienced people regardless of money. However these companies still make myriads of wealth every year. So I think employing experienced people is a good investment, in spite of a high-paid salary.

Moreover, an experienced worker could contribute to the working process, that is because individuals who have abundant experience in certain realm have a profound understanding of the working details of that realm. On the contrary, positive effect will be made by the inexperinced workers. For example. the communication of workers is quite significant in the working process. If there are some inexperienced workers in the team. they probably misunderstand the others’ words or could not follow the others’ ideas, which is bound to slow down the whole process. Since we can’t emphasize the importance of communication too much, we should hire experienced workers.

Base on the discussion above, it is safe to draw the conclusion that hiring experienced workers is much more beneficial to the development of company than inexperienced workers. In order to achieve the estimate goal, experienced worker is a wiser choice and the advantages of which will be seen not only immediately but also in the future.

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928 独立 What is a very important skill a person should learn in order to be successful in the world today? Choose one skill and use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.


The methods and skills a person should learn for the purpose of success has produced a mountain of books - a consistent desire to achieve success. However in my opinion, one of the most important skill which could lead to success is the skill of communication, my reasons are as follows.

Only by communication can we understand each other, so it is true that communication is the base of socialization, by which our society could operate and advance. Therefore, in order to become outstanding in the world, individuals should be well acknowledged with the skill of communication. The ability to communicate, which is the fomation of success, make it easier to aquire others' approval and assistance. For example, a sophiscated leader who gained the support from his subordinates and his superior would undoubtly defeat the introversive competitor. Since no one can deny the fact that without assistance from the others could no one achieve success alone. As a result, morden people should pay more attention to learn communication skill.

There are several aspects in communication skills, one is the skill of persuading. A widely known story about that is a salesman who had succeed in selling an axe to President George Bush won the “Golden Boot” reward. The salesman wrote a thoughtful letter to President George Bush and said that there were a lot of thick dry branches in Bush's estate, which would affect the beautiful scenery of Bush's home, so he recommended Bush to buy his axe to cut the dry branches down. This letter seemed quite beneficial to its reader，then President Bush accepted his advice and paid the salesman 15 dollars for the axe. From this story, we can see the excellent persuading skills the salesman use in his letter. He showed a sincere concern to Bush which is a good way to make Bush adopt his advice. So once the sale is almost impossible to achieve, and a vacant for 28 years finally genius marketing award winners.

Another important aspects of communication skills is to be a good listener. Since communication is an interaction among people, so it is not only about speaking, but also include listening. If one don’t listen to other people carefully, he might not comprehend the others' ideas then he could not have an effective communicate with the others. Here is one example that good listening can help one to achieve success. One years ago, my friend John graduated from MBA and prepared to start his own business. However several problems came to him due to the lack of experience, companions and money. Then he thought of Mr. White, a famous counselor who had once gave several lessons in the MBA courses. Then John read all books written by White and go to conduct him about the content of those books. When talking with White, Mike always listened quite carefully and patiently, and gave modest feedback which was done to a turn, this made White feel delightful to talk with Mike then they developed a good personal relationship. Afterward, Mike started to ask advices about his own business and undoubtedly received professional instruction from White, which was really helpful to his new start company. Due to Mike’s communication skills, he made friends with some one who had experiences and achievements, which contributed to his struggle for success.

From all above, it is safe to draw the conclusion that communication skill is important to success, especially in modern society the competition is so severe that without efficient and affective communication with others by which one can learn or get help from the others, one couldn’t achieve success in the world today.

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The methods and skills a person should learn for the purpose of success has （methods and skills 不能主动 produced）produced a mountain of books-a consistant desire to achieve success. (Enormous numbers of book ,which contains various methods and skills to success,were, and still are published  and many of them are quite easy to sale.Undisputably the issue is motivated by the human’s desperate desire to success)However in my opinion, one of the most important skills which could lead to success is the skills of communication, and my reasons are as follows.

Since communication is the only way people could understand each other, so (去掉so)we can see that communication is the base of socialization, on which our society could operate and advance. Therefore, in order to become outstanding in the world, individuals should be well acknowledged with the skills of communication with the others. If one could express his ideas well, then the others would admit his ideas, which is the first step to success.(The ability to communicate,which is the fomation of success,make it easier to aquire others approval and cooperation. )If one could persuade the other people to follow his ideas, consequently he will gather more power from the others and make them struggle for his goal. (For instance,A sophiscated people who gained the support from his subordinates and the understanding from his superior would undoubtly defeated the introversive competitor.)Since no one can deny the fact that without assistant from the others one could not achieve success alone, one should pay more attention to the communication skills.
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There are several aspects in communication skills,  one is the skill of persuading. A widely spread story of the persuading ability is about the best salesman who had succeed in selling an axe to President George Bush then won the “Golden Boot” reward. The sales man wrote a thoughtful letter to President George Bush and said that there were a lot of thick dry branches in the estate, and that would affect the beautiful scenery, so the salesman made the suggestion that Bush would better to buy a axe to cut them down. Then President Bush accepted his advice and brought the sales man’s axe. So once the sale is almost impossible to achieve, and a vacant for 28 years finally genius marketing award winners. From this story, we can see the excellent persuading skills the salesman use in his letter. He showed a sincere concern to Bush’s astate which is a good way to make Bush adopt his advice. & |0 a! p0 g. G

Another important aspects of communication skills is to be a good listener. Since communication is an interaction among peoples, so it is not only about speaking, but also include listening. If one don’t listen to the other carefully, he might not comprehend the others then he could not communicate with the others in a good way. Here is one example that good listening can help one to achieve success. One years ago, my friend John graduated from MBA and he wanted to start his own business. However several problems came to him due to the lack of experience, good companions and money. Then he thought of Mr. White, a famous counselor who had once gave a lesson in the MBA courses. Then John read all books written by White and conduct him about the content of those books. When talking with White, Mike always listened carefully and gave feedback which was done to a turn, this made White feel delightful to talk with Mike then they had developed a good personal relationship. Afterward, Mike started to ask advices about his own company and received a lot of useful opinions from White, which was really helpful to his new start business. Due to Mike’s communication skills, he made friends with some one who had experiences and achievements, which contributed to his struggle for success.
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From all above, it is safe to draw the conclusion that communication skill is important to achieve success. Since in modern society the competition is so severe that without efficient and affective communication with others, one couldn’t achieve success in the world today.
后三段写得较好，例子运用流畅。但是开头抽象概念的叙述稍弱。

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我黏贴过来就没有红色了，但是修改的句子用括号隔开了，你看得清楚不？

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44# 卡束斯
～谢谢修改，改的很好～用词和句子结构都更自然