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1006 特训独立 Because people are too busy doing many different things,they can do few things well
Due to the constant society development and fast rhythm of life, modern people are always busy with many things at the same time. It is believed that people could do few things as a consequence. However, I hold an opositeopposite view toward this. In my opinion, I think people could still do a good job in certain things thought , although they have to hand numerous tasks. My reason arereasons are listed as follows.
To begin with, I would like to say there is no causal relation between the quantity and quality of the things people should do(感觉是否可以换个词,do 有点不爽). Although facing a wide range of tasks, they could still clear which is more significant and which is less. So it is not uncommon for them to distinguish the initial tasks among all. Take me as an example. I am a girl who is full of vigour(感觉到了,呵呵). Besides attending several student's associations such as dancing club and languages study group, I have also participated in various part-time jobs during my university education. Though I had to handle several different tasks one day, I still attract the most importance (attract the most importance?什么意思?)on my study. Among the top students I am in study, as well as I entertain myself by the various activities in and out university(感觉有点生硬。。。). So it is irrational to conclude people could not do things well because there are so many things waiting for them(我觉得英文是直白的逻辑,这么说有点汉语思维).
Another relevant reason to support my opinion is the ability to manage and organize things that(毕竟是立论文,语言正式些可能好吧) an individual has. In order to survive in this society and become outstanding, most people have developed the capacity of management and organization. With this kind of skills, not only could people make an elaborate schedule to organize tasks, but also they could have a full use of time. When preparing for the Olympic Games, Chinese people have taketaken great effort in building pavilions and other facilities. Undoubtedly it is a complex project consisted of myriads of different tasks, but people in China still finished the mission in time and presented one of the most successful Olympic Games to the world. According to this reflection, people still could make achievements disregard how onerous the missions they face.
Although there are still some people would argue that people would find their ability falls short of their wishes. In some extent, I admit that doing several things all together would have a positive impact on people's efficiency and quality by diffusing their energies . However, as facing such an inevitable situation, people have discovered many methods by the abundant experiences left by generations, which could prevent them the tasks from disorder.
From all the discussion above, the conclusion that people could not do things well because of too many things is unreliable. People still could overcome all the difficulties and make accomplishment by their great diligence and intelligence.
NOTE: 思路清楚,感觉语言上和句式上有点点生硬(个人观点),不过鉴于这是计时写的,已经很不错了。
1007 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To remain happy and optimistic when you fail is more important than achieving success.
No one could deny that it is inevitably to encounter frustration and failure in the way to success. In my opinion, we should remain happy and optimistic when we fail, and I think it is far more important than achieving success itself. (言简意赅!对正文段有很强的信心)
The estimate goal(estimate goal?) of our life is not chasing success, but happiness. People who pursue success isare also for the purpose to obtain happiness. Therefore, whatever we succeed or not, we should always keep a positive attitude toward life and future. (论证得很好!)When I prepared for this examination since one month ago, I had aimed for getting to get enough scores in my first exam. Unfortunately, I failed due to my lack of experience and insufficient preparation. However I still keep an optimistic view toward my failure. After the diligent learning time preparation, I felt happy at the great process I have already made on my own, and what I gained is knowledges(可数?) of my englishEnglish, promotion of my learning ability, the courage to face all the obstacles and the capacity to overcome them by actual deeds.(例子,语言,感觉都很impressive,我要是教官已经对此文有好感了!)
On the other hand, the path to success is always rugged. We should climb mountain after mountain (我又少见多怪了,SALAD请确保这样用是正确的...)before we get what we want. Therefore, in order to make it move, we must remain vigourous and positive after the frustration, which is the basis of success. It is said that every cloud have a silver light, so we should never let failure beat us down. (The citation is admirably suited)We should always keep hope in heart ( the phrase has used correctly?)and adopt ana correct attitude towards the failures. Only through
examining the failure with a positive view, could we find our flaws and discover the key lead to success. Only by facing the problems with a positive perspective, could we stand up again and get another change to defeat them.(ETS seems prefer details or certain example much more.)
Moreover, the failure we confront is also a treasure in our life. The defeat also could embellish (?I looked up MDicition, seems no such way to use it)our life, not only through joy of success, but also through bitter taste of failure. Besides, sometimes a new fortune will come along with frustration. Only have a happy mood and still keep a kin (keen?) eye on it, could we find the new scenery unfolded in front of us. Only be optimistic to life, could we unearth the truth behind it. That is whatever we are suffering at present, ; we should always hold a grateful heart to the world. No matter what will happen in the days to come, we should be vigorous and look forward to the future.
All in all, the happy mood and optimistic attitude is much more important beyond success and accomplishment. Sometimes, life is just like climbing mountain. It is not about how fast we make it or the scenery on the other side, it is just about climbing, with a happy and optimistic spirit and enjoy the sights of the mountain..
NOTE: 思路清楚,好话不谈,重点拍砖——貌似好多句子是你自己造出来的,每个我标出的句子我都在金山句库里查了,历史上还没有这种说法,我听说语言是比较讨厌创新的,不知SALAD同意否。
1008 特训小组 Has Technology made children less creative than they were in the past'
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计时写的大白话文一篇~写完发现没咋重视和过去的对比,冏~懒得改了以后慢慢改~- E% c4 D6 l1 M) U! F6 a* @! N9 }
The constant developing technology has bringbrought dramatical changes to our life, especially for our young children. Some oneSomeone holds the opinion that technology has had a negative impact on children's creativity. However from my perspective, I think technology does not merely make children less creative, but contribute to their creativity.
First and foremost, one of the most significant aspectaspects of creativity is imagination. Since imagination always stern(?) from reality, that means we can't imagine things without any base, the technology does help to develop children's ability of imagination by provide providing them more elements. For example, it is impossible for children who born in 1700 to image the spaceship and computer, but for children who live at present, such things are just existing already so they could thingthink of something out of them. Since technology has bringbrought children more material which would help them to create, it is irrational to conclude that technology does harm to children's creativity.
On the other hand, another aspect of creativity is curiosity(?费解,ETS may have no time to guess your intention). As we all know, children are often full of curiosity and can notcannot stop asking questions all the time. That is because they are curious to things around and do not know any limitation of them. They don't concern about what could come into reality and what could not. So technology could bring them a larger stage for their curiosity. For example, children who see a computer would probably wonder what is it and why it could work, then they could develop more questions and think more of such technology like computers, which would contribute to their creativity.
Last but not least, technology also providetechnology also provides our children more implement to promote their creativity. Since there are new toys which are the product of technology, such as digital pets. Digital pets could not only speak to children but also could sing and dance, which could help children to cultivate their creativity. Also could we neglect the importance of computer. With the help of computer, children could obtain more information at their early age. That could definitely broaden children's horizon and make them more creative.(扣题扣得好)
From the discussion above, we could safely draw the conclusion that technology does not recreasedecrease children's creativity. In assistance of technology, children will make more progress in their early education, especially the cultivation of creativity.
NOTE:remember the judger of ETS only has less than 1minutes to scan you essay and give the mark! You should make him feel understandable and impressive at the most obvious parts. Anyway, it is a essay of high level.
1009 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is a waste of time and money because customers already know what they want
计时30分钟写了430+哈哈终于离目标近了
Advertisement has play a significant role in our daily life and have some positive and negative influence over customers. But in my opinion, it is irrational to say that advertisement is useless and just a waste of time due to the reason that people already know what they want. My reasons are listed as follows.
First and foremost, compare as to the assert that people already know what the want, I would like to say, actually, people do not have a exact idea of their need. In most cases, people do have a vague idea of what kind of things they want, but they fail to find which could meet their need best. When I want to buy some hair shampoo, I got lost in a huge number of various brands of them. Then I would try to recall the memory of advertisement about the hair shampoo which I ever saw on television or internet. Then I would choose one according to the advertisement and instructions of the shampoo. Thus, the advertisement, as for me, could really help me to select the product. (生活的例子,coool! )
Moreover, It is advertisement that could bring new information to customers. There are always new kinds of products spring out. How could they reach the customers? It is advertisement. Even though people have some ideas of what they should buy, however it is far enough for them to try new products which would meet their constant changing requirements. When girls want to buy some new clothes, they always go to some brand websites or ask for a brochure of introduction about new arrivals which would be mailed to girls' home. Then they would compare several different brands of clothes then learn about which will become most popular in this season. Without the advertisement, it is impossible for them to make such a decision in a short time, because they should go to every store to find what they want.(词句过于简单?)
Last but not least, advertisement could help people have a much more profound comprehesioncomprehension about their products, then further contribute to their decisions. It is not uncommon to see that(双否!), nowadays, the advertisement is quite delicate and elabrateelaborate, which could provide consumers a whole inpressionimpression about their products. So for my part, advertisement is necessary in people's daily life and should not be blamed as a waste of money.(论证感觉有点无力,个人意见!)
From the discussion above, we could draw the conclusion safely that advertisement is not a waste of money and the reason that people already know what they want is incorrect. We should lay a correct view on advertisement they we could enjoy its benefits.
NOTE:感觉在限时状态下,写得明显没有原来精彩了,加油!感觉这题思路稍有不足!
总结:
以上四篇文章表现了Salad姐很好的写作功底,只要练习足够,一定能上28+。也请S姐以后常携板砖过来围观!) |
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